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Nidsubh007

@Nidsubh007

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Posted: 12 years ago

#911

Originally posted by: mz.brar
First
of all I would like to apologize, I'm usually not this bad when it comes to
commenting, but I'm blaming the after exam hangover for my current lack of
articulate dialogue. 
Prologue/chapter
1:
"Ankles
adorned with her mother's Payal" Is Khushi adopted by the Gupta's?
Intriguing-
Khushi and Arnav are already going out!? 
Chapter
2:
*clutches
hand to chest* THERE 12 years old! What the hell are they going to do with boys
their own age? I'm not say that dating's wrong but, sweet lord at least wait
until you've hit puberty!! 
I
like how you've captured Khushi's quirkiness so well…….her mind does tend to go
off on random tangents. 
I
don't like the implication of Khushi having to choose between her dream school
and her family and friends.
Arnav's
setting the bar pretty high on a first date.
Chapter
8:
Wow!
Just finished chapter 8(part d) and all I can say is you're amazing at
portraying emotions!! I consider myself to be a very sensible and logical
person but you had my emotions in a knot with the way that Arshi's date
ended. I wanted to yank Lavanya by the hair and drag her out the dining hall
but at the same time I wanted to give Arnav a piece of my mind for thinking
that ending/taking a first date at a business dinner would be a good idea. 
But
then Arnav's words about wanting a future with Khushi in it kept entering my
mind; and it feels as though all the insecurities and disappointment are
baseless. uggg I sooo would not want to be Khushi right now! So
congratulation you have completely confounded my feelings….and it wasn't even
me that when on the date*pouts*
Chapter
9:
I
don't hate Lavanya. You can't blame her for going after Arnav…she thinks that
Khushi's just another flavor of the week. She has romantic history with him,
whereas Khushi's has a deep seeded emotional and personal bond with not only Arnav
but with his whole family (that and he's totally hot for her😉😃) 
Sooo
……what do they want, for their daughter to attend Delhi Uni, get a degree and
put it up on her bedroom wall like 'look I once had a life too!' she'll attend Uni
and then the pressure for marriage will be on from all sides!!! Why is it that
women ask how they can handle both a family and a career, you never hear a man
asking that question. 
Chapter
10:
I'm
feeling the most intense loathing towards Garima right now, my parents stopped
me from going to the Uni of my choice 4 years ago( it was 3 hours away from
home!!!) and I've never forgiven them for it. This is a decision about her education! HER
future!! And no one but Khushi has the right to make decisions based on it. Her
mother is over emotional because of the wedding, and she's making a life
changing decision for her daughter because she's scared of being alone. If
Khushi was a boy I don't think it would have been an issue where she went to
school. Her mother would have been strutting around like a proud peacock at the
fact that her son had been accepted
in to the most prestigious school in all of America, but since Khushi's a girl
and will be getting married and settled down after her degree it's like the
school she goes to matters! Grrr can you tell I'm majorly p*ssed off. Sexism
may not be the issue but I still think that Garima has no right to stop her
daughter from pursuing her dream school.
"not
wanting to lose their identity as they started on the road to become one."
I
love that line! I'm a firm believer that in order for a relationship to grown a
couple must be able to grown individually.
chapter
13:
death
by Arnav Singh Raizada hmmm that's something I'd gladly embrace
wow! Dhak dhak and acidity reached a whole new level with this
chapter!
Chapter 14:
How
in the world do you write like this!?!?!? I swear I've never been so emotional
while reading a fic! I wana cuddle up with Khushi and cry.
My
guess is that Arnav feels that their relationship may hinder Khushi when it
comes to her academic goals; perhaps he's trying to make leaving easier on
her..?
Chapter
15:
<h3>Atta go sweet! Way to keep mum in line!! Ps: nag her for the next chapter
will you😉 you should get your daughter "The best of Girls to the Rescue" I remember
reading the book when I was 8 and just fell in love with all the fearless
female characters!</h3>

HA!
I nailed it! So that one less battle that she had to fight, I'm glad Arnav's in
her corner when it comes to Harvard vs. Garima [the people's court shall
now commence…hehe] 
Geez
yaar what a buzz kill!!
Why
is there a pair of women's earrings in Arnav's sofa?
1.
They are a surprise gift for Khushi


2.
They belong to the cleaning lady


3.
They belong to Anjali


4.
They came with the sofa set when Arnav purchased it and he just never
realized it.


5.
Aakash and Payal have been having secret rendezvous' in Arnav's
apartment, therefore they belong to Payal.



Buahhahah
omg! That just awesome!!! Errm the make out session was kind of
spontaneous---as was Khushi showing up to his office, so that takes #1 out of
the running. The cleaning lady wouldn't wear large earing to work(they would
have to be for it to have poked Khushi from between the cushions) and Anjali
ain't the type to lose an earring and not notice(her husband maybe…..err I'm
referring to the show)
Hmmm
I need to go to this store that hands out free earing with the purchase of
every couch. 😆It would be hilarious to catch Payal and Aakash in the act so I'm
kinda gunning for that to be the reason.😛

Wow! You just blew me away. Saying thank you for your comments seems so inadequate. I loved how you pointed out all the crucial points of the story.

The fact that I could possibly make you feel such a range of emotions is the biggest compliment that I could receive. You have truly motivated me to write my next chapter (which I was being a tad lazy about).

I hope you stick with me as we we continue the journey!

Seriously, thank you!!

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cherrybloom1

@cherrybloom1

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Posted: 12 years ago

#912

hey its 18th...when do u plan to update??

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Nidsubh007

@Nidsubh007

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Posted: 12 years ago

#913

Update will be posted around 2-3 pm central time (USA Time)

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cherrybloom1

@cherrybloom1

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Posted: 12 years ago

#914

👏👍🏼 ill be waiting!!

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Nidsubh007

@Nidsubh007

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Posted: 12 years ago

#915

Author's Note:

Chapter 16th will be updated on a new thread. I have received quite a few PM's asking for the time of the update. It will be around 2-3pm central time, USA.

I will be posting the link of the new thread here within the hour.