Twist Of Fate Chapter8 Pg 118 27/07 NEW!

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

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Posted: 13 years ago

#431

Res

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Your update...lets just say it hits me hard.

So I actually have no words because I think I just want to cry.

But I shall not be silly and tell you it was stunning and exquisite and painful, very, but hopeful too because I really really like that Khushi is not giving up even when things are so futile because Arnav makes them out to be so, she isnt giving up.

The small gestures like buying the red cloth, the forehead kiss, the truth about Aashna, the sugar free sachets...Arnav has to see Khushi still loves him, wants him, has forgiven him.

He loves her but he just needs to know he can forgive himself.

The part where Arnav is going with all of his "Would Shes'...its just...wow. And so is Khushi's monologue towards the end. :)

And the last line is...sigh.

And the writing...just amazing. There is an underlying sadness, a melancholy yet a deep hope..so beautifully done, so amazingly done.

Beautiful chapter, Sona. And Thank You for the dedication! :)

Edited by AngelTeen - 13 years ago

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Aashifa

@curledup

Rocker

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Posted: 13 years ago

#432

your f**king me! you are actually not doing this to me! I can't take it any more.

Sorry for my horrible use of language. But its like torture. Cruel torture to watch them want, to watch the touch, to watch them pine for something the feel is not achievable.

I cannot believe you are creating this sort of torment inside me.

Btw I am holding my ears and doing uttak-bethak because of my loss of comments, forgive me art has taken over my life.

Quite literally.

And if you do not update so help me good I will handcuff you to your computer and make you update!

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appy

@appy_12

Voyager

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Posted: 13 years ago

#433

res!

There's mohabbath alright.. But there's no nafrat.. It's all.. what's that word? umm.. Reluctance? Guilt? Remorse? Regret? It's all in there.. Plus anger!

So many emotions, two of the characters on Tv, one amazing writer! Sona, need I say more?

You're really good with emotions, you know. You've written it exceptionally well, Sona. Well, I'm no one to judge really, but really, amazing.

Now, to the story. Khushi doing all those things for him.. Sugar Free sachets? I actually went aww there! :) I'm curious about the red cloth.. What will she do with it?

And 18 years later, if the passion is like that.. What's the good word.. Ah! Combustible! :P.. Then this is going to be quite a hot ride! :P

Loving it Sona, Loving it. :)

Edited by appy_12 - 13 years ago

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thechaigirl

@thechaigirl

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Posted: 13 years ago

#434

Simply brilliant...I would say every single word u wrote was exactly wer it shudb..i teared up reading it...I m speechless...its beautiful update...

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insanelycrazy

@insanelycrazy

Inactive

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Posted: 13 years ago

#435

res!!

haww f**k, i thought i made it to the first page, but guess not :/ 😭 and i is getting off topic :P woopsie

yayyiee!!! u finally gave us a arnav-ashna part!! love the father-daughter relationship, he was helping her do the project.. SOOO sweet! i love him evn more now

loved the arnav-khushi part! gosh he still carries his gussa on his sleeves na? i love that thing about him :D :D i love how you add small traces of flashbacks on and off connecting them to a time before. it was cute how khushi wanted to get him all annoyed :D :D the part where arnav was having his little fantasy was really hot!😳

khushi was running from the colour ? :( sad, its like her and arnav's thing. loved how you wrote khushi concern for his diabetes and the small small things she was doing for him so his stay there is normal :) the part where khushi was trying to distinguish the love and her hatred/anger, amazingly put in words. poor girl doesn't know which one is more apt/necessart 😆

i love this khushi, how she determined and doesn't loose hope and keeps trying.. awesomee update!

Edited by insanelycrazy - 13 years ago

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laddoo598

@laddoo598

Sparkler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#436

That was so excruciatingly bittersweet. You writing is magic.

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AllSmiles86

@AllSmiles86

Navigator

Posted: 13 years ago

#437

How you have created a plethora of emotions in mere seconds when Arnav turned Khushi around, was beautiful. You have such a strong hold on emotional turmoil of the star crossed lovers.

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meera

@jblueday

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#438

this was such an emotional chapter! arnav want to touch her, talk to her but he dont know how to after all these years, khushi too in the same condition yet why dont their heart knows that? khushi being the talkative one is also at loss of words. each and every small gestures which otherwise seem unimportant conveyed a lot here. she buying coffe beans, sugar free sachets and his fav color dress proved her yearning for him, hope arnav understands😕 it is high time he forgive himself and welcome his wife and child to his life now that he knows khushi took care of his daughter all thee years alone.

these two will never change now i guess ashna should take some step being the smart one she is😊

continue soon andd thanks for the pm👏👏👏

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inspiringstars

@inspiringstars

Dazzler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#439

Oh Dear, what do you do to me? It is so dangerous to read your updates, they drown you into deep, too deep...they drown you into the magic of your words...and then I do not want to come out and face reality. Although what you write is all real, the words, the beautiful emotions portrayed are just so damn dreamy and so mesmerizing.

The longing that Arnav feels for her, when he looks at her when she comes out of the shower, the frenzy of thoughts of what would she do if he got as intimate with her as he was thinking...it was just so beautifully described, the passion and the desire so raw that it could consume everything that came in the way. But he did not do anything, he stayed away, was that because he is guilty of letting her go? or that he doesnt want to scare her?

ON the other side, she also feels the same, she longs for his touch, this feeling of currents deep inside her belly and her core that he invokes and only he could ever invoke. She is also disappointed that he is not coming closer...the frankness of the question, of Aashna being his daughter, just shocked me!

All in all, a wonderfully written update, you are a wonder Sona!! Lots of hugs for this one...amazing!!

Thanks for your pm

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Shobhana

@-Shobhu21-

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#440

*Sigh*

You took so long to update this... That I wouldnt be suprised if Id ended up in the asylum !!

This was so beautifully written Sona, Im out of words !!

The want !! They both want it.. But well just wont say it out !! Those little gestures of hers !! the red bit, sugar-frees coffee beans... And answering about Aashu !! Was so simple... And had there be any other guy with a little more sense then him, would have surely swept her off her feet !! well Im hoping that Aashu makes him see sense too !! And those lines !! About it finally being a home !! aww !! She surely did miss Arnav a lot didnt she ??

Arnav !! This guy is seriously suffering from split-personality disorder !! (no offence) One sec he behaves like he's just changed for better and the next he just leave you going like !! And the the Wouls Shes !! Ahhh he kills you with the imagination alone... And had he really done it, I would be 🤪 going crazy !! As it is ive lost my brain somewhere in those updates of ROA😉

And the whole tone of the update !! there was just hope floating through it, with a tinge of melancholy to it !! Like all the perfect ingredients for the perfect salad !! The right amount of desire, love , want, disappointment and hope !!

Loved it Sona, this update was an amazing piece of writing🤗

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