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sehrish

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Posted: 15 years ago

#31

PART 2 MAYANKS ENTRY

a handsome boy is shown sleeping

suddenly sunlight ray drool over him and start disturbing him

then one lady came and try to wake him up

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M - mayank

MM - mayank mom

MD - mayank father

M: maa sone do na itna acha dream dekh raha hu

MM: oh ho (in a teasing tone) meri hone wali bahu k sapne dekh raha hai

M: kia maa ap phi shuru hogaye

MM: aj tujhe yaad hai k nhe tera and gunjan ki internship start hone wali hai. first day late hone hai kia

M: maa pehle gunjan ko uthayo phr me uthoga

MM: oh mr wo kab se ready hai aur ha us ka khayal rakhna tujhe to pta hai na wo kitni jaldi darr jati hai

M: mein hoon na to kuyun tension leti ho mein apni behen ko kuch bhi nahi hone duga

MM: acha chal tayar hoke aja mei breakfast ready karti hu

( gunjan come in)

G: mayu tayyar hue k nhe

M: yr mujhe koi dress samajh nhe arha tu hi dhundh de

G: tum kabhi nhe sudhroge

M: kia karu (he makes a puppy face)

then gunjan take out his black jeans with blue shirt

on breakfast table

MD: me aj bauhat khush hu k mere dono bache sanjeevani join karhe hai

then gunjan and mayank hugs his father and take blessings from their parents

NOTE: guy i knw this one is to short

but next part will be long for sure

do comment guys atleast hit lik button

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Radhika

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Posted: 15 years ago

#32

yay...!!
first to comment...!!
a very sweet intro for mayu....!!
cares for her sis really much...!!
but dat's in all of d bros...!!
do cont soon...!!
n ya plzzzz give us a long part nxt time...i'm dyin to read out of dis ff...!!

wid loads of luv
radhika

Edited by kash_sajan - 15 years ago

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sanjana25

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Posted: 15 years ago

#33

wow
it was really nice
contd soon

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Angle.

@Angle.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#34

lovey udpate
loved mayu and mom convo
per itna chota update kiyu hai?

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sehrish

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Posted: 15 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: wind453
nice concept
loved cs

do continue soon

thanx for the pm

thnx for liking it

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sehrish

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Posted: 15 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: mahaklovesmayur
a short but a nice part.....

do continue soon with a longer part......

third part will be long pakka

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sehrish

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Posted: 15 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: kash_sajan
hey...!!
nice part...!!
it was short but never mind...!!
will wait for mayus' entry...!!
do cont soon...!!
n thanxx for d pm...!!

wid loads of luv
radhika

i knw i wll cont soon with big part