Poem:Emotions (Suman's POV Updated pg6)

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi everyone! How are you all? 😳 So, i am here today after long with a little poem for you all. Trust me i'm not at all satisfied with the outcome of this attempt. Nonetheless i would like you all to read it. Hope you like it still.
This is based on current track in Shravan's POV. Here you go-

EMOTIONS
(SHRAVAN'S POV)


Is this love or hate
How shall i christen you my mate?
An emotion this peculiar
What shall i call you in particular?

Whatever this is whether pious or evil
Ah! It does ache my heart, like the devious devil
Loathe her, i do
Although i can't live without her too

I detest the very sight of hers
Yet to set eyes on her i do long forth
Of hatred i do claim
Still can't put her to shame

Why so much care
I place in her share?
Why her pain whether or not shown
Manages to hit me like my own?

These wounds on my hands, rendered in her defence
I choose to remain indifferent towards!
And nevertheless my anger shall not rest in peace
Until i've broken every bone of he who dares to harm her, piece by piece

And not just the two of these
My heart, guilt does seize
Because somewhere i too was responsible
For her state this miserable

How shall i face her
Of a heart fluffy as fur?
Why, do i need to?
Cause she always knew

The entire world mocks
As i know not to laugh or to cry, much in shock
Complicated you complicated me and complicated gets everything
As i seek to re-tie these broken relationship strings

Who has the ability to rest
These confusions that lay me to test?
And her or myself, who is it to whom i lie
Or was that always just a try?

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Love
Ramya❤️
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Res!
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Me first! *smiles in pride*
Ramya!
Tu toh poetess bhi hai!
Kya masst likha hai!
I love the 2nd and the last paragraph the most!
It's brilliant!
👏
Edited by orion23 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Res :(
...

Baitu!
First is the worst
Second is the best
Haha!😆😉

...
Unress

Amazing amazing!⭐️

Complicated you complicated me and complicated goes everything!
Nailed it there!

And the last verse! Oh my! Perfect!

Awesome awesome My Wordsworth! No one can beat my Sis in poetry! ❤️So emotionally stormy yet soothing! Loved loved it!❤️
I wonder what'll happen the day you're 'satisfied', if you're not with this! We'll be dead hopefully *smirk*😉😆

Wonderful! 😳
Keep writing such pieces

Lub You🤗
Edited by Artist_Forever - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Unressed First 😃😃😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
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"Whatever this is whether pious or
evil
Ah! It does ache my heart, like the
devious devil
Loathe her, i do
Although i can't live without her
too"---This is my favourite part. I loved loved it. It's just PERFECT. Everything is just so striking. Shravan's emotions are expressed in the bestest way. It's lovely. I loved every single bit of it. Wow! I would like another one from you. From Sumo's POV. P.S- I just love poems.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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What do I say?? Its freakin' awesome ya!!!

Complicated you complicated me and complicated gets everything

These lines say everything!!!!

Main teri haye re jabra hoye re jabra fan ho gyi *dances* ( daro nhi I'm harmless 😆 )

Keep writing!!!

Loads of love
Priyamvada 🤣
Edited by sapphire3 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Ramya it's amazing dear..
Beautifully written.
every word every emotion..
Amazing dear..
Mine favorite lines..
I detest the very sight of hers
Yet to set eyes on her i do long forth
Of hatred i do claim
Still can't put her to shame..❤️
Fabulous dear... 👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Ramya 😃👏👏 This one is for you...how well you have written yaar...you have penned down shravn's emotions so well...The poem says it all...do share this with sumo 😆 may be she ll understand what is actually going on in his mind...Brilliant as always...Din't know you write poetry as well...Ejoyed reading it...Keep writing more...Till then take care.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Ramya,
This is beautiful!!
My favorite bit has to be this -"The entire world mocks
As i know not to laugh or to cry, much in shock
Complicated you complicated me and complicated gets everything ❤️
As i seek to re-tie these broken relationship strings"
Loved the verse!
You write so well. Keep up the good work.
I would love to read something from Sumo's POV.😃
I'm being greedy here.




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Posted: 9 years ago
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Ramya,
This is superb..
Fantastic poem... Loved it absolutely...

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