Virman-ff-two left feet - part 18-ii

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ashni0905

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Posted: 12 years ago

#51

loved the story and keen to see how virman relationship develops

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ashni0905

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Posted: 12 years ago

#52

loving the nok jhok, emotions, esp virats dialogues and authoritative attitude

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Syed695

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Posted: 12 years ago

#53

Nice update..Confusion confusion and some more confusion going on in their life, feelings and relationship that they have...when relationship change we decide we will live our life the way decided ...but the moment it does people around start which eventually effects our though process n then feelings...ur update was apt...emotional ride...on what to expect and wht does the future hold..*Phew* for the first time i have written a longer comment...:) Thnks for the pm!!

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zaira

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Posted: 12 years ago

#54

Sorry for late reply dear...all the parts are fantastic...and ur is really very good and concept is really different... U r a wonderful writer...plz cont soon...
and thanks for the pm...

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afreen

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Posted: 12 years ago

#55

it was superb
loved the college part
continue soon

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twinklexx

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Posted: 12 years ago

#56

Nice update
Contine soon xx

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js1234

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Posted: 12 years ago

#57

superb! this is really very good. Love all the dialouges and thier slow realisation!

BTW - are you updating the other one??

Thks

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Shivani Rajput

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Posted: 12 years ago

#58

M loving dis SS alot... Both are in a fix... dey dnt knw what dey really want... Awesome update... 👍🏼
Dis was hilarious.. typical Virman lol... " kuch acha karne jao toh sunathi hai, kuch na karu toh bajathi hai. Kya musibat hai." 😛

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naina

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Posted: 12 years ago

#59

i am really loving the way the story is progressing...

virat wanted manvi to join college... manvi's remark on virat "kitna padhta hai.. " was so damn funny... he stands for manvi against swamini... virat calls himself the husband and also that he will decision for his wife n no one else... then virat n mavi talking.. manvi hurt on the fact that virat isnt serious abt their marriage n is calling it an arrangement... scene at the college were cute, romantic n hilarious... manvi was blushing... wowww... virat being with maya but feeling out of place... came home just to be with mannu... manvi getting jealous...

favourite dialogues...

Virat: "Kya kaam? We have our very own cricket team of helpers and servants at home. Why does Manvi have to do anything?"

"haan, technical problems. Rukawath ke liye kedh hai. Thanks and bye."

M: "kyu ki mera boy friend aane wala hai mujh se milne"

V: "Kaun? That guy who wanted to elope with you to timbaktu." he laughed.

"Namaste jijaji" they said together joining their hands.

Virat gave them a very naughty smile "oh-ho-ho..mere pyaree saliyah..ithe sare? Vaah!..abhi toh vapas college join karne padega..kyu manvi ji?? "

M: "Virat, aren't you getting late???" Manvi signaled him to leave.

V: "Accha baba. Chaltha hu. Bye."

V: "Take care girls" he winked at them as Manvi rolled her eyes.

" kuch acha karne jao toh sunathi hai, kuch na karu toh bajathi hai. Kya musibat hai."

thank u soo much dear for the bful update...

update soon...

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ash97

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Posted: 12 years ago

#60

The more u r writing the more it is becoming interesting.
Want to know how virat realise his love for Maanvi and Maanvi already falling for him.Gr8 update and dialog keep it coming👍🏼