~*It had to be You*~(AR) Intro 22/11

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hi there. Okay, don't throw chappals at me for doing this. he he I know I have another ff, for which an update is even due for sometime now but I couldn't help not penning this story down. This has been bothering me for a while now, more so because of the simplicity.......without any twists and tales surrounding it unlike my other ff. Its in fact very close to me as its based on the life of my brother and his love life. Lucky, he doesn't know about this else I am sure he wouldn't leave me alive exposing his tragedies like that. lol

And, writing this ff doesn't mean that I have forgotten my other ff, it is equally important for me. Infact, more important as its kind of how I started writing here but as I said I couldn't stop myself from posting this either. The writing style here might be a little different, and less formal unlike "Falling for You", so I hope you don't find this boring or anything like that. If you do, let me know at that instant itself so that I don't waste anyone's time here. :)

Here's the intro, please leave in your comments and let me know what you all think about it.

Thanks

Richa


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~*Introduction*~


"Okay Mummy-Papa, I'll go now." He said glancing at his watch.

"Yeah beta, it is time for you to go inside. Else, the queue might get long." His dad, Mr. Lalit Mallik said with concern.

"Haan beta, make sure you have everything with you. Check the passport again, you kept it in your waist pouch na?" His mom, Mrs. Sheela Mallik said with warmth and care dropping from her eyes.

"Of course Mom, I have kept everything. Now you both don't worry, I am a grown up and I can manage everything myself." He said circling his arms around both his parents, and grinned, dazzling the heavily lit airport with his dimpled smile.

"Just pray they don't say anything about your luggage. These airlines' security should at least allow the students to carry more luggage, how can kids carry all their stuff and yet make it fall under 40 kg" Sheela gave a frowned expression to show her anger.

"Haan maata, ab main jaaon? Otherwise, I'll have to sit on the floor of the plane if all the seats of the plane get occupied." He smashed a grin, to which his mom gave him a pat on his shoulder.

He hugged his parents before bidding final goodbyes and held his trolley filled with all his suitcases and bags, with the aim of heading inside the airport. Pushing the trolley towards the entrance, he showed his ticket and passport to the security guards standing erectly. Waving for the last time in the direction of his parents, he made his way towards the Singapore Airlines check in counter.

"Lucky, the queue isn't that long" he said to himself, giving a tiny smile to play on his lips when he noticed only a woman standing ahead of him.

On his turn, he slid the trolley further to get his boarding pass. "Hey bhagwaan, I hope they don't say anything for the luggage weight. I swear if they ask for extra money to carry more weight, they will have a world war III right here. These money minded people..........always think of gaining some extra rupees in some or the other way. Lutere saale!" he groaned looking at the girl checking his passport details.

"Mr. Mallik.......Mr. Armaan Mallik?" she asked cross-checking his face with his passport picture, as if trying to scan two images simultaneously.

"Yes......" he gave a half-hearted smile, annoyed enough with his last wondering about the weight issue.

"Let's see your wait" she said politely.

"Ya, as if she'd pick me up in her arms to weigh my body. Is she planning to play catch catch with me.......hah" he laughed inside his mind, unwilling to share his private joke. Pulling the biggest suitcase from the trolley, he placed it on the weight measuring conveyor belt.

17 kg......the number flashed on the tiny screen at the corner of the counter.

"Phew..........two more to go" Armaan bit his lips thinking about the total weight of his bags.

Sliding the second bag down the trolley, he placed it on the same position where the previous bag, now vanished, was standing.

12 kg.........the screen lit again with those red coloured numbers.

"Phewww............that makes 29" he sighed with another air of relief.

Pulling the last bag out of the trolley, he grinned again closing his eyes to make a wish for the total weight to fall under the limit.

10 kg..............the final numbers appeared on the screen for the last time, breaking all the suspense and worry going on inside Armaan's mind, making him to smile widely.............showing all his white glistening teeth openly.

He leaned towards the counter "Uhhh.........I want the luggage to be transferred straight to Australia, Brisbane............not in Singapore where I'd be stopping over" he said paying attention to each word clearly, to which the girl at the counter nodded giving an approved smile.

Handing the passport and the ticket back to Armaan, she handed him with the two boarding passes; one from Delhi to Singapore and the other from Singapore to Brisbane.

"Have a nice journey Mr. Mallik" she said as Armaan collected the belongings.

"Thanks......." he smiled, pulling his bag over his shoulder.

"Australia...............here I come" he turned around flashing his dimples, making his way to the immigration.

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey there!!!

This one seems really interesting. And very very natural. No wonder, how many times my mom has fretted with me while travelling about the weight issue hehehe. I guess your brother would not mind strangling you about displaying his love life all over the net, but i believe its going to be really interesting reading a real life story. Hope you continue soon.

Best of luck for this one. Hope u can do justice to your brother's story.

Love
Kiran
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey there wow..the story seems interesting and more its your brother love life story...woah...at last some real love life story..its not that im bored with fictional stories...but at least in reality i would really know how a persons love story is..seriously i just love it its really fresh...cant wait for the next update..thank you so much you are really kind enough to share it with us about one of ur family members love life...cant wait for the entry of riddhima...pls continue


PS:im a silent reader at times so i really apologise if i dont comment...

zafirah
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wooow grt intro pls continue sooon
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Richaaaa!
I totally understand why you couldn't help penning this down...Once a concept makes it's way in your mind...it like never wants to leave you in peace..LOL.Same thing happened to me with my short story...
OMG yaar! What an intro..I'm definitely hooked and attracted to this Armaan--seems totally outgoing, adventurous type...LOL..and his one-liners in his mind were hilarious!!! Richa, you did a brilliant job penning this down...I'm really loving the dialogues and the way everything flowed so smoothly...You know how much I love your writing already *big smile* ...lol...As for this being based on the life and love life of your brother, I totally like that idea...it gives a very real-life perspective to the whole FF and creates a wonderful ambiance....Just make sure your brother doesn't read this..LOL...Okay, jokes apart...I'm in love with it...
I liked how you portrayed the whole- weighing issue...I seriously have a problem with it when I go abroad...LOL..
Continue super soon!! You don't have to PM me ...I'll be here in a jiffy...
Love ya
Anita
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: armaans*basket*

Hey there!!!

This one seems really interesting. And very very natural. No wonder, how many times my mom has fretted with me while travelling about the weight issue hehehe. I guess your brother would not mind strangling you about displaying his love life all over the net, but i believe its going to be really interesting reading a real life story. Hope you continue soon.

Best of luck for this one. Hope u can do justice to your brother's story.

Love
Kiran



lol Kiran, I am sure a lot of us have experienced that weight problem. Its a pain while travelling. I usually bite my nails while standing in the queue. hehe Oh, don't even remind me of my brother, he won't think twice before strangling me. hehe No, he lives in a different state, so I am quite lucky that he has no chance of knowing about my little online endeavours.

Thanks for leaving your comment Kiran, means a lot.

Richa

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Posted: 16 years ago
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hmmm.... sounds really interstin! i love readin true love stries! plz do cntd asap! and plz u dnt mind culd u plz pm me whenevr u cntd? i ill ill b w8in 4 ure pm!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: zgerl

hey there wow..the story seems interesting and more its your brother love life story...woah...at last some real love life story..its not that im bored with fictional stories...but at least in reality i would really know how a persons love story is..seriously i just love it its really fresh...cant wait for the next update..thank you so much you are really kind enough to share it with us about one of ur family members love life...cant wait for the entry of riddhima...pls continue


PS:im a silent reader at times so i really apologise if i dont comment...

zafirah



Hi Zafirah, first of all, thanks for liking the intro. Now like you said you are a silent reader most of the time, but you still made an effort to comment here is highly flattering. Thanks for making all those efforts hon.

Hmmm, so from what I get out of your para is that you like to read real life stories as well. That's nice, and yes more or less this one would have all those things that happened with my bro, I might edit somethings here and there to suit the needs of you all here. Hope you like as the story progresses. he he Riddhima's entry........just started the intro and you are already waiting for her. 😆 Will continue soon. Thanks again.

Love
Richa

P.S. Don't worry about not being able to comment, at least you liked my efforts here. That's all that matters, and is the most important for us writers. Just one teeny tiny request, try to pop in here whenever you can, and give your views about the parts. I would like if you told me about what you liked, and didn't like.......ummm only whenever you can make it. No hard and fast rule hon. 😃


Originally posted by: mar-

wooow grt intro pls continue sooon



Originally posted by: samijan

wow!!!!!continue soon.



Thanks mar and samijan. Will do as soon as I can.

Love
Richa

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: anitamalik

Richaaaa!

I totally understand why you couldn't help penning this down...Once a concept makes it's way in your mind...it like never wants to leave you in peace..LOL.Same thing happened to me with my short story...
OMG yaar! What an intro..I'm definitely hooked and attracted to this Armaan--seems totally outgoing, adventurous type...LOL..and his one-liners in his mind were hilarious!!! Richa, you did a brilliant job penning this down...I'm really loving the dialogues and the way everything flowed so smoothly...You know how much I love your writing already *big smile* ...lol...As for this being based on the life and love life of your brother, I totally like that idea...it gives a very real-life perspective to the whole FF and creates a wonderful ambiance....Just make sure your brother doesn't read this..LOL...Okay, jokes apart...I'm in love with it...
I liked how you portrayed the whole- weighing issue...I seriously have a problem with it when I go abroad...LOL..
Continue super soon!! You don't have to PM me ...I'll be here in a jiffy...
Love ya
Anita



Anitaaaaaaaaa 🤗

You are absolutely right, I had to write this by hook or by crook. Like you said, it wouldn't leave me in peace. lol so you already guessed that he's the outgoing sorts, kya baat hai. Sixth Sense? lmao

hehe glad you liked the dialogues, including his one-liner wonderings; tried to keep the ordinariness of the story alive. Anita Anita Anita, you say I motivate you but see hon, you are always the motivating sorts, which I really admire about you. Not just in my ffs, but wherever I have seen you comment, I see you being such a sweetheart and encouraging everyone with your lovely and flattering comments. I can't tell you how much your comments mean to me, and I simply love to read your views.

I am so glad you liked everything from the intro, from dialogues to the flow. I have to admit I was apprehensive about it, as I am not sure if the simple stories are liked by the readers here or not. I'll see how it goes, if I don't get much response then I might drop the idea of continuing. Will see.

lol ya its "almost" derived from his masti waali life, when he came here after finishing his high school in delhi. Its been nearly 8 yrs now. lollllll I know with the weight issue, its such a pain to travel worrying about that esp. when you go out for the first time as a student. You have so much to carry and so many limitations. Anyway, I won't bore you with my groanings. ehhe

Thanks again Anita for always being there! Your comments always bring a smile on my face as well. 🤗

Love you too
Richa

Edited by Richa1234 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey richa...
that was a very awesome and natural intro...
loved reading it totally...
i guess like ur previous fic u are not continuing this anytime soon...
but if u do pls do pm me...

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