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Vanisha

@TheBlueAngel

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Posted: 13 years ago

#31

hell i dint really wna read dat bt since u wrote i hd 2..

sry its jst dat am sick n a bit frustated kz ov da precap...😳

well i fnk it was da perfect ending..he got his due..😳

btw Sanch ur siggy is too beautiful..😍

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Jyo.

@Jyo.

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#32

Sancho! 🤗 OMFG that was so beautifully scripted. I could feel his pain, and you know these paragraphs:

He could feel the butterflies that now flew inside in his stomach, giving him goose bumps all over. He could feel his heart doing flip flops as he neared the door. Just one more step and the world will be his. With him. For him. Belonging to him.

The familiar churn that he'd used to feel quiet often whenever she was around died. The heart stopped beating. It was all over.

The small card lay on his table as he clutched the broken glass in his hands. The blood oozed out slowly, the warm liquid slowly dropping on the glass topped table. He closed his eyes to see the most beautiful smiling face he'd ever seen. The most innocent eyes he'd ever watched. The most pure heart he'd ever came across. The only girl whom he'd given his soul too. It was her wedding invitation, dated on 17^th August, four days ago.

For some very odd reason, I fell in love with them. I think it's because of the way you've scripted them and how his emotions are so tangible! The last paragraph especially, it broke my hearth into a million pieces just reading it! Amazing OS! Keep writing more. I apologise if I don't read/comment any more. I've sort of lost interest in reading :| But this, I am so glad I gave it a chance and read it! Loved it to the core :)

Write more soon-ish!

Love youuu

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Edited by ..Jojo.. - 13 years ago

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Kuku

@lankan

Navigator

Posted: 13 years ago

#33

I loved the OS ! I was so sad, i actually almost, slightly, cried. I love how subtle the ending was, yet it created an enormous impact. Great job, and thank you for introducing me to another song that i will most likely be addicted to in the future :D

Mehrunnisa

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karisma

@karisma

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#34

heart-breaking!!!🥺 🥺 u captured arnav's feelings beautifully..his anticipation and the moment his dreams came crashing down

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kohli4ever

@kohli4ever

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#35

Sooo sad n emotional...i cud feel my heart break with arnavs...ohh the pain..😭

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Jasleen

@Jasleen

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#36

Very well written! Ending was a bit sad, very emotional!!!

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dumas

@dumas

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#37

sancho that was so sad and emotional loved it thanks for the pm

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catalyst

@catalyst

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#38

It was her wedding invitation, dated on 17^th August, four day

gosh i felt lykk cryinhg after reading tis line... sancho the update was fab i was almost stunned wen i read tis line - sumtyms we do make mistakes and regret it later on n thn u juss cant even look back n crrt them...

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BIackSwan

@BIackSwan

Trailblazer

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#39

loved it murphoo 🤗

feel awful for arnie boy... he's shattered very badly and hard to mend

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Shobhana

@-Shobhu21-

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#40

Sancho sancho Sancho !!
I love you beta...I sooo wish that you become a writer one day...
Kya likha hai...Love it I just love it...
The emotions,the potrayal of the charcters was so perfect...It made me wanna cry...
And the ending...Hai rabba ...Guess you should have played Rabba Ve sad tune there...
I love you Sancho for making my day by this OS...

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