Ambika's VEEBA,Ranjan OS collectionOS-7

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Posted: 11 years ago
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guys this is my first ever OS in IF so there will be many mistakes and it may be a silly one

if it is not nice let me know guys i dnt feel bad

this is the continuation i want after the ranvi-baldev face off as shown in sbs segment


Ranvi sent veera and karan to veera's house ...and baldev after an heated argument with ranvi started to his home

Veera and karan r going on the road on sunsaan sadak and their bike tyre get puctured

Veera- ki huva karan bike kyu stop kiya tune

Karan-lagta hein ki tyre puncture huva hein veera

Veera-hayoo rabba ab ki kare

Karan-chill kar hum chalet huve mechanic shop tak jayenge who bike teek karlega

Veera- menu nahi chalna waha tak menu bahut bhook lagi hein

Karan- theek hein tu yahi ruk mein jake avunga

He left veera alone on the road and went it was very very lonely and veera is standing alone on the road

Baldev comes there in his jeep and c veera and thinks

Yeh toh karan ke saath gayi thi ab akeli iss sunsaan sadak par ki karrahi hein

Baldev stops his jeep and asks veera

Baldev- veera tu ithe ki karrahi hein karan kaha hein?????

Veera-tenu kyu batavu tu ja

Baldev-veera tujhe dikh nahi raha hein ki yaha kitna andhera hein aur koyi bhi nahi hein Iss sadak pe

Veera- oye baldev mere aankehn theek hein menu sab dikh raha hein

Baldev -toh kyu yaha hein bolna?????

Veera-theek hein agar nahi batavunga toh tu chhadega nahi menu who bike tyre puncture hogaya hein

Karan mechanic ke paaas gaya hein

Baldev-tu bhi uske saath chali jati

Veera- chali jati nai chalke jati ab menu na bohut bhook lagra ha hein me vaha tak nahi chalsakti isileyi yaha rukh gayi

Baldev-teri dimaag sirf menu pareshaan karne mein hein istamal karti na tu iss andhere mein kaise akeli khadi rahegi sochi bhi nahi tune

Theek hein aa mein tenu ghar tak chodunga

Veera-menu nahi chahiye tera lift

Baldev-veera yeh sunsaan sadak hein patanahi kaise kaise log aate jate hein yaha

Who karan ko toh akal nahi aise akeli kudi ko sadak pe chodke janeki lekin menu hein tu ab meri gal sunn aur chado

Veera felt it better to go with baldev than staying there alone she got into the jeep

Both r going and veera thought bore lagraha hein mujhe... baldev ko disturb karoongi

Veera started arguing with baldev abt something and baldev also involved in tat argument and dint notice tat there was a lorry coming in front of them and suddenly applied the break and veera was so scared tat she held baldev's left hand tightly and turned her head towards him

Baldev saw veera was afraid and put his hand on her head and veera suddenly hugged him tightly and was crying and said

Veera-mujhe bahut darr lag raha hein baldev

Baldev- veera kuch nahi huva darr mat ...me tune kuch bhi nahi hone dunga

His eyes when he said like tat was so caring and veera cld not c the hatred in his eyes at tat time

Baldev-ab chale veera theek hein

Veera -chalo

They were going and veera is feeling very hungry she was just holding her stomach and she want to tel baldev to stop some at some place and buy her something t eat but she was quite

Baldev notices it and stops at some shop

Baldev-veera bahut raath hogaya hein ab jaldi se ye lassi phile hume nikalna hein ghar ko

Veera felt so happy and drank the lassi

Baldev dropped veera till her home and

Baldev-ab chalunga

Veera-thanks baldev tayiji ne na sahi bola ki tu inna bhi bura nahi jitna mein samajti hu

Baldev had a smile on his face and left to his home without telling anything

mistakes ke liye maaf kariyo😊

OS-1 PG 1 veeba

OS-2 PG-3 baldev

OS-3 PG-5 baldev-gunjan and ranvi-veera

OS-4 PG-7 veeba

OS-5 PG-9 veeba

OS-6 PG-11 gunjan and baldev

OS-7 PG-13 gunjan and baldev

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Posted: 11 years ago
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wow ambi...🤗 gr8 start dear... loved it.. :D
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Posted: 11 years ago
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thanku rimi
yeh veeba mujhe bhi OS likne mein majbhoor kiya hein hahah
was it so bad or is it ok
u tell and v v happy to c comment from u
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Posted: 11 years ago
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ambi it was really good... aur likho accha likhti ho... and yaar aaj bohot thak gayi 2 din se padh rahi hoon toh isiliye thodi der ke liye aa gayi. and it's like wow ki i got to see an OS frm u...😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow Ambi ... It's really very nice... Ab yeh sab real mein kab dekhne ko milega ... Karela Chhod ke chala giya and our hero was there for his heroinya ... Plz keep writing more stuff on VeeBa :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: RiMjHiM19

ambi it was really good... aur likho accha likhti ho... and yaar aaj bohot thak gayi 2 din se padh rahi hoon toh isiliye thodi der ke liye aa gayi. and it's like wow ki i got to see an OS frm u...😃

rimi u r the inspiration👏 c how many r writing OS on veeba now
u write now one OS na
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Posted: 11 years ago
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ambi mai kal ek update de doongi... vo actually nicky ne mujhe baldev ki kasam di thi 😆 ki mai apne bday ke pehle ek update zaroor doon... isiliye ...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: RiMjHiM19

ambi mai kal ek update de doongi... vo actually nicky ne mujhe baldev ki kasam di thi 😆 ki mai apne bday ke pehle ek update zaroor doon... isiliye ...

s she did very nice thing 👏
nahi toh tu nahi likhti
ha me tujhe kisiki kasam nahi doongi but try to write one OS in a week if u can😊

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Posted: 11 years ago
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will try mys best dear...😃 but dekh mere jaane se kinna fayda hua... sab log OS likhne lage 👍🏼
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: RiMjHiM19

will try mys best dear...😃 but dekh mere jaane se kinna fayda hua... sab log OS likhne lage 👍🏼

wahi keh rahi hu inspiration toh tu hi hein 👏
tune kya ek jatka diya sab ne likna shuru kardiye

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