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sapphirose176

@sapphirose176

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Posted: 13 years ago

#11

hey i recog those lines! those are jai ho lyrics. i loved the background score. it was simply awsome.
chp1 really well written. 👍🏼i liked the concept. its fun having and reading so many new ffs on the forum.
do continue soon dear. m waiting...😊

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Susmita

@surprising

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Posted: 13 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: sapphirose176
hey i recog those lines! those are jai ho lyrics. i loved the background score. it was simply awsome.
chp1 really well written. 👍🏼i liked the concept. its fun having and reading so many new ffs on the forum.
do continue soon dear. m waiting...😊

thanxxx a ton dear😊 I'll try to ud soon😳

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Susmita

@surprising

Dazzler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: machinegun

i recoginised them⭐️⭐️.it is the english version of song jai ho of cgm😊😊

here is the hindi version😊😊

shaktishaali avinaashi,

haare na jo haan main he to hoon woh,

man se patthar,tan se khanjar

hoga ab ghayal mujhse ladega jooo,

jitna haraao utna vijayii hoon,

main pralay hoon yuddh kare to koi,

bhim hoon main arjun bhi hoon,

akhada ho ya ranbhoomi ho,

jai ho,jai ho

jai ho,jai ho

jai ho,

jai ho,jai ho,

jai ho,jai ho,

i guess i am right😊

u r absolutely right my friend👍🏼...actually i'd a dream to update the english version of jai ho song in my own english though poor😔

Edited by surprising - 13 years ago

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Anuja

@anu93

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#14

1st of all Welcome to CGM family surprising🤗

Actually the Name of Ur SS is Very Different and sounds cute😳

Hey U translated Jai Ho!! song na😃

I really liked ur SS👏...Concept is very unique👍🏼 and Very Well described👏

CGM's description about his Acharya was soo Gudd😛...

Continue soon dear

Do PM me when u update

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Susmita

@surprising

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#15

PART-2 First-Middle Chapter

Dreams:Lead To What- DIRECTED BONDING or BROKEN AFFECTION??

...But acharya was unique- he is, he was & he will be.Despite living with him more than 30 years, I couldn't properly recognise him! When I was ready to change my decision of death due to starvation just for that tear-drop appeared in my acharya's eye...he himself stopped me! with a pleasant yearning in his eyes, he murmured,'Pain: the winner'...then firmly stated-'if you finalise your decision, leave all the fascination. Go ahead. Please go ahead. Don't look at the past.'

Just past!! You're my past, present & future- I'm made of you acharya- you're my entire world. I find my GOD in you...

But these words couldn't reach my lips; they're roaming about my heart.Ohh...my emotional heart, don't cry such loudly. Though none can hear the sound...it'll make me brust into tears.Control yourself my wounded heart- very soon you'll find the real peace.

Real peace?? Huh...what is called real peace??...the tormenting language of Nandini's eyes...

''It's neither the feeling to achieve you fully...

...nor the unhappy sense to lose you...

I know you're not with me,

but...I can't help blowing with this undescribable sentiment...

You begin my day,

You end it half-willingly, half-reluctantly!

With your touch- every second of my life comes alive...

Because you're...unique.

When I get lost in your eyes,

I feel the heaven in your arms-

...I anchor the shore of my dreamland...

...I turn to a NIL ENTITY...

I've nothing to stop my heart...''

-That magnetic eyes- the untold words of the eyes," it's neither the feeling to achieve you..." fascinated me once upon a time. But what was the result??...everything was ACTING...A VERY GOOD ACTING...After Durdhara's demise when I was broken, daughter of Dhanand...her comfortable care...& the mind-blowing eyesight...used to sooth me even for a moment. Fate, that night...I was ready to tie the knot of husband-wife's relation with Nandini,...her actual purpose was revealed.

...She was determined to take a powerful revenge for her father's death...she was the chief spy of Amatya Rakhas!!...the wedding night...turned too heart-wretching...

That very moment I removed her transparent veil ...,a sharp knife hurt me with all its strength within a fraction of second...Just then a man appeared before me...my almost unconscious brain was astonised!!...the man...the man...

...Let those painful episodes get closed.Isn't there any person who never hurt me??- Acharya?

No, I'm so so unfortunate. Acharya was so much protective about me...but his rigid care & hidden affection caused a great loss...sighing...

"You're my first friend

I'm the shore of your heart, you even are unaware of it!

You're my path-finder

You're the best shelter...

God portrays you because...

In his absence on earth

You fulfil his duties with so much care & affection."

-The quotes were really the reflection of my thought about Acharya. But...one day his few words made me speechless-"I'm responsible for the COMPANIONLESS MOON."

...Who was the companionless moon??

He narrated whole story...I felt as if someone snatched the ground under my feet...

Edited by surprising - 12 years ago

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Susmita

@surprising

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#16

Guys 2nd chap. ended😊 please have a look & do encourageous comments😉

Edited by surprising - 13 years ago

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Rumjhum Laha

@Patrarekha

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#17

wow wow wow...its so beautiful..and wait what?? Nandini tried to kill cgm??? thank god at least u didn't believe the theory of Durdhara being dhana's daughter and actual name of dhana's daughter was nandini...but yar you should write the story whn u got such amazing idea😭

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sapphirose176

@sapphirose176

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#18

wow wow wow wowww👏 u write too good!!!!!!! those lines(quotes) in the middle have u written them as well?? dude the update was aws!!!!! seriously u must be having a time thinking cgm's thoughts.
eagerly waiting for next chp😛

regards,
Gia.

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Susmita

@surprising

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#19

MERE NAYE MITROGAN

KIYA PAHELA ADHAY AAPLOGO KO ITNI BHI KOUTUHALLODIPAK NEHI LAGA????

...TO SABKO DO DO BAR VYAKTIGAT LIPI PRERAN KARNE KI UPRANT BHI PURANA PATHAKOONE KOI PRATYUTOOR NEHI DIYA!!!!!!!!!

KUCH DIVAS BAAD HUM JAB AAGLA AANSH LIKHENGE, AAPLOGO KO YAAD TO REHEGANA NA KI BECAUSE...THE COCOANUT HEART WAS UNDEFINIED NAAMDHARI KOI CHOTI SI KAHANI BHI THA!!!!!!!!

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816401

Hibernated

Posted: 13 years ago

#20

pehli baat to really sorry dear.mujhe apne thread par bhi comment karne ka time nahi mil paa raha tha.vote saare comments maine super speed se kiye the.pls bura mat maniye aur haan ek baar apna asli naam batana dijiye kyonki apko surprising bulana thoda same atpata same lagta hai.coming to the chapter omg acharya was killed by nandini.acharya saved chandu's life.chandu's pain was well described.I had tears in my eyes when I was reading it.