Arjun OS: Woh lamhe woh baatein..Pg7 - Page 4

Lovely OS Vidya.

beautiful OS di...

as always di u r a very good writer

update

amazing os
loved it
shree nd aisha converstion was great
love the song

This was beautifully written, each and every emotion was well portrayed thank you for sharing dear xx

My dear Vidya,

I would have said that this is a touching and credible mood piece, except that I do not see what it means or where, if anywhere, it is going. If this is just the one chapter, and there will be no more, I do feel a little blank and uncertain. You always write from the heart, and that is why you do emotional scenes so well. But this reads like a patchwork: one funny scene with Shree, one tearful reminiscence by Aisha, one empathetic spell of silence with Arjun, and then what?

If this was the opening chapter of a regular FF, that would be one thing, but if this is it, I am not sure what to think of it. Even a very short story has to go somewhere, the narrative and the emotional loop have to be completed. This one goes nowhere, and I feel shortchanged. I am sorry if I sound too critical, or if I have not got what you intended to convey, but my reviews would be pointless if I was not candid, would they not?

Shyamala Aunty

Hello Arjunians...Today morning, i am in a philosophical mood...and the result is this OS...yes its Arisha but more essentially Aisha And Arjun...

So here it goes..."Woh lamhe woh baatein..koi na jaane.."

i know what you mean aunty...i stopped there hoping for a new beginning...a new chapter in their lives...its something i wish to see in the show as well...

superb os...
loved it...
shree was cute and funny as usual...
ooo aisha also had same past as arjun...
loved arjun's concern for her...
the song used was amazing one of my fav song... and the lines at end were lovely...