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Posted: 11 years ago
I will dear but as i had ended in my head i would have to do sumthing till then enjoy the new 1 im about to start
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It was the wedding time..veera wore a red lehenga..baldev in golden sherwani.Ranvi on ghodi veera dancing with the other baaratis.
They were welcomed by bansuri on the door.Baldev and veera eye to eye soul talk

Baldev; kitni khoobsoorat lage gi aur..maare gi kya

Veera; tu kon sa kam he sun k dekh mere dil ki dhadhkan kinni tez he.

they all went inside.Veera was restless.
Baldev came to her.

Baldev; surprise k liye tayar he.

Veera; han bilkul tayar..pr us se pehle ik chinta he mujhe

Baldev; kya?

Veera; veerji k joote kon churayega?

Baldev was shocked

Veera; veerji ki to koi saali he nhi.

Baldev; pind me itni kudiyan hen kisi ko bhi keh de chura legi

Veera; nhi wo nhi churayengi

Baldev; veera tu...

Veera; tu chura le

Baldev; kya?????

Veera; han na tu saala he tu hi chura le jootiyan...naiq me maang lungi

Baldev; tu to ranvi ki trf se thi na..

Veera; me to dono trf se hun na..barat k saath ai hun...barati ban k ab yahan gharati hun phr barati ban k chali jaongi

Baldev; oye me nhi chura rha kuch

Veera; oye hoye..tu kab se inna shareef hogya...apne kisi chamche ko hi bol de na

Baldev; phr mera surprise?

Veera; are yr yahan inni tension he aur tujhe apne surprise ki padi he

Baldev; dekh veera tu mujhe

Veera; ja na ik baar joote haath se gaye to bas gaye smjho.

he knew it was completely useless to argue so he left.

He asked his friends to hide Ranvi's shoes which they did.

Veera; chalo veerji paise do joote lo

Ranvi: e ki veerakhdi..tu to meri behen he na

Chaiji: o puttar ye cheechdi bht chalaq he jahan faida dekha wahin chali jati he

Veera; do na veerji

Ranvi gave her whatever he had in his pocket.Veera looked at baldev , baldev handed over the shoes

Baldev; ye lo jeejaji..aap k joote (in the most irritated voice possible)

It was time for the bidaai and no1 was crying except Balwant.Veera recalled her own bidaai and got tears in her eyes.
Ranvi got emotional too

Chaiji: o chote chan bidaai uski he teri nhi..tu qn ro rha he

Ranvi; menu apni veera ki bidaai yaad agai..me to use bida krne bhi nhi a paya tha

Baldev (to himself); iska to nataq kabhi bnd nhi hoga.

when every1 left...veera was no where to be seen.

Baldev; bg veera kahan gai

Bansuri; wo to gai na puttar...behen ka farz nibhane..
she left

Baldev's friends came to him.

Bfriend1: O ki hoya prajee..parjaijee ne to aapko phir neecha dikha dia

Bfriend2: ab sadi inni sari mehnat ka ki hoga

Baldev was burning in anger

Baldev; oye bhad me gaya surprise..me ab usse koi surpize nhi doonga..use sirf apni padi he...huh!
he went inside.

Bfriend2; prajee bht gusse men hen ab ki hoga?

Bfriend1; parjaijee to gai smjho.
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Posted: 11 years ago
I love this story...with each update I love it more and more.. Kya surprise tha Veera ke liye ... Jaldi se update dena pls...
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Posted: 11 years ago
Loved it ❤️
Nice read 👍🏼
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Posted: 11 years ago
Surprise to bht acha tha lekin veera ne gawa diya ab bs ballu in anger
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Posted: 11 years ago
Oh no Baldev's pissed! No surprise for Veera...tsk tsk!

Another amazing update...please update soon:)))
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Posted: 11 years ago
nice update yaar...👍🏼
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Posted: 11 years ago
Oooh! Another story! I read it all in one go! Superfast reader here, yo! 😎😆

I can't seem to 'Like' your posts. Stupid button. But just so you know, I loved all the parts. Some of the moments really stand out such as:
-Ranvi's protectiveness of Veera. Ranveera bond! Love! ❤️
-the first day breakfast scene - Baldev ensuring Veera is not insulted by his mother
-Ratan-Veera's hug. Me: 🥳
-The entire rant complaint Veera unloaded on Ratan about Baldev's cupboard and tooth-brush sharing. 😆
-"qn oye ..bv hun teri inna sa bhi haq nhi mera..tu to mujh pe bada haq jamata phirta he to me qn piche hatun?" Swooon.
-The bed scene. It was so normal. I thought you will use some "fall on me" cliche but you didnt and it was such a pleasant surprise! 😊
-The part where he blows air into her face was ROFL-worthy when Veera didnt catch on to his "romantic" act. 🤣
-Part 13 was so 🤣 Veera's jealousy, Baldev prodding, the vegetable guy caught in between their fight! Ahahahaha! LOVED it!
-When Baldev took Veera to see Ranvi on his birthday. ⭐️
-Baldev-Ranvi ki dushmani. I liked how you retained that even in your FF. Thank God you didnt make them magical friends already. 😆
-The ego of VeeBa about calling each other and just telling the three simple words: 'I miss you.' 😆
-Baldev's eagerness to romance Veera and her concern for the joota instead. 🤣

Baldev; ab rona band kre gi
Veera; royen mere dushman
Baldev; me nhi rota

Veera hugged him from the back and kissed him slightly on his cheek.
Baldev; oye ki kr rhi he
Veera; tujhe nhi pta
Baldev; ghr pe hota hun na roz tere pass tab to tujhe mujh pr pyaar nhi ata
Veera; meri marzi me apne hubby se kab aur kese pyaar krun
Baldev; tu nhi sudhregi
Veera; tu bhi mat sudhrna.

These two dialogues deserves a separate comment. Seriously. I just love the way you write such fabulous dialogues. There's so much life in them. It's just amazing writing yaar! The first one is just so sweetly funny. And the second one is what I hope happens between them in TV. If they become more refined, then the essence of VeeBa itself will be gone.

All in all, I LOVED IT! 😃

Thank you for this wonderful piece.

TC.
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Posted: 11 years ago
OMG tvlover92 itna bada analysis on my ff..im so glad u loved it...hope u keep up with me now
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part 21

Veera was helping Gunjan to get ready for her mun dikhai.

Veera; mun dikhai tb hoti he ab jab dulhan kisi dusre pind se ai ho aap to yahin ki ho sb ne dekha he pta nhi pind ki aurton ka masla kya he

Gunjan was blushing not saying anything.

Veera; meri mun dikhai yaad he ktni boring thi..uff sab fazool compliments de rhe the jese mujhe pehle kabhi dekha na ho.

Chaiji; o cheechdi ye bhi ek rasam he na..ki karen...chal tu bhi apna saman bandh le..kb a rha he baldev tenu lene.

Just then veera realized that she had completely forgotten about his surprise

Veera; o teri...moti chaiji..wo nhi ayega..menu khud hi jana hoga

Gunjan; nhi nhi veera tu nhi ja skti..pehli baar ai he maike shaadi k baad khud gai to pind k log baten banayenge

Veera; acha! ye pind wale bhi na...me use call krti hun.

She called him..he didn't answer...she kept on calling...he got frustrated and rejected the call.

Veera; mene to uski hata di he..wo bht gusse me hoga tabhi phone kaat rha he lekin ab me ki karaan.

Ranvi came to her

Ranvi; ki hoya veerakhdi..tu inni pareshan qn he

Veera; veerji wo me...aap apne phone se baldev ko phone karo na..mere pass balance nhi
she had to lie

Ranvi; ye le tu baat kr le.

she called him through ranvi's phone.Finally he picked up.

Baldev; oye ranveere dimag na kha mera sawere sawere..jaldi bol jo bolna he

Veera; baldev..(she said in a innocent voice)

Baldev; oh to tu he..mene tere se koi gal nhi krni...

Veera; to na kr..bs menu lene aja..me khud nhi a skti aurten baaten kren gi

Baldev; to me ki karaan..krti rhen me nhi ane wala..aur tu bhi mat aiyo..bethi reh apne veerji k pass..menu teri zarurat nhi

Veera; acha! mujhe bhi nhi...ja bhad me.

she cut the phone in anger.

Veera; aya bada..huh!

the ladies arrived and started the ceremony..Veera was having nausea...it was too boring..especially when she and baldev were angry with each other.

Chaiji; o cheechdi tera chehra qn utra huwa he teri tabiyat to theek he na

Veera; han moti chaiji mujhe thode chaqar a rhe hen me upar ja rhi hun

Chaiji; han puttar tu ja

Veera went upstairs, she was feeling sick and she even vomitted.

Veera; o teri

She called baldev.

Baldev; phir tera phone kya he

Veera; plx plx jaldi a menu dr. k pass jana he.

Baldev; to ranvi ko bol

Veera; nhi plx tu a plx

Baldev; acha acha ata hun.

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