MY FIRST FF EVER!!! PZZZ DO GIVE IT A TRY

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey everyone, i am puja, and this is my first ff ever! so hope you guys enjoy!

ok, my story is going to be based on the show Virrudh which used to air on Sony. i might used the same story but add my scenes into it. hope you guys like it.

CHARACTERS

Vasudha Raisinghaniya(main lead)- vasudha is a loving caring girl. she is cheerful and sweet. vasudha will do anything for her father. she worships him like god, and can't stand a word against him. vasudha is the oldest of the 4 children. she is also the illegitimate daughter of her father.

Dhirendra Raisinghaniya- ( main lead) power hungry man. father of vasudha, vedika, vedant and shreay. DRS runs the newspaper company Danik Darpan. he is a very powerful man. he uses his newspaper to either destroy people or make people. he is a ruthless businessmen and will do anything to get his way in business, yet he is a kind and loving father. ohh and by the way i will call him DRS, so i don't have to write the long name so if u see DRS that's him.

Vedika Raisinghaniya- the second oldest daughter of DRS. Vedika hates her father very much. she thinks her father is always playing games with everyone. she always tries to warn Vasudha against him saying he doesn't deserve her love. while vasudha concerned her father god, vedika concerns her father the devil.

Vedant Raisinghaniya- third oldest son of DRS. very cool type guy. loves his sisters a lot. very handsome, and loves chillings with friends.

Shreay Raisinghaniya- the youngest daughter of DRS, like all rich girls she is ultra glam and fun loving, being the youngest she is often pampered a lot by her father and siblings. she is your girl next door.

Nani- well she is your typical nani, like all nanis are.

Sushant Sharma- ( main lead) sushant works as a chief reporter in DRS office. he loves vasudha a lot and she too loves him. they have been together for 6 years, but are afriad to say anything in front of vasudha's father might disapprove. sushant and DRS never really get along, like vedika sushant also thinks DRS is a bad person and is always telling Vasudha her father will never let there relationship go any further and that he is not what she thinks he is

Vasudha is the dotting daughter of her father. they stand together. DRS trust's vasudha with everything. he relies on vasudha from his morning pills to handling his flies. vasudha is the illegitimate daughter of DRS, she was put in the orphanage by her mother in till 5. when she was 5 DRS fund out about her and excepted his mistake in front of the world, this is why vasudha respects her father so much and worships him. but destiny has something-else planned for her. is her father really that good of a person? if not then what will happen when she discovers the truth about her father? how will she handle the reality of a man she worshiped for 25 years.

SOO what do you guys think?? do you guys want me to write it or not? this is my first ff ever so the story might be the same as the original serial, but i will add extra scenes and stuff. maybe in the future i can come up with a new story. I know it has no ridz or armaan in it and that really popular but I hope some of you guys are still want to read it!

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Posted: 14 years ago
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nice character sketch and start.
eventhough i am KASH fan (ARSh/AR). i only read ARSH and some AR (KASH) ffs. please don't mind.
i would love to get opportunity to read FFs on other Characters, too.
please continue soon and add me to your pm list.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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okay guys here is Chapter 1

Chapter 1

( DRS, he is in his study room reading a new paper, when vasudha comes rushing to his room)

Vasudha- " papa!! Happy Birthday" ( Vasudha goes and gives him a big hug) " Many Many happy returns of the day".

DRS- " Thank you so much" where have you been since morning i have been looking all day for you"

Vasudha- " well.. i went to the temple with nani"

DRS- " where is Nani, then"

( just then nani comes in)

Nani- " hmmm this crazy girl left me in the car" "she was so worried that her father will be looking for". she fought so much with the driver, that he quiet his job and left." " hahahahhaha"

DRS-" ohhh i see" ( eyeing vasudha")

Vasudha- " okay, what ever." Come with me papa"

DRS-" where"?

Vasudha- " to your boss"

DRS- " you are my boss"

Vasudha- " well then do as your boss say and come with me"

( vasudha takes DRS to the temple, and does tilak on him)

Vasudha- " ask for anything you want today"

DRS- ( laughing) " what do i need to ask for? i have everything". " but there is one thing that i would like to ask him".

Vasudha- " and whats that"?

DRS- " that in every life time give me a daughter like you"

( Vasudha gets teary eyed)

( Vedika comes in clapping)

Vedika- " Wow!! just wow", i feel like i just saw some scene from a movie" " wow, what emotions"

Vasudha- " vedika" is it necessary to drink this much?"

Vedika- " of course not sweetheart, but what can i do?' " being drunk makes all the sorrow go away"

Vasudha- " it is papa's birthday today"

Vedika- ohhh, yup sorry, "Happy birthday papa"

( vedika moves toward DRS almost falling, and is about to give him a hug, but DRS stops her)

DRS-" Forget it", " there is no need for that, i would have appreciated it better if you came here sober, but you are clearly drunk" ( walks away)

Vedika-" Come on papa", i know you hate me, but at least give me a proper hug?

( DRS keeps walking)

Vedika- " what ever", its not like you have ever loved me before" so why now"

Vasudha-" vedikaaa!!" was that necessary" " you could have spread him today" " you know how much papa has to bear because of your behavior?

( Vedika gets angry"

Vedika- " PAPA HAS ENDURE A LOT"???????? ARE YOU KIDDING ME?? if anyone has suffered in this house then that's my mom!! she stood there, in that corner slowly crying to death", and you're telling me papa has endure a lot"??? ' he doesn't care for anything". "he is a SELFISH MAN"

Vasudha- "VEDIKA" enough! i don't want to hear a word against him"

Vedika- " Really, and why is that"??? " i am telling the truth, open your eyes!!! or you will regret this later" " i am only doing this for you, i don't want you to end up like me"

Vasudha- " why are you hurting papa, everyday for me"??? " if you think that by believing you, i suspect him, then i am sorry vedika, i can't do that" " anyways, why are we having this conversation" " you are clearly drunk, go to sleep"

( Vasudha starts walking away, and vedika follows)

Vedika- " don't walk away from me"!!! " you can run away from the truth"!!! " who are you to tell me what to do and what not to do" you have no right" " forget me you don't even have right in this house"

( Vasudha turns around)

Vasudha- " and you have a right"

Vedika- "yeah, of course i do" i am Dhirendra Raisinghaniya legitimate child" " and you are illegitimate"

( Vasudha hearing this gets upset and walks away, just then DRS comes out of his study, and walks toward Vedika)

( DRS slaps vedika)

DRS- " GO TO YOUR ROOM"!!!! NOW!!!

( vedika, walks toward her room, and falls in bed)

Vedika-" what ever, i am used to this now anyways".

( DRS comes to vasudha room, where she is crying, and sits besides her)

DRS- " Vasudha, i should be the one saying sorry to you" " this is all my fault" " you have to endure all this because of my mistakes"

Vasudha-" no, papa it is not your fault" " what you did, no other father would have done" excepting your mistake in front of the world, takes courage" " i will always be thankful for that"

DRS- " vasudha, by excepting you, i didn't do you any favor, it was your right"

Vasudha- " i don't understand, why vedika can't see you're kindness"

DRS- " she has always been like that, but come on now, are we going to celebrate my birthday like this"? in tears?" forget what happened" " and besides aren't you you going to serve me breakfast" " i am starving"

( vasudha smiling gets up)

Vasudha- " of course, i will just get to it"

DRS- " and by the way, where is vedant"?

Vasudha-" ummm he is probably on his way from the gym"

DRS-" as soon has he comes home, inform me, i want to talk to him".

Vasudha-" okay"

so what did you guys think?? is it good? please tell me if i am adding to little details or to many details or if it sounds realistic or not. and any suggestion you have plzzz do say!

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Posted: 14 years ago
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SOOO DID ANYONE LIKE IT????????????????
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Posted: 14 years ago
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ofcourse i loved it.
awesome part!!!!⭐️
i can't believe it's your first time, you have done wonderful job writing it.
please do continue soon.
thanks for the pm.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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THANK YOU SOOO MUCH!!!!!! your comment means A LOT to me!!! thank you sooo much once again!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: puja144

THANK YOU SOOO MUCH!!!!!! your comment means A LOT to me!!! thank you sooo much once again!!!!!!!!

you are most welcome. waiting for next update.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey everyone, okay so i added a few more characters

Sinha- Sinha is a powerful politician whose relationship with Dhirendra Raisinghaniya goes back a long way. He will do anything to get his way. best friend of DRS. Sinha is also against sushant, as sushant is collecting evidence against him.


Devyani- She works in Dhirendra's newspaper Dainik Darpan. Dhirendra used her when he needed her & then never look back at her after reaching heights of success. Devyani is waiting for that day when she can take revenge from Dhirendra for whatever he did to her. she also has a liking for sushant, and is friends with her.

Chapter 2

(episode starts with Vasudha serving breakfast to DRS , when vedant comes rushing in)

Vedant-" papa! papa! happy birthday! ( he bends down to touch his feet and hits his head on the table)"

DRS- " ummm hmmm, kya kar rahe ho"

Vedant-" sorry papa, galte ho gaye" " ouch"

DRS- "tumne apne career kay bare mein kya socha hai?"

Vedant-" papa, actually mujhe model ban na hai"

( vasudha starts laughing)

Vasudha- " what'????

DRS-" maine tumse apne career kay bare main pucha", " naki tumhare hobbies"

Vedan-" i know papa, liken aaj kal hobbies koi be career bana ja saka ta hai"

DRS-" Vasudha, main apane study main ho, paper behjawa de na "

Vasudha-" ji, papa"

( DRS leaves from from there"

Vasudha-" vedant! idiot, ek sawal ka jawab dhang se nahi de sakta"?

Vedant-" whaaat?? maine kya kiya?, " model ban ne main kya buria hai?

Vasudha-" tum nahi sumjho gayi"

Vedant-" anyways, di, i need your help, ek problem hai"

Vasudha- ( vasudha remembers something') " problem to hai"

Vedant-" kya"????

Vasudha-" shreya" ( vasudha rushes upstairs where shreya is getting ready"

Vasudha-" shreya, kya kar rahi ho"? college nahi jana?

Shreya-" bas di mein abhi abhi nikal rahi thi"

Vasudha-" shreya, aaj papa ka janam din hai, tumne wish kiya"

Shreya" ohhh, uhhh PAPA, PAPA !!!( goes screaming downstairs)

Vasudha-" shreyaaa chillao mat"

( shreya goes to DRS study)

Shreya-" papa, happy birthday" ( gives him a hug)

DRS-" thank you my princess" " yeh kya abhi aap college nahi gaye"?

( just then vasudha comes in)

Vasudha- " aap ki princess koi tayar ho na main kitna waqt lagta hai"

Shreya-" okay, di i go to go, bye"

Vasudha-" aye ladki, breakfast kaun kare ga"?

Shreya-" di late ho raha hai" BYE!!!!!!!!"

Vasudha- " shreya suno to" "kamal hai yeh ladki"

(DRS starts laughing)

DRS- " vasudha ladki badi ho jate hai, kuch baata hai nahi chalta"

( just then the door bill rings)

Vasudha-" yeh lo, hogi aap ki ladki, saro kuch bhool gayi hogi"

( vasudha, goes to open the door, but finds sushant there, oh and by the way vasudha calls sushant sharmajii out of love)

Vasudha-" ohhh sharmajii aap hai" "ab aye ho mujhe se milne"

Sushant-" tumse"? " tumhare baap se milne aayi huin" chalo hoto"

Vasudha-" acha hai, waise aaj papa ka birthday hai, agar apne papa se mere haath mang liya, toh woh shaayad maan ja yeh."

Sushant-" actually, mujhe to yeh file dene thi, magar aap itna kahe rai hai to maang lata hai'
( sushant starts moving closer toward vasudha, and pushes vasudha towards the door, holding her tight by the waist)

Vasudha-" sushant!!!!!" kya kar rai ho, koi dekh laga"

Sushant-" dekh to dekha nai do, main kisi se nahi darta"

Vasudha-" yeahh whatever" " ab mujhe chodo na" " sushaaant"

Sushant-" bhai itni asani se thode chodo ga, pahale ek kiss toh ho jaya"

( sushant moves more closer to vasudha, in till there faces are an inch apart)

Vasudha-" sushant, chodo mujhe" ( vasudha pushes sushant away) " jis kaam ki leya aye ho woh toh pura karo" jawo aur papa se baat karo" " go"

Sushant-( sighing) " chalo, puche ti hain tumhare bapa se" " dekh ti hai kya jawab hai"

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Posted: 14 years ago
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awesome update!!!
it does not matter to me. i can read both.
it's totally upto you. in which ever you feel more comfortable and easy to write.

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