SHRAMAN SS |Waiting| The path of love.... IMPORTANT NOTE on page 31 - Page 3

Originally posted by: ezbeedscrittore

Damn! I felt so sad when Shravan cried.

Thankfully your Suman was sensible enough to let him know she couldn't talk to him instead of ignoring him plainly.

I liked the concept.

Welcome to the forum and continue writing more.

Yeah she is sensible here I agree 😆
I too feel sad when he cries and thats why to decrease his pain a bit i'll be updating next part 😉
Thankyou soo sooo much i'm so happy and delighted that u liked this concept!!! 😳

Originally posted by: Nimik

Plzzz do continue!!😳

Ohh godd nimik after fero the person I came across next was u ...though a bit late but yes n i'm soo glad u loved my OS ...i too love your writing a lott seriously!! 😳
Thankyou soo much i'll definately continue soonish!! 😳

Ok...so a very very thanx to fero my dear !!! And nimik and all of them who commented and boosted my confidence in writing more...zada achhe ideas toh nai aate hain hmko but i'll try my best and will definately try to improvise myself with more creative ideas
Here's the first chapter I really don't know what rubbish I have wrote so plzz bear with me like last time 😊


CHAPTER 1



As she was leaving his room, first she slowly peeped down the hall and then turned her gaze towards Ramnath's room. Ramnath was nowhere to be seen. In one breath she ran downstairs and straight out of the mansion right into her car and without wasting anymore second she started the engine and drove back to Tiwari Killa.

Once reaching home she went to mamiji , told her the conversation of her and kamini and assured her she'll manage this new brand thing so there's no need to worry. Mamiji agreed and became satisfied.
Then Suman went to her room. Exhausted by the happenings in his room she took a shower, freshen up and went total flat on her cozy bed.
She closed her eyes in relaxation and a sense of satisfaction soothed her mind that she wasn't able to face Ramnath when she was with Shravan...
She opened her eyes and got lost in Shravan's thoughts, his words, his laughter, his smile (remembering this a smile crept on her lips)...then she remembered...his pain...and...his...tears...
Quickly her smile faded away and she tightly closed her eyes.

Suman:* focus Sumo! Focus!! You shouldn't be thinking about him its a crime!...no wait...its a crime? Really? To think about him? ...huh! What rubbish are you thinking Sumo! The man you love , if you dont think about him then you're as good as a lifeless creature!*

She then thought what great thoughts are coming in her mind like seriously , lifeless creature?
She then dismissed the thought sealing it with a final stamp of 'CONFUSION' and dropped all other thoughts which helped her doze off to sleep...a peaceful one.
When she woke up it was 6 in the evening.

Suman:* Sumo tu 3 ghante so gyi?? Kitna time waste ho gya uff!*

Everybody were as usual busy with the preparations and arrangements.
Washing her face she went outside to lend her hand in the works. She went to Preeti's room. Preeti was as usual busy talking with her sweet (extra sweet I should say), innocent (clueless about anything to be precise) and 'OLD STUD' would be hubby!

Suman:* like really how can Pushkar even think of such lies! Anyways Preeti too is dumb in these fields I should admit!*

She remembered how Preeti came in her room all furious and burning pure red. She asked the reason, first Preeti denied that nothing happened but then she blurted out everything.

*FLASHBACK*

Preeti: Dii! I'll kill him! I'll so seriously damn kill him!
And huffed out a sigh filled with anger, crossing her arms.

Suman: Preeti! Hua kya?! Bataogi?
Preeti: Di Pushkar!!
Suman: Kya Pushkar?

Preeti (low voice as if its a secret): Di...Pushkar bol rha tha that he was a cool stud back in his college and larkiya marti thi uss par in fact abhi kuch din pehele tkk week mein 4-5 baar he used to meet his cute, pretty, sexy, hot chick Neha which he claims to be his friend! (she rolled her eyes in disgust)

Suman suppressed a big , heavy laughter and then made a very serious and emotional face. She turned Preeti around by the shoulders to make her face her.
Preeti who was childishly crying, seeing Suman's sad and serious face stopped crying. Suman wiped Preeti's tears with her thumb cupping her cheek with one of her hands.

Suman: Preeti...preeti...vo...jo mai tumse kehne jaa rhi hoon...use dhyaan se sunna, smjhna aur seh lena...
Preeti(worried tone): Kya baat hai Di?
Suman: Preeti...vo Pushkar...Pushkar ko...
Preeti(more worried tone): Kya? Pushkar ko kya Di? Boliye na!

Suman: Pushkar ko...pehele batao sadma mein nai jaogi na?
Preeti panicly nodded in no.
Suman: Pakka?!
Preeti again panicly nodded in yes with full force.

Suman: Thhik hai tabb...bata hi deti hoon...
Preeti: Batao na Di jaldi...mera jee ghabra rha hai ab...
Suman: Preeti...vo Pushkar ko...(looked down in sadness) personality disorder hai...!!
Preeti(confused): Multiple personality disorder suna tha par sirf personality disorder?

Suman again cupped preeti's face.
Suman: Preeti this is a serious bimari...jo Pushkar ko bachpan se hai...mai janti hoon kyuki mai uski classmate aur uski dost thi...abhi bhi hoon ...isiliye mai chahti thi ki meri behen iss baat se anjaan na rhe aur sach ko accept krte hue apna relationship aage badhaye.

Preeti(almost crying): Di...par ye kaise thhik hoga...??
Suman:* seriously my sister is this dumb? My sister?* (looking down again with a sad face) iska...koi ilaaj nai...uske khoon mein hai ye...

Preeti(confused and crying): Matlab?...hua kaise ye?...i mean kabb se?
Suman(looking straight into Preeti's eyes): Jab se vo apne aap ko larkiyo k beech ek bara 'STUD' smjhne laga hai tabb se!!
And burst out into a hillarious laughter.

Preeti(still confused): Di...I'm serious...mujhe kuch smjh nai aya...
Suman(controlling her laughter): Arre pagli...Pushkar aur stud na do different ...extremely opposite poles hain jaise South and North aur ye uski imaginary Neha vala angle is mind blowing...i must accept...maann na padega yaar Pushkar aaj b sapno mein jeena nai chhora hai aise mein apna personality bhulakar kisi stud vali personality apnane ki koshish krta hai but he fails so miserably! Tu bhi na Preeti...vo kuch bhi bol diya aur tu rone lag gyi...ohh god!!

And continued laughing
Suman(panting): Aaahh...my stomach is paining now!
Preeti: Di?! You really think Pushkar uss layak nai?
Suman: Kya?
Preeti: Ki larkiya uske piche bhaage?

Suman(smiling): Jao beta jaa k apne poojniye hone vale pati dev se poocho ye saval haan? Fir jo javaab dega mujhe zaroor batana
And again she laughed.


*FLASHBACK ENDS*

Suman smiled remembering that incident
Suman(looking at cheerful Preeti):* Dumbo but Darling*
And shook her head smiling as if Preeti kabi nai sudhregi.
Not disturbing the love birds she went to the kitchen as the best thing she could help at was cooking, when suddenly mamiji called out at her.

Mamiji: Suman!!
Suman(from the kitchen): Jij mamiji!!
Mamiji: Phone hai tumhare liye landline par!! (in the phone) lekin beta tumne hume Suman ko batane se kyu mana kiya tumhara naam?
Voice from the phone: Bass manju mami aise hi...surprise for her...
Mamiji(smiling): Achha achha...lo Suman aa gyi.

Hands over the reciever to her.
Suman:* landline par kisne kiya hoga...tu bhi na Sumo haath mein phone hai and tu uss insaan ko wait krva rhi hai*

Other side of the reviever was Shravan (as expected!)
Shravan:* phone par bhi intazaar krvati hai ye ladki!!*
Suman: Hello?

Shravan covered his mouth with a hankerchief
Suman: Helloo??
Shravan(clearing his throat): Ahem! Hello? Miss Suman Tiwari?
Suman: Ji mai hi hoon...kya kaam tha? Boliye?
Shravan(in low voice): Ji aapki avaz Sunni thi...
Suman: Kya??
Shravan: Maine kaha aapki madad leni thi...

Suman: Ohh...kahiye kaise madad kar skti hoon mai aapki?
Shravan: Vo...vo...*kuch soch Shravan kuch soch!!!*
Suman: Kahiye??
Shravan: Vo kya hai na maine suna hai aapki haatho mein jaadoo hai...toh mai soch rha tha ki ek baar humare aur humare company k liye bhi kuch bana kar bheje ...zara mai bhi toh chakhu aapke haatho ka jaadoo.

Suman:* kitna ajeeb chhichhora type ka insaan hai ye* (forced a smile) ji ji kyu nai kitne logo k liye banana hai?
Shravan: Yehi bass do logo k liye...mai aapko address de doonga...
Suman: Sirf DO LOG??!! Ye company hai aapki??
Shravan: Haan ji ab mai hoon aur meri wife hai toh hui na vo meri company?

Suman(smiling on his stupidity): Ji thhik hai...par abhi nai de paungi...actually meri behen ki shadi hai toh shadi k baad thhik rhega na?
Shravan: Haan toh mere bhi bhai ki shadi hai issmein kya hai!

Immediately realizing what he said his tongue popped out.
Suman: Aapka...bhai bhi hai?
Shravan: I...i mean mera cousin hai dooor ka toh uski shadi mein...(lowering his voice in romantic tone) mai...aur meri wife...dono shamil honge...toh hm dono ITNE BUSY honge ki ek dusre se baat krne ka time hi nai rhega jo aapka order recieve kar paayenge...so...thhik rhega shadi k baad pakka yaad se...bhooliyega nai!
He said while specially stressing on the word 'ITNE BUSY'

Suman(smiling): Haan haan nai bhoolungi...apni wife se bhi keh dijiyega ki jald hi unhe khaane ko milega.
Shravan: Ji meri wife ko pata hai already.
Suman(laughed): Ji thhik hai rakhti hoon.
Shravan: Suniye!!!
Suman: Haan?
Shravan: Khaane mein sev ki sabzi aur moong daal ka halwa zaroor banaiyega vo kya hai na mera favourite hai aur meri wife bohot badhiya banati hai...ekdm lajavab toh dekhoo aapke haatho mein zada jaadoo hai ya meri wife k...aur haan desi ghee kamm daaliyega...

Suman hearing this got lost in Shravan's thoughts and eventually smiled ear to ear.
Suman: Ji thhik hai.
And ended the call.
The other side Shravan too smiled ear to ear.

Shravan:* Sumo tum mujhe jaanti nai...(pulling up his color with one hand) Shravan Malhotra naam hai mera, tumhe mujhse nai baat krna hai par mai toh karunga!...chaahe tum jo kar lo...ab mai bhi dekhta hoon kaise aur kitne din dooor rehti ho mujhse...

Next day Shastriji, their holy priest came to Tiwari Killa and then they all went to Malhotra Mansion. Suman firstly hesitated but then agreed.
Shravan knew he cant do anything right in front of his family so he stood silently and whenever Shraman's eyes met Shravan would broadly smile while Suman would avert her eyes.

Shravan:* kar le beta jitna ignore karna hai...agar tum Sumo ho toh mai bhi Shravan Mal...kya Shravan baar baar apna hi naam yaad dilane ka zaroorat nai varna aisa lagne lagega jaise mujhe mera naam hi nai yaad rehta!*

Shastriji decided an auspicious and pious date for Preekar's marriage that was on 15th of next month. Lalaji became excited! Kamini was irked! All had sweets and then lalaji announced

Lalaji: Ohh toh bhai issmein deri kis baat ki! Chatt mangni patt shadi krva diya jaaye kyu?!
Ramnath: Haan haan...thhik hai na Tiwari ji?
Nanu: Haan...mujhe koi aitraaz nai hai

Everyone agreed while kamini looked at lalaji in shock.
Pushkar smiled shyly looking down like a girl while Shravan teased him and both laughed.
Suman gladly smiled and kept staring lovingly at the laughing Shravan.
Ramnath saw this and thought of disturbing the scene by seeking attension towards himself but seeing the whole family happy he stopped. He himself dint understand why?

Ramnath:* kya kar rhe ho tum Ram tujhe Shravan ko khush dekhna tha dekh kitna khush hai abhi vo...yehi hassi toh chahiye tujhe...fir...lekin agar Suman aise ghooregi toh uski nazar na lag jaaye...lekin nai...abhi k liye bhool ja...bass Shravan ko dekh...zada matt soch Suman nai kar skti himmat ab!!*

Lalaji: Toh fir thhik hai ji...hm abhi roka ka bhi taareekh tay krva lete hain!
Everyone: Haan haan!
Shastriji did some calculations and declared
Shastriji: Aaj se ek hafte baad ki taareekh bohot shubh hai roke k liye

And then the engagement was fixed.
Shraman while smiling saw each other and Suman uncomfortably looked away.

Shravan:* Bass Sumo...ab tum dekhna mera jalva...tum aise kyu kar rhi ho mai nai jaanta...aur tumhe nai batana toh thhik hai mai force nai karunga...par mai apne tareeke se pata lagaunga tumhare iss majboori ko aur jar se ukhaar k fek dunga ...zaroor pata lagaunga...aur fir humare beech koi rukavat nai aayegi...at least mere rehte toh kabhi bhi nai...ye vada hai mera tumse!! I promise!!*

So guyzz this was it ...plz do like and comment i'll be very glad if u criticise also coz it will only help me to improve 😊

Love,
Ameesha



Chapter 2- page 8
Chapter 4- page 14
Chapter 5- page 18

Wonderful ⭐️
Awesome update
I really wish to see such a naughty n lovely Shravan in serial too

Awesome update do continue soon

Originally posted by: Shree06

Wonderful⭐️
Awesome update
I really wish to see such a naughty n lovely Shravan in serial too

Loved your post👏
Ramnath bhi dhere dhere line pe ajaega 😉I hope so

Yeah you're absolutely right!! Ramu will slowly come on line!! 😉
And yeah this...was my dream for Shravan to become a bit naughty but sadly its a bit dooor in the show so I penned down my din mein dekhe sapne 😛
I'm so glad our thoughts matched and thanx a lot for your comment in very happy u loved it !! 😳

Originally posted by: agrawalrk

Awesome update do continue soon

I'm so so glad and very happy that u loved the update...will definately provide u with another awesome update ...i promise 😉 though I dont take garantee whether u'll like it as much u did this one lol!! 😆 but i'll try my best to entertain u all thankyou so much for the comment 😳

Darling plzzz update faast!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!🤗

Originally posted by: Nimik

Darling plzzz update faast!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!🤗

Cant wait at all!!!

BTW, u can call me Shikha.😉

I'm sooo muchh gladd u loved it to that extent!!!!!!
I'm very very happyy thanx a lot Shikha !! Luv u i'll definately update soonerr
😳 🤗

Amazing amazing amazing update
Hayeee shravan kitna naughty hai
Kaash aisa shravan show Mein dekhne ko mil jaaye😔
Really awesome
Please do continue asap 🤗