Blah blah, Woof woof [AR One shot]

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Mridhula

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Posted: 15 years ago

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talking is overrated...true.

this was interesting - especially the title, hinting the unspoken words and actions performed...

being Riddhima's point of view it was nice to see how she's unraveled his words and ways not having to speak to him; the fact that she didn't need to speak to him was astounding to her; that she knew her answers just as the day proceeded; that in the end she knew that she had already known the answer.

the events during the day would merely be captured into her memories and she would know that fresh ones would get bottled up as well (not that the bottle would be enough to capture them) for her to sit idly with him one day and go back in time.

her inevitable trust and carefree attitude with him, like she reacts to an impulse without her minds consent.....

a lot of things unsaid but immense things understood....this was a very nice piece....hope that you catch up with Grimm soon....

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Robin

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Posted: 15 years ago

#12

wow sookie, incredibly descriptive! so much is conveyed in their silence...i really enjoyed it :D
so the title is a jab at long detailed conversations? silence and actions are enough, so why bother with the blah blah's?
it was very sweet and beautiful! well done!

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Sookie

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Posted: 15 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: Prasanthi
yayyyyyyyyyy!!! u did it!!!

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Manu!!! oops! not here😳.. Sookie!! How much I missed you around here😲.That was a great come back dear!!!!

You just took me to her land.. where can see only her and him. That was perfect. All the times words need be not be spelt out but can be felt. Thats it. Absolutely loved

"The steady hum of stream, late afternoon sunlight, his aroma, her perfume, pungent smell of their lunch, tinkling of her glass bangles, cheap sunglasses perched on her head, blush in her cheeks, his gentle smile and the happiness pulsing through them. She captures them all and locks away in a glass jar. For future references, her brain mocks."

You too will have to feel what I am feeling right now.. No words to express my joy in reading this. You are a charmer when it comes to use of words.

Thanks for the pm and hope to see you around active again.

Hey Prasanthi,
Yeah, I am kind of back but not sure how much of writing I can get done during weekdays.
Thanks for liking this one shot. This was an experimentation in style of writing which I have never done before. :-)
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Posted: 15 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: ashluvdmg
wow....!!tat ws so sooothing soookie...!!
wat a pleasant surprise...!!

luvd it

Thanks Ash! :-) I am glad you liked it.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: ammy-ridz
hey sookie...finally u'r back with a bang!!!

I simply adored this oneshot. It was just mesmorising and i m completely smitten and in awe of this one.

No words were need..yet every thing fell into place...Bravo!!!

Your way of moulding words in the sentence and indirectional tautology had me swirl aroud it like a wine.

My most fav part here was her comparision with the dust seetled on the car and their own feelings...and secondaly your description of the surrounding environment with the kiss...thirdly ...Everything about this whole shot.

You know title never seemed to stuck me until the read the last line...and let me tell ya you know how to make things work..naa...Rock Exactly.

FANTAB!!!!!!! Simple and charming :D👏

Hello Sai,

Thanks for liking this one shot. Actually I loved the title so much that it drove me to write this one shot.
Thanks for stopping by and for your comment.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: olive_green
Wonderful.
few of my favorite lines read

She doesn't like being vulnerable nor likes her feelings exposed naked for the whole world to see. She knows that he is like that too. And it makes her feel a lot better about the whole deal. She decides she likes it when he drops his head to whisper something in her ear which otherwise might miss over the din around them.

She doesn't mind the silence in the car on their drive back home. She likes silence even more now. And in this silence, they communicate.
The last is my favorite..reminded me of a little poem i had written a loooong tyme bak....silence is so powerful..and invasive..

keep writing

:)

Thanks Aria. I am glad you liked this one shot.
Oooh, you are into poetry. Nice!

Thanks again for your comment.
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Posted: 15 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: bhoomikauttam
HI Sookie,

wow!! Was it really a one shot story...?? I found it a beautifully woven poetry.. the words to me were like poetry where two charcter were walkign in the hourney and I was waitign when will they talk... but as they were going throguh the all memories cherishign enjoying the simple moments somehow started feeling so many emotions of happines, romance , silly small cute moments and in all many many feelings envelooped even though they didnt speak much to each other.. realyy how can silence speak volumne and hwo can word and a whole para be written in a way so beautifully only u can project.. I think when i reached the line They Communicate.. i was like talkign is not needed na really.. and in the en. yup u brought alive so many feelings wihtout words be thrown at each other.. emotion, sentiments and love everything in there without saying it all as well..

Lovely one!! Keep Rocking.. !! I dont have ot say it .. I am sure u know it very well U write really well...

Hi Bhoomi,

Thanks for your comment and liking this story.
In a way you are right. Silence is powerful. But if one does not have the tools or patience to understand silence then it loses its meaning and importance. I guess this was my underlying experiment all along but never got to it.
Again, thanks for stopping by.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: krazy4kash
hi

really good update.......all in silence.........they say right silence speaks volumes..........thts wht uve proved...........g8 one shot....write more

luv
kj

Hello,

Thanks for liking this story.
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Posted: 15 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: huda14
awesome....i loved the way u described ridzi's feeling....and the amount of understanding that u showed between AR is just out of the world..!!! keep writin..loved this one shot

Hello,
Thanks. I am glad that you liked this. Its my wishful thinking as to how it would have been between A-R somewhere in January 08 times.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: Robin_M
wow sookie, incredibly descriptive! so much is conveyed in their silence...i really enjoyed it :D
so the title is a jab at long detailed conversations? silence and actions are enough, so why bother with the blah blah's?
it was very sweet and beautiful! well done!

Bingo! Its actually jab at my own writing.

If you remember the series Infinity...its all about talking, talking and more talking. So I wanted to do something new where people talk really, really less and feel more in a different writing style.

Thanks for you appreciation :-)

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