IPKKND FF:Tearing Ourselves Apart Parts 1-26 :)

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tina

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Posted: 13 years ago

#301

very very hot but unfortunately very short awsome, brilliant job...do cont. son and thanx for the pm.

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nyxx

@nyxx

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Posted: 13 years ago

#302

One word...Beautiful! And girl, how can you think youre not good at writing scenes like this because from my view, it was completely magical. I could completely imagine the entire narration, soo kudos for thatt! Youre doing a greatt job and continuee soon!

- Dee

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Writer42

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Posted: 13 years ago

#303

Great writing. Have put you on my buddy list and have pressed the like button with the hope that the next time you update I will receive a PM. Please do PM me, I enjoyed reading your ff. Thanks.

KF

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mimi

@moon_mine

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Posted: 13 years ago

#304

WOW!!!!!

wat a romantic update!!!!!

simply awesome!!!!

loved it!!!!

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patelej

@patelej

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Posted: 13 years ago

#305

Hi, this is my first reply.

I would like to start by saying that your story line is absolutely amazing!!! I read of 13 parts today, and cant wait for more. You definitely have a lot of talent. This was like reading a Harlequin Presents novel. My heart was racing the entire time. I couldn't stop reading. You should come up with your own romance novel and get it published through Harlequin. I bet your novels would be wonderful.😊

I loved how you were able to come up with a solution to the "Shyam" problem, without ASR's family hating Khushi. I also enjoyed the tension between Arshi, it made it very entertaining. It must be hard trying to come up with new ideas to keep this going, and I give you props for what you have accomplished. I never thought that I would get to read about a "make out seen" this intense in an Indian serial, but I'm so happy to see you give your audience what they want. I love where you are going with this, and I have some ideas of what I would like to see. I know that this is completely your vision, but this might help you out if you are having a hard time coming up with different ideas. Again, this is completely up to you. I hope you don't take this the wrong way.

I would love to see the following:

1. Khushi and Arnav trying to stay warm in the cottage. (Maybe not with their clothes off, I think it would lead to a lot see more sexual tension between them. It would also make this last a lot longer, lol). Their clothes can be wet...Maybe Khushi can be sleeping on his chest..., I will leave the rest up to you.

2. If Arshi catches up with Shyam and Anjali, then they can act like they are in love. This would show Shyam that Arnav is perfect for Khushi, and not the other way around.

3. The pillow barrier disappearing in the middle of the night.

4.Arnav breaking down about how he doesn't want anything bad happening to his sister, and Khushi consoling him. (That would be a first)

I haven't thought of anything else yet, but I will let you know if I do. Keep it up, you are doing a fantastic job!!!