The Unnatural: Rise of the Army Against the Si-ah - Page 29

My dearest Zee...
I can feel the loss of words to explain what am feeling...
Wow! So many revelations, at the same time, totally amazing

I loved Mohit's entry...
He's completely San's complimentary element...
Supersweet, childlike, naive, a breath of fresh air...
Plus, i loved his power, really cool...

That was one hard blow Barun gave Abhinav.. Ouch..
I cudn't have imagine Abhinav as the fun loving guy that he was, with Mohit...

Hmmm...
When Abhinav was telling all that to Barun, it seemed bits of Harry Potter flashed in my mind...
And i went down the memory lane, to the good old days...
Abhinav sounded like Dumbledore, and the Harry was Barun...
Honestly, i really liked it a lot...

The whole story abt the war thing, its left me intrigued..
Infact, at this point, i don't wanna think much, but just let the story unfold, because you're doing a great job...

Though, amongst all this, am wondering what's San and Em gotta do...
As in they aren't romantically linked to the boys, then what are they doing in the story...

Daah! Off to the next chapter i am...


Ps - i almost did guess right tht Barun had seen Abhinav outsude..

chapter 7


Wowww Zeee

Just pinch me to tell me its real, and that i wasn't dreaming...



I read chapter 6 before i dozed off

Where in the end of the comment i asked what was it with the Irani's being in the story...

And lo! Barun asks the same when i got up to read chapter 7

Now that's what i call cool...

(Sorry for the break though, slept for an afternoon nap)



The chapter started off real well...

What with Barun and Abhinav in all cool banter..

I really really liked the part how they fun talked...

It was a beautiful chemistry that they shared, though Mohit spoke otherwise...
The way Abhinav acts sheepish when Barun asks him to pretend not to know, was real cute...
Abhinav was almost on the verge of blurting out the truth, abt hiw worries to Barun, bt gosh, he stopped himself...
Are the Irani's a part of the slaves too, the ones in hiding, who've moved on???
Somehow Abhinav associating their topic with Drashti, didn't seem right...
Honestly, what is it worrying him...
Where do Mishal and Drashti come in all this???



Mohit, like Barun commented, is honestly a very likeable character...

You do like him instantly, there's no choice there...
And trust me, this ain't a complaint, lol

Mohit slipped Vaishnavi's name, that's not too cool right???
As in ok, though Abhinav didn't react much, but he wasn't supposed to name the leading chap...

I felt bad for Barun...
If he was so friendly earlier, it really really might be tough on him now...
And one thing i forgot to mention, Barun had loved Shilpa right...
This makes things even more difficult..
His powers exploded, that's how he feels he's responsible for her death, right??

Coming to the part where Abhinav becomes all charming and sweet..
That definitely was something, wasn't it?
He changed his decision suddenly, to accept their invite..
Was it because he knew San and Em were kind of suspicious of them...
Tht's my guess, probably...
What's wid Em and her hesitation??
Was it her precautionary nature, or was she also charmed by Abhinav??

Am off to the next chapter for now :P

:OOO *Jaw drops and hits the floor*

too good!!!!! wonderful yaar!!!! fabulous update dear!

Chapter 8

Hmmm
Actually, now come to think of it, Barun did treat Abhinav a bit too much.. um.. whateva

He's right to blast off at the sight of the weapons, it ain't easy to digest that much..
But directing it all towards Abhinav, was a lil unfair, right??

Those golden words by Mohit, seemed to set Barun alright..
Mohit's story reminds me too much of Harry Potter, sorry, but i just can't seem to stop that from happening...
He kind of resembles Neville Longbottom a lot...
And Barun, like i said earlier, cud be modern Harry Potter...

Ok! Someone from the Irani's, really???
Now i found the answer to Barun's and mine question..
Of why the boys were here...
Wow! My guess is either both the sisters are in the league, or, or maybe just Em, dunno why, but San doesn't strike as one of them...
But you never know, right???

I loved the lovey-dovey Irani's scene, it was very beautifully presented...
Sorry for the short comment, bt i need to hurry to the next chapter :P

Chapter 9

Woah Zeee
All blows together???
A little tough for me to digest...
Shucks...

Starting, thankfully Barun's on better terms now...
I liked the way Abhinav took down Barun on the argument for cars...
Quite cool...
The bond of the boys is going good...
So Abhinav also doesn't know who it is, wow..

Barun's guess is same as mine, hmmm
Perhaps both the sisters shall transform..
Though am wondering why did Em take the extra efforts to dress up in the last chapter...

The Irani's
Why on earth did San feel that eerie silence at home???
The fact that they are adopted is quite high..
Does Mr Irani know anything about their true identity???

The old man, cudn't he warn the others???
I feel too bad now...

The dinner went well thought...
Except the secretive place, Panchmarhi...
That really sounds all secretive...

Off to next one..

Chapter 10

God Zee
Ur actually killing me,
With everyone of the chapters, am dying to read so much more...

The dinner went off well...
Mr Irani off to his hidden place...

The youngsters all huddled together..
I liked the Mr Ickyface story..
Somehow, all of it leads me to believe that Em is the one...
If not both the sisters that is...

Barun had that problem again...
Shit! And wasn't it bad so much...
I'm not sure if Abhinav blurted about Shilpa, perhaps he spoke abt someone else...
But if he did, then he actually had no right to make Barun an object for everyone's pity, he really shouldn't have...

The meeting with Mr Irani in his library was quite eventful
Leaves us all wondering...
As to what's the deep mystery...

The 'He', finally made an entry...
Wow, now, i actually don't seem to like him...
He's creepy, he is...

Somehow, i still feel that the 'He' of your story is KaranVir Bohra, like i'd guesses when you'd started...

God! I'm befuddled...
I need answers in the form of chapters..

Chapter 11

Holy Cow!
Zeee...
What've you done to my poor mind...
Its so crumpled

Reading abt the Bohra guy is like shitty...
Why did he have to do this all?
But hadn't he, then from where wud've unnatural come???

Belief is that Vaishnavi, Dr Vishnu's wife killed Bohra...
Maybe he made a slave, or his son, who's the danger now...
The KaranVir bohra...
High chances of tht u know.
Somehow, i still say it's KaranVir, i dunno why...

The 1983 story, held me captive start to end, totally glued to the screen...
Barun is really one hell of a smart guy...
I liked his queries pretty much..

Temme something Zee
You mentiones 3 names, in a line...
Barun, Abhishek, and Sanaya..
Was that a clue??
I mean even Em was born then, in 1989, did u let out a clue that San is the one???
I badly need anwer to this one...
Pretty plzz

Other than that, the story's moving amazingly, and beautifully...
Keep up the good work sweetheart..

Thanks for the pm

I'll try to be regular now

Love
pooja


PS - I really really admired the unnatural element in your story...
That's utterly creative, and beautifully described
Hats off to you mate, hail ya

*lifts ur jaw back to your mouth*

Hugs and kisses...
Yes, i'm back Zee..
And with a bang too...

Heartfelt apologies on the sudden disappearance...
Exams, inevitable they are...
But finally i'm done away with them...
Took me a lil time to cover up wid the chapters..
But i did manage all of it yesterday...
Thankfully..

I had no clue how the story had developed in my absence...

It's beautiful Zee
Honestly, now this is a writer's dream...
I really really wish i cud think so creatively...
Am especially in love with the mixture of your genre...

The characters, you've portrayed, are beyond everything...
So unnaturaly real...

Keep up the awesomely blossom work
I m very eager to read more and more
And take ur sweet time wid the replies..
I'll wait :D

Love
pooja

wow..this is really interesting, i love the concept, story and everyhing else! it is really unique too and is an awesome read <3 so sorry for the lazy comment but will review properly soon!