'Qayenaat' a MaYur FF - Completed

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fahi

@fahi91

Sparkler

Posted: 15 years ago

#251

Neela amazing update... amazing...

I am still emotional after reading ur KAJ and now this.. yaar tumhe hum sabko rulane ka shauk hai kya? 😆 Tum itna acha likhti ho ki i forget everything else and get right into the story.. 😳

Acha kiya tumne jo Mayur ko ek baar milne diya w/o dad seeing warna toh mein yaha andolan shuru karne wali thi.😈

Jokes apart, i am happy they met and what a meeting too... such an emotional hug, both of them trying to portray their feelings and fears thru it.. their convo was nice...

Shukar hai ki they have Ameena Bi to keep them in contact... and now coming to the letters... wow! I mean seriously wow! I swear with every update i become a bigger fan of urs.. i wanna quote it all but it will be too long so i will just say that the letter Mayank wrote melted my heart... and i'm not surprised seeing as Qayeenat was his work but really i enjoyed reading that..

And that poem... again Neela.. kudos to u! I am telling u, if u compile all ur poems and go to get it published, it will be a superhit... u already have many fans here, including me... 😉

Aww so sad, Neela yeh gham ki aasoon kab khatam honge? Mujhe khushi ke aansoon bahaana hai.. 😳

And actually what u said in ur last reply to my post is true that without all these twists any story would be boring but mujhe in dono ka haalat dekhi nahi jaa rahi hai.. plz kuch karo na... i hope they will get to meet again in next part..

So sorry that i came and rambled on here after rambling on ur KAJ thread but u write in such a way that i have so much to say..

Update soon.. 🤗

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-SharNeela-

@-SharNeela-

Voyager

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Posted: 15 years ago

#252

Originally posted by: kulsumd
haey neela di...
Kaisi hai aap..?
Mayank aur nupur ki mulakaat bahut khubsurat thi...acha hua dadi phul lana bhul gayi..varna mayur milna paate..
Khuda ka shukr hai ameena bi mayur ke khat ka tabadila karti hai.
Nupur aur mayank dono k khat jazbaat aur pyaar se bhare hue the.
Aapki shayri dil mein teer ki tarah nashtar kargayi..
Mayank k khat ka akhri shair bahut khub tha..
Jaldi update kijiye ga...inteezar kar rahe hai..

Aapki tahreer hamare dil ko aisi chu gayi..
Jaise baarish se zameen bheeg gayi.

*kulsum*

kaise ho Kulsum? I m fine now...feeling the aftermath of fever 😊 Glad u liked the update mainly the shayeri but I loved yours too. Good going 👏 keep reading..take care hun

-Neela

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-SharNeela-

@-SharNeela-

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#253

Originally posted by: myownarea
ah this is so lovely.. :)

The part they met was so lovely, they were so lost in each other ... having met after a forced separation. then the letter and the shayari :) beautiful...

A thought just struck me, sometimes when parents try to stop their wards from meeting their BF/GF they actually strenghten the relationship unknowingly without meaning to...the separation puts a new meaning and gives strength to their relationship !! :)

Couldn't agree more with you Divz. I guess its the whole theory about the fear of losing something or someone dear to us makes us hold on to it even tighter be it a relationship or your home or your school. Funny thing is what is meant to be lost is lost anyway and because we try so hard to hold on to it after losing it, we break down completely. Question is though, is it the actual value of the loss or is the whole emotion behind trying to save it but failing all, losing it that makes the whole thing so precious?? Ok did this make sense? 😆 aahh...fever talks...love it 😆 😆

-Neela

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_ArTi4ever_

@_ArTi4ever_

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#254

xceptionally well written neeli.another outstanding update!!u know whats attracting me the most in ur ff.the seperation....!!!!i m sure it gonna make mayur's bond stronger than ever before..sometimes seperation strengthens relationship in a way that we discover all over again what and how much our loved one means to us...!!it made my day.thanks a lot 4 the update.😃

and 4 ur query let me tell u that i m pallabi.but u can call me by whatever u like.

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maria

@Maria.

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 15 years ago

#255

very nice update

loved mayur scenes

waiting for next part

update soon

add me in your pm list

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storytellerm

@storytellerm

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#256

bi is sooo nice
bichare mayur

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affu123

@affu123

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 15 years ago

#257

wow..hope they meet each other soon

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Divya

@MyInspirationz

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 15 years ago

#258

Neela... bahut jaldi comment kar rahi hoon naa... aadat se majboor... mujhe pata tha aisa hi kuch hoga.. jab woh donon miley tab sabse jyaada khushi mujhe hui... aur Ameena Bi.. bahut hi achchi hain... fictional hain toh bhi aisa lagta hain kitne real hain... aur kabhi kabhi hamare parents jo nahin chahte wahi hota hain, do premiyon ko bichadkar, wahi log unka pyaar aur mazboot banate hain... Such an ironical case... dard bhi wahi dete hain aur uske liye dawa bhi wahi dete hain... woh bhi bina jaane ki bachchon ko aisi dawa de rahe hain jo bachchon ke liye achcha hain aur khud parents ke liye bahut kadwi... par kya karen.. Pyaar kiya toh pyaar nibhana padega....

Do dil aise miley ek arse baad

toh poori kayanat roshan ho gayi

Dil ke hazaar armaan aur khwahish

bin bataye hi manzoor ho gayi

do pyaar karne walaon ki toh

woh uparwala bhi saath dedein

yeh insaani rishton ki aisi deewar

deewane ek phoonk mein mita dein

pyaar ki takaat ka asar kuch aisa

koi bhi cheez nahin pyaar jaisa

BTW, howz your health now? Hope the fever has subsided... Fabulous update and your sher was just superb....👏👏👏👏👏

Edited by Divya_kaldivya - 15 years ago