Unleashing Wat Remaind Unsaid-Pt19/pg144/note-p151 - Page 8

hey miss new moon!!

u PMd me wen u had d part 1 up?????? y d discrimination??wat ron did i do??

okay! tht was nt funny...i koe! jokes apart (like tey were nay!)..coincidentally m takin an eng class 2..naa nt grad level..bt my teachz..more in2 poetry n head of d creatives fricn ..soo u can imagine..wat all she mkes us do!! its been 2 weekz n ive ritten 6 drafts already...uhhhh " show not tell" still nt in ma system..bt ill get it by d end of d sem i guess!lol
(seemz like in ritin mood tdy!been leavin long comments 2 all of ya..ma faviez!!)

bck 2 d point...yeahh!! its different..clearly!..vry literate..totall high level..bt grt 4 my class..lol i get all d ideaz 4 u!!..
i can't not imagine lovely as our lovely frm DMG..mind sets!! I like gappu n Rz reln...vry new frm all dt ive read so far!!
again ter wer mny parts i wntd 2 highlight (memz of d 1st time i read newtons..i was like wow!tis riter is damn gud yaar! i gotta save d link so i follow her ritinz! - those were times wen i was new on IF!:D)
Az d stuck up here..poor thin!! actually nt!! ive symphathized wit him too much already!! be creative...try n give more reasonz 4 d marriage...other than 4 lovelyz issues...itll gve a lift 2 yur ff..u koe!! (juss a passin thought!)

okay! basically..i think u get my point..i liked it!! ;)

gud 2 hve u ritin again..missed it!! (do i even hve 2 tell ya!)

P.S ------- i don't like the title..it throws away d charm of yur ritin.. (again! dnt mind me!m invisible!)

Originally posted by: missypatel

hey miss new moon!!

u PMd me wen u had d part 1 up?????? y d discrimination??wat ron did i do??

okay! tht was nt funny...i koe! jokes apart (like tey were nay!)..coincidentally m takin an eng class 2..naa nt grad level..bt my teachz..more in2 poetry n head of d creatives fricn ..soo u can imagine..wat all she mkes us do!! its been 2 weekz n ive ritten 6 drafts already...uhhhh " show not tell" still nt in ma system..bt ill get it by d end of d sem i guess!lol
(seemz like in ritin mood tdy!been leavin long comments 2 all of ya..ma faviez!!)

bck 2 d point...yeahh!! its different..clearly!..vry literate..totall high level..bt grt 4 my class..lol i get all d ideaz 4 u!!..
i can't not imagine lovely as our lovely frm DMG..mind sets!! I like gappu n Rz reln...vry new frm all dt ive read so far!!
again ter wer mny parts i wntd 2 highlight (memz of d 1st time i read newtons..i was like wow!tis riter is damn gud yaar! i gotta save d link so i follow her ritinz! - those were times wen i was new on IF!:D)
Az d stuck up here..poor thin!! actually nt!! ive symphathized wit him too much already!! be creative...try n give more reasonz 4 d marriage...other than 4 lovelyz issues...itll gve a lift 2 yur ff..u koe!! (juss a passin thought!)

okay! basically..i think u get my point..i liked it!! ;)

gud 2 hve u ritin again..missed it!! (do i even hve 2 tell ya!)

P.S ------- i don't like the title..it throws away d charm of yur ritin.. (again! dnt mind me!m invisible!)

missy awsome to have u back..n u read my mind hun....when i turned in my qualifier draft...with different names of course but the same fic.....i dint turn it in with the title....😆 i mean i know exactly wat u mean n u know exactly wat i do....think that happens to all students who take eng creative writing 😆....yeh well il leave it the same here since i started with it now...but iv gota think of something new for the final submission at the end of the term.....hehe....n yeh hun this was the first set of PM's i sent out...i dint send one for the intro.....its been a crazy sleepless week too much work n no time....n thats why no daily updates either....but oh well il update soon enuf for the track to be not forgotten!!!

nywaz....lovely stays for a wile...n the why's come in my good time dont intend leaking out secrets yet lolzzzz but there is a reason...biiiiiiggggg one so il fix it...um just not sure with the way um plotting if i shudnt try another story for the class....he might not want so many twists!!!!😆

oki me too in a mood to write too much i guess....will leave it that...
keep reading!!!...n leaving comments!!!



ps: show not tell....haha...poets at their best....u ever read Yeats???(W.B.Yeats....read him hes a master!!!)

I just loved this descriptive style of writing of yours. How do u do it girl? Tell me something, do u have Newton actually staying at ur place and giving u such gr8 brains 😆. I'm in awe of ur writing yet again, WELL, when wasn't I??😛

Originally posted by: $h!V@n!

I just loved this descriptive style of writing of yours. How do u do it girl? Tell me something, do u have Newton actually staying at ur place and giving u such gr8 brains 😆. I'm in awe of ur writing yet again, WELL, when wasn't I??😛

Beautiful description of their emotions👏👏👏

update soon plzzz n thanx for the pm..

Luv Shivani😳

haha much as i hate to find errors in my superhero, i dont think newton was much of a master with words shivani....😆...um glad u like the part though, i was fearing ppl sleeping off with the amt i wrote in describing downtown, i actually had to replay scenes in my head from the many night outs by lake michigan its a beauty the skyline in the night.....oh well....i wont start off again....will update sometime tom i hope....tom night for me, will be sat forenoon for u guys in india....um hoping it wil be done by then.....

Hi Naseem,

Originally posted by: bhoomikauttam

Hi Naseem,

The part was really well written.. I felt I was actually a picture of the way they were standing the way their minds went into the past n all...

I love the way u wrote.... GOD Now... heheheh so very real in nature.. we wnat this shoudlnt and it will happen..and we stare at God wantign to know whats the plan here... I am not ready kind... I could feel that ..

Abotu Armaan introvert and Riddhima extrovert which isnt similar to the DMG we watch na.. I woudl like to watch Armaan introvert and feelign unconfortable to let the truth out.. awww he would look damn cute....🤪

So Riddhima and Armaan got separaated even before they couldnt admit or comitt to each other..btu had those feelgins with them.. and Riddhi a Spinster.. thats cool...

A wonderful part and the decriptive way of writign is awesome.. U r really a talented writer.. i love ur Vocab and now I can understnad why u get [pissed with others enlish grammer mistakes... lol...

Loved reading the part... great maturity in describing the feelings and emotions.. Kuddos...

Bhoomi

hey bhoomi....great comments, um touched n encouraged!!!...but i do wana say, the english grammer part....well i wudnt have been so fussy but for my high school prof....she taught us to love the beauty of the language, feel how every word we used was so unique, and that inappropriate usage can kill the essence'....think she was trying to fix our slang filled lingo, but it worked for me to an extreme...almost harsh um told most of the times 😆 but oh well...those who know me realize its a compulsive habit n they dont need to care much abt my mindless ramblings!!!neither shud anyone here....um a lingo freak to be precise!!!

but yeh, um mighty glad u liked the part, hope u will continue to enjoy the track,....n armaan, well he aint the meek one, just not his usual flamboyant playboy self!!!!...there will be plenty of chances to know him, n soon!!!😉




@nidha...thanx hun, glad u enjoying the track, its just abt started, hopefully ul stick with all thru!!!

Hi Naseem...

Originally posted by: spln

hey bhoomi....great comments, um touched n encouraged!!!...but i do wana say, the english grammer part....well i wudnt have been so fussy but for my high school prof....she taught us to love the beauty of the language, feel how every word we used was so unique, and that inappropriate usage can kill the essence'....think she was trying to fix our slang filled lingo, but it worked for me to an extreme...almost harsh um told most of the times 😆 but oh well...those who know me realize its a compulsive habit n they dont need to care much abt my mindless ramblings!!!neither shud anyone here....um a lingo freak to be precise!!!

but yeh, um mighty glad u liked the part, hope u will continue to enjoy the track,....n armaan, well he aint the meek one, just not his usual flamboyant playboy self!!!!...there will be plenty of chances to know him, n soon!!!😉




@nidha...thanx hun, glad u enjoying the track, its just abt started, hopefully ul stick with all thru!!!

@Bhoomi...haha dont worry if typos or shorthand were to count as gramaticakl errors i should be sentenced for life time imprisonment by now, um a master at having tons of those sprawled all over my passages!!

@sheetal...hey dear, hearing from u after a long time hopefully ur schedule is not too tight...glad u liked the certain happy bonds, n well of course no one likes kinks between armidz!!!..il have the stuff resolved of course...thats what the fic is about this time i guess!!!have fun reading on!