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Posted: 17 years ago
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Lashy your commentator is back. ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—

๐Ÿค— Wow, gobsmacked, outstanding part you have written. ๐Ÿ‘I cannot seem to find a word in the dictionary to describe how brilliant this part is. ๐Ÿ‘


It totally took me by surprise, ๐Ÿ˜ŠI did not expect the sad scenes between veer, his mum and mami ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ that bought tears to my eyes, agni (langoor kahi ka) trying to hit shera๐Ÿ˜ก , the fight between veer and bhimdev and veer getting injured and lying on the street ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญand shera finds him. Dharam remembering his moments with veer, his father. ๐Ÿ˜ญ

Kya twist maara hai story main ๐Ÿ‘, I dont think any of us expected this to happen in part 19. Hosh udaa diya humara ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—

What I loved :

    Veer's dialogue "Sanjaya ji you need to come along with me ...I have to show you something...I can't seem to understand...it is absolutely terrible..." ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜† i knew it that he is going to do something to sanjaya, after all he has got the go ahead from dharam

    Pretending to be horrified; Veer reacts by grabbing Sanajaya by his wrist and starts dragging the objecting commander away from his remaining group hastily. kya drama karta hai veer, he is so natural at it as well and needs no training๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†

    "Off late; my horse has not been galloping as fast...would you be able to ride it...check it for me..."

    Instantly aghast by the trivial issue of a seemingly obstinate prince, Sanjaya queries him "Amidst all these problems, you are worried about the speed of your horse...Rajkumar Veer ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ I love the excuse he comes up with that his horse does not gallop very fast. Sanjaya is so shocked after veers answer that he does not know whether to strangle him or laugh ๐Ÿ˜†

    Veer folds his hand and glares at Sanjaya, feigning anger "How am I supposed to fight on horseback, if my horse is ill or doesn't function to the best of its ability..." he pauses "If something happens to me on the battlefield...you will be to blame...Sanjaya ji..." kya nautanki karta hai veer. ๐Ÿ‘ talk about giving the guilt trip to sanjaya.

    "Sanjaya ji listen to me...I am not abducting you, so stop screaming like a helpless girl โ€ฆI am just taking you to the military chambers at Aryanagarโ€ฆwe need your help for something very urgentโ€ฆplease don't interrupt me and allow me to explain everything โ€ฆ I shall tell you everything on the wayโ€ฆeverything about Gadhwar...Chatarpur... the revolutionaries...but you must trust me...please..." ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ Veer kidnapping sanjaya. If veer was not a prince, i bet sanjaya would have beaten him for saying that he screams like a helpless girl. I do love the way you have described how veer takes sanjaya and asks his support. Anyway its not his fault, he is just following his older brothers orders ๐Ÿ˜†

    Aww veer explaining to sanjaya what has happened so far and to help him. I like his character and the way you have described his character as he is trusting veer and giving him a chance. ๐Ÿ‘such a wise man unlike the king.

    Kneeling near his mother; he observes the misty warmth in her eyes and savours the brief moment, till he catches sight of the tearful face of his aunt sitting beside her. So sad ๐Ÿ˜ญthat veer is trying to put a brave face on for his mum and mami's sake. So sweet the way he is reassuring his mami that nothing will happen to dharam, king ๐Ÿ˜ญ

    the way he reassures swati mami is so touching ๐Ÿ‘.

    the dialogue Since all guards are going to be busy with the revolts, I have managed to post only two here." Finding himself becoming increasingly emotional, he points towards the large bundle on the floor and continues "I pray you might never have to...but don't hesitate to use the weapons if needed. Everything is there in the bundle...sheets to keep you warm...wood, lamp and oil... some dry food to last for about two days..." This scene bought tears to my eyes, it is so sad the way veer is trying to tell them not to trust anyone and that he cannot post any more guards for their safety. He feels so helpless that he cannot even have an army to protect his loved ones.๐Ÿ˜ญ ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ

    "There is a large pot of w...water, which should last for about 3 days... only use it w...when necessary..." unable to complete his directions or watch the plight of his family anymore, Veer eventually begins to choke on his tears, as he confesses "Oh Lord! You wake me up with a glass of almond milk in your hand everyday, while your unfortunate son is rationing even basic food and water to you

    now!"

    lashy ๐Ÿ˜ญ, this scene brough out the tears and i am sure everyone will cry after reading this scene. I can imagine veer's pain when he asks them to ration the supplies and them remembers all the love they have given him ๐Ÿ˜ญ He must be feeling so bad asking his mum and mami to do that. Also at the same time the women are unsure as to what is going to happen to them.๐Ÿ˜ญ

    I like how nivritti understands veer's dilemma and pain and reassures him. Me want to see these scenes. So touching to see nivritti giving her son strength to fight on even though she is worried about him and their safety. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

    "Ma...have you forgotten that your son is a warrior?" awww he is trying to be brave so his mum does not worry about him. makes me want to go and protect him ๐Ÿ˜Š

    Bending down to give his family an affectionate farewell hug; he flashes them an assuring smile that displays numerous silent promises and then exits the cellar, simultaneously ordering the soldiers to bolt the door behind him. I can just imagine this scene, its like he is giving them an hug but at the same time is feeling as to whether or not he will come back, see them again or not. I found these scenes so touching and so real than what they show at the moment. ๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ‘Each scene you have described makes us realise how we fould feel if we were in that situation . ๐Ÿ˜ญ ๐Ÿ˜ญ

    Rubbing his eyes to clarify his vision, his pleasant visage turns to one of horror, Me so want to see the shock on agni's face when he sees lots of soldiers and thinking how did this all happen. ๐Ÿ˜†He obviously does not know the cleverness, bravery of dharam and veer. How can he kill his own countrymen? ๐Ÿ˜ก

    The spy shera has entered to give information, how dare he show his annoyance to her when his plans are failings.?๐Ÿ˜ก How could he shove her aside and disrespecting the prashad. ๐Ÿ˜ก

    He is calling her a slave, when previously he was thanking her for all the information she found and could not take his eyes of her.๐Ÿ˜ก I like shera's answer as if it not for her information their plan would have been found out ages ago.๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

    Then he had the nerve to get angry ๐Ÿ˜ก when she said the truth. How dare he raise his hand at her, me was going red and purple on this side when I was reading it.๐Ÿ˜† Little does agni know that shera can harm him if she wanted to.

    "Play around with fire much as you want Rajkumar Agnivardhan...continue to do so and you will end up being burnt one day..." I love this dialogue, the fie will consume him and his sick father one day.๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

    Agni steps back in horror, thinking to himself "Bhimsen...here...so soon...the foolish revolutionaries have already raided the assembly...where are the remaining palace guards...I better get out of here..." Agni is such a coward, he likes to cause trouble but when it goes wrong he cannot face it and runs. ๐Ÿ˜† Good the shramik hit him on the head, he deserves it, ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘. I just want to see Jai's reaction when agni tells him what happened and how he got knocked out so soon. Maybe jai will strangle his own son after this ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†

    the way you are describing the war ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

    Dhananjeya is rubbing salt into the wounds, he does not know what important business sanjaya has gone for. ๐Ÿ˜‰ When he does find out it will be him who will be running away and so will jai ๐Ÿ˜†

    I love the way dharam is keeping his calm and the faith he is in veer being successful. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

    "Maharaj! for that matter, even Veer is not around. While we are braving such a serious situation here, I am sure he has gone off on his usual strollsโ€ฆabandoning his regiment!"

    Frowning at his uncle irately, Dharam objects "Chachaโ€ฆVeer knows his duties far more than one thinks of himโ€ฆ and in that case even Agni is not here yetโ€ฆ" this jai ๐Ÿ˜ก is always stirring and causing problems. Kya Jawab diya dharam ne ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘ to defend his brother.

    how the king is asking his own son if Gadhwar will attack them, why did he not listen to his own son. I liked how dharam told his father the truth and what veer has gone to do. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

    the king instead of praising and thanking dharam for all that he is doing is demanding that he was not told about it. ๐Ÿ˜ก when dharam and veer tried to tell him, he did not believe them

    Still in disbelief about the astounding information provided by his son, the surprised father prods on to interrupt Dharam's thoughts "I cannot believe that you have taken such important decisions without letting even me, the king know...how did you know about all this in the first place...about Chatarpur...about the revolutionaries storming the palace..." the king should be proud that dharam is taking his own decisions and is capable of protecting the kingdom and royal family.

    Not wanting to reveal anything about his association with the princess of Niphaud or her personal letter, awww so sweet, ๐Ÿ˜ณhe did not tell the king of his future biw๐Ÿ˜†

    Gradually pondering on how the princes' well made plans seemed comprehensible solutions for Aryanagar's dire situations, Aryavardhan becomes moved at how fastidiously his son and nephew had taken charge of all matters by themselves Finally the king has realised that his son and nephew have grown up ๐Ÿ˜Š and can look after the kingdom. I like how the king feels bad about suspecting dharam, how they were insulted and now feels very proud to have a son like dharam. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

    the brave way veers fights with the revolutionaries. ๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ‘

    The effects of trying to defend his forte solitarily for two entire days starts becoming apparent on the young prince , as he endeavours with great difficulty to overcome the fatigue in his shivering legs and regularly pauses to catch up on his breath. he must be mentally and phhysically exhausted ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ with so much to worry about from dharam, his family, the kingdom and protecting what is right.

    the soldiers worried how they are going to win the war against and whether or not help will arrive ๐Ÿ˜ญ

    love the dialogue of dharam, very commendable ๐Ÿ‘ . He is trying to motivate the soldiers spirit to fight "Dear soldiers...we are facing war now...I know we are challenging a large army...however, if you consider yourself an Aryanagari...if this is where you were born... if this is where your children live...then you will defend your home proudly...even if it would mean you had to lay your life for it...never underestimate the power of miracles..." this is just what the soldiers need to hear to reassure and make them realsie how important it is this war and why they are figthing. ๐Ÿ‘

    Jaivardhan marks Dharam's magnificence on the battlefield and begins to worry about Agni's long absence. I would have so loved to see dharam fighting in the battlefield. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘ Good that jai isrealising how brave and skilled dharam is. ๐Ÿ‘

    For most part of the day; the brave prince and his commanders endure many injuries and continue to perform brilliantly on the fields, astonishing everyone around them. oh no dharam and soldiers getting injured ๐Ÿ˜ญbut still fighting very bravely ๐Ÿ‘However; as the fateful day eventually wanes, the brave Aryanagar soldiers discover that skills alone are no match for a denser Gadhwar army, and the vulnerable Aryanagar army find their forces becoming overwhelmed and conquered, over time. I was at the edge of my seat when I was reading about the war scenes, i can just imagine how worried the soldiers must be feeling as they see big the Gadhwar army ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ

    Veer pushes his tired self to pursue the culprits and strives to grab one of the men running ahead of him, till a voice behind him catches his attention "I have never come across such a tenacious fighter like you... you have fought for two days with no rest at allโ€ฆare you really an Aryavrat?" nahiii veer is getting tired ๐Ÿ˜ญ as he has fought non stop for 2 days. Good that bhimsen has realised how strong veer is and will not be overpowerd easily. ๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ‘

    "How silly of you to underestimate an Aryavratโ€ฆone of the strongest armies everโ€ฆ never lost a single war in the last two centuries!" i like veers answer on ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘ and how bhimsen is dishonestly fighting the war and wanting to attack harmless women.

    Bhimsen laughs out loud and then speaks up in a callous tone "Rajkumar Veerโ€ฆexactly...you put up such a difficult fight and killed so many of our menโ€ฆhence, in order to protect ourselves...and take our own sweet revengeโ€ฆwe had to trick you into thisโ€ฆ.I am sorry...but, who says war is always fair!" sick sick bhimsen ๐Ÿ˜ก๐Ÿ˜ก and while reading this part it made me realise that something bad is going to happen to veer ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ

    Veer suddenly realizes that he was trapped in a dead end of a Shramik street, surrounded on all sides by fresh faces of menacing revolutionaries. The disgusted Veer glares at the men around him and then grips his weapon and takes his stance, unwilling to give up. Wasting no time; the group of inconsiderate men start inflicting blows on the deserted prince with their weapons from all directions simultaneously, which Veer assays to defend for a while Oh nooo, veer is trapped ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ and the cowards start attacking him together ๐Ÿ˜ญ from all directions. ๐Ÿ˜ญ

    Veer

    finds himself unable to block one of the men from running a large knife into his torso. I was shocked when i read this as I was totally not expecting this ๐Ÿ˜ญ ๐Ÿ˜ญOverwhelmed with the fatigue and throbbing pain, Veer looks at the knife deeply embedded into him with a blank gaze, while his vision begins to blur. Helplessly watching the final sights of the horrified men scampering around him in panic; the prince finally shuts his eyes and drops unconscious to the ground, forced to bring his heroic saga to a premature end. oh no, he is injured very badly and there is no one around to take him to safety and tend to his wounds. ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ

    the nearly defeated Dharam looks up to the skies uncaring of the sweat and blood flowing down his brow to reprimand the Lord for testing him so severely. this is so sad as everyone is losing hope ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ makes me realise how deadly war and its consequences. ๐Ÿ˜ญStanding amidst the bloody grounds; the lifeless prince closes his eyes to recall the memorable scenes from his life for a last time - his lovely days at the Gurukul, his mother's smile, his father's blessing, Veer's mischievous frowns, the princess of Niphaud and his Aryanagar home. Constantly battling with repeated premonitions for his brother's safety; aww ๐Ÿ˜ญ he is remembering all the times he spent with veer and family and thinking about veers safety. I dont even want to imagine how dharam will feel when he finds out that veer is badly injured ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ

    The deafening sounds of the war ground come to a terrifying silence, as everyone stares at the source of the tremors - hundreds of thousands of Aryanagar regiments pouring in veins towards both the eastern and western borders of Aryanagar, led by the proud Sanjaya. Watching his full force of commanders, foot soldiers and cartloads of weaponry; Aryavardhan and the remaining handful of Aryanagar soldiers break into a smile of instant relief, while a tear of gratitude flows from the overjoyed Dharam's eye, washing the blood off his cheek. this scene is so b gripping and beautifully written, everyone has lost hope and the minute they see the regiments from east and west, they all feel glorious like they have come back to life. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘ Yey, i felt like dancing and jumping up and down when i read this

    Dhananjeya and Jaivardhan stare dumbfounded, unable to comprehend how Sanjaya had arrived with the entire Aryanagar army on time. Sensing Aryanagar's definite victory, Jaivardhan becomes immediately mad with rage and fury at how all his plans seemed to be collapsing. ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜† me so want to see their expressions and scream out "losers" to both jai and dhananjeya . Yey aryanagar won and dharam and his army will now defeat all the others.

  • Noticing the figure to be a blood-stained rain-soaked cold body strewn aside on a street, Shera protectively closes the eyes of the frightened children with her chilly hands to shield them from the ghastly sight ๐Ÿ˜ญ brave veer is all alone lying on a street ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ and shera recognises that it is veer and saying that he is dead. I feel like going up to her and telling her that he is not going to die ๐Ÿ˜ญ

Lashy, such a gripping part with so many emotions from happiness, sadness to horror. ๐Ÿ‘ I loved how you showed the victory of dharam and on the other hand veer being injured.๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘. It shows the struggle brave warriors go through and the pain they go through to protect the people, family. The scenes are very realistic as normally you always see the main warriors never getting injured badly but here you have shown that which is brilliant. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

me sooooo looking forward to the next part.๐Ÿ‘

Edited by divareena - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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@ sonu

awwww sonu nice to see you.. ๐Ÿค— thankyou so much for your complements on this part..... im glad you liked it...๐Ÿ˜ณ

i loved that scene where veer is trying to convince sanjaya that he is not abducting him so please stop srcreaming like a girl ๐Ÿคฃperfect dialogue for veer ...veer ke liye itne pyaare dialogue kaise soach leti ho lashooooooo

๐Ÿ˜† hee hee thankoo...

that scene was emotional and when veer was talking to his mother and mami๐Ÿ˜ญ...he was trying to hold back his tears oh๐Ÿ˜ญ...he is such a sweet boy

that scene was very emotional.. even though it was simple i guess.. ๐Ÿ˜Š

i loved war scene they way u discribe it na ...i dont have words to xplain..simply superb so maharaj understand now his son and veer...chalo dair hi sahi pata toh chala

ab bhi poora kahaan huaa... he still doesnt distrust his brother... so that milestone is there... ๐Ÿ˜ณ

how could agni treat shera like this he is such a selfish and a mean person๐Ÿ˜ก........person and why shera is tolerating her she should have slapped him but she has no choice

yes she doesnt have any choice.... ๐Ÿ˜Š

veer is injured๐Ÿ˜ญ..oh uska khayal rakhna aur uski achche se seva bhi karana ๐Ÿ˜‰...looking forward to see the next part chalo...ek baar hug aur๐Ÿค—

hee hee ๐Ÿค—

@ hiri

awww thank you eesha.. ๐Ÿ˜ณ hee hee veer and ananya ki romance itni jaldi nahin shuru hoti.. par atleast there will be something.. ๐Ÿ˜ณ am glad you liked it.. hope you enjoyed the war bits too... thanks for the comments on the map..๐Ÿ˜ณ ๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—

@ minoo

Shradu, do you mind editing your post and removing those ugly lines about my beloved script "inferior, less grasping, rushed" How could you?๐Ÿ˜ญ

ask bhuvi.. i genuinely thought this part wasnt good enough and partly the reason for the delay in posting.. ๐Ÿ˜•

It was my 7 course meal......... and everything cooked to perfection๐Ÿ˜ƒ. Need I say, I love my chef.๐Ÿ˜ณ It'll be so easy to comment if you wrote something that was not so gripping all through. I loved the whole platter. How do I select my fav parts. ๐Ÿ˜•

you making me hungry now ๐Ÿ˜›

1. DV's farewell , dread and turmoil over the aleatory. Reading through, I felt it all in me.

awwwwww yes tis true.. they dont know if they would see each other again... and handling quite a bit by themselves... alone...

2. OMG, its so lovely how these boys complement each other. One fills the void left by another.๐Ÿ˜Š Veer has this knack of getting done the toughest things with his prankish stunts.๐Ÿ˜† And, I loved how his sense of humour remains intact even with the horror of situation around.๐Ÿ˜Š

hee hee veer baba will always remain so...

3. *sniff* *sniff*..........thanks to the mother son duo, now I have to make a second trip to the store to replenish my supply of tissues. I loved, how the boy suddenly became man ๐Ÿ˜ณ to take care of needs of the ladies of his family.....right from the bare necessities to emotional assurance in the traumatic times.๐Ÿ‘

๐Ÿ˜ญ what more could a mother want...

me described the shera bit in the note where i posted preview since many readers had the doubt.. ๐Ÿ˜ณ hope it satisfies you...

6. Loved how you described Veer's counter-attacks to the outlaws in the palace. I could see it happening, with the lavishly described intricate details.๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ

awwwwww i know poora palace ka satyanaash.. ๐Ÿ˜†

7. It is so like Arya Uncle to not know the ticking timebomb under his rocking chair.๐Ÿ˜† Now he will understand his boy is not a child to be chided anymore, though the hard way.๐Ÿ˜›

he is very incompetent.. and will continue to remain so... ๐Ÿ˜•

8. Jai and his Dhanno basking in their evilness........๐Ÿคข

dhanno ๐Ÿ˜† i like that name

9. The war-stricken streets of AryaNagar, the chaos, panic and grief.๐Ÿ˜”

i know... like when we have riots even today... its all sad to see.. but reality i guess... ๐Ÿ˜ญ

10. Dharam's inspiring words, provoking and instigating, yet, genuine, without drama.๐Ÿ‘

ooo me thought there was drama in it... ๐Ÿ˜† but..i guess it was inspiring...

11. Veer braving the attack from Bhimsen.๐Ÿ‘ But how did he recognise Bhimsen........... He took his name........while attacking him?๐Ÿ˜•

ooo he has been fighting him/his retinue for two days now na..its only a matter of time before one of his confederates would have called out his name during the fights... and he had caught a partial glimpse of the guy.. so he knows by now... ๐Ÿ˜Š

12. sniff * sniff* again at Dharam's grief, at the wargrounds and his memories of happy days.๐Ÿ˜ญ Awww..... he included princess of Niphaud there..... why not...... she is family now! Almost!!๐Ÿ˜‰

nahin.. par she is part of his happiest of memories - memories that flash by before you die... ๐Ÿ˜ญ

13. Oh no........ how long did Veer lie there on the streets? 'blood-stained, rainsoaked' .......... and he was so badly injured that Shera had to shield the kids eyes. But I liked how she was so protective and caring of them.๐Ÿ˜ณ

this scene though hard-hitting.. i would like to see something like this on screen... ๐Ÿ˜•... wouldnt it look nice?

Now I badly want to know the thoughts that raced through Shera's mind on finding Veer like this. ......... And you know why Lashโ˜บ๏ธ

you will be in for a ____ ๐Ÿ˜†

Hey and I liked how AryaNagar is not a complete Andher Nagari........ that there are rules and laws and protocols and the enevitable red tape followed......... And no prince can order the forces to start or stop without the permission of commander or the king.

oh yes.. how could mere princes (they have not even been crowned as crown princes yet) so they wouldnt be able to mobilise the forces.. thank you for picking out so many smaller points... ๐Ÿ˜ณ

this is a bigggggg hug to you ๐Ÿค— my sweet one...

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Shradhha..... ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Offfffffff.......... kya story hai tumhari......๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜ญ, i cannot read it just once......๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜ƒ

U know what only word comes to my mouth when i read any of your part and that is ...... WOW......๐Ÿ˜ƒ There are no words left with me to describe how wonderfully u ve written all the things....... and artistically......

How u do it yaar? I mean no... its a serious question. How u manage time and get back with ur story so regularly and that too with such an interseting and lovely story? I m sure many here want this answer from u.

I read all ur parts right from where i left... like from part 15...... aur mere ander itne emotions bhar bhar ke aa rahe hai..... like... I thanked god that I found time and came here just to reply back to ur post....... there sre so many things to tell but i m not able to...... and one happy feeling that..... unlike other writers... i m able to talk to or chat with this writer.... jiski writing ki mein fan ho gayi hu.....๐Ÿ˜›

U r just awesome...... ๐Ÿค—๐Ÿ˜Š u r blessed with such a good writing skills..... ๐Ÿ˜ƒ keep it up.

I ve stopped watching DV...... Neither RT's/VM's acting nor RT-Mug pair interests me anymore...... Par tumhari story pad ke ek lagta hai kaash Sagars ne bhi aaisa kuch dikhaya hota...... ๐Ÿ˜ญ Now I ve no hopes from the soap..... I feel ashame to watch this soap or tell my friends that I used to watch DV. Anyways forget this bashing......

The way u started with Gurukul... than that wonderful orphanage idea, Dhru-Sakshi pair...... Gadhwar coup..... Nipahud trip... lovely and heavenly princess Sia - foolish yet innocent, Imperfectly perfect girl made for Dharam. Veer-Bhalla-Dhram ๐Ÿ˜ƒ, Shera's entry๐Ÿ˜‰

Hey maine last 14th part mein likha tha comments mein, ke yeh Shera ek jasus hai..... jo jaan buchke dono ko alag raston par bhadka rahi hai aur unke picha kar rahi hai, par tumne meri baat nahi mani.

Agni-Shera.... aaahhh too good...... It was enjoyable... Ur Agni is perfect and intelligent villian.

Harsh and Sia----- I just loved that scene when she escapes from Harsh's ugly intensions and wraps herself in Dharam's shawl to feel secure... ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ aahhhh i was like ... mujhe bhi ek shwal chahiye..... perfect way to make them realize they r in love......๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜ƒ

mujhe nahi samjha jab Veer orphanage mein jata hai tab Dhruv ko dar nahi ke Veer Bhimsen ki baat sun raha hoga? and That barsa was good,...... awww ..... Sonu๐Ÿ˜ญ

That letter business was so romantic... i mean u possess this great skill to take ur readers from tensed feelings to romantic and then to stree-free moments..... DV ke tensed moment mein bhi unhone letter likha..... maja aaya sach mein I enjoyed that part.... and Dhram so bad in recognizing hidden messages๐Ÿ˜†... thank god Veer waqt pe pohcha....๐Ÿ˜‰

And War ahhh..... it had perfect pace and thrill.....๐Ÿ‘, Actually I hate to read any war descriptions, but urs was so damm good......... Dharam.... was perfect...... he and Veer are best in thier own way... no comparision. I was like thank god aur baki hai..... I wished to read more and more....... Veer taking ladies to safe place... his emotions๐Ÿ˜ญ, Agni losing his consciousness๐Ÿ˜†, Stupid Bhimsen๐Ÿคข, Dharam speech... ๐Ÿ˜ณ socho agar Sia waha hoti toh blush kar kar ke laal ho gayi hoti... ๐Ÿ˜ณhey please let her know how dharam fought for his kingdom.

that Veer dead part was the best.......๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ and Shera spots him..... ๐Ÿ˜ Now there will be fun and romance coming up i m sure.... eagerly waiting

Want to write more ... jaise suj rah hai... mein likh rahi hu.....

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this was the most descriptive part till now ๐Ÿ‘ ..I cud imagine the scenes b4 my eyes..u r underestimating such a brilliant part ๐Ÿ˜ก luved every character....brilliant portrayal....the cellar scene actually moved me 2 tears ๐Ÿ˜ญ Shera's character is so matured.....VEER DEAD??wat will happen 2 Dharam I hope Shera is not too late..... she shud reach and get help on time..Dharam remembers happy moments..wow..I think India's water crisis will be solved....taking in account the amount of tears I hav shed ๐Ÿ˜† luved Dharam's pre-war pep talk...and Veer's line"dont shout like a helpless girl".....plzz post next part soon and how r u?Do keep well plzz..not 4 Sam but 4 urself....and I think sagars r taking a cue from you....treacherous attacks from JV and Agni and other king they were (ofcourse not as intelligent as ur villains sounded more like the leaders of political morcha ๐Ÿ˜† )..and Shera behaves properly........and wears nice clothes(she looked so sweet in Rajasthani dress naa...)I felt like slapping Agni in the prashad scene..I think Sagars better do by taking a leaf out of your book..their storywriter is anyday no match against you....I do feel mayoos ๐Ÿ˜• all dying-dying and crying scenes....but luved the absence of melodrama
1 question....how do u manage 2 find such brilliant language 4 describing every scene,that 2 only through pen and paper... even Sagars cant perfectly describe sum scenes..u leave me awed Di...plzz hold a storywriting training session ๐Ÿ˜‰ I will b ur regular student ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Plzz update soon and end my tension๐Ÿ˜ณ

Edited by rock 2 d2v - 17 years ago

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