The Perfect Painting l AR OS - Page 3

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Originally posted by: olive_green

Neetz, that was AR all the way. Its kind of sad now the tragedy befits them like none other. But I was drawn to this like a hungry soul is to the single loaf of bread, because it had colors, and then you went through his thought process of chossing what shade suits his masterpiece best - and voila! grey..i could see the sketch coming alive. The only part I didnt enjoy was when he threw it in the water, you could see it sink slowly as the lines dissolve within the water..its not like the man to do that..but it was an enjoyable reading. I loved the setting you choose, again perfect for the man that you described..watching her- admiring her from far away..The setting was perfect, I was imagining somewhere else but it was worth the read. You've got to write more here.

Aria

Wowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
Its was really Good yaar.
Loved it.

Originally posted by: Riddss

heyyy dear,
nice shot
do write more



love
Riddss

HAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWw

Sad ending

I hate Sad ending :P
But Yes..till the that end part....i love how it has been written

Very peacefully actually to read 🤣

I actually loved the way of describing her eyes..and the painting thing !!

Hmmm...AR prolly thats why sad ending lol :(

Anyways..u dedicate it to urself...Wah wah Maha rathi...
Well mera kaam kam kardiya...terey bday ka gift khud hi le liye ...ab mujhe mehnat ni karni padegi :P !!

I cud have LOVED it ...but i dont coz of sad ending

i knww every love story dsnt have happy ending in real..but yaar..atleast fiction mei toh happy hona chaiye na 🤣

Hmm btw i loved the last line !! ;)

And Yes...haar man gai yaar...i love it :P

Heyya Neetz !

Neetuuu... and u are back with a shot...yay.

Loved the name, suits the shot; the perfect painting of an imperfect person. The perfection that can only be achieved in a painting, fabulous title. This reminded me of a shot written by my sis; faded colours. Nothing in particular, but the general concept and the main protagonist being the artist, and his muse.

It was a nice read, I like the thought process of him trying to find the right colour to describe his perfect painting; his master piece. Though I think the realisation of grey should have been quite evident to him, in my opinion. The artist in him should have had it figured. But like Aria said, I could see the painting come alive in front of me.

What didn't sit well with me was this line:
The painting that was supposed to be my masterpiece, now seemed to have lost all it's value. It was just a mere piece of paper.

If you see it from an artist point of view; it doesn't sit well, but if you look at it from a person who was smitten, then yes it makes sense. A painting for an artist is their gold mine, their most important possession. So for him to disregard his masterpiece and throw it away in to the water slightly seems a bit off. But I know, you were aiming for something different as I read the last few lines. Her fading away from his life..my favourite line by miles is this.

She was the perfect painting. I was just too smitten by it to see the painter standing right behind.

Brilliant Neetu, the setting was perfect, though I imagined it in the countryside over a canal. Small village, small shops.

Neetu, another song inspired story.. but I love the song, and its from my favourite movie. I can see why it inspired you to write this, the inspiration is more visible with this song to me, than any of your previous ones. 😆

I have to be honest, but for some reason I kept imagining Rahul aka Mayank as the artist, and Shilpa as his muse. But there were points that I would switch back to Armaan.. weird I know. But I couldn't quite place Armaan sketching. :S

Nice early birthday present to yourself. 😛 BTW any plans for the actual day yet? School holidays chal rahi hai right now, if I am correct?

Humz🤗

oh wow..!!..how do you think of all these things..?!!...its so damn beautiful..!!!..I could immediately connect with the story ...its heartbreaking,but so connective..!!!>.Me loved it,Dil se..:) :) :)

P.s when's ur bday?

Originally posted by: Angel-Pebby

I loved it. It was brilliantly written... It was just wonderful. I ran out of words after reading, but I had to appreciate.. So, I'm gonna write, each crap that come with the flow.

Thanks so much! 😃

God, it was beautiful. It was short, sort of sad endings... but it was captivting and striking. I've been really looking forward to reading some of your stuff, down here... after being flattered by the talks about your previous works around my school... and finally, I got one fine chance to appreciate your recent works; btw, I so-recently posted my comment on your fic ... 'Dangerous Love', It's a superb work too.

Really? You've heard about my works at your school? I'm really flattered. I never expected people at this forum to know me well enough, leave alone being talked about in real life. Thankyou so much 😃 I read your comment on the other fic, unfortunately I'm not sure whether I'll be continuing that one or not. I'll try my best though :)

Coming back, in simple and short terms- I loved it. It was beautiful and all-sort of wonderful. It was well written. Though, with no names... but I had first pictures while I imagined it was with AR... they're just so beautiful together and they suit exceptionally well, with the characters.

Thankyouu! 😊

I could not find the words to express more, so it would be good-bye time for me. But, please PM me whenever you write more... It would be seriously great and I would be greatful.

Take-Care.

Originally posted by: chahat_j

wow that was really nice... please write more...