Dark VirMan FF:Break-Up Again?ll Pt5-Pg16..28/7/13 - Page 3

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Posted: 12 years ago
#21
ok... so its a wonderful start... loved it...
continue soon...
loe u
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Part 2
All of them are in the same bus...
All of them occupy different seats Jeevika goes and sits with Avinash...Virat sits with Viren but the two girls Manvi and Amanda sit seperately...
Virat and Viren:
Virat:Chill Bhai! It's just one girl...You'll get someone else..
Viren:That's what I thought when I was with Jeevikaa...Then I found Amanda and after I got her I didnt want anyone else and now that I lost her I dont want anyone else either...My love for Amanda was and will always be true
Virat:Bhai! Just forget it!
Viren:I cant just leave me alone for a while pleaseee...
Virat:Okaaay Bhaaai!
Virat sees Amanda crying likeee heell she was not stopping onlyyy...
Virat goes and sits next to her..Amanda hugs him and cries on his shoulder
Amanda:Virat,Why does all of this only happen to me yaar???...Why??
Virat:First of all stop crying! And promise me you'll never ever ever cry...
Amanda:Sorry I cant...
Virat:Then let me go!
Amanda pulls him back...And continues to hug him...Manvi sees this...Manvi walks upto them..
Manvi:Uhmm Virat can I speak to you??
Virat:I'm busy Mannu
Amanda:Virat just go she's getting jealous :P...Leave me alone just the way everybody else did
Virat:Amanda,let anybody leave you but I promise I will never :)
Manvi hears all this and runs to the backseat and starts crying...
Viren screams
Viren:Dekho dekho hamari draam-e-baz ro rahi hai
Shanab to Jeevika
Shanab:Don't go...She's wrong today she deserves those tears..
Amanda:Viren don't dare say something like this about my Mannu okaay??
And she runs to Mannu..
Amanda:Kya hua Mannu? What's wrong??
Manvi:Just go away stupid ho*!
Amanda:What??
Manvi:I'm crying because of you..
Amanda:Why...What did I do??
Mnavi:Jaaaooo just few minutes back you were gluestick now become fevicol naa...What you waiting for??
Amanda:What??
Manvi:Virat! DUH AMANDA!!!!!!!! Why were you getting soo cozy with him??
Amanda:I told you we are just friends...I woud never consider Virat as something moreee...I know you lovee him Mannu..I will never betray you
Manvi:You are a betrayer and your amazing at it
Amanda:Whom did I betray??
Manvi:Jeevika DI!
Amanda:And how did I betray her??
Manvi:Viren!1
Amanda:Gosh Mannu! Why can't you understand?? She's happy with Shanab..
Maniv:No,she ain't I know my Di better than anyone okay??...She's just pretending because of yoou! You freaking Moron!
And she goes and sits in the front...
Amanda to herself:
Everyone has so much of problem with meee...I have no right to exist in this world...
Sooo Amanda opens Shanab's bag and takes out his metal scale then she unscrews the blade from her sharpener..
She's almost about to lsit her Viren that's when Viren sees her and comes running and hugs her and takes the blade from her hand...
Amanda closes her eyes and feels her pain even moreee...
Amanda:Viren leave me alone...Just leave me and give me back my bladee..
Viren:No I won't...Now I'll never...I shoudnt have listened to you only???...And what the hell is worng with you???...Were you trying to kill yourself???...Why??? I know its because of me its all my fault...Its I who should diee not you..
Amanda covers Viren's mouth..And snatches the blade from his hand...Manvi comes back...
Manvi:Look at you Amanda,still sooo shameless...Still sticking to Viren??
Viren:Manvi just leave us aloneee...
Mani:No,I can't because you with her is hurting my Di...
Viren:Just look at Jeevika she doesn't even care :P
Manvi:I know what she feels from the insideee...
Viren:Do you know what Amanda was going to do??? Just because of what you said she was gonna cut her hand...END her LIFEE!!
Manvi:I would be the happiest person on earth if she did that a Man-Stealer like her doesn't deserve to livee...
Hearing all this Amanda just goes to another seat and weeps and weeps and weeps...No one comes to comfort her except for Viren
Viren:Amanda,
Amanda:What Viren??? What's you problem?? What do you want from me??
Viren:I want to tell you that I had heard a proverb "Jaan dene wala ki jaan,jaan bachane waale ki ho jati hai" Toh ab tumhari jaan tumhari nahi hai meri hai...You have no right to take it away..
Amanda:See Viren,My life is really really screwed up I have absolutely no reason to live..
Viren:You sugested we be friends right?? Sooo fine friends...
Amanda:Viren don't be friends with me..My today is sooo bad I dont know what tomorrow will offer meee.
Viren:Tumhara kal kaise bhi ho ham usse mil kar khoobsurat banayenge :)
Amanda:Stop this filmy nonsense with me please Manny has a problem if I talk to you and I dont wanna largen that problem soo please just stay aways from meee...
Hopeee you liked this update :)
Questions...
Please answer these questions in your comments :)
1.How is the banner??
2.How is are all the charcater including Amanda??
3.Any suggestions for improvement??
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Manvi Just Doesn't Seem To Let It Go..Felt Sad For Amanda,Luckily Viren Stopped Her In Time..Even Though Manvi Told her Soo Much Of Things,She Still Refered To Manvi As her Friend..Why Is Manvi Behaving like that though??...
Banner Is Quite Nice just a small Query..Who Is Amanda??..Can't see the pic clearly in the banner..
No complaints against any of the characters...
Thanks for the pm..
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Posted: 12 years ago
#24
nice update
thanks for pm me
cont soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#25

Nice update...! Maanvi is a dramabaaz...but looks like she has a competition... LOL would love to read more on VirMan.. Thnks for the PM!

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Posted: 12 years ago
#26
story is good
i hope viren n jeevika b together again
thanx fr pm

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Posted: 12 years ago
#27
that was amazing dear
Hope they are together
Thanx 4 d pm
Update Soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#28
wow thanks for the pm
continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#29
Awesome update.
Continue soon n thanx 4 d pm
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Posted: 12 years ago
#30
NICE UPDATE. BUT WHY MANVI IS OVERREACTING.

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