FF: You & I...Collide 2 Prt21 Pg132 Oct26 - Page 7

secondly...welcome to IF...and as a senior member who has been part of IF for 5 years...one piece of advice...the writers here...each in his or her own way...is brilliant...they have the guts to share some of the most personal things about themselves...their writing...their writings are reflections of their ideas, their thoughts, their passion and their creativity...and knock that...its just not...nice...i highly doubt that the writers here are professional writers or have any intention of being professional writers...this is all amateur stuff...and mine is at the top of that list...sure everyone has flaws...some cant do the hindi well...some story plots fall apart...some lack a bit of creativity...but to be the one to point that out...oh gosh...i'd never do that...i'd never tell a writer that i didnt like what they are putting out for us to read...sure...story lines i may not like...but then i just stop reading...but to say that there are holes in their stories and/or characters...no way...so when commenting...more like critisizing...peoples work...take a moment to think about how much time and effort they have invested in their writing and how much of themselves they've put in the pieces...IF will be a lot friendlier 😃

JAZ"

And I couldn't have said it any better myself But I do disagree with one tidbit .. your writing is nowhere near amateur! I have read other FFs but have never felt the way I feel when I read your work. Not only do you lay out such strong storylines with equally strong and well thought-out characters .. but you have a way of capturing us within your story. I've said this before .. that when I read your work especially I feel as if I'm watching it happen in front of my eyes .. it's a surreal experience. One aspect I love about you is how you try to connect each and every FF of yours with your passion -- the medical field. I love when you include the hospital scenario in your FFs because it feels as if I'm watching episodes of ER/House/Grey's Anatomy, etc 😆 .. quite entertaining I must say! And also how you add your own personal touch to the stories by adding your personal experiences as a part of the storyline. And I am so glad to not only have found such an amazingly talented author like you but an amazing friend! <3

Z

Originally posted by: SIYAHI

I am a silent reader but thought I'd just comment...I dunno why I am not a sadist but I love this story... I mean this is life you might cross roads with your first love but not necessarily get back together... and why would Maan not be happy with Sameeera Life moves on Maan too did move on...I would be shocked if you would make Sameera a vamp...and for the record I love sad endings ...I kbnow Shreya Chopra would hit me for this but some sad ending ,make a story perfect...😳

lol...another one for the sad ending camp!! woo hoo...shreya can go and be mad...but reya and i are welcoming you with open arms...thanks for commenting...i really appreciate it...and im so glad that you are enjoying the story as it is...that means a lot 😃

JAZ

Originally posted by: JayaR

OMG...Sam is preggy???

Jaz tum toh naye naye sach bahar laa rahi ho...

Sammaan jodi achchi lag rahi...now waiting for Adeet love ishtory to ishtrat...

and haan thanks for the PM dear...

lol...yaar...abhi toh bohot saare saach hai jisse bahar aana hai...remember...Maan has no idea about what NT did that cause their break up 😉...and let me just say...on a very crucial issue...things are not as they seem 😛

JAZ

Hieee🤗

Collide… collision that usually results into friction and friction that causes sparks and the ultimate result is destruction… either the two bodies are burnt to ashes or are crushed against the massive force! And from where I see in this story it's the clash of ideologies… clash of pride to ego… clash of the two strong minded people… standing for they see is right… where evidently one is right and the other blinded and thus erroneous!

Geet… a level headed female who had her priorities set… who knew what she wanted… a loyal daughter… a caring lover… an angelic guardian… I loved her completely… and I m all going to support her for what she did no one would. The prick in her heart pricked me several times and I felt sorry for her many times and proud of her stance in life. She deserves to be happy and if that happiness is away from the man she loved… so be it!

Sameera… what do I say about her… I can never imagine how difficult it would have been for her to be in a loveless marriage… her marriage is purely a marriage of convenience and now is based on trust and understanding… I feel sorry for her.

When Naintara was brought into the hospital as a victim… I always wondered what a girl barely in her twenties would have done some 10 years down the line that she felt so guilty about… and yet she came back to the only person whose trust she had broken… for she couldn't trust anyone then… fabulous! I was so sorry to see her in that state… no one… no one deserves to go thru the pain that she went through… a victim of wrong choices! And it was truly touching the way Geet looked after her… yes she was a doctor but in many places she was more of a guardian that she had been years back than just being a doctor there… hats off to her!

She came into his dull life to brighten his world… she became his friend and his companion… she understood him perfectly… she stood by him in the time of his need… she became his moral support… she became the caretaker of his home and the guardian and elder sister to his younger sister… when she loved him… she accepted him as a whole… without any probations… without any reservations….

From the perspective that I see this story I see Maan as a failed man… he failed both the women he loved… Geet as well as Naintara…

Naintara was no fool… she was a smart kid and that time and again you have proved… yet she was kid who didn't realize the implications of her actions… she was just trying to keep her brother to herself… she was refusing to share her brother with anyone and had her brother acted a little sensible and mature he could have talked to her to make her secure… even she never imagined that Maan would go a step further and marry a random girl… she failed to see the results… not her fault… her thought were confined to today… to the matter at hand… she didn't realize she would hurt the two people she love to such a great extent… the happy dance just proved the innocence of her age and heart… she was blinded by the words her brother had so casually uttered… she didn't realize she was actually playing with the two lives… I won't blame her as much for if someone would have chosen to use their brains the situation could have been handled. And then when Maan got Sameera home the result was she could never accept her… she could never accept her as her bhabhi… for her she was only her brother's wife! Sadly she drifted away from Maan… was it guilt? To a certain extent yes but also probably she couldn't fathom the fact that Maan so easily gave her GG's place to someone else… deep down… she probably felt the betrayal that Geet lived in… for she knew that place rightfully belonged to only one female…Geet! and she just couldn't accept anyone else taking her place… no wonder she couldn't even allow Sameera to come so close to her for her comfort zone was with Geet… where Maan could give the place to another girl… Naintara stuck her loyalties to Geet! Maan failed yet again!

The only relation now he has intact is with Sameera who's his wife… the marriage of convenience… if it wouldn't have been Sameera it would have been someone else… it's a sorry state to stay under a roof to know that you would never be loved by your husband so dearly for his heart is ruled by another woman… and yet she stood by him… great round of applaud to her… and then when she said she would have quietly left… it was so sad… the pain she have been through was just so evident. I hope Maan takes on wisely with atleast this relationship and the responsibility of a child.

Uff… that's a longgg comment now…. Did you reach the end without dozing off in between?

Originally posted by: Mk.Gh

Heyaaa Jaz! Lookie who it is with her comments lol! I know you were thinking that you'll receive your comments by 2050 but I thought to save you the agony of waiting for so long heh :P And since you started a new thread I'm just going to paste my comments for both chapters here instead of the older one to save you the trouble of having to switch back and forth between the two. haila...i was so shocked to see you here itni jaldi...so wait...are you just starting holiday or ending 😕...either way...im just happy to see your comment!!! 😃...welcome back Z...welcome back!! oh...😃...🤗

Chapter 12:

As if the agony of a possibly dead Maan in Humesha Saath was not enough, you drop the "No Maaneet" bomb on us for this one. *hits Jaz with a couple of dandas and then herself too* Like you just annulled any damn possibility of these two ending up together cuz Mr. Maan SADOO Khurana is completely in LAAV with Sameera so yea woohoo there go my dreams -.- "laav" oh god...i was reading this at work and had to stop right here cuz i busted out laughing...and some family members of my patients were looking at me like i was crazy!! 😆...as for the no maneet bomb..thats been out for a while...but oops i forget you are also just commenting on ch 12...he he...my bad!! 😉

Jaz, Jaz, Jaz. This was pretty much expected behaviour from your side. So I am not going to be cribbing about no Maaneet because no matter what you write it is always intriguing and just awesome .. you have the power to make us like something that is non-Maaneet so that says a lot in itself. As for the people who PMed you No words. But I'm not gonna be so immature as to PM you to express my hatred towards this FF or to tell you that it sucks.. cuz this FF can be many things but sucky. thank you for not cribbing...lost of people have been doing that for a while...and its fine if they dont like it...but must they whine every update and ask about why maneets not together 🥱 ...and as for the PM's...i much rather get those then the ones that do the full out assault on the forum...but then again...i kind of had fun doing the snarky comment 😛...im so mean...😈

(But if there is a 0.000000000000000000000000001% chance of Maaneet being together by the end of this .. I shall keep my hopes up .. call me crazy but yes I believe that by some jaadoo ki chari's miracle Maaneet will end up together. I know. I'm a nutcase ) oh you are a lost cause as well...🤣...how about this as the ending..."Jaz wakes up and realizes that the story was just a figment of her crazy imagination and maneet are doing the happily ever after thing with NT as a family"...chalega!? 😛

Ok Maaneet dreams over.. let's get to the update. lets! 😃

It's a good thing you ran for your life. Let me tell you something. I don't give a damn about Maan Singh Khurana now. He can live his life happily eating brunch with his wife .. but like they don't exist for me. I'm interested in Adi Kent (as Nadia refers to him) and Geet .. or shall I say Adeet .. haha I can't picture Adi as the show's Adi .. I picture him as some hunk with chiseled abs and toned body and what not. As for Sam .. who is she supposed to look like? I can't picture anything for her so she seems more non-existent to me right now. LOL. Ok I'm talking bakwaas lemme get to the story. ha ha...Adi Kent and Adeet are really catching one...you are all in for a treat on the next update 😉 ...as for Sameera...in my mind she is still Mouni Roy i guess...or or wait...do you know the chick who played Damini Gujral on LNMDJ...her...she's a head strong woman with strong familial ties...i like her...😃

Geet .. ahh the strong girl .. good for her for going so far away from Maan and pursuing her dreams. Nothing can be said and done about their last ugly encounter but what's done is done now. They both made a mistake in not wanting to understand the other's POV so what more can a person say about their situation other than wanting to bang their head against a wall? Chaddo. lol...tu ther..i forgot what i put in part 12...let me go revise it really quick so your comment will make more sense 😆 ...ok back...now i see why sameera is such a big part of the comment...she was a major part of the update 🤣...it was the first real dose of Mrs. MSK 😛...but ok...as for Maan...you're right...whats done is done...the past is always 20/20 in hindsight...but trust me...geet has much to say to maan about what you just said...others POV and all 😉

As I had said about Naina from the preview you'd given us. I mean she bloody well knows that talking about SaMaan in front of Geet is not the best thing yet she opens her mouth to do so anyway. She should just lay and shut her trap because Geet, nor I, are interested in knowing her hatred or love towards her Bhabi. Naina's suffering from the day she made the worst decision of her life so she should understand that karma really does come back to bite you hard. Naina has reasons for doing all that she does...dont get me wrong...they arent malicious...not yet any way...im still tossing with her character 😕 ...any way...she has demons...sort of a masochist if you will...but then not really...she's so complex...my head hurts!!! 😆...more on her story to unfold as well 😉

I don't have anything against Sameera. It's not like she went begging to Maan that she wants to get married to him (unless you're going to open up about SaMaan's first encounters too one day and tell me otherwise ) so she's just trying her best to get familiar with Naina. It was nice to see their bonding..and nice to see that Naina was regretting her decision about Geet everyday since Geet left them. They lost a gem and I don't feel sorry! im reading your comment and laughing cuz part 13 is just that...the opening up of the early days of SaMaan 😆...but yes...like you said...she's not at fault for any of this...why should she suffer anything because of a past that Maan shares with Geet...why should she fall victim...which a lot of readers dont mind if Maneet end up together...which disturbs me ...

Ok I just LOVE LOVE LOVED Geet's flashback of her days in school with Adi .. and oulala they danced together .. bliss! Haha awww Adi was the one who made her smile even when she felt like sulking .. he is truly the right one for her. Glad to know that they've known each other for so long now.. they've grown so close. Loved it totally! phir toh tomorrow you might just gush yourself to death about Adeet!! cuz as i was writing the update...i fell more and more in love with him!! i was telling Guli...i was like...I love Adi...MSK ko choddo...mujhe Adi chahiyeh!! 😉

Ok this Arjun dude is sickening. His "I love her" chants make me wanna puke. Like what kind of over-possessive .. lovesick .. psycho is he.. first rapes her then chants his love mantras for her. Like really?! isske uppar toh...no comment 🤬

Well finally Mr. Maan Singh Khurana did something worthwhile and beat the daylights out of him. Lemme guess... is the girl screaming Naina?? (Well I'll find out right now since I have like 1 more part to get through ) he he...nice try but no go on the Naina...its someone else and im scared to read your next comment cuz im afraid you might kill me 😲

Ah-mazing update :D thanks! 😳

Chapter 13:

Oh wow an entire update dedicated to SaMaan lol! I had thought it'd be either some random chick or Naina screaming but turns out it was Mrs. Khurana .. very unexpected I can't believe I didn't guess that one .. it's just that I thought Sameera had already started running and reached where Maan was so I had thought it was gonna be someone else .. oh well .. wanna know what happens to that scumbag Arjun though! he he...i knew no one would guess Sameera...thats why i loved putting it in there...i figured that since at the end i put that Geet was also walking towards the lobby...people might think it was her...but i guess they didnt pick up on that part 😆

Ok .. this is just not fair for Geet! I know she's strong and isn't like this bechari girl all depressed about Maan .. but the fact that within a few days she ends up having to deal with two people directly related to Maan .. that's just torture! I mean as if the fact that he's in the hospital isn't enough .. she's having to face him in the most private situations ever .. first with Naina's rape and second with *GASP* Sameera's pregnancy :O Like woah. That just came outta the blue .. you gave me a mini heart attack .. so thanx to that bit of happy news I have like no ounce of hope left for Maaneet in this .. at all .. (unless that magical jadoo ki chadhi happens to appear out of nowhere LMAO .. yea I know I'm pathetic) But that was a not-so-pleasant surprise on my part because like it's just kinda hard to let go of that Maan Ki Geet and Geet Ka Maan feeling whenever I'm dealing with something Maaneet related lol .. it's gonna take time getting used to but I'm all for it :D But even though I know Geet is strong .. I only feel for her because she's faced so many trials in her life already when it comes to relationships (thanx to Maan Singh Khurana) and now she's having to face them all over again .. but this is Geet Handa we're talkin about so I'm sure she'll handle it on her own cuz she's a strong girl :) I liked her frank attitude with Maan lol .. that's right .. she should totally address him as if she's meeting him for the first time .. :P he he.."mini heart attack" over sameera's kush khabir...MISSION ACCOMPLISHED!!! ...thats why i had to do it...at first i wasnt sure if i was going to do it...cuz making her preggers meant no going back to Maneet ever...cuz regardless of how hard headed MSK might be...he would never walk away from a child of his...or any child for that matter...😳...by the end of the next update...you'll have a different view on Geets life...i garuntee that...her life just looks so hard now with Maan and his clan in the picture...but these past 10yrs...he wasnt there...she didnt have all the emotional baggage and all...😉...

Ok I knew you were going to open up the history behind SaMaan .. so I was glad to read about it in this one .. although some things totally didn't make me happy but then again .. the story has to move forward na ;) ha ha...what things? bolo bolo 😛

In this entire flashback .. I felt for Sameera of course .. what with her family's history and all the hardships they had to face .. things just couldn't get any worse for her so I could understand her need to find a job and later on accept Maan's proposal .. like she said...its ironic that the reason geet refused his proposal was the very same reason the took up his offer 😊

But obviously the thing I didn't like was the proposal ..

So Maan asks her to accept this "marriage" so that Naina could get a Bhabi .. ok I get it .. but to ask like this .. to some random employee is kind of out there .. I mean when he asked Geet it was also because he loved her .. but clearly you could see now that more than his love for Geet .. it was his need to meet Naina's needs first.. because had he not felt about keeping Naina's needs his top-most priority .. he wouldn't be asking a girl he barely knows personally to agree to such a proposal .. but at the same time he wasn't caring about his future either.. I guess after Geet left he felt there was no need for a relationship .. hence he was ready to give up his future for Naina and marry a girl he wasn't in love with.. though I didn't like his proposal .. I guess it was the best decision he could make at that time .. given Naina's whole crying act of wanting a Bhabi .. and there being a perfect candidate for the marriage .. I guess it was his quick decision about this "marriage" that I did not like .. I was thinking maybe she met him .. then they fell in love etc etc and that's how the marriage happened..I wonder what he would've done had she said no .. Sameera wasnt a random employee...i tried to give that sense when he asked about her schooling and all because im sure that MSK isnt up to date on all of his employees personal lives...more on that past soon as well...of course more on how Maan came to that "quick" decision as well...but one thing you are definitely right about...he didnt plan a future for himself...thats why he told Sameera not to expect any thing from him as a hubby...how that changed...will come out in good time 😉

Hearing about Sameera's past failed pregnancies was really heart-breaking .. I mean the girl's been through enough and then she had to face two abortions .. I may not have been in the same situation before but I can understand the pain a woman feels when she is unsuccessful in such matters .. it really just breaks your heart and willingness to have kids .. but I'm happy that she tried again and was successful (till now .. why do I have a feeling that her pregnancy will play a HUGE role in this story sometime later :P) .. it was nice seeing that bonding moment between husband-wife ' but in front of Geet .. man .. I was having a hard time reading it .. I wonder how Geet must've felt watching it! Rehem kar uspar Jaz! LOL! as i was doing the update...ideas began flowing and i fell more and more in love with Sameera as i wrote on...i admired her more and respected her more as well...but yeah...the loss of a child...even at early stages is hard...because from the moment you find our you're pregnant you have hopes and dreams...and to have them shatter...🥺 ...not that i have any experience in that department whatsoever...😆

Ok I have no real problems with Sameera right now .. she seems like a down-to-earth woman .. with right intentions .. but I will not totally fall in love with her so soon .. there's still more to the story so I want to see if other shades of her character come out :) .. but I did like that she cared enough for Geet to say that she would've backed out of her and Maan's relationship to let Geet back into his life .. I don't know if Geet would've gone back had she given her the chance .. but it was nice to know that there was a possibility! If only! *sighhh* of course Geet wouldnt have gone back...hence the line "Maan and Geet may have had a past but they have no future" indicating that even if Sameera walked way...Geet wouldnt have walked back in...she's moved on as well...you all just havent see it yet 😉

Well I guess this update really set a tone for Geet and SaMaan's relationship as a trio for the rest of the FF .. I mean now that Geet has to deal with Sameera and her pregnancy as well .. I'm sure a lot more will come out between them and we'll see how they deal with problems together .. not much in terms of this particular trio at the moment...but Geet is definitely going to be a catalyst for the Khurana family on many levels 😛

Waiting to see what the creep Arjun is doing and if he still "LOVES" Naina to come back to stalk her .. and also how Adeet and their story blossoms ;) <3 a little more on Arjun and lots of Adeet in next update😃

Oh and I can't believe I'm saying this but I can't wait to read how SaMaan fell in love and all that .. I mean they're having a baby aren't they! yup...thats to follow in next weeks update...i was trying to fit it into this weeks but i got a tad bit carried away with Adeet 🤣

CANNOT WAIT! Fabulous update :) thank you!!! 😳

I am ultra ultra sorry Jaz for delaying my comments for sooo long. I just talked to you on FB and told you I'm at the airport .. and thought of finishing my comments on Word so that I can go back to Canada and paste them on your thread asap :) .. I really am sorry .. these vacations and me constantly having to go places really hampered my timings and ability to come on your FF long enough to finish reading and comment on it! But now that I'm going back to Canada I swear to you I'll have enough time to read and comment jaldi jaldi :P Ramadan is starting too so I'm sure to occupy myself I'll be reading your stuff lol .. better than thinking about how hungry you are huh! :P aare what sorry..i was just teasing...ramadan is here...tomorrow is day 1 for us...i just am not a fan of sehri...getting up at odd hours to eat......vaise hi iftar ke baad i have no space for more food...and you will have many OS's to entertain you...😉

Anyways .. again my apologies for the delay .. I promise it won't happen again :) .. phirse sorry bola toh im gonna kill you and write a ff on that!! 😆

Love always, love you too!!! 🤗

Z

<3

PS: Hope you like my comments.. if my comments for Chapter 13 made like no sense' blame it on the sleepiness I was feeling ! Damn my neck hurts from having to sleep in an awkward position :( *sob sob* .. I'm getting ready for some major jetlag .. lol

Ciao <3

Originally posted by: Mk.Gh

And I couldn't have said it any better myself But I do disagree with one tidbit .. your writing is nowhere near amateur! I have read other FFs but have never felt the way I feel when I read your work. Not only do you lay out such strong storylines with equally strong and well thought-out characters .. but you have a way of capturing us within your story. I've said this before .. that when I read your work especially I feel as if I'm watching it happen in front of my eyes .. it's a surreal experience. One aspect I love about you is how you try to connect each and every FF of yours with your passion -- the medical field. I love when you include the hospital scenario in your FFs because it feels as if I'm watching episodes of ER/House/Grey's Anatomy, etc 😆 .. quite entertaining I must say! And also how you add your own personal touch to the stories by adding your personal experiences as a part of the storyline. And I am so glad to not only have found such an amazingly talented author like you but an amazing friend! <3

Z

aww...Z!!! you're sooo sweet!!! 😳...i also love incorporating medical stuff into the stories...it serves two purposes...1...i get to see how much i know/remember myself and 2...i get to learn too!! wow..im such a nerd!! ha ah...love you!!
JAZ

ps: tauba...did i even say Ramadan Mubarak yet!! 😲

Originally posted by: premgeet01

I love all of what you write. As a writer myself, I strongly appreciate that you have the guts to post it on the net. It takes ages to write, but only minutes to criticize. Believe me, I know what you are going through You are going to come out stronger and as a better writer😛 thank you!! 🤗...im glad that you understand me from a writers pov...and you're right..it takes ages...literally ages to get it just right to where you are happy with it yourself...and to have someone just come along one find day and point out flaws...it makes me mad...not for just myself but for all the writers who are putting their work out there for us to read

Ok fine..I sound like a professor giving a lecture to his students...but I really do love what you write and you also happen to have a creative mind which is essential for a writer.. thank you so much...that means a lot!! 😳

Writing is a passion...an art which you are great at...so please do keep writing aww!!! 🤗