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Posted: 14 years ago
#61
Awesome FF!
Aww poor mannat!
Feeling really bad for her!
Is maan taking her to the KM??
Does geet know about her arrival?
Hope maan and geet will accept her soon!
Cant wait for the next update!
Pls continue soon and thanks for the PM
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Posted: 14 years ago
#62
i think Geet will accept Mannat and convince Maan to accept her too
cont soon
thanks for the pm
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Posted: 14 years ago
#63
awesome update
i feel maan have to tell geet the truth
about maanat i'm sure she i'll accept him
with o[en arm & knock some sense to maan
maanat his flesh & blood what her fault the little girl
if her mom betray him
me no liking this maan
waiting next
thnx so much
bless yu
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Posted: 14 years ago
#64
👏...
hi dearie
read all the five parts in one go. wonderful start...
finally maan took the right decision...
feeling pity for little mannat...
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sam or uski sister i hate this type of peoples...
lets see how maan will handle the things now ...
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Posted: 14 years ago
#65

Buddies here is update ...I think u ll lov this ..if u want anything else plz tell me...ur appreciation is my way

Part 6


Maan put on his goggles…holding one hand of Mannat ….moved toward his car …That poor creature had no one who could listen to her ..even God…She had lite blue lil baby bag in her one hand… her Barbie n bunny were in that….She tried much to run away towards Tina's apartment. But now Maan could not let .her go..in any case….He had closed every door opening towards his n Mannat's past .

Mannat: Uncle humko Massi k pass janna hai …(She was crying bitterly…tears came out of her eyes )…She was repeating same line again n again

First Maan gave no answer to her…But when she was repeating same n same Maan stopped for a while

Maan: Dekho aab tum apni Massi k sath nahi reh sakti ..usne tumko chod diya hai..mere pass …abb tum wahi rehogi jahan main rakhuga tumko ..aab challo

Maan's words were such ...like... He was rebuking her…n she stopped crying aloud due to his fear…But She was still sobbing…

He took her to some where else then Khuraana mension

When driver put a break ….they were in front of Khuraana house…Khuraana's old Bungalow ….Maan took Mannet inside …where a old lady was waiting

Lady : Maan beta aap aa gaye ..main kabb say intzaar ker rahi hun

Maan : Bua Dadi ..main keh nahi sakta k aap ne kitna badda ehsaan kiya yahan aa ker...

That lady ..her name Laxmi…. was Bua of Maan's father….means his grand pa's sister .She was a widow..having no kid….Laxmi Bua was living in their parental house back in village…Coz she hated metropolitan life style…As his father called her Bua…Maan was used to call her bua dadi

She was aware of Maan n Sam's relation …n about Mannat he told everything to Bua Dadi…

While in their conversation Mannat was sitting on sofa lik statue..holding her lil baby bag tightly

Maan : Bua Dadi ….muhje nahi patta tha k ..achaanak …aisa kuch bhi hoga mere sath.

She was lil hyper..as She loved Maan jst lik his Daddi …

Bua Daddi : Maan main to pehle hi khilaaf thi tumhare videsh jaane k…per bhai sahib mane nahi…potay k pyar main andhay ho gaye thay..

Maan : Bua Daddi main to padnay gaya tha…Sam se pyar karta tha..aur shaddi bhi karna chahta tha to galat kya tha

Bua : Galat ..mujh say puch rahay ho beta….Sam ne kiya jo kiya…per ussay pehle jo kuch hua….sabse baddi galti who thi…uska natizaa dekh rahay ho(she pointed towards Mannat)

Maan : Per Bua Daddi mujhe kya patta tha…aisa bhi kuch hoga….per jo hua ussay main badal nahi sakta..darr to mujhe yeh hai k mera ghar bikhar na jaye ..isi liye aap ko bulaya hai maine

Bua : Maan betay main budiya kya kar sakti hu….jo galti tumne ki …woh bahut baddi hai…per tumse naaraaz bhi nahi ho sakti..mera khoon ho tum…aab batayo kya soch rakha hai tumne (she calmed down lil bit)

Maan : Bua Daddi…main na Daddi ko ..aur na Geet ko sidha kuch batta sakta hun…Daddi ko dil ki bimaari hai..aur aap to janti hai Geet ko to iski bhanak bhi nahi lagni chahea…uske liye aur bacchay k liye theek nahi

Bua : Ha beta jaanti hu..aur mujhe kuch kuch samjh main aa raha hai …tum kya chahtay ho..isi liye tumne mujhe kaha tha k main tumhari Daddi ko kuch na batayo…apne yahan aane k bare

Maan: ji daddi…jaisa bhi hai..is bacchi ki jimedaari le hai to nibhani to padegi…(He looked towards Mannat) kissi per yakeen nahi kar sakta apkey ilaawa…is liye main chahta hun k.jab takk main Daddi Maa..ko na batta du…aap iskay sath y rahey…..sath main yahan Rahim chacha ( KH's care taker ) aur unki patni salma chachi hai…bakki sabh woh dekh langay….

He bent on knees in front of Bua Daddi who was sitting on sofa

Maan : Daddi aap meri madad karegi na ?.( he had tears in his eyes)

Bua Daddi: Maan beta pehlay tumhare fufa ji ko kho diya bhari jawaani main…bhai sahib (Maan's grand pa ) apnay pass lay aaye…kuch saalon main he pehlay ...Rupali (his mother )..fir Manveer (his father),aur ek din Bhi sahib bhi hum ko chod kar challay gaye…Savitri Bhabhi ne sabh sambhal to liya …per unka dard main acchi tarah se janti hun..tum donno poton ki wajah say hi woh ji sakin…aur beta….jo dard ki wajah bhabhi ki hai who hi meri..aur jo unki kushi hai…who he meri hai…tum donno….aur tumharay liye kush bhi kar sakti hun main (she holded his face in her hands n kissed him on forhead)

Maan : Ji Bua Daddi..apne mere sar say bahut badda boj utar diya…kam se kam Geet ki delivery tak sabh sambhal jaye ..tab tak koi na koi rasta nikal hi aayega

Mannat who was still silent started to cry …..n this made Maan n Daddi to feel her presence

Daddi got up from sofa n set next to her.She wiped her tears

Daddi : Beta kya hua kyo ro rahay ho….

But Mannat gave no response….her condition also made Maan to worry …who had no feelings for her till now

Maan : Mannat dekho yeh Daddi Maa hai …apko bahut pyar karegi

Mannat: Mannat ko koi pyar nahi karta….Massi bhi nahi…jo bhi Mannat ko pyar karta hai ..woh humko chod kar challa jatta hai…..

Daddi : Nahi beta apko chod kar aab koi nahi jayega .( Bua Daddi holded Mannat in her arms )

Maan : Bua Daddi isko time to laggega ..per bacchi honay ki wajah say jyada nahi…naye toys aur jo isko chahea woh sabh isko mil jayega..apnay aap sabh bhul jayegi……

Daddi : Ha beta sabh bhool jayegi….per beta tumhari bhool ka natija is nanhi se bacchi ko bhogna parrh raha hai…

He was speechless…But he explained every thing to Rahim..n Salma…also asked them not to call…Daddi n Geet in any condition…..He took leave from Laxmi Daddi ….n looked towards Mannat….not once..but he was gazing at her……On other side Mannat noticed that He was leaving

Mannat: uncle aap bhi humko chod kar ja rahhe ho….(she held Maan with her lil hands )…Her soft touch some where struke Maan from inside .But without giving any answer he left KH


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Posted: 14 years ago
#66
Wow I am the first to comment today.
Awww Jass i feel so sorry for little Mannat.
The way she said all who love her leave her...Very touching.
And Bua Dadi correctly said the little one has to pay for the elders' mistake..
Wonderful update. Pls continue soon.
Thanx for pm dear.
Edited by Mehek25 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#67
Nice update...
awww maan left her with bua dadi...
poor mannat.. hmm she is really sweet..
plzz continue soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
#68
Aww loved mannat sho shweet
Plz cont soon superb update
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Posted: 14 years ago
#69
amazing really enjoyed it waiting for the time when geet willknow abt mannat
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Posted: 14 years ago
#70
awesome ... superb ...

thnx 4 d pm ...

continue soon ...

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