Inside Virika and VirMan's minds- OS

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This is quite a random OS. This happens when you can't sleep and random thoughts occur. I haven't decided if I will continue it or do Maanvi and Virat's POV. I've written this in a different style something which I have hardly used, so hopefully it comes across well. As weekends tend to be boring, you are all welcomed to be further bored, with the nonsense in my head :D

Jeevika's Point of View

I am 6 and a half months pregnant. For the last few days, I've been having some really bad headaches, but it just must because I'm worrying about Maanvi. She takes up all my time. All I do is worry and care for my sister. I have never seen anyone in so much pain before and as much as I try, I cannot take her pain away. My husband is constantly worrying about me, and it is not that I don't care for myself or my baby but there is something in me that I can't change. It happens automatically and I can't help it, Maanvi has always been my priority and now more than ever.

Maanvi has been taken into hospital tonight due to pain in her abdomen. Upon Virenji's disapproval, I decided spend the night by Maanvi's side. He tried asking me to leave and come home, even Maanvi tried to make me understand and asked me to go home, but how could I leave my baby sister and rest comfortably at home? Once Maanvi had fallen asleep, I sat there holding her hand as I watched my angel finally get some rest.

The next morning whist Maanvi was still asleep Virenji came into the room. We decided to step out, as he wanted to talk to me. He was trying to conceive me to come home and rest for a few hours as I had spend the night here against his wishes. How could I make him understand that I can't just leave Maanvi. Even if Virat is with her, I can't rest at home whilst she is here. She is my sister, my only sister how could I leave?

My head was beginning to hurt again. He was adamant on his point about me looking after myself, sometimes it felt like he only ever said one thing. And I didn't know what else to say anymore. My head was pounding; I could hardly hear what Virenji was saying. I closed my eyes and tried to breath, hoping that it would take the pain away. As I opened my eyes, my vision was blurred. I tried to grab onto the table next to me. It felt as if the ground beneath me had been removed. Suddenly I was lying on a bed with a doctor checking my blood pressure and was being asked to pee in a tube for a urine test. After peeing in the tube, the doctor left asking me to take it easy. Now I was left with Virenji staring at me as something had happened.

Viren's Point of view

My wife is 22 weeks pregnant. This should be the happiest part of our life, it is our first child, but with Maanvi's health no one can truly be happy. Day and night Jeevika worries for a sister and in doing so neglects herself. As much as I try to make her understand, I can't. As well as caring for Maanvi, she needs to care for herself. Tonight Maanvi's had severe abdominal pain and was rushed to hospital. I tried to conceive Jeevika to come home and rest. The last time she stayed with Maanvi in hospital, she was so exhausted and weak we almost had to admit her. Even Maanvi tried to conceive her but she doesn't listen to anyone. Why does she have to be so stubborn?

I ended up letting her stay the night, I knew I shouldn't but I couldn't argue any longer. I decided to head up to the hospital early in the morning, so I could conceive Jeevika to come home for at least a few hours. As I entered Maanvi's room she was asleep, yet Jeevika was wide-awake sitting by her side. I took her to an empty hospital room and tried to make her understand that she needs to look after our child and herself as well as Maanvi. I even told her Virat would stay with Maanvi. Yet she was adamant on staying.

As I was trying to conceive her, something seemed wrong. Jeevika had a somewhat dazed expression on her face as if she wasn't hearing me. I held onto her as she grabbed on a table. She closed her eyes as she opened them she looked straight through me. I tried talking to her, but she did not seem to respond. I sat her on the bed and rushed to get a doctor. She began checking her blood pressure and it was higher than it should have been and ordered a urine test. We left Jeevika to take the test and stepped outside. The doctor explained that Jeevika's blood pressure higher than it should be and that the pressure has been increasing over her last prenatal checks. Therefore, she wanted the urine test to see if Jeevika is at risk of preeclampsia. She explained the risks to me and how it can have serious effects both Jeevika and the baby. I walked back into the room to see Jeevika lying on the bed avoiding looking at me.

Ok guys I told you it was kind of random, excuse the tense discrepancies. Hopefully you might have enjoyed it

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Neha.K. thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Pooja 😊😊😊😊😊 I wish u can get a review through my Smiles only... coz sometimes i feel out of words... your writing makes me spell bounded... Kya kahun..?BriLLinAT.. SupErB...
the idea seemed so realistic..especially with all the things currently going on in the show..This would definently be a great way to put J' pregnancy and her Tension for her Mannu into the script...
It happens automatically and I can't help it, Maanvi has always been my priority and now more than ever.- How true.. it amazed me how overwelmingly emotional you wrote it...,though it was so short. Keep up the good work...the plot is amazing... you are gonna continue na?? :D


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very nice...plz do continue with this os...
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Awesome!!!
I really loved it😊
Your writing is very good...do continue..
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Wow... I speechless! What a unique and amazing OS... Your an amazing writer... Well done.. I'll look forward to reading more of your stuff🤗
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As random as u call It Pj, it was really awesome
I can easily imagine Jeevika 's concern for mannu & ignorance towards herself & the unborn...course when 1 kid is in trouble in front if ur eyes ...howz one supposed to care for unborn

& Viren's pov was also justified...his concern for both his sis in law & wife & his unborn inside his wife ...that frustration and helplessness is sth I want to see on-screen
U know what if lack of sleep comes up with such ideas...m gonna haunt ur dreams dude
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Originally posted by: sweetdollashita

very nice...plz do continue with this os...


Thank-you very much

Originally posted by: shine123

nice.pls continue ...


Thanks for your comments glad you like it

Originally posted by: jenna_p

Awesome!!!I really loved it😊

Your writing is very good...do continue..


Thank you for the lovely comment- Glad you liked it
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Originally posted by: nobo

As random as u call It Pj, it was really awesome
I can easily imagine Jeevika 's concern for mannu & ignorance towards herself & the unborn...course when 1 kid is in trouble in front if ur eyes ...howz one supposed to care for unborn

& Viren's pov was also justified...his concern for both his sis in law & wife & his unborn inside his wife ...that frustration and helplessness is sth I want to see on-screen
U know what if lack of sleep comes up with such ideas...m gonna haunt ur dreams dude


Thanks Priya for your comments and liking it 😊. Like I said it was just something a randomly thought of. Haunt my dreams? Or are you not going to let me sleep?

I'm glad it was relatable and make sense for both POV, that was what I was trying to do. As it was written in the first person I wasn't sure if it would come out in the right way 😃
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Same thing dude...if I haunt ur drmz...u won't sleep neways na...Lolz
Yes writing from summone else's pov is difficult ...but it was cleanly penned out
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Posted: 13 years ago
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random post dear, but it sounded well thought of and written.
great work yar.
loved the medical touch to it.
first pregnancy, high bp, urine test,
preeclampsia.
thats of seious concern

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