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vishwa patel

@-vish-

Rocker

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Posted: 13 years ago

#41

aww..poor jeevika...i hope she comes out from her depression with help of viren...

amazing update...loved how u expressed jeevika's feelings in the notes.

pls continue soon😊

and PM me

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girl97

@girl97

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#42

so cute and nice part

i love ur concept a lot

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Anu101

@Anu101

Navigator

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#43

Thank you so much for the pm

😭😭😭

Feeling so sorry for Viren and Jeevika..I just can't bear that they are going through al this..I mean they are the blissfully happy couple...

Your concept is really nice and your story is so touching ⭐️

Hugzzz

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urmil

@urmil

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#44

lovely update...i am not getting words to praise the beauty of your writing skill...hats off dear

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Priya

@nobo

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#45

Really emotional & aweosm one Pj...Jeevika's state of mind & atmosphere in house is described very well...both VJ have gone through a bad phase...ESP J...but finally she opened up to viren...it always helps

But a lot is to b unwrapped yet...the way Manvi is avoiding J's calls

& the last line that Viren is supporting her But this isn't enough indicates a lot of other things yet to come...

But really nice one & the best part was J's outburst & Viren's urge to c her happy...to take all her pains away

Lovely update !!!! Waiting for next one ..

&& colours r nice always an add on while reading & as for story making sense I dont find it confusing & by the sound of it...it seems well managed..so don't worry about that

PS - & u can really think dude...I mean J's notes r quite philosophical...end point of life & all that...I love such things But to be honest when I Read them with concentration & tried to think on J's pov...I ended up being hungry !!!!

Edited by nobo - 13 years ago

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preetivr

@preetivr

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#46

after loosing who was closest to her soul, her sis, if life had given her ahope, it was the pregnancy.

and that too ends out tragegically.

now i can connect to jeevika here. its too much of loss she has been through

as you put really well sometimes when you have most of what you want the void will still be there, cause emotional proportions of importance of people in our lives is only what we know, and only that one person can fill such a void. no replacement works there.

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shabeelaforKT

@shabeelaforKT

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

#47

an awesome concept!!Feelings,pain...both r just simply commendable..Jeevika pain for lossing evrything...Viren as alwayzz a big support as alwayzz hides his pain..evrythng was just Superbb...Simply Commendable..i want to read more and more partss or never ending partss..plz do update soon...
thankss for d PM!

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shine123

@shine123

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#48

superb...loved the way u described everything...jeevika loosing everything...n viren being her support...amazing...continue soon...n thnx 4 d pm...

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Fari_15

@Fari_15

Dazzler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#49

This was awsome,loved it to the core.Poor virika lost their baby,though I feel bad for jeevika but my sympathies wud be with viren,he has always been so loving and supportive,but may be jeevika didn't,there were so many other issues tht consumed her,tht she lost focus on viren.(I m saying this keeping in my yr SS) .The way u write is so good,it's so gripping and the story is very interesting!

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NEHA KASHYAP

@Neha.K.

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#50

Sorry for being so late to review this... I m doing combined comment of last two updates...
I don't even know where to start...Shitt...M kinda..hating you and loving you right now.🥱
Flashback scene was OUCH...they broke KHOON KA RISHTA:(:(:( M' anger.. its been 13 months they are not in contact...aah... still alive??🤔 whose photo J burnt?

"Ignore everything? Me? You're the one who is ignoring your feelings. Something has pissed you off, yet you won't acknowledge it and tell me. And I'm the one who is ignoring things. . 😊 - I love VIREN in ur SS the most... and J is always my fav. :))) I'd like to say right now that I LOVEDDD EVERYTHING U WROTE...
The Way You Write, The Plot, Details, Everything... SUPERBBB Pooja👏👏👏

They lost their Baby... :( means Jeevika lost her two babies.. her pain is no doubt much more than Viren...

I've lost everything, my parents, my family, my sister, MY child. Everyone is gone, they left, and some forever, whist others carry on with their lives, without even looking back. Where am I left, alone by myself." incredibly powerful and so heartrending...You've got me in tears, here..my heart's literally aching

Viren leant in and cried on Jeevika's bed. Slowly she patted him on the back and as she tried to understand what had happened.😊😊😊😊

Viren reading J's notes... Superb idea👍🏼

So they are heading to Hrishikesh... Well then for sure Behnas gonna face each other after an year... :) well i wud love to know they meet again... so update the next part sooon... Overall Brilliant writing...Very well-written.. excellent use of descriptions, physical and emotional. Keep it up

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