~VeeBa FF~||Ye Bair Ishq||22/6 Ch15 New Update Pg55 - Page 5

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Posted: 11 years ago
#41
Hey your story sounds very very good 😊 Both Prologue and the scenes are nicely written with good descriptions of chota ballu and veera's thoughts and expressions πŸ˜†
Aisa lagaa that I'm seeing the story enacted in front of me, and very few writers can do that..

Kudos Rimi πŸ‘ Pls give us link to the next update soon.Waiting ...
😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Krsna09

Hey your story sounds very very good 😊 Both Prologue and the scenes are nicely written with good descriptions of chota ballu and veera's thoughts and expressions πŸ˜†
Aisa lagaa that I'm seeing the story enacted in front of me, and very few writers can do that..

Kudos Rimi πŸ‘ Pls give us link to the next update soon.Waiting ...
😊

hey priya thanks yaar... the next update is also coming today itself πŸ˜ƒπŸ˜ƒ
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Posted: 11 years ago
#43
Thnks to these people
for hitting 'like' for the previous chapter.πŸ˜ƒπŸ˜³
And those of u who didn't like or comment even after you found the chapter good..--...😑😑.

Chapter:-2

After a marvelous performance, the students finally thought of having a party.

Backstage:-
Baldev, jagdeesh (aka jaggiπŸ˜‰ ) and balvindar (aka billaπŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰) stood together with baldev being in the middle (like a boss😎).
Jaggi- listen people. Aaj raat ko sabhi hostelers party karenge kyuki humaare class 12th ke farewell se pehle hum hostelers apna ek farewell karenge.. Got it?

Every1 :- yeeahhh!!! Yes!! Yuhooo!! Bal.. Dev .. Bal... Dev!!!πŸ‘

Veera and her frnds make a sour face. Baldev sees this and goes to her.
Baldev- kudiye... Tujhe special invitation hai...Special guest hai tu meri...πŸ˜‰
Veera- kyu oye??😑
Baldev- oh... Tu nai ayegi toh apni bakwaas baato se humaara manoranjan kaun karega???πŸ˜†

Baldev, jaggi and billa, the teekha trio, laugh...πŸ˜†

Veera hits baldev on his foot with her sandal.
Veera- baldevv!!! Zyaada havaa me matt udd samjha... Abb tera aisa popat banaaongi.. Ki tu dekhta reh jayega.. Samjha!!😑😑


She walked away in attitude leaving a smirking baldev behind.

At night, the teekha trio, dressed up for a full on party reaches the decided venue.
But there was no-one present.

Baldev- jaggi? Ye kya hai? Sab kaha hain??😲😑

Billa- pata nahi bhai.. Mujhe toh kuch samajh hi nahi aa raha...

Jaggi- bhai bhai.. Door se kuch avaaze aa rahi hain.
Baldev- kaisi avaaz??
Billa- chal ke dekhte hai na bhai.
Baldev- haa chal.

They follow the sound and reach a place where every1 was enjoying the party.

Baldev- ye party yaha kaise??? 😑Maine toh...
Billa- oye bhai... Vaha pe entry hai.. Andar chalke poochte hai kisi se.πŸ˜›

They go on the entry but veera stops them.
Baldev- ye kya badtameezi hai veera??!!😑😑
Veera- arre baldev, tere saare mehmaano ka manoranjan mai hi kar deti hu abb hai na..!!πŸ˜†
Baldev- veera!!! 😑😑
Veera- tu yaha invited nahi hai.. Abb chal fut yaha se!!πŸ˜†

Aakash came there and kept a hand on veera's shoulder.
Aakash- aane bhi dona use veera.. C'mon...
Baldev was Focused on Aakash's hand on Veera's shoulder😑. He couldn't tolerate how aakash was convincing her.
Veera- theek hai! Kyuki aakash keh raha hai.. Mai tujhe aane de rahi hu baldev! Thank him!

Baldev was too angry to handle this😑. He walked away in anger.

Jaggi and billa followed him and reached his room.
Jaggi- bhai aap yaha kyu aa gaye?
Baldev- abb tu dekh... Mai uss veera ko kaise sabak sikhaata hu. Uss aakash se bada chipak rahi thi na!!😑😑😑
Billa- lekin usse aapko kya bhai??πŸ˜•
Baldev- pata nahi.. Mujhe accha nahi lagta jab vo.. Vo veera ke paas ... Akela chadd do mainu!!😑

They leave.
Jaggi to billa- aaj bhai achanak punjaabi me bolne lage.. Matlab emotional ho gaye hain..πŸ˜•
Billa- haa bhai...! Sahi kaha!!πŸ˜•

Few days later, it was time for veera n baldev to return to preetampura.
Chaiji was ready to welcome her; ratan wasn't so happy as usual.

Chaiji- abb chadd bhi ratan, kudi ghar aa rahi hai.. Thoda musukura de... Ravi ke liye hi sahi.

Ratan nodded.

Gunjan was getting ready to welcome her veerji... She was a chubby and sweet homely girl.

Bansuri- chheti kar gunjan..
Gunjan- jee beeji.. Bass ho gaya.

They arrived at their respective Homes, veera with ranvi and baldev with balwant.

Baldev on phone:- haa jaggi... mai pohoch gaya hu...
Jaggi- chalo accha hai bhai. Mazze karo aap toh fir...!
Baldev- haan yaha vo aakash bhi nahi hai taang adaane ko!
Jaggi- matlab??
Baldev- kuch nai..
He made an angry face for Aakash.😑😑

The next morning, Veera and baldev met at the gurudwara..

Baldev smirked and she looked away.

Veera- baldev! Tu yaha ki kar raha hai?πŸ˜†
Baldev- oye kyu? Mai yaha nai aa sakta?πŸ˜•
Veera- tujh jaisa shaitaan.. Yaha..! Forget it!😎

She rolled her eyes and turned around but baldev held her hand and pulled her back to him.

Veera- eh ki karr rha hi tu??😲
Baldev-(whispered)- veera.. Tu kyu mujhse inna door bhaagti hai.. Kyu inni nafrat karti hai.. Mujhe accha nahi lagta..☺️

Veera(confusedπŸ˜•)- tu paagal ho gaya hai ki... Kya bakwaas kar raha hai tu?! Chhadd mainu!!

Baldev leaves her but his eyes were glued to her.
Veera ran away.
Baldev smirked.πŸ˜‰

Veera was very confused abt baldev's change in behavior.
With the coming of age, even she had started having this weird feelings when he was close. When he had pulled her back to him, she felt and unusual feeling in her stomach.
She just cudn't help but think about his intense look.. It wasn't anger.. But she hardly had the idea what it was, she cudn't help but recall his grip on her wrist, his shirt with top buttons open.
Wait!😲
Veera- what nonesence am i thinking!! Eh sab ki soch rai hu mai. Baldev ke baare me?? Vo koi SRK hai jo mai uske shirt ke button khule the etc. Soch rai hu...😲😲

And again she went back to her thoughts about his physique which was just getting better. His face was becoming so cute and smart and handsome and.

Wait again.😲
Veera- fir vahi??😲?!! Veera... Ki kar rahi hai tu...!! Chup chup chup!! So jaa so jaa so jaa!!

Just when she got over this first -tym -weird sensations regarding baldev, she got a call from him.

As soon as she saw his call. Butterflies.
Veera- arre baap re! Eh inni raat me ki baat karna chaahta hai!!πŸ˜•
She hesitantly picked up the call.

Veera- hello!
Baldev- veera... Jaag rahi hai?😳
Veera- haan. Nahi. Mai so rahi thi tune jaga diya.πŸ˜•
Baldev- accha? Abb so bhi nai payegi.πŸ˜‰
Veera- kyu?πŸ˜•
Baldev- meri neende chura ke khud soyegi tu?πŸ˜‰

Hearing that gave chills to her.
Veera- maine ki kiya.πŸ˜•
Baldev- pata nahi... Aaj badi.. Soni lag rai thi tu.πŸ˜‰

Her throat was begging for water.

But soon she got back to her real self.

Veera- chup kar besharam! Inni rat ko jiss ladki ko phone karke chedd raha hai... Vo apne ranvi veer jee ki behen hai! Samjha!πŸ˜‘πŸ˜• Unhe bata dungi na toh..

Baldev- Maine aisa ki bol diya? Haan? Tareef hi toh ki na teri.!
Veera- haa haa theek hai. Ab rakh phone.
Baldev smiled and cut the call.

Veera was feeling very unusual.
Baldev was actually flirting with her!?? She had never thought abt it at all. Baldev... With her?? So weird.πŸ˜•

Just then she got a message.
It was frm baldev:- kal mere ghar pe party hai... Tu ayegi na?

Veera replied quickly:- haa kyu?
Baldev- laal rang me bohot acchi lagti hai tu...
Veera unknowingly smiled.
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Precap:-
Veera surfing on the net...
Suddenly gets to see a topic saying:- how to know if you love HIM??
Veera- mai kyu kholo ye??... ...Kholne me kya hai!!
She opened it.
Veera reads::- you think about him all day😲, you dream about him..😲. You feel nervous around him.😲

Veera gasped as her symptoms matched.
She went ahead.
"you can't make eye contact with him.😲😲
You care for him.😲
You wanna be with him all time.😲😲
His touch pleases you.😲
And while reading this you were thinking about him😲😲😲."
Veera gets scared as she was thinking only about baldev all the while!
Edited by ..RiMjHiM.. - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#44

jaldi update karo na..😭😭
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Posted: 11 years ago
#45
lovely...imagining baldev as shehri munda❀️
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Posted: 11 years ago
#46
One more lovely update !! Ahhh... Butterflies are flying over my head
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Posted: 11 years ago
#47

Originally posted by: ..RiMjHiM..



Aakash came there and kept a hand on veera's shoulder.
Aakash- aane bhi dona use veera.. C'mon...
Baldev was Focused on Aakash's hand on Veera's shoulder😑. He couldn't tolerate how aakash was convincing her.
Veera- theek hai! Kyuki aakash keh raha hai.. Mai tujhe aane de rahi hu baldev! Thank him!

Baldev was too angry to handle this😑. He walked away in anger.



The imagination of Baldev focussing on Aakash and Veera's closeness was very well placed in the scene... I drifted sach me into VeeBa land

Originally posted by: ..RiMjHiM..



They leave.
Jaggi to billa- aaj bhai achanak punjaabi me bolne lage.. Matlab emotional ho gaye hain..πŸ˜•
Billa- haa bhai...! Sahi kaha!!πŸ˜•



Jaggi's observation of Punjabi and emotions πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘
🀣 Hilarious dialogue Rimi πŸ˜›

Rest of the scenes mein, Ballu has already started flirting with his Veera 😳😳😳 And the dialogues, and wrist holding, wow Rimi you are a true romantic πŸ‘

Acche pace mein chal raha hai... I like that Ballu has realised that he's noticing things about her and falling for her πŸ˜›
Edited by Krsna09 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#48
Awesome updateπŸ‘...loved it
Thx for pm.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#49
aaww..😳😳😳 😳😳😳 😳😳😳..
evry lyn of u is jus surprising ..me yaar...i'm luvng it...n getting addicted t d stry..agar jaldi update nahi kari tho mar jaaungi shayad bye god..

their convo at gurudwara..intense ballu..haaye..
n comes d 3 idiots ..u named them pefectly as d theeka trio...punjabi n emotional baldeva..omg..awesum..u r brilliant rimi..loving the way u r writing it..

n their phone convo...romantic baldeva oy hoy..i'm fully drowned in veeba landπŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜‰

n particularly..this lyn of urs..

And while reading this you were thinking about him😲😲😲.".

haha..i'm also thinking the same whyl reading ur stry n feeling baldeva all over..😳😳

kudos t ur magical update dearπŸ‘πŸ‘..waitin 4 d nxt..







Edited by princy48 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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for u rimi..πŸ€—πŸ€—
tauba tumhare yeh ishaare...(baldevisms)πŸ˜³πŸ˜³πŸ˜‰
hum tho deewane hai tumhare..(of ur writings)
raaz ye kaise khol rahe ho..πŸ˜‰πŸ˜†πŸ˜‰
tum updates se bol rahi ho..πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
jaadoo aate hai tumko saare..😳😳😳
πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘ πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘ πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘
Edited by princy48 - 11 years ago

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