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Posted: 13 years ago

#191

Originally posted by: mystique_girl
Please please stretch the story...the last one(Dear Diary) felt right even when you added a few more parts..

About the term "open relationship", I am sorry I used it in flow of words I guess, but my next comment might have told you I didnt want to term what they had as a relationship yet .

But what they plan to have, can it be termed as a relationship? Or just an extended friendship with a dollop of attraction? If Geet agrees to this, what can we call this "thing" between them ? Casual fling would be gory .. Open relationship too serious a word... I am still searching !

Never ever apologize, it takes the fun out of the discussion...

So in-turn I ask the question...What's in a name?
What we are trying to do is find the sex of the baby when the couple haven't even done 'it'?
Terrible example at that...😆

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mystique_girl

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Posted: 13 years ago

#192

Originally posted by: ninand

Maan's forthrightness was most refreshing. That he honestly came forward with his desire for exploring their mutual pull, seemed such like a trusting gesture. To comfort her with what she revealed when he accidentally touched her.

Why hurry in deciding or naming this.. When you feel a connection with someone, you explore it by spending time together, that's how relationships are formed. They just happen to have the luxury of time and privacy, since they are on this train. all the more better.

She only has to decide if she is ready to open up, to see, touch and feel what this is.. There are no expectations, since there can be no expectation this early .

Loved your comment, Ninu...specially this part..😃

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mystique_girl

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Posted: 13 years ago

#193

Originally posted by: 6thElement

Never ever apologize, it takes the fun out of the discussion...

So in-turn I ask the question...What's in a name?
What we are trying to do is find the sex of the baby when the couple haven't even done 'it'?
Terrible example at that...😆

ROFL at your comparison !!

Many many 🤗 for you !

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Posted: 13 years ago

#194

Originally posted by: ninand
I have ended up wishing hopelessly that I hadn't read this all together ,and should have commented some after each part. Cause the absolute fluidity in language and the character of each line in the last chapter(chapter 7) has left me in an entirely uncomfortable position where I am practically bursting with some emotions which find no coherence or definition in words . so ..

I read it and re-read it instantly thrice for the sheer beauty of your language Hasini. You give me that, and I have no need of dissecting those characters , or psyches, or ask questions.. it makes me feel sated and look forward to their story , letting them develop your way.

I confess I only skimmed through some comments, so do not know the nature of the doubts here. I just find them both, as clueless as we all are. Just because they each have been through broken relationships , does not mean time should be a parameter in them deciding if their new interests are rebounds or surface attractions-distractions.

Their past only makes them circumspect, more wary of the true nature of what it is that is growing between them , than if they had met under less duress.
Maan's forthrightness was most refreshing. That he honestly came forward with his desire for exploring their mutual pull, seemed such like a trusting gesture. To comfort her with what she revealed when he accidentally touched her.

Why hurry in deciding or naming this.. When you feel a connection with someone, you explore it by spending time together, that's how relationships are formed. They just happen to have the luxury of time and privacy, since they are on this train. all the more better.

She only has to decide if she is ready to open up, to see, touch and feel what this is.. There are no expectations, since there can be no expectation this early .

What I mean to say is, I find no questions right now, neither a scope nor any need for them,.. only spontaneous reactions, the instincts and the senses teasing one another, the way they surprise themselves, and ..

God I dont know Hasini !.. I just loved reading it. I didnt even want to comment, but if I dont comment I feel I'll explode.. 😆 so there really is no option.

maybe next time, I'll simply quote the entire update. Nothing can beat that :)

Writing it all at once, you leave me dumbfounded too.

No questions? You are the on the minority here...😊 I can only hope that as the story progresses tow you all to one side.
Glad you like reading it, but I'm not so sure, I like when you say "you didn't even want to comment"
Good or bad, a few words are still do some good than to leave it unsaid. Hope I will find you around with the upcoming updates...for I very much plan to stretch it out a bit, than originally intended.

THANKS for your lovely words. In a way, you have your own fan following and I'm one among them too.

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mystique_girl

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Posted: 13 years ago

#195

Originally posted by: 6thElement
But do, check it out ;) It comes with my strong recommendation.

Its a straight forward story. No twists and turns (except one 😆 that is needed for their separation).
I would ignore the slow narration, but their acting is above par for television standards and flawless.

I could never tell, if it was the dialogues, or the narration, or the way they acted out the scenes with the no-background-scrore atmosphere, filled with nothing but the character emotions...but they make me go bonkers for them.

Lord! I can't wait for Saturday.

Finally got a chance to look at this ... well it looks quite good actually - specially their expressions and the song was very well suited..

Just wanted to clarify - are the girls in the first part of the video and last different? Can I have two lines on the story of the soap pls? It helps before I start reading your writing. Is your story on the same lines as the soap?

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Posted: 13 years ago

#196

Originally posted by: mystique_girl

Finally got a chance to look at this ... well it looks quite good actually - specially their expressions and the song was very well suited..

Just wanted to clarify - are the girls in the first part of the video and last different? Can I have two lines on the story of the soap pls? It helps before I start reading your writing. Is your story on the same lines as the soap?

Technically, no ardent fan of Humsafar can write two lines about the story.
And I'm not even going to try it. 😆

Khirad and her mom live in Hyderabad and Khirad's mom is dying from cancer. As she begins counting her days, the widowed mother reaches out to her brother, who is settled in Karachi - Baseerat, his wife and son Ashar (obviously with all traits of the US returned charming male lead).

Baseerat feels guilty from not having stayed in touch with his sister over the years and brings her to Karachi, along with Khirad. The sister falls gravely sick, and Baseerat promises to take care of his niece by proposing marriage between Ashar and Khirad.

Ashar's best friend is Sara with all the makings of an obsessive friend, who owing to their childhood friendship blindly assumes that Ashar will marry her - which of course is not the way Ashar sees it. When Sara hears news of Ashar's marriage to Khirad, she turns suicidal, and attempts to take her life, but is saved eventually with people finding her at the nick of time.

Meanwhile, Baseerat's wife is against the marriage too and Ashar himself does not wish to be tied down to a woman who is by no means a match to his suave, urban ways of life.

Baseerat convinces everyone and with much resignation the wedding takes place at home in the presence of Khirad's dying mother. Shortly, Khirad's mom passes away and Khirad becomes a shut clam, withdrawing from the new life and the people she comes to live with.

In the days that follow, Khirad overhears Ashar tell Sara that Khirad can never be that companionable and equal partner he would like her to be. As a result, her ire rises and her ego is grimly stoked. Khirad feels she has been forcibly thrust into Ashar's life and keeps her distance from him at all times.

While Khirad and Baseerat bond for all the lost time, Baseerat becomes ill and leaves Khirad all to herself, after he asks Ashar to give Khirad all of life's happiness. After his death, Baseerat's wife appears to have a change of heart and promises Khirad to be the mother, she has lost.

Ashar takes interest in Khirad and initiates actions to show his fondness, once she comes to live with him in hi room. He learns that she is educated and notices her refined ways.

Of course, Sara turns villainous at best, and tries to keep Ashar from bonding with Khirad, by whisking him away for impromptu dinners and never forgets to highlight her low upbringing which Ashar forbears, in compassion for his childhood friend.

Ashar begins seeing Khirad in new light, despite his initial prejudices and eventually falls in love with her. She in-turn reciprocates and they are now happily married and more of an adorable couple.

Ashar suggests Khirad to enroll for higher studies and she enrolls in a nearby university. Khirad discovers friendship in the younger student circle and for reasons unknown, Ashar is threatened by her male friend Khizer, who also happens to be Sara's cousin; Khizer is madly in love with sara only to face constant rejection due to her own affections for Ashar. Ashar turns out to be insecure about their relationship and his mood-swings remain a puzzle to her, for he never comes out with his scruples.

In a get-together where Ashar is planning to join them later at Sara's house, Khirad and her mom-in-law arrive only to find Khizer already there. Khirad is asked to prepare some dishes and Khizer helps out. He purposefully spills something on Khirad's dress and using that to his benefit, pulls Khirad's dupatta off and helps her clean herself, when the entire family walks in on them, which seemingly comes across as an intimate moment between the two. As if on cue, Ashar arrives there, right in time for the showdown.

The family declares them as an illicit couple and Khizer comes out saying that they needn't hide their affections any more, which terribly confuses Khirad. Ashar's mom castigates her leaving khirad behind at Sara's place. When Khizer finds himself alone with Khirad, he comes out with the truth. That it was a ploy - which would uproot Khirad's presence from Ashar's life - into which he was bought into by Ashar's own mom, in return for an offer to study in the states. Khirad finds her way home, only to be thrown out without an audience with Ahsar (Ashar is not at home) and realizes it was Ashar's mom's revenge for coming into their lives and for her decimating the vision she had for Ashar's life. It crumbles Khirad to come to terms with a sly, scheming mother-in-law who was far from being a mother to her.

A pregnant Khirad manages to go back to Hyderabad broken and depressed. Ashar continues to refuse taking her calls, despite the number of times she reaches out to him at office and at home. She goes into premature labor and gives birth to a baby girl: Hareem. At this time, she decides to start living for her baby and hard walls against the feelings of abandonment and betrayal from Ashar. Sara remains in Ashar's life, but he pulls into his shell and lives an ascetic life.

Four and half years pass and Khirad finds out about Hareem's heart condition, that requires an open heart surgery. She reaches her rope's end before she reaches out to Ashar as her last resort. She confronts him and states all proof that Hareem is indeed Ashar's daughter - of which, he had not been cognizant of in all those years. She doesn't hear from Ashar for the next four days while she is staying in Karachi and it begins to worry her.

The next day, Hareem is playing outside the hospital, where Ashar lands and she recognizes him as her 'picture wala papa'. The father and daughter hug just as Khirad comes out and Khirad takes her away to see the doctor. Ashar finally breaks his silence and lashes out in anger to Khirad, for keeping his daughter away from him for all those years.

This is where the story stands at the end of Episode 15. Uff! If anyone feels I have missed any details, please go on and post.

And now all of you who read the summary, owe me to read the FF: Humsafar and write back. 😆. At least, like this post, to know that my time, writing this up, was well spent.

Note: My story has nothing to do with the soap, except for borrowed imagery that the show dispels to the characters (Not for Ashar though)

Edited by 6thElement - 13 years ago

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Posted: 13 years ago

#197

Originally posted by: -nirvana-
^ H, that is truly brilliant. Bravo...👏

PS.. I would just like to add one more thing is that there is no real 'touch-touch-touch' (physical intimacy) in the show, just as the usual props like rain and thunder, turning off the lights, drawing up the sheets, etc., hinted at intimacy between the lovers and shazam.. she's pregnant! :P

A, for a long while I wondered when they consummated their relationship...

I concur its in Episode 6, when Asher learns about Khirad's edu background and then suggests that she should get the lights 😆. Anybody dare point fingers at my observation skills? Don't...I'm going to be mortified; blushing down to my toes.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#198

awesome update hasini..really very interesting...keep up the good work going...just too good..👏update soon..😊

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Posted: 13 years ago

#199

Originally posted by: Surya.Ravi
awesome update hasini..really very interesting...keep up the good work going...just too good..👏update soon..😊

Thanks...

But which one are you talking about? Humsafar?

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mystique_girl

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Posted: 13 years ago

#200

Thanks so much, H ! I had requested two lines and you took time and energy out to write a complete synopsis - thanks so much..it has saved me the time and effort to watch the episodes which I had searched out from the Pak serials thread.

Its a touching story indeed with its share of melodrama ofcourse. The characters in the video looked pretty intense and i guess thats why its on your list of recommendations.And I see you all having the same doubt of the "deed" as we had for Geet...I wonder how stupid the show directors are that they think us to be intelligent enough to infer from idiotic scenes they show..

I will ofcourse go and read your take of the characters.promise to comment on that thread 😃

Thanks and lotsa 👏s for you !!