Galib - A narrative in context of Sharaman's love Part 2 (Pg2)

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Galib, Suhanvar ( poet ) at par ... Still relevant. I want to try to narrate these beautiful Gazals and weave Sharaman's story around these Perls .

na thaa kuchh to Khudaa thaa, kuchh na hotaa to Khudaa hotaa

Duboyaa mujh ko hone ne, na hotaa mai.n to kyaa hotaa



When there was nothing just a void, a blank you existed ... And if nothing was in existence still you would have been present ... You are everywhere in nothing and also in everything.

What distroyed me is my existence ... No one can destroy something which doesn't exist.

Tum tab bhe the jab kuch nahi tha ... Aur jab kuch bhe nahi Rahega Tum tab bhe rahoge... He is talking about existence of love ... Bas agar Mujko ye ahsas nahi Hota ... Mere pyar Ka ... Kya Tum mujhe distroy Kar pate...

Sharavan_ Suman Tum Hamesha thee aur Hamesha rahoge ... Kyoki you are my love but main Barbad hua kyoki main apna exsistance tumhare sath chaha ...Mujhe pyar nahi Hota to Kya mujhe ye dard Hota ...


I would take situations of Sharaman' life one by one and try to enterprit it .

Note:- view and opinions are invited as it's something out of league ... Mujhe continue Karan chahiye ya nahi ...

Part 1. Har ek baat pe kahte ho - Taunts on Suman

Part 2. Phir kuchch is dil ko beqaraari hain - Sharavan's inner turmoil after marriahe


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Suman on Sharavan's taunts and beahviour

har ek baat pe kahate ho tum ki tuu kyaa hai
tumhii.n kaho ke ye a.ndaaz-e-guftaguu kyaa hai

You taunt me on always on everything... You Tell me what kind way of talking is this ?

ragon main daudate phirane ke ham nahii.n qaayal
jab aa.Nkh hii se na Tapakaa to phir lahuu kyaa hai

Jo khoon ... nason main daudta hai vo kuch bhe alag nahi kar raha .. ye to agar fight ke vakht aakhon main khoon naa utar aaye to uske kya value hai.

I don't believe in passive life .. I want to test the water ... I want to fight with life ... what's a life with of self-respect.

chipak rahaa hai badan par lahuu se pairaahan
hamaarii jeb ko an haajat-e-rafuu kyaa hai

Mere kapde mere badan par khoon se chipak gaye hai .. ab kuch fata bhe ho to use silne ke kya jaroorat hai...

I know taking risk has its own consequences ... its my dreams which made me bleed and now I am covered in my own blood ... my life is covered in blood, pain and fight but I don't think there is need to mend it any more .. what is lost is lost ... now there is no need to patch even a little thing or part.

[pairaahan=dress/cloth/robe; haajat=need; rafuu=darning]

jalaa hia jism jahaa.N dil bhii jal gayaa hogaa
kuredate ho jo ab raakh justajuu kyaa hai

jab shareer jal gaya hai to atma bhe jal gaye hogi ab rakh main se kya doodhte ho ... aakhir chahte kya ho.

I am burned by your taunts, your deeds ... even my soul is burned ... still you come and scratch my ashes ... My wounds ... tell me what you want ... I am dead now .

rahii na taaqat-e-guftaar aur agar ho bhii
to kis ummiid pe kahiye ke aarazuu kyaa hai

mujme baat karne ke taqat nahi bachi hai ... aur agar ho bhe to kis ummeed se baat karoon aur bataon ke mere kya ichha hai.

I don't have stamina to talk ... and if I can muster the courage to talk to you ... what would be the basis of my request ... I have no expectation left. I am not even sure you will listen.

[guftaar=speech]

banaa hai shaah kaa musaahib, phire hai itaraataa
vagarnaa shahar me.n "Ghalib" kii aabaruu kyaa hai

main tumhari sah par itrati the . tumhare sath par naaz karti the varna mer kya aukat hai.

It's you because of whom I used to fight the world ... My pride was because of you ... you were my pride ... What I am without you... I simply don't exist.

[musaahib=associate]

Tum etne taane kyo dete ho... main kya hoon ? mujhe batate ho har roz... ye kya tareqa hai baat karne ka.

Haan main try karna chahti hoon life main.. jeena chahti hoon apni sharto par ... vo life bhe kya jisi bina fight diye chor diya jaaye ... tum batao ... mere passion ke bina main exsit karooge kya. Bina lade kaise gutne tek doon ... bolo ye to marne ke barabar hoga...

Mere self-respect aur tumhare behavior ne mujhe ghayal kar diya hai... mere jindi taar-taar hai ... main sar uta ke chal to rahi hoon par mere kandhe jhuk gaye hai ... mere soul shattered hai... tum ye choti choti madad lekar kyo aate hoo... ab fark nahi padta.

After the dance part _

Aaj tumne mujhe ... mere aatma ko jala kar rakh kar diya ... Fir bhe baar baar samne aate ho... mujse baat karne .. taane marne . nothng left Sharavan you are talking to a dead body... only ashes left ... ek hava ka jhoka bhe me muje uda dega ... mighty sumo is just a facade ... I lost all my hopes, my dreams , my will to fight ... (this is the moment she abandoned her dream of PCT and Sharavan and accepted her fate to marry Aditya)

Mujme to himmat bhe nahi bachi hai tumse baat karne kee ... Aur agar ho bhe to kis haq se baat karoon . Kis ummeed se kanhoon ke tumko chahti hoon ... kya tum sunoge bhee...

Main to tumse thee... main tumhare dum par gooroor karti the... tumhare dum par tumse ladti thee... ke tum mere ho... varna mere kya aukat hai ... main to tum se the ... ab tum nahi to main bhe nahi. ( that's why we see the life less suman)

Note ... Galib is one of my favorite poet ... please tell me if you like my narrative. Typo or grammatical mistakes ho sakti hai... cant proof read ..

Plese listen gazal on youtube to understand better.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DinEYZvLuxk

Edited by Wiccamaya - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Next is Bazzicha- E- Atfal hai dunia ... For Sharavan
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Posted: 9 years ago
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You made my day... 🤗beautifully written...👏
Looking forward for the next,..❤️

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Thanks sweetheart 😊
A single makta of Galib can be discribe in thousand ways... I am not capable to justify a single verse ... It's always Aha moment to read these masters ...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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amazing...it was really totally amazing...loved the way u used ghazal to show her pain...how broken, shattered sumo is...
pls update next part soon...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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amazing...each gazal described a part of shraman...hats off yar ..its really wow...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wicca use
Fir kuch is dil ko bequararee hai
Seena Zoya-e-Zakhm-e- kararee hai
Fir jigar Khodne laga Nakhoon
Aamad-e-Fasl-e Lala quraree hai

Iss ghazal ka har ek sher Mano Shravan ke liye hi bana hai
Some of it is apt for Suman too
Bahut khoobsurat ghazal hai
Edited by tibs09 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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are haan ... yesh good one ...
I am doing ...
bazecha-e -atfal hai dunia mere aage
hota hai sabo-roz- tamasha mere aage...

after that i will pick this one...


one of the sher is

go haath ko jumbish nahi
aakhon main to dum hai
rahne do abhi sagro-meena mere aage...

Thanks Tibs


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Posted: 9 years ago
#10
nice..

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