IPKKND SS:A Girl Named Khushi(Chap. 11)Upd: 12/25

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inspiringstars

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Posted: 12 years ago

#531

Brilliant Narration and so powerful characters, whether its the cuteness of little girl or strength and pain of Payal or the weakness and desperation in Arnav. This is storytelling at its best, I am late for comments, but glad I caught up.

I so dont want Khushi to be his child, because he really doesnt deserve acc to me, to lead himself into the life of a child whom he abandoned, if she is his child. If she is not, well and good, he should leave her alone, and so definitely not kidnap her like that. I can only imagine Amrita getting so worried for her. What a brilliant conversation she and Arnav had about gold bangles and all! It was all amazing, and perfection!!!

Thanks for the PMs, and I am loving this story.

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farheen75

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Posted: 12 years ago

#532

Well u made me cry with your every sentence... Payal is so right why should be breathe when Khushi's breathing has stopped? Why should he get another chance when Khushi didn't? If Payal would have been stronger then both the sisters could have raised their kids without their respective jackasses husbands but Arnav Singh Raizada made sure to completely break Khushi so that she won't be able to think to breath again and he was successful in his task but he couldn't turn Khushi into a coward like his mum who committed suicide on her own daughter's wedding bcz her husband cheated on her... Payal was so right that even if he is the father he doesn't deserve little Khushi bcz what this little needs is a loving and caring mother and not a monster and heartless father.

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Vee

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Posted: 12 years ago

#533

That last line?

it stood out for me... like hell. The entire chapter was stunning... STUNNING.

I wish I could say more, but I can't. Not without abusing what this update actually meant for me.

-V

Edited by V323 - 12 years ago

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Arjuhisis

@Arjuhisis

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Posted: 12 years ago

#534

Oh my God, what was that navin? What did I just read now?
Payal, where were u all these while? Iam thunderstruck after reading what u have said
Well written update navin
Priya

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@debby_11

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Posted: 12 years ago

#535

You made me cry

It was such a beautiful part though it was heart wrenching...it really touched my heart

Brilliantly written part

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Viji

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Posted: 12 years ago

#536

God...the past is terrible...

And its all because of that dadi...And Arnav agreed to her condn Wth???😡😡

Seriously Khushi has gone through a lot...😭.Nt oly her...Payal is also in a very bad condn...I jus loved the way hw u showed us the past in payal's words...👏

Jus loved the whole scene wher payal is talking...And the last line was 👏👏

I had tears in my eyes after reading those lines in Blue😭

Awesome update...Lets c wat happens in the further updates...😃

Waiting for it..thanks for the pm😃

Edited by vqwerty - 12 years ago

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smitzy

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Posted: 12 years ago

#537

I cried.

And there's no bigger compliment I can give you.

BAS.

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Nazibah

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Posted: 12 years ago

#538

If you're quiet enough you can hear me applauding...for Payal...for Khushi...and for the amazing writing...and if you can't then I can give you this 👏

Thanks for the PM!

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shree10

@shree10

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Posted: 12 years ago

#539

Napster naveen, read parts 5 to 7 in one go.

Ok now I actually had tears reading part 7. I have always admired your portrayal of Payal be it perfection or in this. Liked how she told Arnav that he has no right to be little Khushi's father.

part6- DNA test? U left us a cliffhanger there. But by end of 7 perspective almost changed after knowing how Arnav ditched Khushi.

part 5 - Really loved the way how Amrita reprimanded Aranv. How creepy it must be for her to have a stranger stalk her kid everyday!

Sorry I will be taking this slow as I am not good at taking angst stories lightly. I just get too affected.