Maneet FF - Journey called life (OLD THR 1 - 2011-12) IMP NOTE PG 126 - Page 7

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Posted: 14 years ago
#61
hey loved the update...
i know the rythm story but the way u hv taken the story with the geet characters...i loved it...
loved our cute si komal...
maan is totally attached with this sweet little angel...
pl cont soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
#62
wowww loved it
hope komal tells geet about her meeting her papa
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Posted: 14 years ago
#63
This is really wonderful dear.
I loved the way u change the story line.
Getting interesting, am so curious to know what more u had stored.
Seems like Maan had to turn to be the Angry MSK, just like in Geet serial.
But I guess the arrival of cutie pie Komal, will change him soon.
That pretty fast for Maan got attracted with lil Komal..
Btw how old is Komal.
Plz cont soon dear...
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Posted: 14 years ago
#64
Geet nd dev were newly weds then who is komal???
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Posted: 14 years ago
#65
Here goes part 2...will give next update a little late as I am busy till sunday and need to give all priority to Geetika at this point of time.
Will be sending you all a combined PM for both the parts and both FFs
Part 2:

Geet and Komal reach home

Pinky and uncle ji (Pinky's dad) were eagerly waitng for them

Aagaye tum log...hum kab se garma garam pakode lekar intezar kar rahen hain (We have been waiting for long with hot pakodas)

Pakode...Komal is all excited as she loves to have them with tomato ketchup

Geet smiles at her daughter's happiness.

Uncleji...kyon itni takleef utathe hain? (Why do you want to take so much difficulties?)

Takleef kya hain beta...mujhe kushi hothi hain apni Komal ke liye yeh sab karna (No difficulties dear...I am happy to do this for my Komal)

Challo...chai banadetha hoon...(Let me make tea)

The four have a Tea session which is a usual evening get together.

Uff...this summer is really killing.

Thanks god...its a month of June and hopefully, the summer will slowly vanish. Geet...when will Komal's PreKG-1 will start? Did you check in her school?

Yes uncle...another 3 weeks to go. Till then she will continue with her summer education and activities in the same nursery and school.

That's good...I remember Komal was a little baby when you walked into this house for the first time...yeh 3-4 saal kaise challa gaya patha hi nahin challa.

Geet got quite again. Uncle sensed it.

Geet bete...tum ne abhi tak pakode nahin kaye...

Pakode...WOW

Yash bete...aao aao (Hey yash...come...come)

Pranam uncle ji...hello Pinky pulls her cheeks...hey Geet...how are you?

I'm fine Yash

Komal is still angry and gets up to leave to her room.

Yash clears his throat and tells...Aaj job hi ache bache hain unhen mujhe gale lagakar kissi deni hogi...aur jo acha bacha eisa karega...use yeh chocolate box milega (Today, all good children present here need to hug me and kiss me...and which ever kid does that...will get this box of chocolate)😉

Komal's eyes pops out by seeing the BIG Chocolate box filled with all her favourites. She runs to yash..hugs him and kisses him immediately.🤗

Everyone there were shocked...Maanna padega (Must accept)...Only Yash can handle Angry Komal.

Arre Komal ji...aap tho mujh se naaraz thin a (Komalji...you were angry with me right?)

Naaraz? Koun? Kab? (Angry? Who? When?) Tells Komal innocently holding the chocolate box with her kiddish greediness

So, what all happening in School Komal Darling?

Yash uncle...Yash uncle...guess whom I met today in School.

Everybody look at each other...who could it be...

I met my PAPA...says komal proudly and innocently with a smile.

Geet couldn't gulp her tea further...her eyes opened wide...

WHAT? Komal...What are you saying?

Mama...I came to tell you this but you were busy at office.

Everyone looks at each other with shock.

Yash gestures at Geet to keep quite...So, how does he look? What did he say?

Oh...My PAPA...Most handsome and strong PAPA...He took me into his arms...lifted me and kissed me.

Yash...dont know who is this person...What's going on...oh no...I need to talk to her principal tomorrow.

Relax Geet...Lets find out more

I came out of school following the ball and that ball hit my PAPA. He lifted me kissed me and asked me where is mummy.

Geet is going blank in front of her eyes.

I told him she will come to pick me only after school gets over. And then, he dropped me back to school.

Komal..how many times I have told you not to interact with strangers. You are getting to be a bad girl...not listening to me atall.

Komal starts crying...Mummy I met my PAPA not a stranger.

Komal Darling...How do you know he is your PAPA?

Uncle...he hugged me...lifted me and gave me a kissy immediately after seeing me.

Geet was about to shout at her...Yash stops her.

Pinky..please play with Komal for a while.

Pinky takes her to the play area.

Geet...I think this person just got her back to school...that's it. Nothing to worry about.

Yash...I dont know who is this person...anyways...I am least bothered about him. How did Komal came out of school and no one noticed it. Thank god that this person got her back otherwise what would have happened? Yeh sochke main gabrarahi hoon (I am thinking about this and worried). What ever said and done...need to talk to the principal tomorrow. Will do it when I go to pick her.

At KM...

Maan was thinking about that little angel whom he met...She called him PAPA and surprisingly he was not angry at her...but why is he loving it? Mera us bachi ke saath kya rishta hain? (What is my relationship with that little girl?) Why am I miss her and willing to meet her again?

Next day, Maan visits that school again. He comes to the School reception and requests to meet the School Headmistress. He walks in and surprised to see the School Headmistress is none other than Nandini Ji, one of close family friend.

Arre Maan Bete...Aap?

Nandini Ji...Aap...He touches her feet.

Jeethe Raho bete..I am the headmistress here.

Maan...I am sorry for what ever happened beta...I wish you to carry on with rest of your life. Can you imagine how much your dadima is worried for you?

Maan keeps quite...

Acha, you have come here for some important work or it was a casual pass by?

Woh...I was passing by your school yesterday...I mean I had a meeting here in the next building and my car was parked near your school...one little girl came running to me following her ball crossing the school gate. She was a cute little angel...I saw her and don't know what happened to me...I immediately lifted her up and kissed her cheek...she started calling me PAPA.

Oh...what's is that girl's name?

Komal.

Komal? Maan bete...I am sorry for this...she is a kid and wouldn't know anything what she is talking. Actually, she lost her dad when she was very young. She might have called you PAPA in a different context...sorry dear.

No no...I am not angry with her...Us phool jaisi bachi se koi naaraz kaise ho saktha hain? (Who will get angry with a little girl who is as soft as a flower) Infact, I have come here to request you if I could spend some time with her say just about 10-15 mins ' 2-3 days in a week.

Nandini was shocked to hear something like this and that too from Maan Singh Khurana.😲

Bete...I can understand your feelings. Am happy to see you happy after such a long time and Komal is the reason behind it. No wonder...Komal hain hi eisi (Komal is like that) ...even that little girl will be happy for sure. But I must discuss this with Komal's mom. See...We are answerable to parents/guardians. If we hide this fact from Komal's mother, she might get upset with the entire issue. I will speak with her and let you know the outcome. You can call me on my mobile this evening.

I appreciate your efforts Nandiniji. Even I dont mind if Komal's mom knows about it...I have one more concern...I came into the school yesterday and shouted at the security for being careless in giving enough concentration on the school kids of Komal's age. How can she come out of the school that easily? Please look into this matter.

Nandini was shocked...Maan has a point. Maan takes her leave and she calls the security guy on duty immediately after Maan leaves..she blasts him and warns him that such mistakes should not be repeated again.

Precap: Will Geet agree to what Headmistress requests?

Edited by Vaidhumom - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#66
how come geet has a daughter
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Posted: 14 years ago
#67
awesome di ...wow Maan is so eager to meet Komal ...aww ... unknowingly it shows the depth of the bonding & his loneliness.

wonderful update!!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
#68
wow awsome yaar ...loved it so much !!! continue soon pls
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Posted: 14 years ago
#69
loved the update...
finally geet got to know wat komal wanted to tell her...
i hope geet accepts wat the HM says and maan gets to meet his angel for sometime...
pl cont soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
#70
LOved it, plsss continue soon.

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