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Posted: 9 years ago
#41
Reserved to continue Artist_Forever aka Mahi's part..
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SORRY GUYS!!
Mummy be zabardasti lunch karne baitha diya tha...
And hence I am a lil late...

Here's the continuation...

Suman was patting at the ball of dough to make a roti out of it when she heard a knock at the main door. She knew it must be Pushkar with all the things she had asked him to bring. The knocking continued for a couple of more times not giving Suman a chance to come out of her apron and hurriedly she moved out to open the door.

The scene in front of cannot be called less than adorable. Suman in an off white apron with dabs of flour on her cheek, her hair tied in a haphazard knot at the back of her head with small wisps escaping the knot and falling onto her face, pinkish nose and light sweat on her forehead, holding a rolling pin was looking too cute. A chuckle escaped his lips and she closed her mouth immediately as she realised it was Shravan, the same lawyer brother of Pushkar, his hands laden with lots of bags not allowing him to ring the doorbell.

"Please come in... mujhe laga Pushkar aaya hoga..." she mumbled as she lowered her eyes in awkwardness, feeling that she again behaved very unlady like manner in front of this well behaved guy.

"Pushkar aane wala tha but suddenly he got a call for some meeting and he had to rush... so I did the shopping for you..." Shravan said putting all the bags on the sofa. He brought out a beautiful white and pink lily bouquet and presented to her. She looked at him surprised.

"Mai pehli baar aapke ghar aaya hoon... Kuch samajh nahi aaya ki kya lekar aau isliye bas... sab kaha gaye hai waise.." he trailed off. She took it from him with a smile as she uttered a sweet "Thank you... Nanu aur dabbu park gaye hai, mamaji office aur maasi aur mami dabbu ke liye shopping karne bahar gaye hai... "

"Thank god you liked it... or else I thought you would hit me with this belan..." he joked and she quickly hid it behind her back. She looked at herself and closed her eyes in embarrassment.

"Nahi... vo mai dinner bana rahi thi... you please have have a seat... I will be right back..." and she uttered and rushed in her room with the lilies.

Shravan looked around. A huge yet beautifully maintained villa. Decorated with lots of colours, it oozed elegance. Shravan's eyes came to a still as he looked at a fresh Suman coming out of her room. Dressed in a beautiful pink-orange floral kurti and tights and hair tied in a loose pony, she was quite a sight. Her silky hair always falling on her face, giving her a desirable look. She smiled again as she poured some water in a glass and offered him. Man, she was hell of a beauty and had one breathtaking smile. It was as if his thoughts weren't in his own control when he saw her. He would always want to imagine how would it feel to touch her, kiss her...

"Woah woah Shravan... again your thoughts are going the gutter way... stop it right there..." His brain screamed and he took hold of the bags to give her so that it can distract him and not cause the poor pretty girl any embarrassment.

So how was it... hope am able to hole ur interest...
@shailaja... eagerly want to know how u will handle the game from here 😉😆

Edited by Amreen... - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#42
Reserved to continue after Amreen's update. Guys, I'm going to go green! I don't mean jealousy. I mean that my updates will be light green in colour. Saw just now that dark green is already taken. So mine will be light green. Unressed

Though Pushkar had promised that he would come along with Shravan to help Suman out with her preparations for Dabbu's birthday party, but his matchmaking instincts got the better of him and he decided to send Shravan alone to Sumo's house making the pretext of an important meeting so that both of them would get more time to spend with each other and know each other better.

Of course, Pushkar knew that the entire family except Suman was outside shopping so as to give Suman time to make arrangements for the surprise party. And that was how Shravan and Sumo unexpectedly found themselves all alone at Tiwari Villa.

After a bit of embarrassed silence on both sides and exchanging a few pleasantries and courtesies like talking about the weather etc etc, both of them got down to the task at hand, that is making arrangements for Dabbu's surprise birthday party.

Suman was explaining to Shravan the technique of how to blow a balloon.

Suman: Balloon ko aise pakadthe hain aur...

Shravan(within himself thinking gutter thoughts): Kaun balloon ko pakadna chahtha hai. Main toh kuch aur hi...

Suman: Tum ne kuch kaha?

Shravan nodded his head vehemently. Did this girl by any chance know mind reading? He shrugged his shoulders thinking to himself "Not very likely!"

Shravan (Saying out aloud): How many balloons like this do you want?

Suman: Ten pink balloons, ten red balloons, ten yellow balloons, ten orange balloons,...

Shravan(In exasperation): Bas ithnahi?

Suman (Innocently): Thodi kam hai na! Toh sab fifteen fifteen karlena!

Shravan clicked his tongue in astonishment at the super-added cuteness with which Sumo said all this. She was beginning to play on his mind and heart like anything.

Suman: Main yeh ribbons stick karti hoon tab tak.

She got up on a tall stool and was about to begin sticking the ribbons when a leg of the stool broke and she was about to fall down. She tightly closed her eyes but the impact of the imminent fall never came because she found herself in Shravan's arms, clutching tightly at the collar of his shirt, her head hidden in his bosom. That was when she realized that he had caught her before she could fall. She was uninterruptedly staring into his deep, dark, brown eyes, which literally seemed to speak volumes to her.

With great concern in his voice he asked her, "Tum theek toh ho?

Suman also recovered herself by now as she said, "Main theek hoon! Par ab hum kya karenge? Yeh stool toh tootgaya aur yeh sare chairs bahut weak aur unstable hain chadnekeliye. Ab main upar kaise chadungi?

Shravan(A bit hesitantly realizing how stupid the suggestion seemed even for suggestion): Qutub Minar jaisa hoon. Toh agar main tumhe pakdun toh chalega?

Suman: Alright! Par giraoge toh nahin?

Shravan(to himself): Jo khud ithna girahuva ho, woh kya girayega kisiko? (Speaking aloud) Nahin main tumhe girne nahin dunga. (And as an afterthought, added this single question which made Sumo burst into peals of laughter) Tumhari engagement nahin hui hai na? Main jantha hoon Pushkar sirf meri tang keech raha tha.

Just then, Shravan realized what a Freudian slip he had made in his anxiety to know about her single status.

Sumo replied, "Yeh Pushkar bhi na! Bahut shararathi hai! Main ab tak single hoon!"

PS: Guys even my short bits come this long! So please adjust! Hope all of you like this continuation of Amreen's update.

Edited by shailusri1983 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#43
Given my chapter... plz have a look guys!!
Shailaja loved ur previous continuation abd waiting for next...do maintain the time gap... though I think waise bhi u will need some time to continue it... 😆

@Artist_Forever Wow Mahi... sorry for late appreciation... but I really loved ur part... u gave it a really good turn!! 👏
Keep it up...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Amreen...

Given my chapter... plz have a look guys!!
Shailaja loved ur previous continuation abd waiting for next...do maintain the time gap... though I think waise bhi u will need some time to continue it... 😆

@Artist_Forever Wow Mahi... sorry for late appreciation... but I really loved ur part... u gave it a really good turn!! 👏
Keep it up...


Thanks but I don't think I gave it a turn...
Just went in Shailaja's and yours flow...😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Artist_Forever



Thanks but I don't think I gave it a turn...
Just went in Shailaja's and yours flow...😆



Yes.. but when Shilaja and my update together messed it up you added a good addition with the flashback of the movie scene, in such a good way that it merges amazingly with the story!!
So I really loved the way u cleaned out mess 🤣
Did u read my continuation???


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome work Amreen. All my creative thoughts are going this way and that. I'll give mine shortly. Actually I think both of us posted simultaneously seeing the previous continuation. Mine got posted before and yours a bit later. But aise bade bade forums main aisi choti choti baatein hoti hain! This idea of Ressing and later Unressing and maintaining a time gap will definitely help in maintaining the continuity of the story.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: shailusri1983

Awesome work Amreen. All my creative thoughts are going this way and that. I'll give mine shortly. Actually I think both of us posted simultaneously seeing the previous continuation. Mine got posted before and yours a bit later. But aise bade bade forums main aisi choti choti baatein hoti hain! This idea of Ressing and later Unressing and maintaining a time gap will definitely help in maintaining the continuity of the story.



Thanks Shailaja...
Yup... exactly that's what happened...
🤣 Sahi kaha...
Take ur time but after reserving plz don't take more than an hour or so... 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi guys,
I've unressed my post on Page 6 which is a continuation of Amreen's post. Do look up and let me know what you feel or try continuing from where I left.
Sailaja.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow ppl, amazing yaa... It's going great... I will update it in the main post tomorrow...and will give my gutter inputs too 🤣
Ab mazaa aa raha hai ise padh ke...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Okay guys... am here again...
Actually Shilaja... I had written ki birthday kal hai and Nanu and dabbu park gye the so that means decoration kal hona chahiye as dabbu will be back after some time and will see the decorations and then surprise will be ruined na.. but never mind..I have tried to continue... plz see if u all like it 😊

Suman got hold of all the colourful streamers. She had planned to attach and then roll them so that dabbu isn't able to notice them. And after he is asleep she would open them and also attach the balloons and other decorations. Shravan bent down and wrapping his arms around her thighs he lifted her so that she could attach the streamers to the ceiling. Suman gasped at the touch. Suddenly the idea of lifting her was looking too bad to both of them. Shravan felt desire squirming into the pit of his stomach as her soft frame wriggled a little in his arms. Her sweet tangy fragrance numbing his olfactory senses, her long hair teasing his face. For Shravan it was like he has been told to hold a chocolate pastry but not eat it and for Suman... she felt her breathing quickening at the proximity. The sensations his touch was evoking in her... a mix of something passionate and strong with a hint of shyness... was something she had never experienced before. She quickly attached the steamers with trembling fingers and asked him to put her down in a meek voice.

Shravan slowly put her down. Though she felt relieved to be out of his arms but also deep down a sense of mild diappointment washed over her as soon as the warm embrace of his arms was gone. Shravan's hormones were on a drive right now. This girl has increased his heart beat and pulse so badly that he was just wanting to push her on the adjacent wall and kiss her senseless. Suman walked into the kitchen and taking out a cold bottle if water gulped one fourth of the bottle in a single go. Shravan could feel her suddenly changes behaviour, her quickened breaths and the redness that had crept up her neck. It all indictated that she was also not less affected by him. He walked behind her. Getting hold of the bottle he too gulped some from it.

"Are vo mera jhoota tha..." she cried as she saw him drinking from her bottle. He closed the bottle and kept it on the fridge as he shrugged his shoulders. She blushed some more and turned around to hide it.

"Sumo tum kya kar rahi ho..." he asked coolly leaning on the counter, with his hands folded on his chest.

"Mai vo cake banana shuru kar rahi thi.. maine socha kyu na ek chhota sa cake midnight celebrations ke kiye bhi banau... dabbu bohot khush ho jayega..." she smiled as she felt the thick tension in the air vanish slowly. Shravan heaved a sigh of relief when he saw Sumo coming to her normal self. God he should have never proposed the stupid idea of lifting her as it only put them in awkward situation and that too then when Suman had started too feel comfortable in his presence.

"Oh... toh mai tumhari help karta hoon..." he said.

"Are nahi Shravan... you are the guest... already you have shopped for the things.. now u please sit...mai kar loongi..." she said with a smile.

"Please Sumo... I am not a bad cook..Please...let me help... varna mai bore ho jaunga aise.." he requested with a puppy face he knew worked magically on women.

"Okay theek hai...vaha bag se cooking chocolate aur coco powder de do..." she uttered melting at the expressions. He jumped up as he rushed and brought all the things she needed.

"Dabbu ko us surprise ke baare me pata hain.." Shravan asked leaning on the counter again he gave her all she asked for and she took and mixed it with her brows furrowed in concentration, making the batter.

"Nahi... surprise hai toh kaise pata hoga... pata hai vo subah se muh latkaaye good raha hai... use lag raha hai ki hume uska birthday yaad nahi...us kya pata li hum uske liye kya plan kar rahe hai" she chuckled with mischievous eyes like a small baby. That heartfelt laugh couldn't help to tickle his senses. Oh god she was so damn beautiful. So pure... so lovely.

"Mmm... batter has came out so tasty..." she moaned in delight as she dipped another finger in the cake batter to taste it again. Shravan gulped down as she let out that sinful sound. His mouth watered looking at the smudge of batter on her lips. GOD this girl was going to make a mess of him. He was snapped out of his stupor as she snapped her fingers in front of his wide eyes and gawking open mouth. He nodded his head in a negative and Suman shrugged as she again went to the work at hand. Putting the batter into the baking dish, she had her tongue stuck out in concentration making her look like the definition of adorable. What was with this girl who could make him passionate one moment and the next he is melted into a puddle as she does some cute antics of hers. He smiled shaking his head at her when the doorbell rang and Shravan gestured that he will open it as her hands were soiled with the batter. She quickly washed her hands and ke ate the mess as she she heard Nanu and dabbu entering the house. She heard Shravan introducing himself to them and that brought a smile on her lips. She came it to see that mami and maasi too had returned and they all were chatting with Shravan. She gestured to them that all the plans were going well.


So what's ur opinion!!
Anyone who wants can please continue...
And give it feedback too... love u
Edited by Amreen... - 9 years ago

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