I want to be positive ff..finale.. Part 8 and just a lil after thought

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Suzaina

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Posted: 9 years ago

#11

This was wonderful

Shravan deserves this cold attitude now

But not so much

So break the ice soon please

Continue soon

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nancyrio90

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Posted: 9 years ago

#12

Thanks for your comments everyone..

Here's is Part 4

Next day Shravan got ready in the morning and straight headed for Malhotra and associates...

Sumo as usual left tiwari killa for PCT..her eyes went straight to Shravan s standing spot..she was disaaponited not to see him there today... and wondered where was Shravan this morning...she hoped he was well ...then suddenly told herself.. I don't care kahi bhi jaaye mujse matlab..but yet cudnt stop wondering as in the last 2 months he hadnt missed a days attendance in that "standing zone"..she quickly cleared her mind and drove to PCT..

At Malhotra and associates Shravan walked towards Ramnaths cabin..it took a lot of effort for Shravan to walk up to his dad for talking to him...but he knew..he had to do it..keeping his hurt and negative thoughts aside he had to do this!

He found Ramnath sitting with hand on his head... Though he felt bad but...it was nothing against the disgust that he felt..he started Papa.. Ramnath jumped out of his seat and almost ran towards him..Shravan stopped him by a hand signal and stepped back...

Ramnath said mujhe pata tha Shravan tum waapis zaroor aaoge.. Shravan gave a sarcastic smile..nahin papa. Main waapis nahin aaya..kuch kehna tha isliye aaya hoon..

Ramnath said bolo beta..kya kehna hai...bolo..

Shravan said..Papa aapne jo bhi kiya jiss bhi wajah se Kia mai woh kabhi samajh nahin paaunga ..par haan aapko inn galtiyo ke liye zara si bhi guilt hai ..tho jo main aapse ab kehne wala hoon aap shayad samjhe..he paused as though words were not coming easily..

He composed himself and said aapne sabke payar kai majak bana diya Hai..chahe woh mera aapke liye ho..maa ka mere liye ya phir.mera sumo ke liye.he paused.then contd..aapne sabke pyar aur vishwas ke Saat khilwad kiya hai.main puchna chahata hoon itna dhoka deke kya aap khush hai sukun mein hain?

Ramnanth said..bilkul nahi main bilkul bhi sukoon mein nahin hoon.aur yeh jokuch hua badalna chahata join..tum jante ho agar tum waapis...shravan dint let him complete.Shravan said apbhi jante hai past nahin badla jaa sakta.par agar aap isko zara bhi badalna chahate hai tho aur do pyaar karne walo ke beech mein mat aaye..Ramnath looked confused..Shravan continued..main Preeti aur pushkar ki baat kar raha hoon..Ramnath knew exactly what Shravan was saying but he said yeh kamini aur lalaji ka decision hai main issmein..Shravan gave him a sharp look and cut him midway. With sarcasm evident in his voice he said chachi Ne aapki koi baat kabhi nahin taali..u also know agar aap kahege tho woh na chahhate hue bhi manegi..aur lalaji tho waise bhi iske khilaaf nahin honge...yeh main jaanta hoon...Ramnath tried to say something..but Shravan got up and said shayad isse aapke gunaho ka bojh kuch kam ho...aur main...he dint complete his statment..and left..Pushkar saw Shravan leaving Ramnaths cabin and knew kuch dhamaka hone ko haI!!!

In the evening that day Pushkar was waiting for a call from Shravan as Shravan had told him he wud come up with something when suddenly he was called into the living area.. all family members were already there and Pushkar looked confused...Ramnath started.. Kamini tum hamesha chahati thi na ki Malhotra and associates Pushkar ka ho jaye.Kamini nodded with a 200 watt smile .yeh lo firm ke legal tranfer ke papers jo maine sign kar diye hai aur ab legally sub kuch Pushkar ko de diya hai..Pushkar tried to interrupt...but Ramnath said meri baat khatam nahin hui..par uske liye meri ek shart hai..everybody hearing attentively..Kamini tumhe Preeti ko apni bahu accept karna hoga..pushkar looked visibly shocked and kamini opened her mouth to object.but Ramnath said soch lo..now kamini u have to decide..I give u an hour..ache se socho as I plan to take shagun to tiwarijis house tomorrow itself..let me know..papers mere pass hi hai main study mein hoon and he left..

Lalaji told kamini Pushkar ki khushi ke liye hume ye karma chahiye chahe firm uske naam ho ya nahi..kaminis dirty mind was at work and she nodded and said of course..hum sab kal jayege..she thought to herself shagun hi tho hai..ek baar papers haath agaye phir she smiled wickedly...

Pushkar stood there..dint know if should be happy or regret his moms mentality..as he knew her motivation to accept the proposal was greed..he was also boggled with the sudden support for his love story which came from Ramnath..and suddenly it struck him like lightning and he blurted out loud "oh bhaiya tho aapne"...he trailed off..he knew Shravans presence in office today morning will invite some dhamaka .. par he thought with a grin yaha tho "diwali" ho Gai!!

Pushkar called Shravan to informe him of the good news...and that the family wud b going to preetis house tomorrow with proposal and shagun..Shravan tried to act shocked but Pushkar told him.. bhaiyaa I know and Shravan dint deny... he said to Pushkar...I am happy for u.. pushkar thot to himself yeh main apke liye bhaiya kab keh paunga..he insisted that Shravan has to join them..for shagun...Though Shravan ached to go but denied as he knew it wud hurt suman to see him in her house..but Pushkar said he wudn't go at all without him..with much reluctance and Pushkars unending persistence he agreed to join Pushkar along with family to go to Tiwari killa..

Good times r coming friends...I know the wait has been tooo ong...but it just round the corner

Feedback awaited!!Ovelook typos please

Edited by nancyrio90 - 9 years ago

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nancyrio90

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Posted: 9 years ago

#13

Well herez Part 5

Next day morning at Malhotra mansion everybody was getting ready to go to Tiwari killa and Pushkar thought to himself once this is settled I would tell sir I don't want Malhotra a ssociates on my name it belongs to Bhaiyya unko hi milna chahiye..he thought to himself he has to wait for the right time for this convo...

Pushkar had told Preeti that he would b coming with the proposal to her house with his family...it made her restless..noone else knew in Tiwari killa abt it...her restlessness was noticed by Sumo...Preeti had not shared abt Pushkar with Sumo as she knew it wud bring her memories of shravan...but she wanted to tell Sumo now...before she cud say anything the doorbell rang and Sumo said wait I will just come...

She opened the door and was shocked to see the entire Malhotra family standing in front of her..with sweets and fruits and some packets..she saw Shravan trying to hide at one side of the door but his tall frame failed him... pushkar gave a broad grin and a friendly hug to ..Sumo but she stood there unable to respond..Mamiji came pacing out ..kaun hai..woh dhoodhwala na..use bolna pani kam..and she stopped..she saw who was there...Sumo had frozen there as she dint know how to react...mamiji literaly shook Sumo physically and she somehow moved to the side giving eveybody way to get in...but she still stood by the side of the door..mamiji smiled and ushered everybody in..

Shravan was the last to enter and he saw Sumo...it was after a long time he was seeing her so closely..her eyes pale and she had grown weaker..their eyes met and they stood there looking at each other for a while..

A silent convo bw the minds started..

Shravan mind saying kya halat banna li hai Sumo...khaati peetii nahi ho kya..itna bada tiffin center hai thoda khud bhi khaa liya karo

Suman s mind replied meri jo bhi halat hai..usse tumhe koi matlab nahi hona chahiye...ye caring friend hone ka natak band karo..

Shravan s mind...Natak!!!.please sumo tumhara gussa main samajhta hoon par mujhe ek mauka tho de do please...apni baat kehne ka..maafi mangane ka...tumhe waapis apna dost kehne ka haq de do ...pleaase...his eyes almost pleaded to her..

Suman cud see a drop of tears forming into his deep brown eyes...

Suddenly dabbo came running with few of his friends without realising they all pushed Shravan so hard that he bumped hard in to Sumo..and they both lost balance and thud...were on the ground.Shravans tall frame was was on top of Sumo...Shravan instinictively put his hand underneath her head for saving it from hitting the ground...they looked each other shravan looked at her lovingly.deeply into her eyes...not that all these things of falling or being physically closed hadn't happened earlier..it had all happened.. but his realisation of unmeasurable and deep love for "his Sumo" had given this physical proximity a new dimension..sumo was too shocked to react...and suddenly became aware of the closeness and the affect it was having on her...she started to move..trying to restore the distance but he dint let her move..in disbelief..she almost pushed Shravan hard which made him sit up..she quickly stood up clumsily and was about to leave..when she saw Shravan s hand bleeding Profusely ..One of sumos hair clip had made a big wound in Shravans hand. Sumo instinctively jumped and starting wiping the blood on his hand...concern evident on her face & Shravan s heart skipped a beat and he told himself..she stillcares...she cannot see my wound my pain..

Dabbo said sorry bhaiya aap

Theek tho hai? Shravan replied "was never better and smiled softly tilting his head not letting his gaze wander away from her. Sumo looked at him...questioningly and he came out of his daze.. her expression making him realise the gravity of his own words and expression..

Sumo jumped back wiping of all expression s of corcens from her face...and told Daboo to get the first aid kit and put a bandaid on shravans wound... She was gone...Shravan thought to himself...chalo kuch tho diya Sumo..naya ghaav hi sahi...I cherish everything I receive from u...everything..

He was again jolted out his daze with loud voices from inside...Mamaji had rejected the proposal and said we don't want to give our daughter in this family after whatever they have done..kamini looked relieved ..pushkar and preeti looked miserable...Nanu who was listening to this convo till now..spoke up.."main janta hoon Malhotras ne jo bhi kiya theek nahi kiya...par mujhe lagata jiske saath galat hua...he looked at Sumo aur jiski zindagi ka yeh faisla hai yeh decision hume unpe chodna chahiye..he looked towards Preeti...he asked Sumo and Preeti what do they think..

Mamiiji made a face and protested...kya din aa gaye ki yeh ladkiyan ab decision lengi..Nanu interupted...and said "Manju yeh din bahut pehle aa jane chahiye the...agar shayad tumhe bhi apne decisions lene ki azaadi milti tho tumhara frustration shayad thoda kam hota..apni beti ko tho woh azadi do... and then he looked at both Suman and Preeti as if waiting for them to answer..Sumo said ek minute nanu and took Preeti to her room...they came back after fifteen minutes ..wait seemed like an eternity to Pushkar and Shravan looked equally anxious...

When they came back none cud read the expression on their face..Suman started " Main janati aap sab humara decision janna chahhate hai..thank u nanu hume ladkiyon ko apne decision lene ki azadi dene ke liye..she continued looking at Pushkar..Mujse zyada pyar ki importance shayad koi nahi samajh sakta...Pushkar in turn looked at Shravan..Shravan s eyes eyes filled with love guilt and concern for her..he looked at sumo without blinking ...attentively listening to every word she was saying...she continued...mere saath malhotra mansion ke logo ne jo bhi kiya ho uska Preeti pushkar ke pyar se koi connection nahi hai. ...giving a side remorseful glance to Shravan and Ramnath..and hurt so evident in hers and shravan s eyes...he heard her saying..pyar ek bahut khoobsurat ehsaas hai bahut pure aur sacha...

main bahut khush hoon preeti aur Pushkar ke liye aur unhe whole heartedly support karti hoon..she signalled Preeti to continue.. Preeti took the que and said..yeh sach hai ki Pushkar ko pasand karti hoon..I reaaly do..she looked at Pushkar..giving him a loved and convinicing look...par yeh bhi sach hai ki main iss relationship ko tab tak aage nahin badhana chahti jab tak dono families isse accept nahi kar leti..coz both things r important to me...Pushkar looked stressed as he dint know what the families wud say.

Shravan was in awe of Tiwari sisters show of maturity and poise in handling the situation..Shrava told himself...sumo aaj tum aur upar ho gayi meri nazron mein...u never stop surprising me...I love u even more today...and suddenly Sumo looked at him as if she cud hear him say that...he lowered his glance as if he was caught off guard..and she instinctively gestured a questioned look as if asking him what..too which he smiled and shook his head? She realised what she was doing and turned her face away..she told herself sumo he is not ur friend anymore ...

Nanaji broke into everybodys thoughts and said..bacho ne apni maturity dikha di...ab bari hum bado ki hai.

Feedback shall motivate me to continue

Edited by nancyrio90 - 9 years ago

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Nileshni Devi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#14

Read all on go. Brilliant write up . Please continue very eagerly waiting for the results the elders will come up with.

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Reading_love

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Posted: 9 years ago

#15

Awesome !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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don girls

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Posted: 9 years ago

#16

Interesting

Just read all the parts so far

And love it

Nice storyline

Update soon

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Crazypiya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#17

WoW sachhi mein pata nahin aisa kab higa..
Plzz continue

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Gurveen

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Posted: 9 years ago

#18

Brilliant
Read your story in one go
Shravan is regretting and Suman is not ready to accept his apology
Your ff is truly positive
The way you are writing on the whole concept is really amazing
At least Pushkar and Preeti ki love story toh sage bardh rahi hai
Suman still cares about Shravan yet she is so much hurt
Shravan really need to do something
Amazing
Continue soon

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nancyrio90

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Posted: 9 years ago

#19

Thanks for it comments

Part 6..

Lalaji came forward with folded hands towards mamaji and said...jo kuch ho gaya usse peeche chodte hai sameerji...inn bacho ke saath humlog bhi ek nayi shuruwat kartein hain... sameer looked at nanaji and he nodded in affirmation...then he looked at mamiji who was already nodding with excitement unable to believe her daughter's luck...

So sameerji smiled and held lalajis hand and said mujhe bhi manzoor hai..

A sigh of relief left Pushkar face and he smiled beyond description looking at Preeti who returned an equally sweet smile...

Sumo who was looking at both of them teasingly said ab koi aise arranged marriage tho hai nahi ki ladka ladki ko alag se baat karne chaatth or bhejna pade...iski tho koi zarrorat nahi hai..Shravan who was standing there said..par mujhe ladki se akele mein baat karni hai..Sumo pretending not to understand said tho karo Preeti se baat... Shravan replied tumhe bhi pata hai main kis ladki se baat karna chahata hoon ..suman ignored him and jumped right middle and said aaj sabke liye special khana main banaugee...aap log baate kare and she ran to the kitchen not wanting to be around Shravan as she was angry with herself of he still having an affect on her despite all that had happened...why just cud she not turn a blind eye a deaf ear and an immune heart towards him why!!!!!!

.she in her thoughts banged against the kitchen slab...Shravan who was following her saw her bump and smiled...he stood at the kitchen door and said..yeh tumhari bhidne girne ki aadat kabhi nahin jayegi.

She did not answer and kept taking out things from the refrigerator..her back towards him...she was telling herself ...pls jao aaj ssbke liye mujhe khana banana hai..tum gadbad karwaoge..please..and she turned with her hands full off stuff and bumped right into him as he had come and stood right behind her..main kuch karwa Doon he asked..She said haan..he became hopeful..sumo meri help lene no tayyar hai..wow!!! she said pls chale jao yaha se meri bahut maddad ho jayegi..his jaw dropped at her cold response...he moved back and stood again at the kitchen door..but did not leave..Sumo kept cooking and he kept standing there looking at her remembering their good old days playing like a movie in his mind..

Preeti came to kitchen and said..main tho aapki madad karne ayee thi..but seems u already have a helper..she said teasingly...she wanted to lighten up their mood...Preeti wanted them to talk ...break the ice as she was the witness to Sumos hurt and tears as she knew how much ever her sis tried ...suman cud never hate Shravan...she paced out of the kitchen with plates and said main table laga deti hoon..trying to give them chance to talk... Shravan kept standing by the door trying to find something to talk...it was strange there were times when they had to lay rules on who wud talk first now ...things had changed so much..it had been so long and not a word was spoken...just to start the conversation again Shravan said kya bana rahi ho? Sev ki sabzi...karele? Bhajiya ki sabzi..shikanji? Dal?Sumo had been ignoring him but somehowmention of dal made her fume...and she replied in utter rudeness kyon tum dulhe ho..tumhari shaadi hai? Jo tumhari pasand ki chheze banaungi...Shravan instantly replied tum haan karo tho aaj dulha ban jau...bolo kab karni ha I shaadi...She turned and looked at him... she was expecting a smirk a joking look on his face for what he had said and was about to give an equally witty answer.. but seriousness , passion deep look on his face scared her...she kept quiet as if she din't hear...Shravan continued please suman ek baar meri baat sun lo..and he moved inside the kitchen and stood next to her..she acted engrossed in cooking still shaken with the passion she had seen his eyes when he had almost proposed marriage...she was scared to look into those eyes that still had maddening affect on her...best was to act dumb and ignorant..and that's what she did..Shravan insisted I want ur complete attention for just ten minute can we please talk..Sumo knew this time she might not get away without listening to him..but she cud postpone this and she said ok..I will give u ten minutes but after everyone has finished lunch we will talk..Shravan could not believe his luck and almost jumped with joy with sumos acceptance to talk to him ...he instinctively held both her hands and kissed them and said thank u...u made my day Sumo u really did...Pushkar came in just then and saw Shravan s gleeming eyes and glowing face... and said teasingly lagta hai case jeet gaye aap...hinting towards sumo with a mischievous smile..Shravan answered almost glowing like a bulb.."nahi case tho nahi jeeta par pehli hearing ne kuch hope di hai...both brothers picked one one Apple from the fruit basket and teased her...Sumo kitna time leti ho khana banana mein bhook lagi hai..

So..apparently all my post r lengthy..uff..what has Edkv done to me...

Feedback awaited..lot of typos as I am writing from my phone..so..

Edited by nancyrio90 - 9 years ago