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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: dazzling_glory

very emotional update

naina has completely broken down. she is missing raj very much..but she has no choice but to do get married for her parents.
You have written some beautiful lines, to describe naina's emotions and pain. I specially liked these two.
"Naina ke dil mein toh aapke alawa koi aur nahi aa sakta, parr...parr Naina ki zindagi mein koi aa raha hai......Aap ....aap mujhe Maaf kardenge naa? Aap apni naina ko samajhte hai naa?"
and
"She smiled to hide the sadness n laughed to hide the tears. It was very touching. And I liked the song also. Wonder whom or wat she saw."

Please continue soon


Thanks dear...i'll update soon...😊
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Lion_Priya

Hi Dear......😊 Hello Lion'ess' !

First of all...ek writer k liye sab se bada challege hota hai...us k charachters k emotions ko xpress karna...!!! chahe vo comic ho ya tragic....romantic ho ya aur kuch...!!! badi baat yeh hai ki jo tumhe read kar rahe hon...voh khud us charachter k situation ko feel kar saken...!!! jo ki tum ne is ud se bakhubi nibhaya hai...!!! too gud dear... just awesome...👏 👏 👏 ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ Tumhe sach mein aisa lagta hai ki I did goos job?...well... assuming tum sach keh rahi ho aur mujhe chane ke jhaad par nahi chadha rahi ho😛...Thanks yaar....😃
zindagi itni asaan nahin hoti...jaisa ki hum serials ya movies me dekhte hain...!!! apni ek khusi k liye baht sare compromise karne padte hain. aur apni khud ki khusi se pahle humain un ki khusiyon ka khyal karna padta hai...jin ki khusiyan hum se saamil hain...!!!😃 Right....thanks again...!
naina ne bhi bilkul vahi kiya hai...!!! apni khusi ka nahin balki us ne apni parents ki khusi ka khayal rakha. chahe voh ander se kitni bhi dukhi ho...kitni bhi tuti hui ho...par...us k liye yeh jaruri tha ki us se jude hue log...kam se kam khush toh rahen...!!! hala ki us ki zindagi me khusiyan rahe na rahen...!!! ek daughter ka scrifice apne parents k liye...ek lover ka emotion apne khoye hue pyar k liye...baht hi achha likha hai tum ne...!!! har ek word har ek line jo naina k dil se nikli....ek dam sahi tha... naturally...ek aam insaan ki zindagi aisi hi hoti hai...😊Priya...ek comment kitni baar mujhse thanks kehelvaaogi?😊 Thanks for understanding Naina's POV....and infact kuch kuch mera bhi.... but wait....Why am I thanking you? Being a friend, u were supposed to understand what exactly was going on,in my bheja while writing this...😆😆
"she smile to hide d sadness & laughed to hide d tears" ...my fav line...😃!!! yaar yeh toh mere dil ki baat thi...tumhare paas kaise chali gayi...!!!😃 Sachchi??😃 yeh line maine soch ke nahi likhi....bass aise hi apne aap hi aagayi...i mean mujhse type hogayi.... aur jab main ek baar final touch de rahi thi update ko toh main bhi shock hogayi ki maine yeh line likhi hai?😆
naina ka raj se dil hi dil me baat karna...yeh sochna ki voh use jarur maaf kar dega...it's very touching...👏
hope ki Rahul ko sachhai pata chal jaye...aur voh Raj aur Naina ki zindagi me RAAHU ban kar na baithe...aur apne liye TINA ko dhundh le...😆Don't worry...agar usse TINA pasand nahi aayi, to main usse ANJALI, MUSKAAN etc sab se milva dungi 😆😆...bass apna Raj ekbaar aajaye.
vaise main hamesha itna emotional nahin rahti...par kabhi kabhi ho jati hun...😳!!! aur aaj is comments ka pura shrey jata hai...IF ko...😡!!! kyoun ki yeh pg khulne k liye mujhe 20 baar try karna pada...😡!!! aur main itna emotional ho gayi ki yeh comment kuch aisa ho gaya...!!! toh plzzz yaar...maaf kar dena...!!! 😃 Aaaaa n! Now i got it ! tabhi main sochu panditjee masjid mein namaz kyun padh rahein hai ? Chal...mere upadte ne naa sahi, IF ne toh tujhe 'emotional ' bana diya !!😆
cont soon.😊Look who is telling?😆 ( yaar...tujpe gussa nahi reh sakti !)

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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: bakula_gandhi

nice part

Felt very bad for naina
update soon

Thanx dear...😊
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Mahak Sinha

Let me say sorry first because i am replying on it after one week at least u update last. Sorry dear that i took so much time to reach here No probs dear...but haan., i always wait for your comment😉
Now coming to the update. Baapre...let me brace up....😛
Mai tujhe kya kahoon mujhe itna gussa aa raha hai ki.............. 😡 😡 😡Mummy bachaaooooo!
There r two reasons 4 that, one is that Naina is getting married to Rahul i mean for his parents happiness or whatever but how can she engage with a stranger about him she hardly knows anything? 😡 😡 😡 CORRECTION !!! she is getting ENgaged...not married....aur arranged marraiges mein aisa hi hota hai...

Raj will be back as Naina me too damn sure because u know if it would n't happen i will not spare u.😆 😆 😆Yaa...yaa... i know😆
Next thing which made me angry was the point u stopped the fic. 😡he he he!! Now you know main kaisa feel karti hoon jab tum apne fics aise turning point pe chod deti ho aur saalon tak update nahi karti ho?😆😆
😡 😡 Ek to itna chotu update aur us me bhi aise jagah par break. 😲 😲 😲Update this asap otherwise i am coming to kill u.
😆 😆 😆 Dar mat aise hi dhamki de rahi hoon par mai serious bhi ho sakti hoon agar tune jaldi se update nahi kiya to.😡 😡 😡Arre nahi...mujhe jeena hai yaar...tumhare fics jo padhne hai😆 most probably I'll update tonite!

Edited by manatated - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: manatated

oye bass kar...

itna bada likha...phir bhi tujhe chota lag raha hai?
Thanks for liking it...😊
Rahi baat raj ki toh samay se pehle aur bhagya se adhik kuch nahi milta balikey😛

Kaya karu, tu jitna bhi likhti hain, usse parne ke baad aur bhi parne ka dil karta hain, Tere story hi itna aacha hain 😆😛😉,Aur tu likhti hi itna acchi hain😳.Aab kaise baas karu bol😛.
Welcome dear😊.
Gyan ke liye dhanyabaad gurujee😳, hum iye baat jarur dhayan mein rakhenge😳.
Post next part soon dear😳.
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Posted: 16 years ago

Hello guyz...here's the next update for all of you...

will be waiting 4 ur comments....

Part Six:

So it was all fix''.she was going to get engaged tomorrow!

Then her father came to her.....

"Naina beti..."

But she was turned into a statue....she was thinking about Raj......

The thought of she belonging to someone else tearing her apart....

Her father tried her calling thrice, but when she didn't respond, He went forward and hugged her....

She rested her head on his chest staring forward when suddenly she saw

Raj....

He appeared from behind a chandelier out of nowhere.....

"Jaanam, dekh lo, mit gayi dooriyaan"

He was looking dashing as ever wearing v-neck woolen shirt with cool black leather jacket and hairs perfectly gelled....

He was constantly gazing at her while approaching her.... smiling cutely as ever...

He came and wiped a drop of tear as it rolled down over her cheek....

He assured her of him being there and playfuly hit her nose with his finger, while standing facing to her just as she had her head on her father's chest ....


" Main yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan...."

Her father took her downstairs where celebrations were going on...

She was walking in daze.....

Then suddenly she realized she was standing in the middle while everyone dancing around her.....

She again heard him singing assuring her of his presence....

"Jaanam, dekh lo, mit gayi dooriyaan"

She turned to her left from where his voice was coming , when he snapped his fingers on her right coming from behind her.....

" Main yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan...."

When Rahul asked her hand while dancing , and she denied....Raj took her hand gently and handed over to Rahul .....

"Kaisi, sarhadein, kaisi majbooriyaan

Main yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon,

Yahaan..."

Atmosphere had turned cloudy and dark......

Naina retired to her room....

she was filling chilly both due to weather and due to apprehension of what her future held....

She was removing her jewellery sitting in front of mirror when suddenly Raj cupped her face and made her stand up....

"Tum chhupa na sakogi main woh raaz hoon"

He made her turn and pulled her closer by waist from her back......

"Tum bhoola na sakogi woh andaaz hoon"

He gently moved her hairs and kissed on her neck while she closed her eyes lost in his touch..... He took it as a consent and laid passionate kisses on her neck, tightening his grip on her waist with one hand.

While loosening laces of her dress with other hand, he caressed her bare back and began kissing passionately making her close her eyes tightly.......

"Goonjta hoon jo dil mein toh hairaan ho kyun

Main tumhaare hi dil ki toh awaaz hoon"

His passion and intensity of his desire made her go weak in her knees.....

She lost balance only to land in his arms......

Raj gathered her in his strong arms and carried her to the bed....

" Sun sako, toh suno, dhadkanon ki zabaan

Main yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon,

yahaan..."

He tripped over something to land with Naina on the bed and Raj on top of her....

She looked into his eyes only to find herself drowning in those brown orbs...

" Kaisi, sarhadein, kaisi majbooriyaan

Main yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon,

Yahaan..."

While he leaned and nuzzled her neck burrying his head in her hairs, inhaling their scent....

He lifted his head and caressed outline of her lips with his thumb ........

He brushed his lips on hers and kissed her on lips,taking her lips into his while she responded with same fervor .....

Naina was brought into reality when pooja barged into her room . She dragged her to the stairs ,where pooja made her sit in front of her. Pooja was making sure that Naina looked just perfect tomorrow. She loosened Naina's hairs.

While pooja was brushing Naina's waist length long silky tresses ; Naina's face was pulled down for another passionate kiss by Raj who laid with his head on her lap......

Just then her mother came with the 'Chunree' of the attire she was to wear on her engagement. Her mother lovingly covered her head with the chunree when Naina found Raj getting in chunree along with her,cupping her face and kissing softly on her cheek.....

Huda came with the samples of the sweets that were to be made tomorrow and handed over a 'Jalebi' to Naina.

When she was about to eat, she found Raj holding her hand, having the first bite and then making her eat with his hands.....

It tasted really sweet.....

Naina found herself going crazy with his thoughts....

She ran from the hall to the terrace to breathe in some fresh air and let out his thoughts.....

She sat on the reeling....when....

He called out from the garden......

" Main hi main ab tumhaare khayaalon mein hoon

Main jawaabon mein hoon, main sawaalon mein hoon"

She came running into the garden only to be engulfed in his arms...

Raj hugged her tightly as if he was telling the world that she was His and only His....

"Main tumhaare har ek khwaab mein hoon basa

Main tumhaari nazar ke ujaalon mein hoon"

She parted began kissing him on his forehead, eyes ,cheeks....

She found herself standing alone in the garden when he arrived from behind the bushes, and neared her giving her a 'wink' and she shyed away....

"Dekhti, ho mujhe, dekhti ho jahaan

Main yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan"

It was as if God was happy and showered blessings in the form of rain......

While she asked him to get inside, he held her by wrist and ask for dance....

She smiled and put her hands around his neck while he slid his arms around her waist swaying on music playing in their hearts....both drenched in the rains and their Love...

"Jaanam, dekh lo, mit gayi dooriyaan

Main yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan

Kaisi sarhadein, kaisi majbooriyaan

Main yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan"

He pulled her closer every second till when they were very close with no gap between them even for air......

He began kissing her cheeks, neck, shoulder passionately, finally capturing her lips......

Suddenly...... she was alone standing there in rains with no Raj around.....

Her tears mixed with the rain....not to be realised by anyone....

She started to move inside when she felt a strong grip on her wrist....

She looked back to find Raj gazing her intently, smile playing on his lips , the rain giving him a sultry look....

she grew restless... crying hard now...she freed her hand from his grip and ran inside......

She was going mad.... He was really driving her crazy.....

" Main yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan hoon, yahaan"

Raj echoed..................

Edited by manatated - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago

Too good!!!!Awesome!!!!!Mindblowing!!!!

In her imagination Naina saw Raj appearing there out of nowhere!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😍 😍 😍 😍

The song is very nice and beautiful and just perfect for them!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

It was a beautiful dream sequence!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

Raj is there all around Naina and she just can't think beyond him!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

No matter where she goes she was just seeing and feeling Raj!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj and Naina are so romantic and passionate!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

Kaash yeh sab sach mein hota!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😍 😍 😍 😍

Naina is going crazy with his thoughts!!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔

Poor Naina!!!!!! She is missing him so much!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭

I feel terrible for her!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭Uske saath bahut bura ho raha hai!!!!!

Raj hugged her tightly as if he was telling the world that she was his and his only!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼

They were just like Shahrukh and Preity in Veer-Zaara!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

The song and all the events that happened between them were same as that in the movie!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊

It was just beautiful!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️


Edited by Shaina_b - 15 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago

Hey dear, Kaya likha hain, it's too romantic☺️.Yes, it's a dream but phir bhi, hay, kitna romntic update dear☺️.

Anyway,This update is superb👏,
I feel really sad for Naina😭, uske sath , bahut bura ho raha hain😭😭😭.
Raj ko jaldi se le aao 😊😊, aur naina ka sadness dur karo😊.
Pls pls pls pls😳.
Post next part soon dear😃.
Edited by PrithviSanyo1 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
How I wish all these things had happened in reality...!!!!😉
Extremely romantic...!!!☺️
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Posted: 16 years ago
Oh...wat a part. Only Raj n Raj was there around for Naina. She just cudnt think beyond him. No matter wat she does where she goes she was just seeing n feeling Raj. I was feeling terrible for her. Poor girl!!!
How can she marry any1 else whereas her world starts n ends wid that one name-Raj? I just hope this engagement doesnt take place.

Pls continue soon.

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