~~ Immortal Nights ~~ - Page 5

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Posted: 13 years ago
#41
u should suely continue
its spooky concept
waiting 4 next one
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Posted: 13 years ago
#42
interesting... do start the SS... kriya and swayam are vampires! awesome...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#43
Nimmi simply luvd it.awesum concept
Lookin forward fr d further updtz...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#44
Amazing start!
I really loved the concept..!

thanks for the pm
update asap!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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heyyy ek or ff wow😃,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,n amazing cnpt thnkx 4 pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
#46
wow!!!
nice story :)
i really luved it n specially vampires ...
i jus luv the to the core :P

u must continue :P

n dont forget to update soon :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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yipee...new ss on Kriyansh...it'll be fun
do continue asap...
nice start!!!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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nyc concept...waitng fr d frst part egerly...:)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#49
Interesting concept:):)
Do continue and pm me pls:)
Sending u a request:)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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The Strange Girl

Reyansh, Vickramjeet, neharika and Sharon were roaming in jungle to find a way to their camp but all in vain.. they reached a place.. that was similar to the one on where they start their camping.. but here there was nothing..it was an empty place with lots of bushes and big trees… they were exhausted and hungry..


They haven't eaten anything for past 5 hours..
They were lost and were searching for food and their place.. but no sign of it… they cursed themselves for coming to such a spooky and terrible place..


Sharon was hell tired… she couldn't even breath properly..
As she hadn't drink water from 5 hours… that was enough… she sat near a tree losing all her senses…

Reyansh went towards her and asked

R: u alright??

Sh : ya but I cant take it anymore…

R: u wait here .. we will get something and return to u…
And neha will be here with u.. we cant take any kind of risk..
Especially here..

Sh: ok

Neharika and Sharon sat there breathing hard..
They were hell hungry at that time… no one can image how that hunger would be except 1 person..


There Reyansh and Vickramjeet were trying hard to just get a sign of some water but all in vain…
Suddenly they heard something..


It was a piano's voice…
Someone was playing a piano.. it was a sweet yet paining tune..
They looked at each other and then start looking here and there.. the piano was so soothing to hear that they felt their all hunger and tiredness was gone..


They started searching for it but no sign again..
Every where they knew one thing..
NO SIGN NO SIGN..
NO SIGN OF NOTHING..

Then they heard a sweet yet in pain voice.. that was a girl's voice..

Sau Baras guzre raat hue
Sau Baras guzre din hue

They saw a girl walking at a far distance..



Sau Baras guzre chaand dikhe
Sau Baras guzre bin jiye

She was in pain.. anyone can say that..
She was wearing a black gown..she was singing in a low voice but they can hear it easily..


Kyun pal theharta hai yeh
Kyun waqt badalta nahin hai


She said looking up at the dark sky.. reyansh and vickramjeet tried hard to see her face but her hairs were enough to hide her face from those eyes…


Yeh raah sooni hai kyun
Kyun koi nikalta nahin hai


She said while looking at the way she was going … they can see her eyes… tears were rolling down from her eyes to cheeks and then to her neck… she was totally drenched in the sea of pain…


Sau baras guzre saans liye
Sau baras guzre bin jiye


She said these words while moving her hand from her chin to throat and then to neck…
She was still walking… she was too weak..


Palkein hai khwaabon se khaali
Dil hai ke bandh koi ghar


she turned .. they hide behind some bushes...
she was so beautiful... her face was dull and her eyes were swollen..
she was so fair but have dark circles too...


Kabhi rang thay nainon mein
Kabhi dil ko lagte thay par


she smiled faintly and then placed her hand on her chest near her left shoulder.. in other words, on her heart... she was deeply thinking about something..


Woh raat saheli meri
Sab taare chura le gayi hai


she runs from there in a slow speed and then broke down at a place...
she feel down and starts crying hard..


Woh dil jo tha mera
Ab woh bhi mera nahin hai


she again places her hand on her heart and then hugged herself tightly..


Hai khafa mujhse yaar mere
Kya pataa kab yeh phir mile


she straighten herself and start walking again..


Hum toh charaghon se jalke
Baithe hain umeed mein


she sits near a small pond..


Kya jaane yeh kis ka
Rahe intezaar hume


she said while looking up at the sky..
and then she lies on that place ..


Koi chu le mujhe
Kyun aakhir yeh lagta hai dil ko


she mouthed these words and hugged her self
and then turned to the other side..now she was facing them but she didnt saw them..


Saansein bandh hai toh kya
Ab bhi dhadakta hai dil toh


she said these words while crying in pain...


Yeh tadap koi naa sune
Naa samaj yunhi dil hai yeh


now her face was straight with no expression..
she closes her eyes tight and then opens them..


Sau baras guzre raat hue
Sau baras guzre din hue


she stands and then starts walking...


both boys ran to her but when they reached that place, no one was there..
Who was the girl?
what happened to her??
what is she doing in a hunted jungle??
why was she in pain??
they asked each other and then looks down in disappointment...

Vickramjeet : she was so beautiful but she was in pain..

Reyansh : ya.. but what was she doing in jungle??

Vickramjeet : how do i knw??

It was hell dark all around but Thanks God they saw that link and then reyansh walks back to the girls.. now they werent thirsty but hell hungry..


they were walking from past 1 hour and they found nothing.. but some spooky things... some weird and strange places..
suddenly they heard a thud...
they looked here and there but no one was there..
they were scared now..
they walked backward and then hit someone..


they turned back while screaming...
there eyes were closed..
they opened there eyes murmuring God to save them..


when they opened their eyes , they saw an aged man standing with a stick in his hand..

Man : tum log yahan par kya kar rhe ho???
he said in an angry tune..

Reyansh : we are lost here.. we dont know the way out of this jungle.. can u please tell us the way...

Man : bohat raat ho gayi he .. tum logon ka yahan is tarha ghumna thek nhi.. yahan pass me hi hamare mahraja ka mehel he.. aj wahin ruk jao..

Reyansh : mahraja ka mehel?? jungle ki bech me??

Man : sawal pochne hen ya zinda rehna he??

Reyansh : wo.. wo zinda rehan he..

Man : to us taraf chale jao..
he said while pointing towards a side..

they all looked there and then turned
Reyansh : par

but he was gone.. no one was there..

Vickramjeet : ye kya tha??

neharika starts crying...

Vickramjeet : its ok neha... pata nhi yahn hamare sath ye kya ho rha he..


next update after 60 likes..
hope i deserve that :)
and any suggestion or juttas and chappals are warmly welcomed...

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