IPKKND FF | Broken Strings (ON HOLD) - Page 19

Originally posted by: arshiforever143

U did it again Shay!!!! where do u get those dialogues from?!!

From now on I am starting a DIALOGUES OF THE CHAPTER containg the awesomest dialogues!!!!!

And to start with this...

He was a man. An Oh-so sexy man.

Okay so I loved the relationship portrayed here.

Arnav-Anjali

Arnav-Akash

Akash-Khushi

Anjali-Khushi

and to an extent there was a hint of a beautiful Arnav-Khushi in the upcoming parts!!!!

Waiting for the next update Shay!!! Love ya!!

Originally posted by: Madafterarhi

Woah, loving Akash here.

That was most simply genius. The effect these teo stubborn idiots have on each each yet they fail to realize it...and Anjali's love for Khushi...every thing was very well portrayed..

Loved it! And update soon please?😃

Originally posted by: sargamfriends

before i begin may i just say to you...writing with emotions is a talent and let me be crystal clear you have it!!! Loved every bit of this update...just how the chapter flowed was beautiful...

Now coming to the update...i have have have to admit i am loving Akash atm...not because he is trying to bring thm together (well yeah tht gets him browny points) but for his sheer understanding...he might seem like this cool as attitude dude who is bindaas about everything but really...in all sense he has a soft spot of emotions...and that has been very well formulated in his character...he dsnt show his emotions..he believes actions speak louder than words...he is a man of action...also he is very observant...he has observed his brother keenly over the years and realised the kind of person he is...he knws wht effects him and wht works on him...but he also observed Khushi...the woman he never met but knew was affected in a different fashion by his cousin...lol i loved the part where he knws he will killed by his brother bt is ready to take the risk if it means true happiness for him...which was presented as a funny thing but in true sense it shows he can do anything for his cousins 👏...

Coming to Arnav 🤣 loving it...bahahahaha his situation is so classic...he thinks he dsnt care but in hearts of hearts he wants to be forgiven...it almost feels like he dsnt want to talk to Khushi in a fear tht he might nt be forgivn...but whn he saw his sister being forgiven he had hope of being forgiven...it nw seems like a possibility...earlier it feels like he knew he had no hope so he fooled himself lol and himself alone into believing he dsnt care...but nw whn he saw tht she has forgiven Anjali and has no grudges againt his family...and is also being friendly with Akash...he has hope tht he just might get his best friend back...

And last but not the least my favourite KHUSHI...oh hw i love this character of urs...there is nthng made up abt her...so real just like any other girl...she admits to herself her weaknesses...her feelings and her thoughts...just between herself and herself she acknowledges her feeling for this man she hates...no lies no pretence...clear admission...she admits and thn she seeks a way around it...she dsnt have any objectives behind it...she dsnt evn want him to beg for forgivness...she wants him to realise the pain of his actions...she acknowledges the pain he gave her...the feelings she has for him despite all tht...and thn after thinking from her heart...she reverts to her brain for a plan of action...their no air of ego...just plain hurt...she has to train herself to act the way she does but she has no problems in acknowledging it to herself...i love tht abt her...makes her so real...LOVE HER!!!

have to say to you...this is an awesme piece of work 🤗 a huge hug to you for taking the time out and creating it 😊

Originally posted by: dreamyshadows

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I'M A GOLDIE WITH THIS POST! WAAHOO 😃

Brilliant! I just absolutely love this Shay! You know your writing is to die for, and your talent for showcasing such amazing emotions for each character and each little thing is just wow. 👏

Onto the updateee

Hmm, Akaash is just point blank bawse. Period.

I'm dead sure that he's my favorite character in this fiction, I absolutely adore him ^_^ And the fact that he's trying to bring Arnav and Khushi together just completes the picture. Sigh. Can I have him?

Anyhoo,

Lol, hot mess. Woah there, let the angry tiger not hear your thoughts Akaash, warna you're a dead man 😆 Anjali has begun redeeming herslef [slightly] in my eyes. I'm glad that she's confided in young Kaashi, makes things much, much easier. 😃

LOLLL.

Thats legitimately all I can say for Khushi. No joke. She is just too chill 😎.

How absolutely Khushi to admit her weakness like such an oh-so-mature person, and then pretend like she's the strongest human being on earth. 😆 Aahhh, your descriptions are so wonderful Shay! Such a motherf**king hot Arnav, Im dead 🤢

Hmm, not bad Anjali. But will this end up splintering hers and Arnav's relationship? 😕

Khushi is the epitome of an ice princess right now. Just a perfect ice princess. Well, at least for Arnav she is. I do kinda feel bad for the guy, and then I dont. I'm still in the middle of making a decision 😆

Oooh, tension in the air and tension in bitwa's mind as well eh? 😉 Jealouswa! Haila! Akaash better run, or knowing him, get even closer to Khushi soon 😆 Then we'll see the real fireworks shoot. Its almost Diwali isn't it? 😆

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

Arnav is such a man child. The last part was so funny. Akaash absolutely lurveesss torturing Arnav doesn't he? 🤣

Loved it Shay, like I love you!

CONTINUE SOON.

Avi 😃

GOLDIE GOLDIE GOLDIE GOLDIE

😛

Originally posted by: DropofDew

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edit - yeyyy!! First again! 😃 😛

And bahahahahaha! Call me a sadist but oh dear lord I found Arnav's frustration so hilarious! Poor thing is a goner! 😆 😆 Aaah you silly little boy if only you had done the right things in the first place you would not have landed in this pile of shit 😆.

So okay moving on as I still continue to laugh at Arnav and his still adamant arrogant mind 😆.

I love Aakash!!!! I love him! Why can he not be like this in the show? He has a purpose here! I just love him!

And I honestly LOL'd at the part where he catches the apple with his teeth 😆.

Khushi of course I love more than everyone else in your FF although Aakash is quickly getting closer to that spot. You've written her waking up in the morning with such reality that I'm lost for words! Every single word, your utter brilliance of just being able to choose all the right ones! Aah!

And Khushi at least you're not happy at the prospect of having to go to work at AR designs 😛, I wake up every morning moaning "f**k my life" 😆 and I chose this uni course for myself 😆. I could totally relate (dunno if that's a good thing 😆)

I love how you described Khushi's yearning for Arnav despite the fact that she had decided that her mind was made up the night before, all her attempts to keep up a strong front and not let him get to her, her realisation of the fact that it is in fact a difficult task and that she may not be able to stay away from him after all was written so wonderfully. Especially your description of her inability to stay away from him physically, that handsome, mind-boggling, making girls weak in the knees aura he carries with him was written out just perfectly! 👏

Oh good lord I had a huge grin on my face all throughout Arnav's part, he's such a sucker 😆. Poor man is trying to keep up his hard exterior but failing miserably! 😆 I'm starting to feel quite sorry for him now. And I'm glad that Khushi is still keeping with her plan and not showing that he has in fact got to her. He is slightly deluded though (of course) in thinking that she should be the first one to talk to him and at first that part got me really angry but then I realised he was going to take the first step and got all happy inside. But you know what I'm the happiest at the fact that in the end she just walked away and they didn't end up speaking because well Arnav you still have a lot of redeeming to do!

And of course I think my comments would be incomplete if I post them without saying this. You write so painstakingly beautifully! If you publish a book I will be the first person in the queue! Honestly! From the moment that he grabbed her hand till the moment she walked away was written so perfectly, so magnificently that I could imagine their each and every action, every expression as if it were happening right in front of me! I could read that paragraph over and over again.

I especially loved this line:

The air around him went cold, the warmth of her hand leaving behind a sheen of ice on his rough hands as he just carried on looking at her.

it was just perfect! I have no other words to describe this!

I really like the fact that you focused a lot more on Arnav in this chapter. I remember you saying that you were still sort of trying to figure him out and judging from this chapter I think you have 😊. Because it's certainly helped me understand him a bit more. I now don't feel as angry as I was with him in the start but of course as I mentioned earlier he has a long way to go in terms of redemption. He can be an arrogant stubborn twat but his feelings for her are more prominent now. He can't keep away from her, he yearns for her to talk to him, just one word, anything, even shout at him but just talk to him. He wants to talk to her, I could see his walls crumbling bit by bit in this chapter and then when he finally holds her hand his resolution has broken, he gives in and lets go of his pride. But I'm still happy that Khushi is not going to give him the satisfaction of obtaining her forgiveness so easily. You go girl!

And Aakash your heart is in the right place but I'm afraid I can see Arnav having you for dinner 😆. Going to end my comment before I fall asleep on my laptop reiterating that fact that I love Aakash! 😆

I love your work and thank you so much for this quick update!!! 🤗 🤗 🤗

Lots of loweee from Pinks! ❤️ x

Originally posted by: archmink

I read all the part in once
I loooved it ... yr story telling is unique

Arnav is going crazy just in one wk how dose he think his best friend must of had cope with his void for five freaking years , it's very painful to not have any answers wether that he is alive or not ,.. She was going to their special place and mandir everyday to prey for himself ,, she had kept Jim alive in her mind and prayed for him when his own di had ask her to let go.
She shims give him the run for his money and make him fall to his knees for the pain she had gone thru ,.. he may had his resones for doing what he did like vanishing in to thin air but saying sorry does not make up for it

Plllzzxxx pm me when u update

Originally posted by: -Shobhu21-

Glimpses of chappy 7 !
I want the whole updatewa !

But the glimpses have made me even more excited to read the next update !
Wiaitng for it !

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Haiii !!

So Khushi, woman you absolutely rock ! *takes a bow* That was surely the best way to potray Khushi !
The way you explained her letting Arnav take her hands in the beginning, and teh emotions soaring through Arnav !

And probably she realised that her resolve's weakening so she moves ! And crash ! Heart broken he is, though he wont accept it even a bit ! And best friend ? Did he just call Khushi his best friend ? Im absolutely angry at him ! I mean you go missing, let her assume you're dead, and now he's bloody jealous over Akash talking with Khushi ! *IDIOT* (SORRY, BUT ASR is pissing here)

And Akash ! I love him !
Smarty pants !

Amazing update Shay !
And it's so stupid of me to not see the update down neeche ! :P Thanks for telling

Originally posted by: shay1990

PINKS!!! ❤️
You wonderful woman!
So just like always... I shall take this space to say a humongous THANK YOU!!!! And that i just love you dammit!! 🤗 Once again, if i could bake you a cake,,, I would! Or i would send you a Pizza Hut hot cookie dough... Providing you like them that is 😉

So firstly, i love that you love Akash... This was my aim, to make him an integral part of everyone's lives. Because he is!!! And also, I'm so happy that you noticed the apple bit! It took me a while to structure that sentence the way i wanted lol... So I'm so glad you liked it!!! 😆

And yesss... I'm equally as glad that you liked the part when Khushi wakes up! Because sleep is such a beautiful f**king thing... And should be explained as such! LOL.
And don't worry... I used to wake up thinking 'f**k my life' every single day before lectures when i was at uni as well. peas in a pod!

And thank you for noticing that i finally have a purpose for Arnav LOL... you are absolutely correct in thinking that! I think i finally understand him myself now. This chapter was purely setting the scene for the gradual breakdown of his resolve - and for his redemption!

Once again... Thank you so much for your amazing commentary. It really does make my day to read them. And i love you so so much for it.

Hugs coming your way right... Now!
🤗 🤗