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Posted: 15 years ago
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Introduction part 1



Morning at Shaan's house.....at the breakfast table.........

Shaan: Dad. Since my college is over....so......I was........ (He paused and exchanged a look with his dad)

Dad: yes. My son you can join from Monday..........

Shaan: thanks Dad........

Dad: thanks to you Shaan.........days passed and I never realized that you are a big boy now.....................years have passed since your mum left us.....but..........

Shaan: but you never let me feel her void..........you always took care of me.......

Dad: Shaan I m really proud of you my boy.......many boys in your age are not that responsible but you are and I'm blessed to have you........

Shaan: Dad please stop pampering me....................and ummmmm........

Dad: Shaan..............how was your farewell party.......after all…….this was your last day at college!!!!

Shaan: I didn't go.............

Dad: but why??.........

Shaan: Dad I don't like it.........

Dad: look my son.......you are young and energetic.......people in your age enjoy and party hard...but you always stay alone .......why!!!!

Shaan: Dad let's swap the topic......I m not comfortable............

Dad: oh I almost forgot I have a meeting to attend........so I better get going.... you enjoy today....from Monday on "welcome-to-hustle-bustle"

Shaan was quite and left for his room.............

------Shaan's room---------

He enters and starts sorting out his clothes...................and checks some documents.............

He is thinking of some old memories.............

---------Flashback.........--------

He is playing but suddenly he falls and bruises his knee.....but his mother lovingly dresses it up and..........kisses him............

He remembers his mum preparing all sorts of good dishes for him..........but he always did a lot of nakhras before eating them.................and naughtily teased his mum

He remembers her saying…….

Mum: Shaan..............you always irritate me with your naughty pranks and actions..........but when I won't be here you will miss me a lot........

--------Present.............-------

Teardrop falls from his eye......he's standing in the window pane looking at the distant children in the park...............

He speaks to himself

Mom why did you leave me.....please come back I miss you!!!

He picks up a frame on his desk with a picture of him in his mother's lap.............and presses it against his chest

He usually spent hours sitting near the window looking at the people on the other side happy with their loved ones.................

Though he loved his Dad a lot but he felt a big void in his life.............no one to pour his heart out to!!

He was lonely...........he had no friends...Or rather he never made one…...because he was scared of parting from his loved ones.........he was never this way but when he was 15 he lost his mum and he preferred remaining silent and alone from then......

He never ever let anyone know him, share his feelings or expressions.........he always engaged himself with books or anything else..............but never ever involved with other people except for his Dad.................

Later he composed himself and went to this desk............collected some things he wanted to keep on his new desk.....

Suddenly he heard knocking at his door...........servant brought him coffee.....

He took and sat on the couch........it was evening by now..............he was thinking of what his Dad said in the morning..............


......to be continued


Edited by Gunseerat - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Note: all chracters in our fan fiction are fictious and they have no relation to any show or chracter of any show......😊

Advice : if u cant relate to the character.please imagine them as ur fav protagonist rather than ours......😆😆

Notification: if u didnt find the chapter intresting you can tell us and we wont bug u since its us unknown so u may dont wanna read it.😃

Love
Naz😎 & Gunseerat
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Edited by Gunseerat - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
#26
wooooow
this was aussom.......😃
the dad n shaan convo...n past memo.....😊
this was juss too good.......👏👏
hope someone enters into shaans black n white...life n fill his life with colours......😳
gr8 strt gunsi n naz.....u guys rockkkkkk⭐️⭐️⭐️
cont.soon
thnx for d pm😃
Edited by juhi_karneet - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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heeyya gunsiny n naz...awww..such an emotional chap..last part ws really sad...

n a responsible shaan is a pleasant change thnx 4 dis...

continue soooooooonn
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Posted: 15 years ago
#28
Hey Gunsy di and Naz,🤗

What a chapter, it is emotional and touching.😊
This fear of loosing our loved ones, well, everyone can relate this to himself/herself.

And well, he lots his maa..that's sad.

And oh...fictional...I love it.
I was longing for this kind of FF, I mean fictional character FF.😃

Continue soon and do PM me.

Apsy.

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Amazing Start Jaana...

Loved It
Cont.Very Soon
Thanks For The PM..!!
-Mehek-
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Lovely part....!Really liked it.Plz continue soon

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