Non-FF story - Right and wrong

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-dolphin-

@-dolphin-

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Posted: 13 years ago

Introduction

As a principled individual, she has always worked hard to do the right thing, sometimes working against her wishes. It didn't occur to her that choosing right could sometimes have the wrong consequence, or that fate may have a bigger role to play in the outcome of her choices. As she struggles through life figuring out the thin line between right and wrong, she learns some bigger lessons of life...ones that she should have accepted a very long time ago...

Note: This is a non-FF story that I have recently started. All characters and names are fictitious. I'm writing just for fun (partly because my first story was well received...sort of :P), and so my updates are not very frequent. Well, not as frequent as they used to be. We'll see if there is any response and change pace accordingly.

Edited by -dolphin- - 12 years ago

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Posted: 13 years ago

Whoa! so i m d first one...congrats 4 new story and will read it soon...

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jdots

@jdots

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

Hey congrats for the new Story..

Gr8 beginning...Do continue...

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bushrayou

@bushrayou

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

alright I had no idea you started writing again but DAMN am I happy!

I distinctly remember you were the sole reason why I started reading FFs that did not have known characters. And was it one worthwhile journey! I now connect more to the writing than to the faces that I might be putting characters to.

so thank you!

I started reading chapter one and just needed to read all five in one go before doing anything else. YOUR writing ALWAYS has such an addicting force.

You have this magic to make Characters come alive, to make emotions felt and seen.

I felt her hesitation and her nervousness, her hurt and her inability to pull away.

I am so damn intrigued into what this past is that he seems to not think anything is wrong with and a past where she can't seem to forget?

Seriously, great start. You always pull readers in and once again i am bookmarking the FF and will be checking constantly (like always)!

Thank you!!!!

Edited by bushrayou - 13 years ago

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bushrayou

@bushrayou

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

oh damn! how did you just make feel like I was ADDICTED TO HIM!

that was awesome! I really like how he has this calm presence to him, how he isn't giving up and how he understands her.

I like how hopelessly she is in love... because that is how it is!

LOVE IT!!! realistic, simple and beautiful!!!

god I missed your writing!!! THANK YOU!!

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bushrayou

@bushrayou

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

hm... big heart to want to move on... with him.

Sometimes I think maybe the hurt is too much to overlook... but in that instant we only hurt ourselves more by staying away.

I am intrigued by their shared past...

I guess I believe in second chances and she is giving him one where he desperately needs it!

Keeps getting more interesting! THANK you for writing! ❤️

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bushrayou

@bushrayou

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

damn that started out good... thinking they were trying to be together again... I like and am nervous with the new entry. I don't know if he is someone of significance for her... Extreme reactions usually mean extreme feelings...

The Rufus bit... damn that was bad. I don't know what effect that will have on her with him... did she forget her most important thing becuase of his distraction? God complications!

lol loving it!!!

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bushrayou

@bushrayou

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

oh damn! that was what I was waiting for! I slightly got nervous with the the Rufus situation and the new entry and thought that things would not turn in his favor! But he made it work!

The way you described them living seems so natural and real. I wonder when she will declare herself... and am nervous that when things are good... will something bad happen?

Loving it!! I like her character, her inner dialogue that occures that shows what she is thinking and feeling.

EXCITED for this kiss to continue... lol feel like we have been waiting forever :)

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bushrayou

@bushrayou

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

wow wow wow woww!!!!!

SOO happy to come back from being away and read two amazinnnggg chapters!!!!

chapter 10- that was brilliant! to not show her diving right in and to show how overwhelming them actually truely being together may be for her! to show her hesitance and acceptance! LOVED IT!!!

SERIOUSLY made my smile and just sigh!!!

Chapter 11-... just start off with a bang eh? god this makes me want to re-read TGND just for that feeling again which you are so aptly invoking in me all over again!! I am like a little kid in a candy story happy!!!

oh god... say you are mine? could you kill me more? damn my stomach just clenched and my heart skipped a beat!! god i am in love!

how do you always manage to make me fall in love with characters I don;t know? love it love you!

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bushrayou

@bushrayou

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#10

sh*t SH*t SH*T!!!!!

i knew it! I knew this was tooo good to be true!!! damn it! i knew i was getting happy tooo sooonn!

but clearly this is creating the plot of the story and damn is it interesting!

lol " once bitten twice shy" what a great line to say so much in. This is their hurdle one of many I assume. But this is a big one.

how does one convince him to marry her, either way one will have to give up their stance and that will make them unhappy. The way I look at it, if she gives in without marriage she will never be fully trusting in this relationship and her self. If he gives in, he only gave in doesn't believe in it, and she will think he was forced and not that he was wants to marry her.

DAMN how one move can bring you to the breaking point.

vvery excited to see them overcome this ... they will right? lol why does the neighbour character lurk in my head...

;) LOVING IT!