Mil Jaate Hai Jo Bane, Ek Duje Ke Vaaste- Alternate ending - Completed - Page 83

Originally posted by: SleepyPsycho

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Psycho🤗

Sorry if I go absurd in between or I have to cut short the comment,I have lost my specs and I really cannot see the screen properly nor can I concentrate on it for a longer time,my eyes really burn.

Arey ya... Baad mai reply kar leti tu...

Oreo,this epilogue took me to a whole journey all at once through just words and made me smile hard.Zoya Magician on her duty,doing it extremely well!

Aww man.. Thank you so much 🤗

Begging the update with Shraman nok jhok (Their true essence ) was adorable (including the foam footsteps too *_*)

Haina😛

Then came the besharam Shravan, kissing his wife in front of family indicating very merely just to show how impatient he was.Naughty Bachha😆

Ekdam naughty😆

Then came THE Tulips and Shravan saying "Cause I am a fool' Epic and cute.

You know I always wanted Shravan to remove that car and place pictures and pictures of them and their family and you brought it alive,Thank You!

The dialogue exchange that followed was life!

You did too! Glad to know I am not the only one😳

Also a big bear hug for not forgetting our prem patra by Mr.Malhotra and the instance when Sumo had read it and mentioning it with utter perfection.

Bear hugs back at you🤗

That bit of intimate scene we got was mindblowing,my cheeks were all red and sanskaariness had risen 😳

Aww, mine too😆

Then Shravan ka 'Pyaar agaya toh agaya' Man! That was way too cute,I want someone like that so bad.(P.S.-Stop setting my soaring high standards higher!)

Well why should I suffer alone😆 With my standards off the roof, everyone's should be😉

The diya rangoli was beautiful.

Glad...

Then the watch came in and the 'MY 007 <3' idea,way to brilliant! Kudos to you for that.

Thank you!!

Shravan is such a naughty man, wishing for Mini Sumo to spoil her rotten but that was again very cute.

Indeed

That kaleidoscope part stole the whole update for me! Panda hugs for writing it.

Panda hugs back at you! They are both too broken and still have beautiful hearts, takes the cake, baker and bakery for me

That pregnancy announcement was one of a kind,so unique and absolutely marvelous!

Chef Sumo at her finest😃

My favorite dialogue being 'You don't love me any more.. Mai bataoongi sabko! Zulm karta hai mera pati mujh pe, khana nahi deta hai.'.HILARIOUS!

Hahaha! I could imagine Suman doing such melodrama and Shravan being the least bit perturbed 😆 Its just how they used to be...

And god! I loved how you understood Shravan so well here and added the dream and fear of Shravan,way to beautifully penned,absolute delight to read it.All those emotions were extremely well expressed!

Shukriya ❤️ He was very unsure of himself throughout...

The birth part and Shravan being a baby again and doing everything except of calling the car,had me in fits😆

Hehe Oxford level gadha...

I always wanted Sumo to sit on Shravan or have some moment of that sort but we got the kids doing that here but never the less it was super super adorable.Along with Sumo,it made my heart melt.How I always wished to see Shraman babies and Shravan as a dad.Phooti Kismat humari.

Kasam se yaar!

And what stole the second part for me was this:

'"And mine Mommy?" Asked Shravan bemused.

"I didn't know I had three kids?"

"Oh you do! I'm the eldest.."

"With the youngest brain.."

The kids kept looking from Mommy to Paa and Paa to Mommy. "Uffo Mommy, jusht kish Daddy! We want to go to park!" Said a very frustrated Samairah.'

HOW EFFING ADORABLE.I am copying this in my notepad and I am gonna read it whenever I feel down,cause I am sure its gonna help me out and make me smile.

Arey yaaa... Thank you hai ji aapko...

The quicky part was ☺️

Well that it was...

Please don't mind what I am going to say right now.Your last few dialogues of the updates had gone a bit too cheezy and over the top sounding a bit melodramatic but this Epilogue was perfect,everything was so well.No complain but only and only smiles and happiness.

Not at all.. All views are welcome...They had? Umm I felt they were fine.. But thanks for pointing it out, I'll re-read to see where it got cheesy...

I hope you are writing more stories very very very soon cause I ain't the one to wait more.

Well wait you shall have to.. I'm on a writing sabbatical.. Over ho gaya merko😆 But I will eventually write...

Also the length was a blessing😉

Glad you felt so...

Loads of Love!

Love back!

Originally posted by: -AnnieQueen-

Zoya🤗

You're back!!!!

Hey love

Hey hon!

I know I disappeared yet again but what to do

Exams exams and exams

These entrance exams can really be a pain

I understand.. No issues😳

But I can say that at least the hard work paid off

I got chance in my desired varsity😃

That's great! Congratulations! So proud of you❤️

Now coming to the story,

What I really felt reading the whole story was how dedicated you have been not only with the story but also towards your readers

Well that's a first...

It is a great thing really

I could feel with each line and word that I read I can say you have thought over scenes and explained every detail with sheer dedication

You didn't rush it neither there was any need of fillers

And you solved all their problems in a way the ShraMan we knew would do

No matter what; no matter how much trouble they have to face; no matter how many MUs come between they can sort out all the issues without much drama like they did here

Because here ShraMan are sensible enough not to fight on baseless things and not letting their ego win over their love

You portray the actual ShraMan

The way they should have been always but they lost track

Man! That's the best thing I've heard today! Thank you so much🤗

The scenes after their marriage

The love making

The sweet nok-jhoks

All those scenes were mesmerising

Especially I loved the scene where Sumo was upset about her mother and Shravan held her

I always wanted this scene

The way Shravan dealt with the betrayal

I liked it and it was fair

Both his parents were to be blamed

No one was flawless

BUt everything was worth it

Shravan finally came back on track and so did Sumo

I loved the way you portrayed his fear

This story was really something we needed after the abrupt ending

And I really can't thank you enough for that

You don't need to thank me hon! It was something bubbling in me and it needed to be told...

Love you Jaan 🤗

Love you too jaan 🤗

Originally posted by: yashimalhotra

read the last update and the epilogue together

That must have been a massive read😆

two uber long chapters and i love that

I'm so glad you do!!

filled my heart with joy and made it all fluffy

Hehe

a great diwali present

brillliant

Thank you!

thanks for the pm

You're welcome!!

Originally posted by: A.Hajnal

Zoyaaa, thank you for this amazing journey...

You're welcome anytime...

Would never have words to tell you how much peace you were able to give to our thoughts...

This is the best compliment ever...

Know that every word you have written was appreciated and would be a source of peace for me whenever I would be haunted be the incompleteness of EDKV

Thank you for making me feel so much better...

...Thank you! 🤗

Originally posted by: orion23

Well koi nai,we both hold a different meaning and esscnence of certain stuff,what might be cheesy for me might not be the same for you and vice versa.Everyone defines words and feelings differently na? Anyway you rocked it and did this for us is all that matters!

Originally posted by: SleepyPsycho

Actually you know I also had a slight feeling about that but the truth is while writing, I too felt that some dialogues can't be written without them being cheesy. it's just the way they are. they might seem that way but that's normal I guess. I mean come on love tends to be cheesy so that is obvious😃

Originally posted by: -AnnieQueen

Actually you know I also had a slight feeling about that but the truth is while writing, I too felt that some dialogues can't be written without them being cheesy. it's just the way they are. they might seem that way but that's normal I guess. I mean come on love tends to be cheesy so that is obvious😃

Originally posted by: devilaonmoon

Reading... 😃

Originally posted by: devilaonmoon

Aw..., dear!

Couldn't believe it seeing my name in the special mention.

*Feeling delighted... 😳*

Thanks, Zoya.