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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: --Kesh--

A beautiful end to a beautiful story...

This story just made me realise how important colours are in ones life and how each colour signifies different aspects of life, relationships and emotions.

Yellow is a surprisingly rare colour that people tend to choose.. and I loved the reason behind Geet's choice of this very vivid hue.

I came across these verses some time ago.. thought of sharing it here.

Colour me Yellow

Bright coloured sunflowers that dance in the sun.

"I'm here" said the primrose. "I'll not be outdone!"

The buttercup added "Now don't forget me."

"I love yellow cowslips" then buzzed the fat bee.


The brightness of sunshine ' this surely must please.

Yellow ducklings, canaries, primroses, cheese.

Though yellow is linked with cowardice and fear

I will always feel happy when yellow is near.

The lovers of yellow are contented with life

And much prefer laughter to conflict and strife.

Yellow speaks of new life and of intellect too.

Well you think of what else as I wish you adieu.

by Jodie Whitehead


Love you buddy.. hope you get settled well in the new place... take care and see you soon on AG... Good luck.. god bless...




Beautiful!... lovely one Keesh!!

Another one i love... though not a song...

Daffodils

I wandered lonely as a cloud
That floats on high o'er vales and hills,
When all at once I saw a crowd,
A host, of golden daffodils;
Beside the lake, beneath the trees,
Fluttering and dancing in the breeze.

Continuous as the stars that shine
And twinkle on the milky way,
They stretched in never-ending line
Along the margin of a bay:
Ten thousand saw I at a glance,
Tossing their heads in sprightly dance.

The waves beside them danced, but they
Out-did the sparkling leaves in glee;
A poet could not be but gay,
In such a jocund company!
I gazed—and gazed—but little thought
What wealth the show to me had brought:

For oft, when on my couch I lie
In vacant or in pensive mood,
They flash upon that inward eye
Which is the bliss of solitude;
And then my heart with pleasure fills,
And dances with the daffodils.

- Wordsworth

I esp. love the last para... and i think this is hte effect this Geet has on this Maan! 😆
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Cloud9.

I was smiling throughout the first Para. The women discussing something which was salt on the wounds of Maan was cute. Nainatara made me want to give her a big hug.


Lolz...you will make an enemy of Maan if you would appreciate that point of his mother!😆

"You are right Sameera. She has her own brand of liveliness. Lucky would be the man she will spend her life with. Ofcourse, that is, he if can handle her madness."

My own mother is my enemy! Arghh!

"True Badi Ma," Sameera winked slyly at me, "only Veer seems to have mastered that art."

That's it! I can't take it anymore. If I hear one more mention of her my mind would explode. "Excuse me ladies," I shifted my gaze to Sameera, "and Fatso." Ha! Look at her face. Revenge is sweet!



First thins first. I love this Maan. He is different from your other Maans but is very much adorable.
While MPGD Maan is respectable and Just a Dream Maan well you-know-what-able, this Maan is adorable. Absolutely adorable. The love he has in his heart, the effort he takes to try and express, even not flinching to go out of his way.. Wait he does crib but still.. it is marvelous. But what I love the most is his one liners!
Yeah...he is a grouse! But with a heart of a gold :)

Ad not to forget his family! One more thing I love in this story is the happy family you showed.
I have lived in a HUGE joint family always...and though there maybe times you wish to keep away from them...fact remains they stand rock solid with you when required. And believe me...gatherings on occasions and functions is a laugh riot in our home!!

I absolutely loved Sameera's teasing and Man's getting back at her. BTW Why do I find Maan like you? You call me with that stupid-endearment-you-gave-to-me-which-i-hate whenever you want to irk me. Don't you?
😈😈

Ah! Now i get why he was so obsessed with Sunday! I asked you in the very first update but you being YOU didn't tell me then. Am proud of myself here. Ah Don't ask the reason. It's just like that!😆
I couldn't tell you that in the very beginning!! *rolls eyes*

One, she could say no.

Two, she could laugh at me and say no.

Three, she could hit me, laugh at me, then say no.

Four, Chotte Papa could beat me to pulp, she would laugh at me and then say no.

Five, she could yes.


I love love loved the options he gave. I don't think the fourth option would ever happen. Yash has better options like teasing Maan for the rest of his life you know..
Yeah...but then this is Maan...he has led himself to believe everything will fall around him if he even takes a step!! Lolz

Frustrated and still rankled with my mother's last comment I wished sourly that I had never promised her that I would give up drinking. I couldn't help shoot a jealous look at my father and Chotte Papa. And a part of me knew that this jealousy wasn't merely due to the fact that they were allowed to enjoy their drinks. But it was from the fact that they had the women they loved, to fuss over their drinking in their lives, forever.


The underlined line caught my attention. Again shows the person he is! No words! It's just brilliant! I love him more..
I did a right thing in listening to the song before. But surprisingly I loved the song more when i heard it with the update. Guess what even though i've the song in my mobile (after you told me about the song the first thing i did was to search in my PC and i found it) and even though i've heard it before, I could feel it this time when i heard it. Before it was just a song but after this update it's more than a simple song to me. I would forever remember this story every time I hear this song. 🤗

The door of the cab opened. An umbrella unfurled from within and it was'

I screamed "Yellow." even before Maan did!😆 You remind me of my teachers at school. They used to pause for a while to have students prompt the answers.. you know just like you😆

🤣🤣 ...I would make a very bad teacher!!

She was truly here. My senses revived as life coursed back in my veins. The numbness ceased as the hum-drum of activity boomed around me. The traffic outside the doors, shrill of the bell at reception, the coming and going of the guests, the low whispers of conversations inside, the'arghhh'it was a cacophony'a riot. I hated crowds.

I love crowds Alright I hate them too- it just depends on my mood.😆 Anyway I loved the above paragraph. Trust me I was visualizing the entire scene before me. You have a way with words and you always manage to paint a scene before my eyes Miss. Artist!
😳😳

"No! We will have to move. Walk forward from the point we are standing stagnant at."

"If I let you go you would move away beyond my reach. You may not come back to me."

"You will have to take the chance. Status quo will do none of us any good."

"Why would you come back to me? Someone who will keep you trapped like this. Someone who would not free you ever from his grasp. I am keeping you caged in my arms against your will. I am more selfish than you can ever believe."

"Nemo judex in causa sua. No one should be a judge in their own cause. Let me decide if I would want to stay here or not."

"I saw the carnations."

"Did you not see the orchids?"

"I know you value our friendship."

"Is that all you know? Is that all you could infer?"

"The flowers were not roses. The roses wouldn't have been red."

"Commercial myth. You should be wiser than that to rely on them."

"You once said yellow stands for friendship."

"I was eight then'"

"You are twenty-four now. Why is it that I still see you holding steadfast to this color?"

"Maan'"

"No listen to me first. Which symbolism have I missed? I know you so well yet it feels there is something that has escaped my notice."

"Maan'"

"No seriously! I swear by my conscience that I accepted the color as you the moment I saw you invite it in your life. But now you are shaking my definition of it."

"Maan'"

"You are shaking the foundation of the bond I believed we had. What is it about yellow that I have never known before? Why are you so obsessed with this color more than ever before?"

"Chup! Bilkul chup," she clamped her hand on my mouth. She took a deep breath as mine refused to exit from my lungs, "For years yellow ribbons were worn as a sign of hope as women waited from their men to come marching home from war. I have lived yellow for you to come back to me."

"Geet'"

I am doing this now. Now! Or it may be never.

"'be mine."

Why isn't she answering?

She should have answered back immediately.

Its three seconds already! She should have answered by now.

Most girls have an answer ready a split second after the last syllable. Well most girls generally do anticipate being proposed to Khurana.

I hate my sub-conscious.
"Priceless."

"What?"

"The look on your face."

"This is not my answer."

"You have made me wait for so long for this. For Geet to hear her name from lips of her Maan. I should sue you for it. Or maybe," she turned her full glare on me, "I will simply make you wait longer as compensation."

"Geet'"

"God, yes!"

I started underlining what I wanted to high light but by god I ended up underlining the entire conversation. Did i tell you I love when you write a conversation between the leads. Even though you say you aren't good at dialogues
Do you know how long it takes me to bloody write a dialogue of such nature!!! Its the most mentally taxing thing ever!!!

(See your list goes on increasing.. I can't do this. I can't do that.. blah blah. Ah i surely could kill you) So anyway the dialogues between your leads always make me read them with batted breathe. No nonsense, sweet and short with under currents! Awesome.
When she said "Walk forward from the point we are standing stagnant at." I got the clue and just wanted to shake Maan to life. God Man aren't you getting it yet? Okay I understand that he's so much drowned in his self thoughts, wondering about her reaction.. he can't be blamed!
He is in love with his best friend...one...that always makes you wonder whether to risk friendship for feelings which might be one-sided. Second...there is always a fear that where all of you are brought up nearly as siblings...will it be seen acceptable to have such feelings for her in such a situation. Poor Maan!! Lolz.

But when she gave an explanation to her obsession with yellow, my eyes widened and I was grinning ear to ear and I also wanted to smack you for even doubting for a second that it'd fall flat.
It's such a simple reason...hence my doubts...

Trust my family to place bets on my love life. High time I had a serious word with them.
I love the family!😆 So everyone knows about the not-so-secret-love. Can i please smack him on his head? Okay he can't be blamed poor guy was totally oblivious and was worried sick all these days!
ROFL...no mention of your darling Vicky? Or did his deo spray can scare you off?😛


A vast of realm of passion lay open between
Yet to be explored, wild and uncharted
Together they floated in that idyllic space
Where innocent ignorance ceased and sensual awareness started
It was a beautiful journey of the story of an ignorant lover who was worried about the reaction he'd get to his proposal and the ending is not truly an ending.. it is the new beginning of transformation of family friends to something more. I thoroughly enjoyed this story to the core and loved it to bits. I generally love Geets of stories but in this particular story I love Maan more. His intense unexpressed love and yearning was beautifully shown and I tell you this is another gem of your writing and is one of my favorites.
"I am the yellow dot that enlivens your otherwise dull canvas of existence."
True. For him and for me. You get what I mean? This is for you Jazz!




For all that you are to me My Yellow dot🤗
AAAWWW!!!!!!! 🤗🤗

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Posted: 13 years ago

Thank you :)

Originally posted by: spvd

part 7
excellent...
just loved it...

PS - Shiku and Aashu my God u both are fantastic...ha ha ha...i always get a thrill seeing ur posts after Jazz's updates...


Glad you liked it...

Originally posted by: mandymore

Luvly prt...oh god geet n her jaap of stuppid maan...
awww it ended...


It had to end eventually ...glad you enjoyed the update.
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Water.

It was mind-blowing SS.

Loved it to the very core.
Yellow! The colour gave me a new perspective going forward.
U are an amazing writer and I m positive that you already know that.
Loved the sketch. It would win a prize at an art show.
Thanks for the SS


Heyy :)

Nice to have you here.

Glad you liked this attempt of mine. The color yellow is so much more than I have managed to put across...it has many more deeper and brighter symbolism...but this is all I could manage.

The sketch is very basic and random...I had just roughly drawn it up...its not even entry-level...lolz...I could point out the flaws and you would suddenly find how mediocre it is...even by my standards.
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Gcs-girl

awee awesomel
luvd it


Originally posted by: Surya.Ravi

nice..good update...😊


Thank you guys!! :)
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: punam2712

JAZZ SHIKHA HAS BEAUTIFULLY TOLD THE WHOLE STORY
LOVED MAAN'S POV AS THIS WHOLE STORY WAS JUST MAAN MAAN MAAN
HE WAS NOT SURE OF HIMSELF WHILE THE WHOLE FAMILY KNEW HIS FEELINGS
HE WAS A TUBELIGHT WHICH TOOK FOREVER TO LIGHT
GEET COULD NOT TAKE IT ANYMORE, HE HAD TO BE HIT ON THE HEAD FOR HIM TO FINALLY ASK HER TO BE HIS AND TAKE HER NAME FOR THE FIRST TIME
BUT LOVED THE WAY YOU WROTE THE DAYS'S HAPPENINGS WITHOUT THEM EVEN MEETING ONCE


Lolz...everyone often complains that there is so less of Maan in MPGD...I decided to even things out here🤣

Exactly! Geet just couldn't take it anymore...how do you get a man with both eyes open to see things right infront of him?? Give him a nice whack at the back of his head!! Lolzz

Glad you liked it...though I was called evil for not getting Maaneet together in one frame till the very end. Hope it met all your expectations :)
Edited by jazzerette - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: jyoti_l

lovely end...


she is the colour of his life...

waiting for the glimpse of their future...

thnx for a wonderful story,,,,...

enjoyed reading it,,,,


Thank you for the appreciation :)

I hope to put up next part in a day or so...
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: mechantefille

I Cannot Believe That I'm Late!!!! Arrrghhh!!

Koi na...better late than never...lolz

And Did I ever tell you that I was gonna post the same song a millions times and never did it...or did I? Instead I went ahead n mailed it to your fan!! Bewakoofi ki hadh!
You didn't...but chalo...atleast it added a new flavor to the story...hopefully...lolz

Anyway that had got to be one of my favourite numbers.
Mine too!!!😃

I drink in ur updates, Jazzu they fill me up with emotion. gosh I missed you. I so truly appreciate that romantic element you put in, not to mention the surprised element Vicky got in...that was epic.
Lolz...annoying younger siblings ...I tell you!!

Sighhh...am off to read it..again!!
Love u, babe!
Glad you liked it sakhi!! 🤗

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: t_areeb

love the dialogues when the ladies were teasing him

and he has all stupid plans
too good


Glad you liked it :)


Thank you😊

Originally posted by: todayzstar

Fab updatee dear...
superbb..lubd ittt😳


Thanks a lot!!
Edited by jazzerette - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: impoojaverma

one of d most superb writer u r...

cant expressed in words...

d way u write LOVED IT🤗

nd i loved MAAN in this ss

he is far different from others...

well done


Aww!! Thank you Pooja!!

So glad that you enjoyed reading the story...and appreciated this Maan so much :)

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