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REALITY BITES!!

Once again Geet was left behind shocked by his words. They had been a reality check for her. And she was unable to swallow them...

Nik's words kept echoing in her head. His words like 'selfish', 'Immature'' ,'Powerful', 'peer pressure', kept coming into her mind! She couldn't figure out where his anger was stemming from.

What had she done that made the show possible? It was ridiculous.

How could the show's success be dependent on her? Impossible!!

Nik didn't know what he was talking about. She barely hung out with enough people. How could she cause peer pressure?? Just because she didn't show up for practice he was accusing her of anything and everything. This line of thought was annoying her, no end. His accusations weren't making any sense with her.

She walked to her jeep in the same line of thought. Nobody had ever accused her of anything, much less being immature and selfish. Sure she was popular in college, but people followed Sid more because of his Casanova image. And Mayank had his share of admirers...but she ' no one aped her...did they? She couldn't remember as such. Nik was new in college. How could he make such value judgements in such a short time. It was all rubbish. She didn't believe it a bit.

Sid was already in the jeep, listening to music. He seemed lost in thought , however.

She started the jeep and sped home. Both were lost in their own thoughts...Sid , on his conversation with Raina, and Geet , mulling over Nik's outburst.

She had decided to ignore his accusations, but they kept coming back to her. She couldn't get rid of the idea that she was selfish or immature. They reached Sid's home and she stopped the jeep. Sid got off.

''Chal kal 9am, right?''

''ok...err, Sid...tujhe lagta hain ki show hamaare wajah se hit hoga?''

''Obviously...hum hain toh hit hona he hain,'' he said

''Sid, main seriously bol rahi hoon.''

''Toh main bhi serious hoon naa...we're the rockstars ,man.'' He replied laughingly.

She gave up. Sid would always be Sid...

''Chal see you tomo,'' she said

''Bye babe.''

THE NEXT DAY.

Raina walked to the computer lab. Sid had messaged her to meet him there. When she entered the room was dark and the LCD projector was turned on. Sid was sitting on the table. When he saw her he smiled and beckoned her.

''Hey:''

''Why did you call me here?''

He stood up and came close to her.''Kal ke chat ke baad, mujhe laga that you were in need of some encouragement...so I pataoed the professor to let me borrow the room for a while.''

''To practice here?''

''Abhi LCD projector on hain toh kuch dekhenge naa.''

''Come sit.'' He made her sit and sat next to her.

He moved his laptop and turned on a video.

[YOUTUBE]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LnLVRQCjh8c[/YOUTUBE]

Raina watched in a daze..she took in all the movements. The video was of two crippled dancers who were doing a contemporary routine. However what hit her the most was that the girl was missing an arm and the boy a leg. Still, it didn't seem to affect them. Not once did she see fear or hesitation. She had tears in her eyes by the time the video was over.

She turned to face Sid ,who looked horrified at her tears.

''Oye tu ro rahi hain , phir se? ''

''I'm not upset, you idiot. I'm touched. And really really ashamed. My excuses seem so shallow.'' She wiped her tears, and turned to face him. She looked in his eyes and smiled.

''Thank you Sid. This was the best surprise, ever. More like a reality check. But I needed it. It was something a friend would do.''

He looked affronted, '' I thought we were friends''

She smiled ,'then I can definitely give a friend a hug.' She leaned forward and put her arms around him. He smiled and hugged her back.

Meanwhile...

Geet reached practice early. She started her warm up and waited for Nik. His comments had given her little sleep. Still, she was determined to reach before him. She had finished warming up by the time he reached. He just looked at her in acknowledgement. She practised her steps while he warmed up. They didn't utter a single word while they practised. Almost half of the routine was done and there was still a month to go for the show.

Once they had finished practice, they quietly packed up. She went and changed in the girls' locker and went looking for Mayank. She found him on the pavilion, holding an impromptu meeting with a few other juniors. He was busy so she waited idly on the step. Mayank noticed her boredom and asked her to help him. She checked all the tasks that were to be done. The juniors came one by one and checked their lists with hers. It was dusty and she was sweating. She constantly wiped her brow and face. Out of nowhere a hand appeared and offered her a wet wipe. She turned to see the smiling face of a junior.

''I know, even I can't bear it.''

''Do I know you?'', Geet asked politely.

''Err, I don't know. Hi, I'm Nishi'', she gushed and extended her hand.

Geet..smiled and extended hers, '' Hi, I'm G---''

''Geet !! I know. Who doesn't know you. You're like the college rockstar. Well, errm everyone's in awe of you , I guess. '', gushed Nisha happily.

Geet turned in her seat fully and took a look at the girl. She was dressed in cargoes and a vest with sport shoes. Her hair too seemed permed and she had worn only one earring on her ear.

On the whole her outfit resembled Geet's. Her image hit Geet in the gut. If one had seen the girl from behind, they would've thought it was Geet.

She looked around. She couldn't remember the annual programme ever having so much of excitement ...as far as she could remember, the show was always something the rest of the students skipped. She knew she did. Sid, Mayank and she mostly had a night out or they went camping. How was it that this year there was such an uproar and fuss about it?

The junior were hovering around Mayank. They eagerly took his orders and completed the work in time. She looked around more...the outfits resembled Sid's dressing style. She saw shoes the same style that Mayank wore. Her style of cargoes looked common too.

Nishi was saying something. She turned her attention to her.

''Did you come early today? I noticed your Jeep is parked in the 1st spot.''

Geet didn't know how to reply. . Nik's words rushed to her mind.

She was dazed and shaken. Had she been living in her own ivory tower all this while to never have noticed all of this? She couldn't remember being that popular. She sat for an hour just chewing over the events of the day.

Nik's words came back to her! .

''It is a big deal. The success of the show depends on you. The mere fact that you're performing ensure a packed hall. Have you any idea how much power you have? People aspire to be you, they follow you...YOU create peer pressure unknowingly. But your completely irresponsible about it. YOU have a gift like none others...but you choose not to use it..not to share it. I find that extremely selfish and immature. And the more I think about it, the angrier I get. I don't respect such people.''

Only one question haunted her ...Could he be right?

Precap:

Gaurav Khurana: Maan, dignity and honour is something you shouldn't let go of. It's what defines us, Khuranas.

Precap 2:

Daadi: Maan,don't let you pride blind you. Humility is what makes a man. How a man treats a person lower in status than him, shows what he is made of.



Heya Fellas - so ...what do you think about it? boring update? or too much? kuch toh bolo na.

The next update will take a while hope u enjoy it.


Chapter 9 - Honour and False Pride

https://india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1663833&TPN=8

Edited by mechantefille - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#42

REALITY BITES!!--- more often than expected😉

GEET REACHED early.😲😲

On the whole her outfit resembled Geet's. Her image hit Geet in the gut. If one had seen the girl from behind, they would've thought it was Geet.--- GEET IS A ROCKSTAR EVERYONE WANTS TO COPY.. hmmm...🤣

Nik's words rushed to her mind.--- again?!! she loves NIK... she keeps thinking abt him..

Nik's words came back to her! .--- looks like NIK did have his charm on geet..

Gaurav Khurana: Maan, dignity and honour is something you shouldn't let go of. It's what defines us, Khuranas.-- exactly, hope cvs understand this also...

overall great update again.. me enjoying this FF.. like the bond of sid and geet.. NIK😡😡 MAAN updates pls!! and maaneet milan.. gosh u hell bent in making us wait for their milan ghsp cvs??😡😭 👏👏⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ loved this update.. more pls, continue soon..
and me watched the video.. woah i cant write my feelings!! best dance performance, really hats off, soul touching.. love u dear for this update.. will wait for nxt..
🤗🤗🤗🤗
Edited by zaara25 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#43
story is picking up nice turn and interests.. good work keep it up..
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Posted: 14 years ago
#44
awesome turns coming hmmm nice dear😊
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#45
Nice update and the precaps look GOOD! Very nicely written!
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Hey Amruu ...sorry yaar was a bit busy b4 , read them all together ...becoming interesting and liking the characters ...😊 keep going dear ...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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heya people...

yup Maan is coming up next, par itne imp character ko toh acche se likhna padega na...so Maan will take a bit of time probably a day or do. plz bear with me.
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Amruta

@zaara
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@Jesssu
so good to see u here. welcome aboard!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: mechantefille

heya people...


yup Maan is coming up next, par itne imp character ko toh acche se likhna padega na...so Maan will take a bit of time probably a day or do. plz bear with me.
love
Amruta

@zaara
love ur comments

@Jesssu
so good to see u here. welcome aboard!

IM WAITING DEAR!!!😃
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Guys, these few upcoming chapters are the chapters where Geet and Maan will evolve and how their lives will change. they are important in the making of who they are. So please do bear with me.

Also, you comments have encouraged me. So what do you say, shall I put the FF on the main Geet page??

Do lemme know.

chapter 9 - Honour and False Pride

Khurana Constructions:

Gaurav Khurana. Life hadn't come easily for him. When his father had set up Khurana constructions, it had been a small firm. Tejpal Khurana had been hardworking, but his early death had pushed the burden on Savitri Khurana's shoulder's. Since Gaurav was still young, she had managed to keep the business afloat till he was able enough to handle it. Gaurav had then brought the business back to life and given it a new lease of life. True he did face a lot of ups and downs, but he did revive it. His mother gave him handy advice and a helping hand. Success led to happiness in the form of his wife and children, but tragedy struck when his wife died giving birth to Vicky.

Life however went on. His business and his children were what drove him. His favourite was Annie. Her docile nature and quick wit reminded him of his late wife. Maan had taken after him in his temper, while Vicky had taken after him for his passion. He knew that once Vicky had decided on being a dancer, nothing would sway him. Maan, despite being a good dancer, had the mind of a businessman. He just needed to be honed.

At the moment Gaurav needed his son's opinion. He knew what decision he needed to make, but he still wanted to hear Maan's opinion. He called him now, from the party he was attending to meet him at KC.

Maan came immediately.

''What's going on Dad?'' He asked calmly.

''Maan, the Malhotras want to change the clauses of the deal papers. I want you to have look at them first.

Maan sat down, and went through the papers.

''Dad''. He said once he'd finished. ''These clauses will cause a lot of labour problems, and it's going to cause losses for us.''

Khurana Sr. smiled looked proudly at his son.

''I was hoping that you would notice it. A keen eye is needed in this business world. Anybody can take you for a ride. You have to be vigilant at all times. They don't call it cut-throat business for nothing.''

Maan listened carefully and weighed his father's words. This was not his first piece of advice. His dad kept advising him from time to time and Maan stored these bits of knowledge. He knew that they would come in handy.

''Still Dad, they are the Malhotras. Will we get such a big deal again? Our firm is quite small as compared to theirs. We can do as they say for a bit right? It's just project.'', asked Maan with uncertainty.

''No, Maan,'' he replied firmly.

''But Dad, Malhotras. It's a big deal here.''

''I know, son, but it's at the cost of our dignity and value as a firm.''

''Dad, with such a big firm, isn't it more important to keep them happy?''

''Maan, it's pittance that we're getting for our services. I am not against the deal, but the newer clauses don't sit well with me.

''Dad don't make this an ego issue, please.

'' Maan, dignity and honour is something you shouldn't let go of. It's what defines us, Khuranas. If we do the deal, then it'll be according to the original clauses. It's not about my ego, but about my dignity as an entrepreneur and boss. None of my staff will do for anything less'.

Maan looked up at his father and realized what his father was saying. It was a piece of advice he remembered for the rest of his life. It added something to Maan..made him a little something more.

The phone rang and Gaurav answered it. He spoke to the receptionist and asked her to send in the visitor.

A middle aged balding man entered the room. He was dressed well and had a superior air about him.

Mr Khurana rose and greeted the gentleman.

''Hello, Mr.Patel, how are you?''

''Hello, hello Gaurav. Hello, beta,'' he said turning to Maan.

''Hello, Sir'', Maan replied with a small smile.

His entry was not something he was happy about. Mr. Patel was a few years senior to his father. He was in the same field as the Khuranas were and often visited them. Maan didn't like his interference in their business and his father's trust in him. Mr. Patel was degrading in his attitude towards Gaurav and Khurana constructions , but Gaurav seemed to trust his advice and opinions. However, his condescension towards the Khurana's kept Maan's guard up with him.

Gaurav was explaining the clauses of his deal with the Malhotras to Mr. Patel. Maan disapproved, but there was little he could do about it.

Mr. Patel went through the papers. He seemed to be going through some kind of thought. Finally he kept them on the table and looked at Gaurav.

''The new clauses seem ok. Go ahead.''

Maan interjected. ''But, Mr. Patel, the clauses will cause us labour problems.''

''Maan is right, Patel saab''

Mr. Patel looked a little annoyed.

He weighed his words and spoke to Gaurav. ''Gaurav, dekho, mujhe iss business main 15 saal ho gaye hain. Kabhi kabhi you have to make such sacrifices.

Even though he was making the same statements that Maan himself had made, Maan had now bought his father's argument. He therefore did not believe what Mr. Patel said. His guard already being up, he came up with counter arguments to interject in the conversation.

Gaurav seemed to believe what Mr. Patel was saying. This was getting Maan irritable, but every time he tried to interpose, MR. Patel cut him off and made him feel like a child.

Finally after a lot of time, Mr.Patel got up to leave. Gaurav seemed convinced by what Mr. Patel was saying and he had a stressed look on his face.

''Think about what I said, Gaurav,'' Said Mr. Patel before he left.

After his departure Gaurav looked pensive, like he was considering Mr. Patel's advice. Seeing this Maan became agitated and wondered if he father had been brainwashed.

''Dad, please tell me your not re-thinking your advice to me!'', he said in exasperation.

''Son, I can't well ignore what Mr. Patel said. ''He does have a lot of experience''

''Dad, I know he's a good friend of yours, but I just don't trust him. My instinct tells me he's up to no good.''

''Maan, how can you say that. When I was new in the business he helped me out so much. I owe that man for the support he gave me''

''Oh, come on Dad, you know it as well as I do...the advice he gave you at that time was beneficial for him more than it was for you.''

''Maan, I can't understand your dislike for him. He's always helpful. Don't you trust my trust?''

''I trust YOU dad, not him. And so I have to say that the 1st decision you made was right. We cannot afford to let go of profits and have labour trouble in the same go. Please stick to your original decision.''

''Give me time to think about it Maan,'' Said Gaurav, quietly. He didn't know what to do...both the options seemed confusing in retrospect.

He decided to think about it after going home and discussing it with his mother.

AT HOME:

Savitri Devi: Gaurav, kyat um itne losses paana chahte ho?

Gaurav: Nahi maa, par itni badi deal apne haath se jaane bhi nahi de sakta, aur mujhe jhukna bhi nahi hain.

Maan was standing in the background listening to the elders speak.

Savitri Devi asked for his opinion.

''Daadimaa, I don't think Dad ne yeh deal karni chahiye. Maine bhi yahi kaha ki iss deal se humaara hi nuksaan hain, but Daadi it is a big offer. It'll get us recognition.Still, despite all of that, I say we do the deal on our previous terms and dismiss the newer clauses!''

Daadi observed Maan as he spoke. She saw a proud young man who was voicing his opinions based on what he had deducted for himself. She was pleased with what she saw.

Savitri Devi: I think he's right Gaurav...both of you are , but ultimately it's your decision Gaurav. You don't need to do it today. Sleep over it and think. Then decide tomorrow.

Gaurav: Ji maa, I'll do that.

He turned to Maan.

''Come on , son, let's get this discussing, and let Maa rest.''

''Dad, why don't you go ahead, I need to speak to Daadi.''

After his father had left, Maan sat near his Daadi's feet. He didn't speak much. She sensed his mood.

''Something wrong Maan. It's not the business deal is it'', she asked intuitively. Maan was the quietest of her grandsons. He never emoted much, but just kept his feelings to himself. She , however understood him well.

''Anita, Daadi...she's already dating someone in the US...she was never serious about me. ''

''To be honest with you Maan, mujhe woh aapke layak nahi lagi. She wasn't very grounded. It's good you found out about her in time.''

''I know Daadi, but I felt that I shouldn't have actually given her attention in the 1st place. She was a nobody and she is known everywhere now, because of me."

''Maan, don't let your pride blind you. Humility is what makes a man. How a man treats a person lower in status than him, shows what he is made of. Don't think that just because you are Gaurav Khurana's son, that you are some big celebrity. You are still nothing in your own right, and I would hate to have any grandchild of mine with false pride...Treat ever person you meet as an individual. They might not all be good people with your sense of values, but that's how you'll learn to judge people and the keep your friends.''


Precap: same one; Geet??working hard??


Comments, people!! Chetti chetti! (hehe me loving this phrase...thanx to Lucky paaji)


Chapter 10 - A Slice of Humility

https://india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1663833&TPN=10

Edited by mechantefille - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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nyc update
luved it
do continue soon

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