SS Stand by me. Part 7 pg 37

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Roshni

@dilkeroshni

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#51

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So since I was threatened that I should have the biggest comment. Here goes nothing...

That was very well written and thought-out overall. I loved the emotional outcome of this part. They were very projected!

There were so many little mistakes that should not have been there. This is why I try to avoid posting right after writing becuase I usually end up finding so many mistakes. Read this part again baji and I will guarantee that you will be shaking your head at yourself asking, did I really write that? <-- Yes I know that was a run-on sentence but I am going to ignore that tiny little fact for now!

I know you are so sneaky giving us false hope. The Arnavji at the end sounds like its Khushi but I know its not. It is probably Payal. Giving us false hop *shakes head at you* She is on a ventilator so I am pretty sure that it is not her.

How come everyone didn't believe her before and literally threw her out of the house but came rushing to the hospital to see if she is okay?

I hope this is long enough for now!

Roshni

Edited by dilkeroshni - 13 years ago

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-Mayuri-

@-Mayuri-

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#52

So emotional and extremely sad! But very well written! Can't wait to read more!

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kdkumar

@kdkumar

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Posted: 13 years ago

#53

OMG loved it!! She has to survive!! Can't wait for part 3!

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dumas

@dumas

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#54

part 1

awesome update that was so heart breaking poor arnav he let her down because he did not want to choose between his sister and her

part 2

she drank poison and is slowly dying her family have left her behind and now his choice is her lets hope she survives poor akash and payal their sr is on hold loved the both parts please pm she has his world in her hands

Edited by dumas - 13 years ago