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bharathi aram

@bharathi aram

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Posted: 16 years ago

#181

frstly *applause* awesome update!

1. Is the story's pace going okay or are you eager for more action?

yes i wud lik to see mre action,romance n comedy

2. What did you think of the semi-romantic scenes?
thy r cute te wy thy re...though mayb am impatient n eager too see mre of it!

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Sayanti Das

@Raee_Salvatore

Sparkler

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Posted: 16 years ago

#182

wow the update is awesum.as usual the chapter name was absolutely apt...hmm i liked the Hina vs Todd scenewow tht guy is a jerk no doubt........and he even hav the nerves to stand in front of them and sneer..god wat a.....😡but i hope like all of them tht he get a gud lesson for wat he did to carissa...the thing i liked in tht scene was how hina handled the situation.she was'nt afraid of him.and neither she lost her temper....a thing likely to be done by me if i see tht scum🤢😆but i think in tht scene holding ur composure was necessary..!for tht i really admire Hina.Deeps,Samira n Nelaam's attitude was predictable and vry much in their character..which is another thing tht i like about ur FF .😳

So another Deepz/Karan scene ahaaaaaaaa u know tht scene reminded me of the old MJHT days....lolz soooooooo typical of them...well well karan's remark was prtty smug.even though she apologised he was all sarcy about it....😆😆gosh this is my MayUr...😳luvd tht lil scene gotta b one of my fav from this update for the Obvious Reason😉

Ummmmm coming back to the story....oh so carisa is leaving ...!!!well i hope she returns soon.....i really like her a lot....and gavin to he is sooooo sweet and caring n ohoo he has a secret !!hmmm now now wat can it be is it tht he is gonna propose her or sumfin..rehaan seemed to hav n inkling but well i kno for all the answers i will hav to wait a lil more. i was wondering about rehaan's decesion too..so is he going to participate int he competition?i hope he does......!

well seemed like the whole gropu are actually starting to get along togtr.i mean their bonds r strenthening and the lil get together for samira's b'day proves tht..Rehaan seems to kno samira so well...um well shud i say tht samira's cleanliness habit doesnt freak me.coz i am also high on cleanliness at tyms.may b not tht paranoid😆but i can totally understand her point...:)

the light talks btwn the gang was pretty amusing...he he adi being himself...and he called neelam chashmish again...aww they r just too adorable...he he deepz was sooooo fubnny she thinks one shud get sumfin pierced just bcoz they hav turned 18 lolz...but well i like the idea of nose piercing...i being the coward wud nvr do any kind of piercing....lolz...but i think samira will defo luk really pretty and OMG she considered it onl after rehaan commented about how he thinks it will suit her..now there is definately sumthing btwn them and they r not aware of it yet....but it was such a cute scene😳

As for Zaid Hina.well Zaid seems prtty shy about his feeling..if u dunt mind me asking is he shy in general or is it bcoz it was hina!.well hina is really growing on me wid passing days.she is nice to zaid for one thing and really likes their company.she may not hav any feelings for him as of yet.but i defo see a potential jodi in them..their scene was vry well written and i liked the way its progressing..:)

Hmmmm the song part was really grt...brought out the essence of a true,inncoent and beautiful memories..ahaaaaaaaaa childhood memories, they are always so precious arnt they! the song was really amazing and i can absolutely relate to it..i exctly felt like rehaan while listening to the song..the melody is just sooooooo soothing n hrt warming.

and eventually this chapter came to an end with tht beautiful song.......a wonderful closing .i liked the way they all decided to speak in hindi sumtyms among themselves from now on.

i must add this as my curiosity is getting bttr of me.......u kno na tht Carissa is leaving for the entire sem and though i wud love to hav her back u mentioned tht she isnt going to come back b4 the nxt sem...does tht mean tht Rehaan/Samira?deeps get to hav another partner.can it b Karan..ohhhhh okkkkkkk i know thts prrty absurd of me to think of it.but i really want Karan to b wid them more often.....😳😳

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now for the questions:

1. Is the story's pace going okay or are you eager for more action?

i think the story's pace is fine however i dunt mind if we get to hav sum more action but as of now its really going well and i dunt hav any problem wid it watsoever.

2. What did you think of the semi-romantic scenes?

i hav already stated my views about how i feel about the sem romantic scenes acc. to b they r beautiful and soooo amazingly put in words u portray the scenes wonderfully and i just luv ur writing style.mayb i wont even mind if we dunt hav a full fledged romantic or passionate scene for a while coz i find the semi romantic ones more attractive and sumhow they give me the feeling of being in first love u kno how u feel wen u just strt realizing tht u hav actually found sum1 who is special to u and to whom u r more special thn any1 else.its just a wonderful feelingso innocent and pure.

hats off to ur writing i must admit tht i am getting addicted to it the more i read the more i am falling in luv wid the writer and her characters😳thnk u sooooo ,uch for sharing ,

do update soon will b eagerly waiting,

Luv Raee🤗

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debby

@debby

Dazzler

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Posted: 16 years ago

#183

Hey Rabia! How have you been?

Starting with the title of this chapter: memories to last a lifetime.. That was beautiful and somehow very apt. I liked the little interaction between Todd/Hina/Deepali. The tension was built up very well and Todd is so easy to picture, given the way you write him.

And oh the Karan Deepali scene! Thanks Rabia for keeping your promise. :) These two are so different from each other that all their interactions are fiery, riveting and engrossing. I am glad she went to apologize to him - the water must have been cold.. LOL. The way he responded was so smug and sarcastic, exactly what is expected of him. A bang on scene that I thoroughly enjoyed reading!

Carissa and Samira - a nice sweet exchange there. So Carissa thinks sumthing's up with Gavin and Rehaan isnt being too helpful. Ha, looking forward to more on that front. Did I mention I love how you write Deepali? I love her enthusiasm about everything - it is infectious.

The Zaid Hina scene was amazing. Very innocent, very sweet and very romantic. Ditto for the entire birthday sequence. I loved the way the song fit in smugly with the proceedings. To quote your last line: "realized more and more how lucky they were to find such a great group of friends..." I completely concur. The story brings forth that friendship feeling so well.. The more I read, the more I want to read.

Coming to the questions.

1. Is the story's pace going okay or are you eager for more action?
I am fine with the pace. I love build ups.. More action will come when the time is right and this being your brainchild, you know the best.

2. What did you think of the semi-romantic scenes?
They were lovely and had a very soft/serene feeling to them. Would love more of these.

Keep up the great work Rabia.. as I always echo, you are a writer with amazing intuition and talent. 😊

Edited by debby - 16 years ago

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Monica

@_Monu_

Dazzler

Posted: 16 years ago

#184

HIII RABIA

SORRY 4 REPLING LATE

I WAS BUSY

JUST FINISH TO READ UR UPDT

GREAT PART!!

AND WAS SOOO LONG

I LIKED IT!!

MOST THE ROMANTIC CUTE SCENES!!

OK....CONT SOON WHEN U WANT

SEE YAAA

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Ynaiita

@ynaiita

Navigator

Posted: 16 years ago

#185

awesome!!!plzzz cont soo!!luv all the romantic scenes too.

ynaiita

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payas bansal

@_Payuu_

Sparkler

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Posted: 16 years ago

#186

oh my god suhana

loved it yaar

sorry for replying late

thanx for d pm

and plz for god's sake do continue soon

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Rabia

@SuhanaSafar

Dazzler

+ 7

Posted: 16 years ago

#187

Originally posted by: princess14
great update! i think the story is going at a great pace...and the romantic scenes were great as well.!!!! continue soon..can't wait to read more!!!

Thanks so much!

Originally posted by: Anjalika Khanna
nyc part................

Thank you...

Originally posted by: PaNa4ever

Rabia!

I'm so in love with the story, Rabia...Every time you update, I let out a cheer in my head! Unfortunately I don't have time for a long comment today, so I'll answer your questions and find time for a long comment for Chapter 7!

Aww, thanks! No probs girl. Thanks for reading...

I think the pace of the story is just fine - I have no objection to more action, but I like the way the pace conveys the characters' daily activities and their interactions as well as their family lives. It's very engaging for me because I love detailed writing (unless it becomes too detailed, which is not the case here).

Yay...perfect! Will try not to get too detailed then....

The semi-romantic scenes were a treat! They always will be for me, at least. I'm a staunch enthusiast of subtle nuances, no matter what! (I think that's why I almost always end up loving characters/jodis who are not the main focus of films or TV shows...LOL!) Constant overdoses of romance don't work for me, usually. But that depends on the characters, also. It's all about characterization for me, and you're doing a great job showing us facets of each character little by little!

Okay great! I didn't feel that it was the right time for overdoses of romance anyway...or even true romance. I love subtle nuances too. 😃

Love you, hun!

~ Borna (You noticed the username change, I presume! But just in case you forgot...LOL!)

I realized it when I couldn't send a PM to your previous ID. 😆

Originally posted by: Bollywood_chic
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*EDIT*

Heyy Rabia..

how are you doing?? hope ur exams went well.. im so jealous of u getting holidays.. im jealous of everyone getting holidays.. hehe

Doing well...exams were okay. Just glad to be done with my first year. You don't get holidays?

overall the part was fantastic.. i loved the first confrontation between hina, neelam samira and deepali and todd mitchell.. the first one would always be the scariest to see the reaction and the way that you wrote about it, was so realistic.. i loved this bit here: Todd smirked haughtily, and it appeared that he was finally about to speak. But instead, he walked forward, passing Hina and continuing down the sidewalk. Hina turned to watch him leave, a glint of triumph in her eyes. i could jus imagine it happeneing in front of my eyes..

Glad you liked it...I tried to imagine it unfolding before my eyes and then tried to describe it in sufficient detail so that readers could do the same...

i wanna know more about the story between karan and deeps and being a massive MN fan i always want more.. hehe.. but this start was good.. plz do write more about them soon.

There will be more in Chapter 7. There's a lot to come in their story, but I must warn you...it will start out with a lot of fights (just like MN)...

the section is this part that stoo out the most was the mini surprise party for Samira with the cake and all, and the way you wrote about her fixing her bed and everything before she came into the lounge.. everything that happened in the lounge was the starting of a strong friendship between all of them.. and i can't wait to read more scenes about the whole lot of them.. the song was sweet and meaningfull.. not to say very old.. i saw the date 1961 and i was like?? 😲 ur kidding me write but as i listened to it.. i ended up loving it... jus coz im not a fan of reallly old sngs.. hehe.. .

Lol...I just love old songs (they really don't write lyrics like those anymore), and this one seemed to fit perfectly. Nice to know that you ultimately liked it.

and the fact they are all gonna speak hindi to each other jus cz of deeps is reallly sweet of each and everyone of them, the fact you have kept their heritage with them still.. is a change.. these days.. not many ppl actually keep their roots wen living overseas..

: )

True...there are many Indian Americans have no connection with their original heritage. But actually when I started my undergrad about five years ago (wow, time flies), I was actually impressed by how many students WERE in touch with their heritage. All is not lost yet. 😉

okay now to ur questions..

1. Is the story's pace going okay or are you eager for more action?

..I love the story pace, your focusing on their friendshops and the little details that make every character.. don't rush ahead because i love reading about each bit of their growing friendship..

Sounds good!

2. What did you think of the semi-romantic scenes?

..uhmmm... they were good.. but to be hoenst.. you may need to make them stand out more.. make it more evident..

Point noted...Will try to work on that.

:D

thanks for an amazing part, the PM and plz cont soon..

xx

Sonia

Will do....I've started writing the next part, so it shouldn't take more than a few more days.

Originally posted by: hazel94

Hey how were ur exams
im sure thye went gr8😃

Hey! They weren't too bad....nice to be on vacation.

i loved the longggggggggggg update

i love how their friendship is building up nd i dont wanna miss a bit

im glad ur not rushing it as its just perfect😃

everyupdate

we get to know a bit more about each character which is rreallly good😃

Character development is almost as important as plot for me...

now about the semi romantic scenes😛

well i think u need to make them full on romantic so they stand out more nd that all of ur start blushing😆

Hehe...alrities. Will try. Though, I might need some time because no one except Zaid is really in love yet...

i cant w8 for the next update

have fun in the holidays

tc

Thank so much Hazel!

hazel

ps thx for the pm😃

Edited by SuhanaSafar - 16 years ago

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Rabia

@SuhanaSafar

Dazzler

+ 7

Posted: 16 years ago

#188

Originally posted by: drishti_sajan

hiii rabia!!

hows u??

hope ur exams went well!!

Doing well Drishti...how about yourself? Exams went okay...

i was waiting to read the next part......finally u update!!

it was awesome, outstanding, fantabulous!!

Aww..thanks girl! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

loved the scene in which the girls were talking abt todd.....and then when he was there himself......i cud literally see it happening in front of my eyes its the same with the rest of the update!

Pretty creepy huh?

the deeps and karan scene was brilliantly written......poor karan deepali drooped chilled water on him....he must be freezing....lol.......i hope they become good frnds soon.....

Lol...it might take a while with those two. Kinda like MaYur....

awwww....samiras going......everyones gonna miss her so much...hopes shes back in ur FF soon....

I'm assuming you meant Carissa. Yeah, she needs to recover. She'll be back when the next semester begins.

loved the way u included samiras surprise party.......it was definately the highlight of the update...i wiss even cassira wud have been there....

OMG they're all gonna speak in hindi....poor deepali..her accent...lol

Hehe...well, Deepali's accent really isn't as bad as she thinks it is...

the storys pace is perfect.....not too fast...not too slow.....i'm loving it the way it is and the way u write it soo detailed makes me love it all the more.....but i wudn't mind a bit more action though.

Ok...will mostly keep it like it is, but might try to add some action if possible.

the semi-romantic scenes were definately a treat....it had me blushing and i always love these romantic scene......

Aww...I love romantic scenes too. 😳

loved ur update!!

thanks for the PM

continue ASAP.....

Will continue in a couple days, hopefully. Thanks for the comments.

Originally posted by: Shafoo
wowowow tht was amazingg

Thanks Shafoo!

Originally posted by: cute-kanwal
thank god u updated it seemed ages since u hav updated update was as usual very nyc but can u plz show sum more of adi and neelam.by the way thanks alot 4 the pm

Thanks hun! There will be more Adi-Neelam soon. If not in Chapter 7, then definitely in Chapter 8.

Originally posted by: picavgreat

Ooh! Love this chapter! Your whole story is shaping up so well. I'm a huge Shahid fan, so I really love the Rehaan-Samira scenes. I still have Rehaan & Zeenat's mystery longing at the back of my head. Why was Rehaan SO angry at Zeenat? I hope you expand on that soon! :) Rehaan seems like a mysterious guy. Haha.

Glad you have you on board dear! Will add your ID to the PM list. I'm a Shahid fan too, and I enjoy imagining him as Rehaan. I'm still trying to decide when to reveal the Rehaan-Zeenat story...I'll try not to take too long. Thanks for reading!

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Pallavi

@pigbelly4myfeet

Rocker

Posted: 16 years ago

#189

Hey Rabia,

Congrats on being done exams! Sorry for taking an ice age to comment...😳. Ok well finally read the update and it was awesome as always! 👏

Loved the description of the 'eye-battle' between Todd and Hina. Really well written. I could totally picture each and every thing during that scene. :D

YAYYYYY you included the Karan-Deepali scene as promised!! 😃 *grins like a fool* I toh ek dum LOVED it! You totally kept the essence of Mayank and Nupur. I was totally living the scene yaar, and could picture Mayank's irritated look to Nupur and Nupur's scowling and making faces at Mayank..hehe...awesome scene!! Thanks so much for including it. You rock. 😃

Aww Aditya and Samira are SOO cute...it reminds me of when I used to live in India, and go to my bhua's house in the summertime. I used to go and play cricket with my older cousin bro and his friends, and his friends used to tease me all the time. I miss India and my cousins....😭..hehe no worries I'll see them next month when I go to India. *cheers up* 😃😆

And awww again...mann this update was so majorly 'awww' worthy...so since I suck at words I'm gonna be 'awing' alot k? Don't say I didn't warn ya! 😛😆 O ya...so aww again at Gavin being mysterious about moving in plans with Carissa. And Rehaan's adorable yaar! I can totally relate! I suck at keeping secrets and I always give it away with my face...especially since I grin like an idiot over like anything...but haan Rehaan was too adorable. He's so turning into my fav. character. khee khee....😳

Aahaha the bollywood scene between Zaid and Hina kinda cracked me up. 😛....hehe sorry....I just find it hilarious how mesmerized Zaid is by Hina. lol ok sorry moving on...

Nice description of Samira's room. :D ....Loved the cute little touch about her not wanting to go out in her PJ's. Super cute! I'm like that too...I'd be mortified if found in PJ's too...even when I go pick up my bro or something in my car, I change into jeans first. 😳😳 And Awwww at Rehaan imagining Samira to smooth out the creases and all, wala part. SO adorable. I seriously love this couple. Maybe even more than Deepali Karan....😛 I said maybe ok? Dammit Rabia, you and your amazing writting skills making me change my fav. jodis. 😛 hehe...nahh they're cute. 😊 Although if a guy told me I have a face for nose rings, I'd be like "whaaaa"..how the heck do you know that? I can't even tell being a girl if people have faces for nose rings and you bein a guy can?? *raises eyebrow*, *shrugs, makes impressed face* Waah jee! 👏 I need one of those guys, that can tell me what'll look good on my face. 😃...kahaan milenge? batao jee. I KNOWWW have a new twist in the story where you hatah Samira mere raaste se so I can have Rehaan? Haan haan? See he can dance, I can dance, he's Shahid Kapoor, I'm Pallavi.....*thinks*....yeah that's about all I got...but seeeeee we're SOULMATES!!! 😍 *starts thinking up a genius plan to steal Rehaan* ....Ok fine...meanwhile I'll comment on the rest of your update...😛

I'm lovin' Aditya in your story too btw. Love his sarcasm for Hina. I always do a silent cheer for him every time he cracks one of those remarks at Hina. And the way he avoided Deepali from intruding in his and Neelam's date was great too. Serioulsy lovin' this guy....NOTT more than Rehaan though...*goes back to cookin' up the genius plan to get him*

AHHH LOVEDD the song touch!! Such a great song too! EEEEEEEEEE *get's all emotional and in a bollywoodish mood* I feel like HUGGIN' YOUUUU Rabia for that touch!! *hugssss you kas ke and doesn't let go*

Aww and the end scene was awesome too how they all connected. Awesome update Rabia! Ok question time?

1. I'm ek dum fine with the story's pace yaar....I like these cute moments and friendship/ easy going scenes too....they help to develop the relationships between everyone...plus are enjoyable to read. So I think the pace is fine! 👍🏼

2. lol....I loved the Deepali-Karan interaction...😳..hehe...and the Rehaan imagining Samira one too. 😃 The cute scenes went with the overall light tone of this update...I don't mind them at all waisse bhi. 😃

Awesome read, continue soon Rabia. 😊