- Pyaar Ka Izhaar - : A Shraman OS

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Hey guys! Since confession is in the air, I thought of penning a small confession piece, in a hatke style. Enjoy it!
A funny, entertaining OS from me!



Pyaar Ka Izhaar





Pushkar waited in Shravan's room.
"Bhaiyya, aur kitni der?!", exclaimed Pushkar, irritated. But Shravan didn't seem to get affected by his loud cries. He was so busy getting ready.

Intehaan ho gayi, intezaar ki
Aayi naa kuch khabar, mere yaar ki...

Finally, after what seemed eternity, Shravan came out, all nervous.

Pushkar smiled, after seeing the hard work Shravan had done on himself. Black suit, white shirt, puffed cufflings and a bouquet in hand: A perfect confession attire!

"Hmm, jach rahe ho Bhaiyya!"
"Ab suno meri baat, dhyaan se... Aapko yaad hain naa kya kaha tha Maine? Aur is baar, Maine khud aapke liye yeh bouquet choose kiya hain. At least fresh toh hain, varna..."


"Haan baba yaad hain, ab zyadaa mat bol, samjha? Thanks, anyways"

"Toh phir pichle 50 baar se aap bol kyun nahi paa rahe? Bechaari Sumo kitni pakk chuki hogi! Kitna time waste hua hain ismein."


"Is baar bolkar rahoonga, I promise!!", said a determined Shravan.

He marched forward, and on a mission. It was Mission Confession! After all Pushkar had worked so hard in making them realise it. Poor soul had planned a million dates for him but he himself felt so uncertain and shy about it that he just couldn't! But this time, he was damn sure.

He reached the Park well in advance. He still remembered the first time he had set out to confess his love:



Shravan's Room

Books strewn all the place -- A Hundred Ways To Confess, How To Say Those Three Magical Words, Confession Theorems, etc.

He hurriedly wore his coat, still revising last minute notes from the most successful book : How To Say It All.
He was terribly late. He always laughed and cursed Sumo at her inability to reach on time but this time it seemed he was in real mess. The Bouquet seemed two days old , crumpled and cribbed.

His preps for D Day were going on since two days, with the bouquet bought well in advance. The Roses had changed to Blackish Red and were drooling out.

"Doesn't matter", he thought.

He rushed to his car. And set out for Hotel Palm Grove, where a table was booked in advance.

He was smoothly driving on the road when in a bid to move fast, he skipped a signal. The Traffic Police held him and started asking for license, etc.


Shravan was forced to cite the name of Ramnath in order to escape from him, quickly. But the Traffic Officer felt bribed and offended. He barked at Shravan to get out and held his collar.

"You rascal! Trying to bribe me, eh? I'll show you what's bribing."

He took him to the Police Station where he paid a fine of Rs. 500, not before standing in a queue of rouges.

Finally, huffing and puffing, he finally reached the Hotel. Hair strewn, coat tattered and bouquet looking all the more dull. That, was his first date. A complete mess!!
Of course he didn't dare to propose her at that time. Everything was wrong about that supper.




Shravan shook back into reality hearing Sumo's snaps.
"Hello? Kahan ho??"

Shravan nodded 'nothing' and cleared His throat. No more waiting now, it was time for action!!

"Sumo, woh mujhe tumse..."

Aree Ladki Beautiful Kar Gayi Chull
Aree Ladki Beautiful Kar Gayi Chull

Rang Sumo's phone.
"Wait a minute", said Sumo and picked it up.

"Haan bol Preeta! Kya?! Payment dene se manaa kar raha hain? Tu bass vahan do minute ruk, main abhi pohonch Rahin hoon". She disconnected the call and muttered some curses.

"Shravan, Haan woh tum kuch keh rahe the... (ab toh keh do atleast)"

But Shravan already was worrying about Sumo's temper.

"Woh ... Main tumhe drop kar doon?"


Sumo mentally slapped herself. He wouldn't be able to do it, for sure. It was Like a billionth time she had heard anything and everything but 'I Love You' from her stupid guy.

She got up at once and dashed towards the car, leaving him behind.
Shravan, poor boy, had to literally run towards her.
"Sumo..."

"Bass! Ab tum kuch nahi bologe. Ab sirf main boloongi. Kya tum teen shabd nahi keh sakte? Court mein toh bade bade arguments ladte firte ho, Mr. Lawyer? Kya mujhe hi bolna padega?"

But he was too numb to react. His lady, outright shouting at him, demanding a confession.
He couldn't help but smiling at Sumo's angry face. Her flicks shadowing her eyes, she was yet so adorable. His angry young lady.


"Ab bologe kuch?"
"Par tumne hi toh kaha tha, kuch mat bolo"

"Uff!", Sumo tapped her head.
"Theek hain phir. I Love You!. Dekha? Itna simple tha", she said it in a go.


She overtook him and opened the car door. Shravan was transfixed to the spot.

She had proposed him? Confessed to him? His heart did a somersault and he jumped. Finally!

"I Love You too", he mumbled.

"Heard that! I heard that!", came Sumo jumping back to him. "Phirse bolo naa".

"I Love You, I Love You Sumo!", confessed Shravan, finally, after confidence.


Yayy! They had done it. After 50 trials that went unsuccessful. After 10 years of ignorance. After an age of being together! After endless fights and quarrels!

Shravan triumphantly returned to his house after leaving Sumo to her debtors' place. He insisted on dropping her to Tiwari Killa but she told him that she'll manage back.

Pushkar was waiting for him with a bated breath. The much awaited moment. Had he said it?

Pushkar looked at him with bulging eyes
"Bhaiyya aapne..."

Shravan broke into a huge smile. His fists soared in the air. "Yes! Have done it!"

"Whoa! Bhaiyya, you managed to do it!! Great!. Main toh soch bhi nahi Sakta tha ki you're gonna confess, woh bhi Sumo se pehle."

"Urm..., not exactly", replied Shravan.





Love,
Mahi❤️


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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was a cute os. Nervous shravan...it was so funny sumo losed her temper and confessed first and then finally he confessed. It was so cute, amazing etc. (Cant remember more words for praising i m speechless ) loved it really. Lots of love for you.
-Anupriya
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome👏
Will reply in detail by tomorrow evening,
Exam khatam hotey hi tujhe pehla reply
Hugs
Keep writing on our Dhaansu couple 🤣
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Posted: 9 years ago
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How on earth do you manage to do it all???
I so love this confession! Bilkul dono paagalon ki tarah paagal hai! Reference books for confession? 🤣 Last minute revision? 🤣
Though in terms of appearance, Shravan chahkar bhi messy nahi dikh sakta. 🤣
Shravan and the run in with traffic cop seems unlikely to ever happen but such a comical scene it is!
Sumo the moohphat! [=D]
"Ab bologe kuch?"
"Par tumhi ne toh kaha tha, kuch mat bolo." 🤣 Suman, the Sumo!
"Phirse bolo na." ❤️

Pushkar the bae!!!

Adorable and hilarious AF!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Aww this is hilariously cute! 😳 😆 Don't mind but to be honest i imagined rosal the whole time in it! Kya karun,they were the first thing that came to the mind. With the books and revisions. 😆And Som/chakri making him do the rehearsals. I imagined som as pushkar sometimes and at others chakri with his amazing comic timing. 😳 Thank you so much for giving me this hatke style confession. ❤️
Its superb my girl!! ⭐️
Edited by ramya06 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: ramya06

Aww this is hilariously cute! 😳 😆 Don't mind but to be honest i imagined rosal the whole time in it! Kya karun,they were the first thing that came to the mind. With the books and revisions. 😆And Som/chakri making him do the rehearsals. I imagined som as pushkar sometimes and at others chakri with his amazing comic timing. 😳 Thank you so much for giving me this hatke style confession. ❤️
Its superb my girl!! ⭐️


Rosal, yes, they're definetly one set to fit in here. And you know what? I do feel Chakri and Pushkar are the same! Didnt i tell you, MP and Edkv were similar?

Glad you loved it. Thank you di🤗❤️
Edited by Artist_Forever - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: shinegirl100

It was a cute os. Nervous shravan...it was so funny sumo losed her temper and confessed first and then finally he confessed. It was so cute, amazing etc. (Cant remember more words for praising i m speechless ) loved it really. Lots of love for you.

-Anupriya


Hey Anupriya🤗

Thank you dear! So happy you liked it😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Artist_Forever



Rosal, yes, they're definetly one set to fit in here. And you know what? I do feel Chakri and Pushkar are the same! Didnt i tell you, MP and Edkv were similar?

Glad you loved it. Thank you di🤗❤️

Yes you did, and i do feel so! You deserve it!
So who's our bhago here?😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: potterginny

How on earth do you manage to do it all???
I so love this confession! Bilkul dono paagalon ki tarah paagal hai! Reference books for confession? 🤣 Last minute revision? 🤣
Though in terms of appearance, Shravan chahkar bhi messy nahi dikh sakta. 🤣
Shravan and the run in with traffic cop seems unlikely to ever happen but such a comical scene it is!
Sumo the moohphat! [=D]
"Ab bologe kuch?"
"Par tumhi ne toh kaha tha, kuch mat bolo." 🤣 Suman, the Sumo!
"Phirse bolo na." ❤️

Pushkar the bae!!!

Adorable and hilarious AF!



By all the support i get, am bound to write well!!😛
Am so so happy that you loved it.

Yes, did try to make it pagal and hilarious and i can see I've fared well here.
Lol, these two can definetly be crazy😆

Thanks a lot Yagneshri🤗
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: ramya06

Yes you did, and i do feel so! You deserve it!
So who's our bhago here?😳



Its Preeti, Sumo's younger cousin
And you should see how these two ladies drive their counterparts crazy!!😆
But tbh, she's a little harsh and unfinished, i dont like her much🥱

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