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oyshee

@..oishu..

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#101

In collaboration with Part-2:
This is what everyone's wearing:

Manyata:

Jai:

Vijay:

Unnati:

Hope you all liked their outfits😳😳😳

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757315

Hibernated

Posted: 13 years ago

#102

very nice loved it uday has lost his memory oh god this part was lovely awesome loved it thanks for the pm and continue soon

Edited by vampire12345678 - 13 years ago

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tuliluvsarmaan

@tuliluvsarmaan

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

#103

Kheech ke sir pe danda marungi tab samajh mein ayega kya?? For the last time!!! Stop underestimating yourself!! This wasn' bad at all!! It was really really really nice an awesome Oyshee!!! Kasam-se!!

👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏 X10000000000 for this update!!!

I loved it!!! REALLY REALLY REALLY LOVED IT!!! You know what, now i cant chose the best part!!There were sooo many!!!

And THIS was NOT AT ALL boring!!! Really!!

The idea of J's diary was fab!!! I think it was a really unique, hatke and cool way of presenting the current rishta betwwen M and J...a very intresting way to keep forth her mind. And I see J's really turned nice...good job!!! And the way u've written, its FAB!! just the way anyone would write in a journal!!

And loved this line "...believe it or not, I do love her" 👏👏👏👏

And the 3 siblings scene was really cute!!😳😳😳

And i am adoring the way u r giving us Manveer scenes in form of flash-backs...and the way u r swinging between past and present!!! Really cool...this also shows how much Manyata is actually thinking about Uday..How much she trulely misses him!!😳😳

And this part was SOOO GOOD!!!

"Hum party mein tumhaare pasand ka kuch pehenna chahtein hain. Yeh baat samajhna itna mushkil hain kya?"

TOOO CUTE!!!!!!

and this also!!!!

"Manyata had to smile at this. She smacked his arm mockingly and as he pulled her into his embrace, Manyata felt her anger disappear and she relaxed in his arms.

Uday: Pagal. Itni si baat ka bura maan gayi!

Manyata: Sirf tumhaare baton ka hi bura maanti hoon. Kisi aur ki kisi bhi baat se mujhe koi fark nahi parta!

Uday: Itna pyar karti ho humse?

Manyata: Tumhe andaaza bhi nahi hain hum tumse kitna pyar kartein hain!..."

hayyy...marr gayi!!! Uday hugs her like this...tooo cute!!!😳😳😳😳

But the best part was Giri-Manyata bonding!!! Sach mein, I didnt even think this possible ever!!! Jaldi bataana yeh chamatkaar kaise huya!!! By the way you've written it, it seems J ke saath saath Taklu uncle-ji bhi sudhar gaye hain!!! OHHH...I'm tooo excited now!!! Ab aage kya hoga??? Tumne toh barehi swiftly 2 villians ko accha baana diya,that too in a vry convincing way!! Koi naye villians laane waali ho kya?? Oh, i remember...majnu aur chaudhry toh hain hi!!! Well i'm guessing Sab ki shakal majnu ko dekhke utar gayi! is that so???? Oh god!! Why did u stop here??? Now how will i wait till the next update???? SO NOT FAIR!!!And the way u described Uday's scene was tooo funny and emotional and cute and very very very well written!!! LOL, sapne mein bhi gaaliyan!!😆😆😆😆LOL...but even though he doesnt remember her...he feels a pull!! of course he does...no one loves as he does na? Pull toh ayega hi!!! At least he's awake now!! and u described the doc-doc scene very nicely!! LOL..DMG dekhti thee kya???Overall, a superb!!!! FANTASTIC!! update...and now plzzz part3 jaldise post karna yaar,cant wait!!!P.S. The outfits were breath-taking...just as u described!!! J's one is stylish and just like something she'd wear!!! Manyata's one is classy, just like a Yuvrani should be wearing and Unnati's one is simple yet gorgeous, just like the sort of she wore on M's corronation!!! And VB's sherwani is also cool!!!FAB job done!!!

Edited by tuliluvsarmaan - 13 years ago

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Archita

@ITV_Loverr

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#104

Res... Oyshee you're a amezing writer. It was just beautiful. Asweme update. Uday has lost his memory..oh god. Please send uday back to manayta soon and thanks for the pm.

Edited by Archi02 - 13 years ago

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Jarin04

@Jarin04

Sparkler

Posted: 13 years ago

#105

Oyshee it was really nice. Oh god Uday lost his memory. Let's see what happens next

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hamra

@rocker12

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#106

huh it was gr8 :) uday lost his memory ohh what will happen next plz cont soon now i cant wait plz cont soon and in that part neither a word was boring it was to expressive :)

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Ash

@kakacool123

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#107

That was amazing oyshee I have to say it didn't bore me - not even once 😉

I loved how J became a new person with a greather conscience, how she feels for her sister.

The diary was a great idea, as we could just how j was feeling

The bond between M and Grijraj was fab, i loved there cutness, Daughter- Father relation. Truly I was smiling like an idiot

Who was the peson that interrupted them?????????????????? I am intrested. Very very intrested!!!

And Uday had memory loss oh god this is getting better and better-i wonder what will happen when he meets M

Truly Oysheee u are a FANTASTIC writer, I don't need to tell u, u probs already noe - when I saw ur PM i screamed at the top of my voice in joy as my mum came running in thinking I was being attacked LOL😆

Thank for tha PM and update very very very very x100000 soon 😛👏

Edited by kakacool123 - 13 years ago

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chitra_rao

@chitra_rao

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#108

Thanks for the PM dear 🤗, loved it. I really like the way you switch between manyatas flashback and the present situation of Uday & manyata.

What was the highlight of this update is giri-Manyata's relationship, this is one relationship which was never shown to grow in the serial, so this relationship fascinates me a lot.

J writing a diary is again good, it adds depth to her character.

Again a very nice twist is the rajmahals dr saab linked to the patient uday😊, a very loosely connected line, but will be great use in future track.

Again a very slight hint I'm getting from the story is that, u might create a one way love track between the doctor, and the 101 Patient that is uday 1 I might be wrong, and I would be glad too coz I like surprises 😉 But whochever way you take the track, I'm gonna enjoy it anyways .

And the dhamaka was Uday having memory loss, though I kind of expected this twist, but again it all depends on how u use this track and play out with it.👍🏼

It was a really well woven update 👏, continue soon 😛

Edited by chitra_rao - 13 years ago

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Sonali

@adventure_gurl

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#109

loved it hope Udayveer makes it back to them and then gradually recovers his memoty

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Tuli

@Tuli.Luvs.Uday

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

#110

Apu part2 wasnt boring in any way!!! It was SUPERB!!! And totally agree with tuliluvsarmaan here...the fb was gr8 and Uday's dram, LOL...bechaara, itni gaaliyan khaayi hain ke sapne mein bhi M ki gaaliya hi sunai deti hain😆😆...loved part2 immensely!!! continue soon😳

Part2 ke liye: 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

Edited by Tuli.Luvs.Uday - 13 years ago