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liv2laugh

@liv2laugh

Sparkler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#241

Hi Angel

Awesome update 👏 👏 👏

You have a gift. You managed to capture Geet's wonder at exploring this mansion as well as her thoughts on the way things are done.😆 😆 😆

I can just see her whipping the mansion into shape once she becomes a little more confident. 😃

A request could Maan be the one to discover her broken arm and take her to a doctor please 😳. I think it would really help cement the relationship in her eyes.

Loved the Maaneet moments......it did not seem forced at all and flowed very well with the pace of the story. I would never have known you added it later. 😃

Thanks for the PM
Jhan

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Loquacious_Aash

@Loquacious_Aash

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#242

wow angel.......😊😊😊😊

u make us wait n wait n wait........and deliver magic.........😳😳😳😳

the way u put it was amazing.....simply sensous without being OTT.....😳😳😳😳

loved it....👏👏👏 u really have a gift gal....👏👏👏

i kno u brought up the broken arm part here...but when will maan realize????

and what about the priview???? not that i'm complaining mind u....😆😆😆😆

i wud love it if u continued where u left off...and maan seees no sindoor in geets maang n fills it himself...😳😳😳

P.S. --- what do v do to make u update more often?????😭😭😭

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san1989

@san1989

Beginner

Posted: 14 years ago

#243

Nice story please do PM me when you do your next update.

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mardej

@marde

Navigator

Posted: 14 years ago

#244

very nice update waiting fr next part soon

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Antares

@Antares

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#245

That was awesome! Maan and NT are so tender and soft towards Geet......feel for Geet....her fears are so deep-rooted....it will take her a long time to leave her torturous past behind.....Maan has been understanding so far.....hope he remains that way.....it's really interesting to see how will they fall in love. Loved that little romance.....it was cute...lolz. Do continue soon.

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hemvb

@hemvb

Inactive

Posted: 14 years ago

#246

nice ff....

can you pm me when you update??

thx

emma

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shivangi783

@shivangi783

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#247

Lovely update.

The way you descibed the part where Geet was exploring the mansion was really good.

Geet is so scared of everyone because of the life she had been living since her mother passed away. The bedroom scene was really good. More scenes like this please where Maan is taking the initiative and geet also realizes that her pati is not gonna treat her like her brothers or dad did.

Her arm still paining? How iabout a scene where Maan comes to know and helps her with it-may be by applying an ointment or taking her to the doctor.

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johnangad

@johnangad

Inactive

Posted: 14 years ago

#248

maan is totally hooked! lovely morning scene!

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aleeha

@deadly-kiss

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Posted: 14 years ago

#249

Yay! You updated. I love your writing. its good to know that geet doesnt have to clean anymore. "Pati"? hehehehe sooo cute. lol. How will she call him in front of others?

"Pati, I have to talk to you" ahahahah! i cant wait.

sooo cute the morning kiss part.

continue soon. I'll be waiting.