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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Madhuri53

I oved the eay geet robbed chopra's safe...and more loved by the way was getting impressed by geet & pari...their way of robbing...excellent...update soon...


Thanks madhuri!
its all thanks to me watchign all the criminal movies hehehe😉😆

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Madhuri53

Awesome'maan with them in their house'..he has daring to play their plan and not scared of being trapped'..I scared that geet should get that this was a trap for her ''.

Eagerly waiting for next''


Thanks so much!
lets see what happens 😆
will update soon!
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: misssmily

Wow nice concept yaar ! thx to ur friend for such a good idea, loved the way geet is soft at heart !

Maan is already lost in her eyes hahaha... abi ye hal hai to agey kia hoga ??? 😆

Me eargerly waiting for the next ( am followin SKG as well, thx for takin time to updt ! )


Me waiting !


Thanks so much missmily!
lets see what happens next😆
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: -Nilam-

wonderful update...loved it...
so maan is successful in his plan...
now we have to wait and see ultimately who falls into who's trap...😉😛...
poor adi😆😆😆...loved the way pari escaped ...
please update soon...







Thanks Nilam!
lets see what happens
and who traps whom😉
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: -harneet.gill-

amazing luved it

ohwow maan is in dere house now
wonder wat will happen
eagerly waiting for da next part :P
cont sooon

harneet <3


Thanks Harneet!
will udpate soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
Hey guys,

So am back...

One question:
Do you guys not like this idea? Am not getting many comments or likes...do let me know what you guys wanna see ahead..I do always take your guys suggestions into consideration

Chapter 4

Maan looked at Geet...he had never seen anyone like her before as beautiful and smart. He looked at her big brown eyes that was looking at her with confusion..her innocent face that asked many questions...he wanted to touch her face trace every curve as if he wanting to etch her face into his brain...he had this urge to touch her but couldn't...he can't do anything that will jeopardize his mission...at the end of the day she is a criminal..a robber that needs to be put away behind the bars...

Maan slightly moves making Geet come out of her dreams..she moves back and straights up...Meera came just in time carrying the first aid box..she looks at the person close to Geet..now fully awake...Geet gets up...

Meera: uhh Geet...the dressing...

Geet: huh umm I will do it...

Meera: okay...

Geet sits back down next to Maan..she slowly makes him face her so that she can get a better view of his wound..she didn't know why she was feeling nervous..for the first time her hands were shaking...his eyes...there was something in them..something that made her heart beat faster...

She avoided looking into his eyes while dressing the wound..Maan slightly smiled..for the first time...a girl was avoiding him..usually all the girls go crazy after him but she was avoiding to look into his eyes..."Geet..." one of the name that he had on the list..its beautiful he thought..."Geet..." its like as if he could say that name again and again...

After the dressing, Geet gets up. Meera looks at him suspiciously..Maan just turned the other way afraid that his mission will be gone...

Meera: umm can you tell us your name or phone number..so that we can contact someone from your home...

Maan (looks at her..and holds his head in pain) I...don't.. remember anything...(Geet and Meera look at him shocked) I don't even know what I am doing here or how I got this wound...

Meera: There has to be something that you know of your past..any familiar sign? Name?

Maan: NO..(he shakes his head back and fourth) nothing...ahh it hurts

Geet: Umm its okay...don't hurt your wound...(she places her hand on top of his to stop him from moving..Maan looks at her..she immediately lets go of his hand)

Meera: Geet can I talk to you outside please...

Geet: umm okay...

Both walk out..as soon as they left..Maan gets off the bed..he searches the room for any type of clue...he knew that they were the robbers but going by assumption doesn't help anything..he needed to get some proofs to link them with the robbery...

He slowly opened the closet but found nothing inside..he goes through each drawer they were all empty..he was about to go back to bed when he heard them talking outside..he slowly walks toward the door..he could make out who was talking when...Geet had a unique voice and very soothing to his heart...he shook his head when he just replayed what he said in his head...

Meera; Geet what are we going to do with him? You know its dangerous to let anyone stay here...

Geet: I know but we can't let him leave either in this state

Meera; why not? He seems fit and young enough to take care of himself

Geet: He doesn't know anything of his past..

Meera: That should be our problem because? (she sighs) Geet look you know very well I am saying this..he knows our names now..what if...he goes to the police and tell them about us?

Geet: Tell what? You are over thinking this Meera...they have no proof of us...what can police say? They have no photgraphs or anything how the bandit queen looks like...as far as they or we know..it could be anyone

Meera: but still...I don't know why but I am not getting a good vibe here

Geet (smiles) Meera trust me...I promise as soon as he is better we will leave and you know we never stay in one place for long...

Meera: I guess but

Geet: I have something figured out...once Pari gets here..I will go over it with you both...

Maan was confused..what plan? He wanted to know what she had in her head...what if they leave him? No..hearing from her talks he knew that she doesn't leave helpless people..then what made her be like this? Why did she become a robber? What does she do with all the money? He needed to find all the answer and at the end stop all of this...it was his duty..but how well can he do his own duty? He doubted himself for the first time..why was he feeling hesitant?

He quickly goes to the bed when he hears them opening the door..he closes his eyes..pretending to sleep...someone pokes on his shoulder to wake him up..he slowly opens his eyes and saw Geet...both looked into each others eyes...she clears her throat

Geet; umm are you hungry?

Maan (sits up on the bed..) umm no..do you know me?

Geet: No...I don't..we found you on the road and brought you here

Maan: ohh...then maybe its better I don't stay here...I don't want to be a burden

Geet: No its fine...anyways its night out...

Maan (looks at the time..it was 3am) Do you mind if I ask you something...

Geet: Sure no problem

Maan: What were you guys doing at this time...(Geet looks at him shocked) I mean this late

Geet: Ohh ...(Meera came in the room..both look at her..)

Meera: Umm Geet..Pari came

Geet: hmm...(she looks at Maan) we will have someone bring your food in...

She leaves the room before Maan could say anything...Maan hits the bed with anger...he slowly gets out of the bed..he leans against the door but doesn't hear anything...he goes to the window but to his bad luck..the windows had bars on them...there was no way for to know their plan..

He slowly opens the room door..he had to take this chance..he needed to know what was going on...he looked around the house..pretty neat...it was simple..white everywhere..there were no pictures on the wall..all empty...the style was pretty modern...he was getting more curious...why were they blank?

As he walked..he heard some talking...he was about to lean against the door when someone came up from behind...

"Can I help you?"

Maan (turned around and saw an old guy...) uhh umm I needed to use the bathroom

"Ohh then I will help you..follow me..." (Maan looked at the door and quietly followed the man..he didn't want them to anyone to become suspicious)
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The girls sat in the room..Pari was caught up with everything that had happened while she was away..now the question remained what to do...

Meera: I still think that we should just let him go...him being here is dangerous..what if he hears us making our next plan or find something that might link us

Pari: Yeah G Meera is right...even though he doesn't remember anything...what if he sees the news or something?

Geet: Nothing will happen...first thing first..Pari you will call me Geet..not "G" and we will not rob another place yet..

Meera: Why not?

Geet: I think it is better...let this whole situation settle down a bit...

Pari: Ohh yeah "G" I forgot to tell you guys...someone was following me

Meera: What?!

Pari: Yes, I managed to fool him but he was right behind me..I managed to take some pictures of him (She downloads the pictures on the computer...Geet and Meera look at him..) Do you guys have any idea?

Geet: No...can it be the police?

Meera: maybe..or else who could follow us

Pari: G do you think that they knew we were coming there?

Geet: I don't know...maybe it is better we don't do another robbery until later..we have to be careful...Pari why don't you do some research on this person..and see who he is...find out what you can

Pari: Okay "G"

Geet: Ohh and another thing...its Geet...as long as he is home...you cannot call me by that name...

Pari: Yes I got it...G..i mean Geet...

Meera: What are we going to do until then?

Geet: I guess behave like normal girls...

Pari (excited) I have tons of ideas of what we can do

Geet: I was being sarcastic...(Meera smirks..Pari gave her a mean look)

Precap: What are you doing?
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Posted: 13 years ago
nice part...i really dont want maan to get them this soon...hehe...me wanna see more of this bandit queen...geet rocks as the BQ...LOVED IT...continue soon...
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Posted: 13 years ago
Super update...
nd loves dis geet
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Posted: 13 years ago
its great i love continue sooonnn
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Posted: 13 years ago
No yaar me loving this fanfic !
Really interesting concept !
I was planning something like this as well 😆 but you beat me ! 😉
And as am not as good as you... i droped the idea, BUT me wants you to continue this story and use your talent here becoz there is a lot to exploit in this story... ( as u fantastically did with shetan ka ghar, me love this ff of yours ! 😳 )

Ok as i love analysing, i'll try to analyse aech part in detail ^^ ( i said i'll try 😛 ) Ok so here it is :

Fisrt the strory in general, the girl being the criminal is quite refreshing as in most ff maan is the gangster !

Now what will b good to see: a typical story would go like that : geet dosn't know abt maan's real identity and blablabla... Instead it will be interesting to see geet knowing abt maan's soon enough ( thanks to of adi's pic ) and then their war starts, this will be really thrilling ^^
In this way : maan and geet "staying together" planning to destroy one another, like geet suspecting maan but no being sure, maan's knowing her truth but not being able to find solid evidences...

Oh n of course u'll put pari with adi and meera with the other guy i dnt remeber his name ^^

OMG mene poori story likh di 😆
You are the writer not me ^^

My piece of critic : I think Maan should take his time... i mean he should try to gain their confidence first and not jump behind the door to listen to the girl's convo... like when meera wanted to talk to geet, maan got up and started searching... it was too early to do such move...i dnt know if u get what i mean ^^ 😳

Anyway me eeeaaagerly waiting ofr the next updt 😳

With a lot of love and support !

Zubi 😊



Edited by misssmily - 13 years ago

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