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Posted: 13 years ago

#891

Awsum part as usual!!!

Luvd da update nd cant wait to read further so plx do cont. soon. Thnks for da PM. Tc😊

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DulceTentacion.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#892

Dear Writer,

I thoroughly apologize in advance for the delay in writing my feedback. Chapter 16 will be read and commented after the 4th of Jan :) :P

From, a specail someone for falls into your VVIP category =D

My thoughts regarding your recent Note: I totally comprehend as to how you must be feeling. Writing and getting minimum feedbacks really does not help. It demotivates the writer, makes them feel like thier writing/storyline is not up to the mark, or not enjoyable, it somewhat also makes the individual feel stupid to some extent, You write to please people and when they dont give back any feedbacks on what you have wrote it makes you feel like you really are wasting your time. Writing a sentence or even 2-3 words can be very encorouging for a writer. The littllest gestures like 'Good update' 'Amazing work' show appreciation and gratitude. How do i know this? I sort of/kind of/used to write FF's. LOL. Stopped midway because i really dont know how to balance Uni and writing a FF. It really is hardwork. and Writers like Priyanka and others who update their FF's regularly show how much hard work and dedication they put into their work. They make out free time for us readers, hence we really should appreciate them. Like everyone one of us out there, they also have a life, but they put that aside in order to please us, so dont you all think a little bit of appreciation would be nice? :)

Ah...I better be of now, my assingments awaits me 🥱

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Ritu

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Posted: 13 years ago

#893

Hey!

I just wanted to apologize , not only to you, but all the other writers whose fan fictions i read. I have not read the last three updates of this fanfic so i wasn't able to comment. Today was a holiday, so i got some time of to read and comment.

When i read your note, i thought that i really need to comment to let you know that i appreciate this fanfic and love the way you express each feeling. Every little emotion is written beautifully. i still haven't read the last part..so i cannot say anything on that!

This might come across as an excuse to not comment, but i know exactly how it feels, when you write something with all your heart, and people just cant say a simple "Thank you" or "It was good".

I cannot promise to comment after every update as i honestly cannot keep up with all the updates at once. I have my second year Engineering exams in a week so it will be difficult. But I can promise you that i will try my level best to at least leave a small comment if not a big one :-)

Coming back to the fanfic, I honestly have never read anything this this one. Infact this is the first time i am reading a dark fanfic! Everything is just perfect..from the beginning till the end. Every emotion be it pain, suffering, longing, desire, hurt, is so clear that i can actually feel it. All i can say is that you are truly a brilliant write and hats off to you to actually have the courage to write a dark fanfic:-)

P.S- Sorry, this is the first time i have written such a long comment, so bear with me!

P.P.S- Thank you :-)

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meina

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Posted: 13 years ago

#894

Great part! And happy new year!!

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meriyaar

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Posted: 13 years ago

#895

fab chapter dear.

waiting for the next...

i understand if you're busy and trust me i know what it's like writing a ff and then not getting enough response. so, sorry if you feel i'm one who hasn't been commenting... i dnt always have net connection so after i've read it i tend to forget...

anyway thanks for the pm and i would love to receive them in the future too :)

thanks for a wonderful update

xoxo

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Tahmina Aliya Begum

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Posted: 13 years ago

#896

DO NOT MISTAKE THIS COMMENT FOR A NEW CHAPTER 😆 however long it may look ;P

Comment for Chapter 15:

Your always getting us on our thinking-toes (toes?! did i just say toes? the more i'm writing toes the weirder the word is starting to look..ignore this i'm having weird moods) So yes the note at the beginning of the chaper notifies us that there is something thats holds great importance in Riddhima's life that we need to catch in this chapter and instantly i said to myself 'i won't recognise it or find it in this chapter' when i am asked to do something like that i think too much and end up missing the obvious hehe. anyway i shall try to find this important thing in R's life by reading further on..

I would have loved to add something to the topic of this chapter: lies. but you have summed it up SO well Priyanka, theres nothing else i could add that could explain white lies or bad lies any better. i am going to quote the few words you sufficiently used to sum up the topic of lies because i loved how ya did it so much hehe

"Good lie to save us from something bad and bad lie to save us from something good."

I think the clarity of your explanation is due to how you used opposites to explain it: a bad lie to take you away from good and a good lie to take you away from bad. you mention that the way the good and bad lies work are ironic and i love how you made the above sentence ironic in the same manner, to emphasise the irony of the workings of lies. I also have to add that your use of clipped, cut, short sentences have such a huge effect - it makes us feel the sharpness of R's harsh reality. unfortunately i'm not as refined at explaining things; do ya understand what i just blabbed out in words, Pri?

"People say they lied for your own good. People say they lied for their own good."

I love the play on words here..in this whole chapter actually. This sentence is almost repeated with just that one word difference which makes all the difference in the whole sentence. Your use of words and how you structure your sentences are brilliant Pri and i felt these qualities of your writing were especially evident to me in this chapter.

Ah i never thought of it in that way. The generally comfortable life i live has never made me question the difference between belief and trust, well a easy life would generally make us see belief and trust as basically the same thing because in a easy life we believe the people we trust. Its always been that simple to people who have others in their life who they trust and can believe without any damage or doubt. Isn't it odd how, we, living the relatively easier life do not generally realise the stark difference between belief and trust and how it affects so much of who we call our trustworthy ones and who we choose to believe. (As Riddhima says, its not only our trustworthy friends we believ, we believe other people too sometimes forced to even.) While Riddhima who has had such a difficult life but this hardship has made her see the difference in trust and belief that many people who live the easier life fail to learn.

Riddhima thought she had that trust AND belief with her father but she was found to be wrong about the wonderful things she presumed and hopefully dreamt into HER image of her father. She seemed to weave a lot of good things about her father in her hopes of those weaved dreams coming true. This made me tag Riddhima as a more brighter/optimistic person when she was with her father because she had more hope in her to keep believing that these good things that she thought/dreamt/hoped, did exist in people when it was clear that her father was a brute..but she kept hope and believed him, trusted him!

However this is also a huge naivety she had. While NOW Riddhima may not be as hopeful enough to find the good even in bad people (seemingly bad people in Armaan's case) she has lost the naivety of hoping good from endless evil...even if it seems like she's grown into a more darker and lonelier person through the knowledge of who to hope goodness from, its part of her learning process and progress towards going from a darker person to a brighter. "Darkness to Light." (darkness and light is a HUGE theme in your FF and I quoted this from Dee's comment)

She has learnt to not believe the lies she used to tell herself that so and so person is worthy of her trust and belief.
I will not at all blame her for expecting Armaan to be one of those liars who she shouldn't anchor her hopes upon when really he is worthy of her trust now, because she's gone through so many various types of punishment that she now knows that "teasing and giving false hope to the victim before presenting the punishment to them" is one of those types of horrifyingly hope-crushing, sinister punishments.

Even though this lack of trust and therefore refusal to believe him may make saving Riddhima a frustratingly longer process for Armaan, its worth it to both of them and to us to see trust growing between them before love. I love how you are going the opposite way around with trust developing before love.
This is kinda going off topic and includes me rattling on about my bookwormish personality but I recently read a romance book which was a sequel to the first one. The first book consisted of a love triangle in which the two fall in love through an accidental affair. The sequel of the book is all about how they cope with finding it within each other to trust the other. You know what they all say: when two persons fall in love through an affair it makes trusting each other difficult because if the two fell in love through an affair how do the two know their partner won't stray again and have another affair? its a very common issue - unfortunately - which is why i think trust before love is something different but simpler and usually results in a steadier relationship..

Sheesh this comment is massive and i still haven't got through the whole chapter. Apologies if i'm hogging the page..well actually no i kinda take a fraction of that apology back because i'm behind with commenting now so i owe this long comment-converted-to-essay to Priyanka 😆

As Minaz noted, i did enjoy reading the interaction between A and R. Although its quite a trivial interaction, it holds great importance and i could feel the turn taken at this point of the FF. This chapter is the volta (english vocab for the turn) and there is that huge rush of hope felt through the words and even Riddhima feels it that something new is beginning here. And i loved that feeling after the gloom of R's POV.

"His touch wasn't what I had experienced before. Not rough like before. And Not painful like before. It was different. ...just different."

^^this particular part caught my attention. She doesn't know what this 'different' is. This new touch. its so foreign to her because she's been at loss of the touch of love and care, it made my heart pain for her (she's a fictional character but your writing holds enough strength to make me feel for her so much)

Blue Eyes ...As Dee mentioned, the monikers R has given the characters does make a huge difference to how we view the characters but it could be argued that these nicknames are making us biased and gain a narrow-perspective in only interpreting, what Riddhima sees in those characters, from the nicknames she has given them. She may not realise it but the name she has given Armaan is her hint to him being her guardian angel to peace. The color blue is associated with water, ocean and hence the idea of peace and soothingness being tagged along with the color blue. I love how much you have made me see the nickname Blue Eyes differently - at first glance Blue Eyes gave a sense of dark, strange danger but now its been shown a different light to being seen as peaceful..wonderful transition of how we now see Armaan, Priyanka!

although Blue Eyes gives the sense of peace to come to Riddhima through Armaan, blue - water, ocean - also brings the thought of the symbolism of water. Water is something we see on the surface unless we choose to dive deeper and a lot of unknown things can be discovered under water. this metaphor can be connected with Armaan (Blue Eyes) only being seen by Riddhima from the surface; she hasn't delved deep enough to see the unknown person/thoughts swimming underneath this surface of Armaan. she will delve deeper when she trusts him.

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Tahmina Aliya Begum

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Posted: 13 years ago

#897

HAPPY NEW YEAR!!! to Priyanka and all the readers present here =D

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blessed4

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Posted: 13 years ago

#898

Amazing part ...and I love reading your ff pl continue soon and thanks for the pm !!!

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Lekshmic7

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Posted: 13 years ago

#899

Great part!! Ridhima is suffering so much, hope she will b fine soon. It will take smtime 4 her to understand Armaan & his doings! Thnks alot 4 d pm. Happy new year