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Posted: 12 years ago
#31
sorry guys..this updates taking a little long..i have an exam ...but i'll surely update ..and surely a Longgg one
thank u 😊 😊 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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part :3

They turned around to see who was it...and to their surprise it was Karan ..Jeevika's landlord's son and Viren's buddy from their school days.Seeing him Viren jumped out of his car and hugged him .They were very happy to see him..being a gentleman at heart took Karan to Jeevika to get them introduced ..but he was surprised to see that they already knew each other ...
and to break the mystery he spoke up.."wo wowooo tum log ek dusre ko pehle se jante ho..kaise???" and his eyebrows were raised like anthing..and Jeevika and Karan were laughing😆 😆
and Jeevika replied to him saying "yeh mere landlord ka beta hai ...😊 " and Viren was like 😲 😲
then the three went to their respective classes promising to meet after their class in the park


AND story shifts from their college life to the present where everything has changed...
Jeevika is with a small boy in the kindergarten school. the boy was holding her finger tightly like he would never let her go..this made her happy and reminded her of someone..someone very special ...but her thoughts were broken as she realized that he called out to her and was pulling her down
she bent down to listen to him and felt that he was there..she felt his presence which was missing,which she longed for in all those years...
the boy told her "mommy, i don't wanna go.i want to satay with ur right by your side ..please mommy don't send me,plzz"
her heart seemed to melt down but controlled her emotions and told him "why are u so worried, mommy will be right here waiting for u ..don't u want to go to school, make new friends and have fun"and he replied "no, i just wanna be with u..plzz mommy" and made a face which could make anyone his slave and one could never deny him..but Jeevika caressing his hair told him "look baby, mommy will be right here, and u'll be fine in there ..umm ok we'll go to the summer park when u'll be back home from school but for that u need to go to school and be back soon...u love summer park and wanna go there na..so rush "
this brought a smile to his face..though not the brightest but he could now leave his mother and go in " he hugged his mommy , gave her a kiss on her cheek and went in ...and Jeevika was left outside with the rest of the parents...
she was waving to him even when he was gone..she was actually lost in her own thoughts...since the sun came up in the sky she was feeling some anxiety and didn't feel like doing anything except thinking about HIM...she was not able to justify herself why she was thinking of him ..who didn't loved her, who betrayed her, "why , why , why " she was asking herself ...but at the back of her mind that over the years she had missed him a lot and longed for him each day and wanted him to return but ...😭

(guys i am making the story a background story to increase the suspense...hope u like it 😊 )

Edited by nimiksham - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#33
Alot of suspense but its alright
Your update was awesome
Plz continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#34
she left the school compound questioning herself, lost in her thoughts and without seeing here or there...she was feeling very lonely and wanted a shoulder she could keep her head and cry her heart out and throw it all out which been buried in the deep corners of her heart...
she was crossing the without her senses present there and was about to be knocked down by a car but the disaster was prevented...she apologized for her absence of mind and went forth ...
HOME
she was not feeling well due all the thoughts racing in her mind , disturbing her and bringing back the old days which she left 6 years ago and were now the thorns under her bed...she thought to herself "was my behavior towards Viren insane, was i the one who broke our vows, am i the culprit making 'Trishi ' live a life which is much less than what he deserves, am i..." and her thoughts were given a halt by the door bell which was being rung hard
she wiped her tears , arranged her hair and went to see who was at the door..as she opened the door she saw a familiar face,who had been there in the bad times of her life..it was Swamini bua...Viren's Swamini bua who was there for Jeevika at all times...Jeevika never understood why she supported her and not Viren and she never made her feel that she was a member of the family which she left ...
seeing her she gave an expression of surprise and then bend down to touch her feet seeking her blessings...she took her in the house and the ladies sat down to chat over a cup of tea...
Swamini could make out that Jeevika was disturbed and asked her what was the matter...Jeevika didn't spoke and just tried to control her tears..
Swamini stood up and asked her the same thing again..this time she could not control the out burst ..she was full till the brim and the outburst was necessary..she spoke her heart to her which relieved her a bit but total comfort could be brought in just by him
having shared her feelings for bua she was better than before. when she left Jeevika stated to get ready to pick up Trishi from school...as she knew he would be very sad if he does not finds her waiting for him...she didn't knew what awaited him at the school

On reaching the school she wwas waiting for himto be out and share his experience. the bell rang,the children were out but Trishi was not there..Jeevika was worried..she stepped forward to go out in his search but he came in sight i the arms of a lady..it was Maanvi
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Posted: 12 years ago
#35
how could i missed ur story...!! it was simply awesome... good job dear...!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#36
This story is getting more confusing by every line..
So many thought overran my mind when I was reading the two updates.. The suspense is really good...but. Ant make out whether your telling the past.. Or what is exactly happening, I mean the story just skipped from college to this life.. It is really good... But. Really wanna know the actual thing all together...
Update soon and thanks for the PM!
Would love to read further..
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Posted: 12 years ago
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thanks for the PM and wonderful written continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#38
awsome update!! so much suspense...
can't wait 2 read next part
thanx 4 pm..continue soon!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#39
Hi,
Thanks for the pm first of all :)
And read all the updates just now, i am loving it, but the confusion and suspense is building up so much!
Amazing, please updaate soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#40
guys i m seeing that u all are a bit confused..but i m just showing the past phase and the present...

Maanvi had Trishi in her arms ..Jeevika was not happy seeing this because earlier Maanvi had tried to separate her from Viren and now she might have some intentions to harm Trishi and seprate her from her ...Maanvi stood before Jeevika and said hi..jeevika replied to her but in a kind of rude way..jeevika took Trishi in her arms and was abot to leave when Maanvi said "pooch gi nahi kesi hoon..kya ab main itne buri ho gaye" "Jeevika akhir aisa kya hogaya ki ab hum dost bhi nahi reh sakte "..Jeevika made Trishi go to the car and turned towards Maanvi "tum pooch rahe ho aise kya hua..jaise tum kuch nahi jaante..tumne kuch kiya hi nahi"
M : main toh aaj tak nahi samajh paye ki maine kiya kya hai..jeevika we were Best frnds but what happened that u hae me now..i want an explanation for this change
J : maanvi i don't think u deserve 1..a girl who can spoil her frnds life deserves the worst..i never expected u to come btw me n Viren..its all because of u ..bcoz of u Trishi is away from his dad...i hate u ,maanvi..i hate u and plzz stay away from my son...tears rolled down her eyes and she left ...
Maanvi was left there to ponder upon what Jeevika just said..she couldn't get it why Jeevika believed her to b the reason for the rift btw her and viren..it was true that she loved Viren but when she came to know that Jeevika loved Viren she had decided that she won't come btw the 2 of them...but then why was jeevika thinking so...

sorry guys for a short update but a long one tommorrow..hope u guys like it as the tangles in the story one one by one...do hit the like button and leave ur comments 😊


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