*reserved....will undo from a diff place then! :D
*edit*
abi YAHAN saare hat jao, mera reserve UNreserve hora hai jiiii! :D
dude, aren't you bloody surprised with this? and ain't i bloody committed and brilliant to my cases, and causes :D okie, seriously, there much, MUCH, i liked in this part.. in a vague overall statement i'd say it was 1. a vast improvement over the previous one, 2. i'm sure i can't pledge my soul over it, but i'd be close to say it was one among those u have done pretty finely :) so yeh, yeh yeh, grin wide! :D
the start was a freak! the good way... hehe... not for the quote u chose (which was also a smart pic, most importantly for the irony it presents in its implication and the historical engima who implied it... at some time) but far far more, for how u put para 1... i think, i'll say it best to declare, u made up for all the mess i thought u made with the beginning of the previous part..
there were other random things i liked... most of which can be summarized commonly as pertaining to the shades in each char u depict, specially in how subtle yet quick they can change... i think, its a fine job uve done creating, so far in this part, characters very believable in how the behavior of single human can vary so widely... ridhima, to nikki, to rohan, to armaan to abhi... and damni... yeh, it covers them all... i like thereality of variation they present from each other and within themselves..
there were two silly errors i seemed to spot (haha! yeh, don't blame me, it takes something to become perfect u know, ahem :D ) rohan wearing bulls... just sort of surprised me, cause they reside in london... yeh, the world is a small place... and we're all global and universal... it still sort of falls as a 'not obvious' ... guess that doesnt count as an error, plus, who knows u may link them from chicago at some point of the past...
second, the photo shot 'duo sitting on the fence'... and then armaan sitting and abhi 'stood' leaning against? ... ??? err? ... kiz!!! u made him sit and stand at once in the same shot? what is h, a char from the potter series? :D
third, was wondering... armaan was surprised ridhima talked of a lawsuit against her brother, for exploiting pwer of attorney? ... i'd think a damn successfullawyer as him would hardly find surprise in THAT... where there is uge money, aren't fam fueds the most obv? again, not really a mistake just somehow out of place, i thought...
khair, sachi, me likey! i enjoyed reading, i feel intrigued, and im willingly awaiting the story to proceed..
hugz hain, dhero~!! :D
chummaz too kidda,
daddda!!
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