ShraMan FF: Holding You, (C18 pg 102) - Page 29

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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: vimikrao

Sumo was hurt beyond any words, she didn't want to go in front of him but wanted to make sure he is fine. Shravan's inner fight between forgiveness or hatred towards his parents. Hope Shravan understand Sumo's feelings for him & reciprocate to it with full heart. Hoping to see some light hearted moments between Shraman soon.

Beautifully written
Vinu


Thanks Vinu ;)
Light hearted moments before some heartbreak coming your way 😉
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Nik03

Sal...🤗
Just read last 3 parts in one go...!!
So here the res 😉
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Unres(For chappi 5)

Killer one Sal... 👏
Ramnath Malhotra's redemption...!!
Can I tell you that you had written ALL in your style what I badly wanted to read and badly wanted to see...A hug your way for that buddy... 🤗
Thank you 😊

Oh you truely didnt realised Mr. Malhotra...not only you, nobody realised actually!!
Shravan always had wanted an assurance...assurance that he was NEEDED and that he do BELONG...to someone, to his loved ones!!

Hall of fame...Just a mere materialistic things!!
He do had found everything...success, his own identity, name, fame...But lost himself, his true self!!
What an irony!!

The most fav line of mine here Sal...
In the quest of creating a man, he had killed the child inside him and as much as he tried he couldn't bring him back....Loved it sooo much ❤️
Exact words to explain to what extend, you had destroyed Shravan, your son Mr. Malhotra!!
Killed it here girl 👏

Even though Ramnath was to be blame for Shravan's pain but!!
I always had a soft corner for him...I cant hate him...not more than Nirmala Ahuja!!
He had made his son a successful personality, he had made his son strong n confident individual, he had loved his son with all his heart...N most importantly...He was there with him...Atleast he was there!!
He was in every damn way, a better parent than Nirmala Ahuja...N thats a fact for sure !!

Redemption...It is what you can do now...He sure was late but better late than never!!
N yes,...He does have his support system with him this time...His life,his wife, his best friend, his childhood friend, his Sumo!!
She sure was the woman who would stand strong no matter what comes her way when it comes to Shravan, her chashmish!!

Shravan was going to hurt. His heart was going to break, again....❤️ ❤️
Actually Shravan's heart was made to be broken!!
No matter who was at fault, but his heart n soul was made to be broken!!

Scared Shravan, insecure Shravan...He always was!!
But Sumo can see through...through the facade, through his mask of indifference!!

Morning scene...
ShraMan at peace...N am at peace❤️
Their bickering...Oh!! How much I missed it ...Loved it !!
Their cute, lovey dovey moments...Haaye
Beautifully penned down girl...❤️ ❤️

Shuddering Shravan...Aww!!

It was funny how easily they could fight with each other but when they had to open up to the other, they found their palms sweating and their hearts racing....Indeed!!
#ShraManGoals

Emerald earrings...Aww!!
Shravan..❤️ ❤️
Sumo truely was imprinted all over his mind... 😳

Aapne ghar ? Ye ghar tumhara nahi hai kya...Oh My!!
It did felt like...Like a child is speaking...A hurted child, complaining child, an insecure child who is afraid...afraid to lose her...Who wants an assurence that shes here ...with him...foever!!
Loved it !❤️
Actually Shravan's Love was like a child...Stubborn, Sweet, always giving, demanding, Soo.Innocent, soulful...!!

The way Sumo assured him...She is the Sumo we all want to see...She is The REAL SUMO!!
Thank you Sal...🤗

Tumhe kabhi bhi kisi cheez ke bare main baat karna ho to main hoon. Jab tumhara dil chahe, to bula lena, main poch jaon gi....Thats what he ever wanted!!
And Only n only Sumo can give him that!!...Sooo damn loved it Sal..❤️

Hamesha...Aww!!
It gives a diff feeling when Shravan whispered it seeing her retreating figure!!

I soo Loved it how you had chosen that very same place for confrontation!!
It held special place n memories.!!

Loved how you had taken care of simplest things which held so much importance and feels real...Like the way Ramnath seeing Shravan sitting infront of him n thinking how times flew!!
Great work buddy...Small things but held great importance n left great impact!!


The way you had written the whole convo...Splendid job Sal 👏
I can literally imagine it all happening infront of my eyes...Nailed it here buddy !!

He was an object to them, his love was nothing more than a thing. One had estimated his worth, the other had sold him...Nothing can describe Shravan's pain than these words!!
Can feel connected to them!!

was a nightmare and there was no emergency exit from it....Ah!!...The words n their impact... 👏

She was the only one I ever wanted. The only thing I ever asked from you...It had left an impact on my heart like no other Sal...Touched me hell deeply❤️
Made me cry...N mind it am not one to cry easily...Always in control!!
So you can imagine its effect on me!!

Shravan really would have choosen his father had he asked him to chose btw Sumo n him!!
Shravan's condition n state of mind in your words Sal...Oh My My!! 😭
Kitna rulaane ka iraada hai Sal??
Nailed it...Killed it girl!!

He wanted to sleep and never wake up again....Pain pain n pain!!
How do you bring someone from the darkness, how do you hold their hand and ask them to stay?...Espacially when that person is hopeless!!

One touch and all his defences came crashing down, he was so vulnerable with her, so exposed...He always was!!
This is what makes them ShraMan!!

Crying...!!
It is how your body speaks when your mouth fails to explain the pain or happiness you feel...!!
Shravan...My heart goes out to him... 😭

Darkness engulfed him as oxygen left his body....Oh My God!! 😭
Nervous Breakdown 😭

This is the sound of heartbreak, it's silent....Oh My My!!
One line n it said it all!!
Touching one 👏

OMG Sal!!
You are something else ya...Indeed !!
Hats off to you buddy... 👏
Am in loveee with this one...❤️ ❤️
Thank you for writing it...😊

Ok!!
So I have literally written a short OS here 😆
Cant help it you know 😉😆
Nikke se Nik se Nikka sa likha nahi jaata 😆

Thanks for the pm dear...😊
Loads n Loads of Love n tightest of 🤗 🤗
Nikka sa Nik ❤️


No matter how many times I read this I just can't stop smiling, man I missed you 🤗
I totally understand your thoughts about Ramnath, they match mine 😉
The little thing you said about Shravan's heart 🥺
I also liked the morning scene, I would have loved to see them bicker, being happy with each other ❤️
I love it when you quote the lines you liked it really helps me when I am unsure about what I have written.
Shravan to hai hi baccha ;)
You are one observant soul bro, you saw the thing I tried to do, when Shravan is sat in front of him
👏 I think more than the writing is the attachment you all have to the character that makes you feel that way.
Thank you so much Nik !
Aur waise bhi Nikka sa nik ko chote comments suit nahi karte ;)
Thank youuu ❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: KitkitMkb

No matter how many times I read this I just can't stop smiling, man I missed you 🤗
I totally understand your thoughts about Ramnath, they match mine 😉
The little thing you said about Shravan's heart 🥺
I also liked the morning scene, I would have loved to see them bicker, being happy with each other ❤️
I love it when you quote the lines you liked it really helps me when I am unsure about what I have written.
Shravan to hai hi baccha ;)
You are one observant soul bro, you saw the thing I tried to do, when Shravan is sat in front of him
👏 I think more than the writing is the attachment you all have to the character that makes you feel that way.
Thank you so much Nik !
Aur waise bhi Nikka sa nik ko chote comments suit nahi karte ;)
Thank youuu ❤️


Glad that I could make you smile.😊
I tried to be an observent...😊
True that we all have attachments with the whole EDKV fam but writing has its own effective way that makes a reader feel attached to the happenings...N you are pro at it my girl 😳

Haina!!😳😉
Suit nahi karte na isliye hi to!!😆
Thank you too buddy...🤗
Edited by Nik03 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Unresed @ pg 36 for chappii 6
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Beaware...Its looonnnggg 😆
Cant help it!! 😛
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Posted: 8 years ago
Unresd at 33!
Like always,,loved it more than what was written in that box..!
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Posted: 8 years ago
Finally got here 😕

What an emotional update Saleha 👏 I'm in love with the way u deal with the emotional and intense narration .. the words the scene etc are all superb 👍🏼

Their is so much pain and bitterness in Shravan and Sumo is the only healer for him .. his insecurities and securities are eased only by her .. what an beautiful mess this is .. seriously kudos to mr jha for these characters the story and all the forum writers who put so much life and emotions .. each in their own way !!

They like twinning rope whr they meet and are pulled apart and meet again :)

Waiting for the story to progress 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
Amazing story dear eagerly waiting for next update.
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Posted: 8 years ago
waiting for next update dear please update soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
Unresed @ pg 36 for chapii 7
Finally!!
Sorry Sal...Am late. 😕

Love🤗
Nik
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Posted: 8 years ago
MKB ab kitni kitkit karu ki tum aaj update kar do. Its officially tomorrow night !!

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